"You'll stay with me?" [Harry]
"Until the very end," said James.
- James Potter
He was laughing at her. "Come on, you can do better than that!" he yelled, his voice echoing around the cavernous room. The second jet of light hit him squarely on the chest.
- Sirius Black
"There was a clatter as the basilisk fangs cascaded out of Hermione’s arms. Running at Ron, she flung them around his neck and kissed him full on the mouth. Ron threw away the fangs and broomstick he was holding and responded with such enthusiasm that he lifted Hermione off her feet" Deathly Hallows (I think everyone thought, "Finally!")
I like how you opened with Rita Skeeter, determined to add finishing touches to her book; different to how other stories begin :).
I also like your characterisation of Malfoy and that he has changed (but only slightly of course :P)
Looking forward to the rest of your story :)
I really liked this chapter and love how you have Harry helping to look after his godson, Lupin and Tonks would be proud :).
I also like your idea that Harry would speak about Snape at his funeral, to try and make people aware of his true allegiance to the good side :).
Keep up the good work :)
James Potter has changed: no longer an arrogant, irresponsible prankster, he has matured into a responsible Head Boy with tops marks in Transfiguration. Lily Evans has changed as well: normally studious and in control, she has lost focus as she struggles with Head Girl responsibilities and N.E.W.T level studies. An unexpected encounter in the corridors one weekend leads to several startling realizations, the least of which is that things have definitely changed between James Potter and Lily Evans.
This story was nominated for a 2010 QSQ and is now complete.
I like how this story has begun and look forward to reading the next chapter :).
The British insults did work and made me chuckle :).
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad the insults worked. I'm not sure if they are strictly British, really, but my original spat sounded way too American.;) I'm glad you enjoyed the beginning and hope you like the rest! Thanks again for the review! ~Gina :)
Quite short but none the less intruiging :).
I wonder what James keeps seeing in his dreams?
Update soon, want to find out more :)
This was beautifully written :).
You really showed how much GInny would be in pain if Harry died, and how long it would take her to try and move on from her first love.
I love that at the end, after visiting Harry's grave, she felt ready to move on and be a proper wife to Dean and live on.
Although I think you have a typo "And finally, Lily realized, she was ready.", I'm guessing you meant Ginny?
Not being nit-picky, just wanted to let you know :).
Author's Response: I definitely appreciate it, that was a complete typo! Thanks for bringing that to my attention, and thanks for the kind review!
Just found your story and I'm enjoying it so far :).
I think you're characterisations are great, and I love James' mum and how she treats James and Sirius :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I actually really appreciate that because, oddly enough, Mrs. Potter's short appearance in this chapter was the most difficult to write. I didn't want her to be too babying, but JKR has always said that James was a rather spoiled child.
James' sonnet was a work of genius haha. Made me laugh :).
Keep up the good work :)
Author's Response: Thanks! James' sonnet is definitely my favorite part of this chapter, even though it doesn't help in convincing Lily that he's any more mature. xD
Lily was sooooo blushing because she thinks James is hot ;)
Loving the story so far :D
Author's Response: Oh, she's definitely in denial at this point. And honestly, I love getting a review for each chapter because I don't know what parts really stand out otherwise. Thank you!!
ooooo now that was exciting!
I like that how you described James' transformation into his stag form :).
Can't wait till the next chapter is up :D
Author's Response: Thanks! That part in the chapter was difficult to write--especially the part where Remus almost bites James. Glad you liked it! :)
I have tears in my eyes right now! This chapter was so beautifully written and you conveyed James' struggle to come to terms with his mums illness so well!
I think you got the character of James so right as I feel that he would have definately cut himself off from his friends, not wanting them to worry or burden them.
Keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely, lovely review! :) I'm glad you thought that James' self-imposed seclusion was realistic. I imagined what James would do in a crisis based on Harry's behavior in OOTP, but also I think that he wouldn't want to be a burden, as you said. This was a rather sad chapter--I'll try to make the next one a bit more lighthearted if possible.
I rather liked this chapter :).
When we were first introduced to Laura, she reminded me slightly of Luna. I wonder why James decided to put Lily's trunk in that particular compartment?
I also laughed at James' reaction to Lily saying she'd rather have Sirius, as if it was Sirius' fault :).
Now update so I can read on, you have me intrigued :P
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart
i carry your heart(i carry it in my heart)
-E. E. Cummings
September 2012: HEY guess what I couldn't wait, and the third installment, "World Enough," is UP NOW under James/Lily. Or just under my name. Or at this link: http://fanfiction.mugglenet.com/viewstory.php?sid=92131. Yay! :D
I cannot wait for the next chapter! It's such a funny thought that they'll all be together with the idiot otherwise known as James :).
Please say something secret and romantic happens between Lily and James *crosses fingers hopefully*.
I love Trickster and so far im loving it's sequel!
Oh that last part between James and Lily was so romantic yet so heartbreaking.
Clearly he still has feelings for her if he thought "What the hell" when she said he was dreaming!
Love it...update soon hehe
I really liked your story.
It was nice at the beginning to think of all the times that Snape was actually being the good guy, but nobody apart from Dumbledore knew!
I also like the struggle that Harry goes through on what to write as he did hate him at school.
Although I'm not sure Hermione would feel that strongly about him? She would probably just understand his actions...but hey thats just my opinion.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed reading my fic enough to review it. In my opinion Hermione doesn't like him, she respects him. But if you were Harry, a seventeen year old boy, just gone through a harrowing experience of war, would you or would you not be predisposed to hope for more positive reactions, especially in relation to the dead? Hermione has always defended Severus to Ron and Harry, and doesn't actually say anything bad about him. A teenage boy's usual reaction to indifference? A childhood taunt of 'you like him!'... but hey, that's just my opinion :P