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Ultimatum by Marauder

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Sirius has loved Remus for a couple of years, and James is sick of watching his best friend suffer. So he gives him an ultimatum: Sirius has a few hours to tell Remus, or else James will. Fic also includes Peter, McGonagall, Andromeda, Tonks as a little kid, Regulus, and cameos from Filch and Lily.
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 03/14/09 Title: Chapter 1: Ultimatum

Oooh I loved that! I don't normally read slash, because it's too non-canon for me, but this was beautiful! especially the ending. made me smile a lot

Letters by Sarah Kavanagh

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Lily thought she was in for a boring summer... but James Potter had other ideas. Love Letters, with a rather bizarre twist.
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 03/08/09 Title: Chapter 3: Firbeglass, a fun torture device

Oh my god, I could just keep on reading that for hours and hours! I so love how you make James write... PLEASE continue updating.. I know that months of begging fans haven't made you but pleasepleaseplease do update... please... prettyprettyplease... oh god I love you!

Kickin' It at the Top by Soap

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: A Marauder-era fic - this story takes a look at all the characters we've come to love (and hate), as well as an OC or two thrown in for good measure. Follow the Marauders through seven years at Hogwart's, with appearances from the infamous Black sisters, Lucius Malfoy, Regulus Black, and of course the one and only Severus Snape.

There are a bunch of pairings in this story (although romance is not necessarily the central theme) to include James/Lily, Lucius/Narcissa, a splash of Lucius/Bella and unrequited Snape/Lily, and finally, plenty of Sirius/OC. Enjoy!

Over 120,000 reads! Wow! Thanks everyone!
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 03/08/09 Title: Chapter 55: Epilogue

I actually just signed up to write you this review, because I really wanted to tell you how much I loved reading your story. You really managed to get the Harry-Potter-Feeling, but you made it even more interesting with the sexual and other relationship issues. I also loved the ending. Of course it couldn't be a complete happy ending, but what awaits Sirius behind the veil made me very happy and hopeful for him.
The only thing I would maybe criticize is how James and Lily got together. I think it would have taken her much more than getting that "load" of Severus off her shoulders before she stops loathing James and "gets over herself". Maybe it would have been better to insert one or two chapters that show James carefully starting to flirt with her again etc before she kisses him. Then again, noone knows what was in these letters... ;)

I really loved reading this. It made me cry a lot when Anne died, and I very rarely cried even when reading the Harry Potter series. Awesome job.

Pansy, Going and Coming by Spottedcat

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: After the Great Battle is over, Pansy Parkinson comes face-to-face with a bitter loss. But even when things seem to be at their worst, Pansy finds a kind spirit.
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 04/29/09 Title: Chapter 1: Pansy, Going and Coming

That was so cool..

Author's Response: Thanks!

The Lions of Gryffindor by Equinox Chick

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: It is June 1976 and The Marauders are at the top of their game. From the outside they look to have everything.But appearances, as the saying goes, can be deceptive.

James is discovering that not everything in life is his for the taking. Sirius knows he will have to defy his formidable family. Remus lives in constant fear of his life beyond Hogwarts. As for Peter... Well, Peter is struggling to live up to his friends.

The ties of friendship are strong, but war is raging and with a dark power rising those ties will inevitably fray.

Added to the mix is an adversary called Severus Snape, some lost House Points, a prank or two and a whole lot of Lily.

This is a Marauder tale.

This is a story of what made them special.

This is a story of why it started to go wrong for The Lions of Gryffindor.

OH MY GOOD GODRIC! Lions of Gryffindor won the 2009 QSQ for Best Marauders' Era Story. Amazed and incredibly grateful to those who nominated, judged and have beta'd this fic. THANK YOU.

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Trick or Treat!
3. She clicks on her mouse and swipes her wand;
Some stories go up, and some stories are gone.
Stories of her own? Why, she has plenty!
Fewer than one-hundred, but far more than twenty.

Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 10/06/09 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 The Full Moon

WOW Carole!

