"You'll stay with me?" [Harry]
"Until the very end," said James.
- James Potter
He was laughing at her. "Come on, you can do better than that!" he yelled, his voice echoing around the cavernous room. The second jet of light hit him squarely on the chest.
- Sirius Black
"There was a clatter as the basilisk fangs cascaded out of Hermione’s arms. Running at Ron, she flung them around his neck and kissed him full on the mouth. Ron threw away the fangs and broomstick he was holding and responded with such enthusiasm that he lifted Hermione off her feet" Deathly Hallows (I think everyone thought, "Finally!")
The part where James started singing made me laugh..a lot :D.
And the bit where Lily said to him "i despise you" and he siad it didn't count because he already knew that, was a little heartbreaker moment. I felt so sorry for James there.
Loved the ending :D
Author's Response: Things did get a little sad at one point there -- but it had a happy ending! I'm glad you liked the story :) Thanks for the review.
Winner of the 2010 QSQ for Best Canon Romance!
I loved the start of this chapter! It was so amusing, especially when Sirius said he would never bet about his best friend!
I also liked the interaction between Lily and James when they were talking about how their friends thought the were in a relationship, and how they both reacted. As if both were scared to say their true feelings incase they scared each other off.
Aw the last few paragraphs were genius! How James showed his anger at being suddenly ignored for no reason. The whole argument seemed so natural and FINALLY they kissed :D.
Can't wait for the last chapter!
At this point in time I could bang Lily and James' heads together! Just KISS haha :).
The way you wrote how they stood together at the window sill was lovely.
I also love that none of the teachers put a stop to the snowball fight and chuckled when you said Dumbledore threw some at the Slytherins mwhaha.
Looking forward to the remainder of the story :)
i have to say this line made me laugh:
"The other three stared at him. Sirius raised an eyebrow. “Wormtail thinks you’re sexy,” he informed James."
I think is developing into a great story :).
I also love how you've wrote Peter, he's not some big wimpy weirdo, but part of the 4 Marauders (most other stories describe him as if he's already drifting and following old Voldy.) So well done for that :).
I also liked how you wrote the relationship between Lily and Severus, made him seem normal :).
Hope you update soon :D
I really enjoyed your final chapter!
The way in which you wrote the interaction between James and Lily was lovely, relaxed and believable :). It just flowed so well and kept them in character.
I also laughed at the part where Sirius, Remus and Peter were bored waiting on James' return. Very Marauder like :).
When you introduced the topic of the Patronuses, I liked how you had Lily's change to a doe which signifies she has been affected by James a lot longer than she would care to admit. I also thought it funny when James took this as a sign she loved him, such a Potter like comment :P.
But I think the section that was so important and hardly ever found in any other Marauder fic, was Peter's point of view on the train. It gave me the idea that this was when he began to change and it was the start of his journey to becoming the Wormtail we are introduced to in Harry's time. It's such a slight little thing that just added to the story and showed how Peter could actually change in the years to come, and be able to betray his friends. When he realises that the three people he thought were invincible, and would always protect him, weren't so.
And oh the part with Snape was sad but beautiful :).
All in all I loved your story from start to finish :)
Author's Response: Peter's...a little tricky sometimes. Knowing how things end up, the temptation is to make him totally wimpy and unlikable, but the fact of the matter is that he WAS one of James's closest friends, and they all trusted him enough to not realize he was the spy, and to make him Secret-Keeper. He wasn't a two-timer the whole time, and I guess I'm just trying to figure out what happened. But thank you so much for reading and reviewing--the sequel's up now!
This story makes me want to hug James! I actually love this side of James, which is side I haven't seen in a lot of other fan fictions that I have read.
Your story highlights the true feelings of James, whenever Lily rejects him and it just makes my heart go out to him.
I loved it!
I just found your story recommended on the beta forums and thought I would give it a read. I thought it was great.
It was different to other characterisations of James and Lily that I've read, this sounds so natural! I also like that James tries to get Lily's attention with more subtlety than other fan fictions.
Lily's reply is also rathew witty and made me smile!
It's official...this story rocks :).
The way you write the interactions between Lily and James is just so natural and it flows.
Can't wait to read the rest :D
kirstin louise (:
Author's Response: Thanks! I really love writing all the scenes between Lily and James, so I'm glad you enjoy them too!
Wow...how chilling and evil!
Reading what Rosier was making Lily do made me cringe a little. But I felt that it added to the story so well done :)
I love how she managed to break through to tell James she loved him though, I'm guessing she might break through completely next chapter? *crosses fingers*
I actually read the memory as I enjoy them :)
And poor Grace, I'm happy she wasn't the killer!
Looking forward to the next chapter, you're a great writer :)
Author's Response: This chapter wasn't pretty awful to write. I had the first section and the memory written the day after the last chapter was posted, but it took me a while to push my way through the entire encounter with Rosier. But I'm glad you thought it well done! And I'm glad you like the memories and read this one! :) Thanks for the review! Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon.
That was so dramatic and I loved it :).
You wrote the conflict between James, Lily and Voldemort well and it was convincing, not forced.
But I think your sections on Sirius were the best, his anger at his brother, but the fact he still protected him after what he had done was so Sirius. And that last paragraph where he wrecked the bathroom and it was Lily that calmed him, not one of the Marauders was so sweet. It also seemed symbolic of the fact Lily was now one of them, not just James' girlfriend.
Love it, now get that epilogue uploaded :P
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you thought the whole conflict with Voldemort was well done. Sirius kind of took the show in this chapter, you're write -- and oh, oh! I had wanted that final scene to represent that Lily was no longer simply James's girlfriend; in my head, this is the start of her friendship with Sirius outside of their respective relationships with James. I'm so happy you caught that :)
I just found your story and I have to say that it's a really original idea. I like that Lily is with her Muggle friends.
And I keep laughing, like when Lily says James does Ballet, that is just too funny. And the St. Dementors football team that's so original!
Love it :)
Author's Response: Yipee! I love new readers :) I'm glad you're liking it so far! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, it's greatly appreciated!
This sounds even more heartbreaking in the book just because you get to here James and Lily interacting with Harry :(.
Very intrigued in your story (just found it)
Again wonderfully and comically written :D.
I absolutely LOVE the last two lines! Because as everyone knows she defiantly did have the last laugh!
yeas, she did, didn't she? I think we all had the last laugh (apart from Bellatrix) ...
So glad her moment (through the medium of song) made you giggle! Thanks for R & R-ing,
I must say this is a clever and hilarious piece of writing!
I even had the song playing in the background as I sang your lyrics which made me laugh even harder at how well every single line fits!
"Potter’s dismay at my welcome back party!"
That line had me in fits!
I also loved the last verse as it was rather comical singing it :P and I could just imagine old Voldy dancing around a room full of Death Eaters who were clapping to the beat and then he would give a great bow at the end to rapturous applause. Genius :)
thanks very much! This song was written as a wee bit of fun at Voldemort's expense. Luckily, he never heard it, or I would be one dead Muggle ...
It is pretty funny to imagine him doing something so completely ooc. Perhaps if he'd sang a bit more, and schemed a bit less, he might have been a bit more satisfied with his lot in life. Then again, maybe not!
Thanks very much for R & R-ing. I'm so glad you liked it!
Ginny Weasley Potter is newly married, but matrimony was proving to be more difficult than she had ever expected. Harry was nearly always working, and her dreams of wedded bliss were slowly slipping though her fingers.
And then came Gabrielle Delacour, an incidental acquaintance and an unlikely ally. Gabrielle tries to help Ginny mend her soul and her marriage, but slowly, Ginny realises that there is more to this newfound friendship than she had ever thought possible.
I think the way you write is wonderful, so believable :).
Howver I don't really agree with what happened at some points in the story, although that may be because I'm such a Harry & Ginny fan.
Like I don't think for a minute that Harry would leave Ginny on their wedding day to go to work, he loves her too much.
I also think that you may have over exaggerated Harry's inability to read emotions when it comes to girls, as I'm sure he would know perfectly well that his being at work would take a toll on Ginny and his marriage.
However I love how you brought in Gabrielle to the story as she never features in many fan fics that I have read.
To end on a nice note and hope you don't take offence to my views, you really are a great writer, your characterisation of Harry is well written as I could see him as a bit of a workaholic. and it was a refreshing change to see the faults that Harry and Ginny's marriage could have :). Rather than the complete perfection other people tend to write about :).
Ah, the conflicting Harry/Ginny shippers' view. :)
I actually hashed this out with a friend of mine who adores Harry/Ginny (I tend to gravitate toward other ships myself). We discussed how we both felt about Harry and how he would act as a trainee Head Auror. I tend to think that it would be much like undergrad work at law school. You work like a dog, with ridiculous hours mired in books and dogsbody work that no one would ever want to do. I believe that, once he actually got the job, his lot would improve, and he would be home more. Therefore, Ginny would forget about her infatuation and move on with her husband and son.
This brings to light something that I have and always will believe of Harry, and it's that he's unintentionally insensitive. He sees Ginny as this strong, independent girl who's been through hell, but after all of that, wouldn't she just want to be a girl in love with a boy? I think he'd have a hard time getting past that idea that she can and will take care of herself in order to be the doting husband he wants to be.
I understand how we can come to a bit of an impasse, as I believe that Harry isn't kittens, bunnies, and roses. He's just as screwed up as the rest of us, maybe even more so, considering his lot in life. From that, I believe that he and Ginny will have their trials and tribulations, but they'll get past them, because, face it, they've seen worse.
It's been interesting, and I hope to hear from you again. Cheers and happy reading!
“…he fell through the ancient doorway and disappeared behind the veil, which fluttered for a moment as though in a high wind and then fell back into place… Sirius must be just behind the curtain…”
Sirius Black didn’t die when he fell through the veil in the Department of Mysteries. He was transported to another world: our world, where Hogwarts doesn’t exist and magic lives only in the fantasy books. As Sirius tries to understand this strange new world and find his way home, he runs into some unlikely old friends. Nothing is the same behind the curtain.
Wow...this is soooo intriguing!
Can't wait to read the rest :).
I also found your statement at the beginning, "This is for everybody who never fully accepted that Sirius Black could be killed by drapery."
rather amusing :)
Author's Response: haha :) thank you! I'm glad you found it amusing. Peace, Virgil
:O...James Potter a muggle? I can't believe it.
Want to keep reading though, looking forward to where this story is headed :)
Author's Response: I couldn't help but mess with Sirius some more, haha. You may be even more shocked by what happens next ;-) Peace, Virgil
Haa the serious Sirius joke amused me rather a lot.
And yey "Remy" seems like the normal Remus we all know and love :)
Hope you update soon.
Keep up the good work :)
Author's Response: Thank you! Peace, Virgil
:O...James Potter a muggle? I can't believe it.
Want to keep reading though, looking forward to where this story is headed :)
Author's Response: Double-post, lol :)
Well I have to say I'm happy you wrote a continuation to Grave Days, which I really enjoyed.
And so far I'm enjoying this :). Bit suspicious of Dean though :o
Author's Response: Thank you, I hope that you continue to enjoy this story. Dean? I hope that you’re suspicious of some of the others soon. N