There were so many great things about this chapter. First of all – your characterisation here was genius. James, who doesn't entirely understand Remus' problems, but tries to cheer him up in a way, Sirius, who of course thinks he can do it no matter what everyone says. James and Sirius who (at the end) prefer talking about Lily and plotting than being concerned about what happened just before. Peter, who worries a lot – about the others, about Remus, about Sirius, about where he stands in the group, about what just happened outside...

Then, how much thought you put into the details. From the bandage around Sirius' head to Martha and Lysander, and that James wouldn't fit through the tunnel as a stag – brilliant.

And then there's so many intriguing things about this chapter! Like, what is it between Professor Prewett (tee hee) and Madam Pomfrey? And WHO was the mystery man in the forest! I do hope that your story takes up right there with the next chapter and doesn't switch to another POV... if I have to wait long for this, I might just kidnap you and force it out of you. (JK!!! if you do write fast...)

I think that this might be one of the most climatic/suspenseful (is that a word?) chapters you've written for this story so far. Also, your description, especially the little bits within the dialogue, are amazing. I also loved how you backtrack between the chapters (to the previous chapter and the conversation between James and Lily).

Ooh I need more now! I might just reread the whole story, Amanda inspired me... haha :D


Author's Response: Kara, I never responded to your review. Sorry, my love. Thanks as ever for the kind words and encouragement. I will update as soon as physically capable (Nano obsessed atm). Hmmm, which POV next? Sheall I tell you .... NO! Although I can tell you that the mystery man won't be a mystery for too much longer. Poppy and Fabian may just be friends ... or .... nope, lips are sealed. Thanks again. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 08/11/09 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - Family Ties

*cheers* yay for updates!

I love how you have worked fun!Lily in there :D

What I also liked a lot about this chapter is that you show that they are just plain and real teenagers. I know that you did this in the previous chapters too, but I particularly noticed it here. Maybe it's because of Remus' problem, or because Sirius has to learn that he isn't better than Snape anymore, but I just... somehow noticed it more.

And speaking of Snape – ooh I can see the dark cloud coming in the distance... We, of course, know that Snape is going to become a Death Eater. I love how you're foreshadowing this here with a.. kind of new dark power of Snape's.

Very confused and high quality review. Ah well :D I loved it! Your chapters are always way too short though

Author's Response: OOOH, Kara, I never responded. Ah well, I'm glad you liked the chapter ... have fun with the next.

Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 06/03/09 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Potent Potions

I loved that chapter, I think it's one of your best yet. Especially the Remus-part and how he is worried about the smell of the potion.
People might argue that the "Remus' senses are in overdrive before the full moon"-thing is clichd, but I don't think so (actually I think it's quite logical that he does have heightened senses then).

Oh and I think what you gave James (especially the Quaffle wax) is great, too. I never would have thought of that. It's going to be so hard to come up with something clever for my story :D

Ah, I can't give you any constructive criticism... It was really a lovely chapter. What did Sirius smell apart from the bike?

Author's Response: Ah, well, before cliche class he smelt anything female but I couldn't put that in, could I?No what I really think is that he smells motorbikes, wet grass and friendship - but I couldn't work out what friendship smells like. The part about Remus' senses was something I nearly pulled out as well, but it's part of another fic, and JK made a point of saying that he got hairier near the full moon, so I do think his senses would be heightened. Thank you very much for the review - that was quick! Carole xxx

Albus Severus by ray_16

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Al doesn't like his name. Or being named after two oddballs. He asks Uncle Ron, “Why couldn’t Mum have named me instead?” so then maybe he could have had a better name.

Well, this is why...

Big thanks to Azhure for beta-ing this!
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 05/13/09 Title: Chapter 1: Albus Severus

Ah... but doesn't Clifferton Potter have a ring to it? *thumbs up*

Ahem :D Imagine that.. And the teasing at school... oh dear, the poor boy! Lucky he did get the other names, at least he can be nicknamed "Al" now.
Else he'd be called "Cliff", which reminds me of a troll, or there'd be evil jokes, about "cliffhangers".. ooh, too many silly thoughts flooding my head now :D

Oh right- I too particularly enjoyed the ending. Bet he appreciates his name now...

Author's Response: Clifferton.. I think that's the most decent name Ginny came up with.:D I imagine a big red dog. Cliff... Clifford.
Everybody loves the ending! Including, of course, the writer, moi!
Thanks for your second lovely review!

Lavender, blue - A Gryffindor true by Equinox Chick

Rated: Professors • Past Featured Story
Summary: When Lavender Brown returns to Hogwarts for her seventh year, she knows things will be hard. Professor Dumbledore’s death has scared everybody, and with her Muggle-born mother in hiding, she makes a promise to her father to stay safe.

But to stay safe she must ignore her instincts and turn her back on her friends.

This is a Lavender Brown/Blaise Zabini story, but also concerns that last year at Hogwarts when the Trio were a'hunting Horcruxes.

Thank you to Laura (bookofsecrets) and Terri (mudbloodproud) for beta'ing the first chapter, Alyssa (Harry4lif) for the second and Emma (Amortentia x) for taking over the reins. And Natalie for the last chapter.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I doubt that surprises anyone.

This story won the 2010 QSQ for Best Chaptered Non-Canon Romance. Thank you to everyone who nominated, appreciated and judged.

ATTENTION: Because of prissy glitch on the archive, stories with a rating about 3rd-5th cannot be read. I have lowered the rating to enable access, but the content remains the same. This is a PROFESSORS rated fic. Read at your own discretion - the sexual situations warning is there for a reason.
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 05/20/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Promises to keep

That first chapter was great. I've been staring at your banner for ages, playing that song Marillion made of the lines in the beginning, in my head, always thinking I didn't have the time to read it right now, but I just couldn't resist any longer :D I'm actually glad you only posted one chapter yet, but now: post more!
Apart from that, it's wonderfully easy and fluent to read. I actually thought it would take her much longer to join the DA again, like, until the third chapter or so, but looking back on the first chapter, I suppose it's good you didn't overstretch that part of the story.

I was afraid you'd make Crabbe in love and all kind and fuzzy towards Lavender, because that wouldn't suit the rest of his character, but I think you made a very good portrayal of him eventually. I shuddered when I read that Butterbeer-scene...

I think you also did a great job on not turning Lavender into an OC of yours. She has so much more depth than in the HP books, but still she is very much in character. Something I'm not sure about is whether she'd really be so sad about Ron after months, but then again she was rather obsessed with him.

I think I read somewhere that someone said your Ginny was too out of character for snapping at Lavender like that (I might be mistaken though). I really don't think so. She's worried about what Harry does and angry that she can't do anything to help him. In that matter, I see Ginny as an idealist, someone who'd do a lot for a "cause," to show their colours. And she'd obviously be angry at people who back out of a movement like theirs, when Harry is risking his life, and she clearly sees that evil threat and wants to do something about it.

Great story, I don't think I can give you any constructive criticism. I always thought your MWPP characterisation and style was great, but you're obviously just an overall very skilled writer.


Author's Response: WOW! Thanks Kara. Grinning with pleasure now. I don't think anyone's mentioned Ginny being OOC in a review, but I could always argue my case (LOL). I actually think Ginny would snap at anyone who appeared to criticize thouse she holds dear. You only have to see her snap at Hermione after the Sectumsempra incident to know that. Now, I thought I'd made it clear she was over Ron, and wasn't that sad about him - my point being that too many important things have happened in the intervening months for her to actually be that bothered about Won-Won, but that must be unclear. The reason that it didn't take her until Chapter three to rejoin the DA is that this was supposed to be a one-shot for Characterisation Class, so I needed it to have a recognisable end. Having said that, I have written chapter two and it's currently with my beta so watch this space!

Thank you again for the review. I really appreciate it. Carole xxx

Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 05/20/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Promises to keep

I remember now (well, I checked actually, because I couldn't remember), and I guess I thought someone said that about Ginny, because you mentioned that you might have made her "rather an unsympathetic character" in the character exploration class... Never mind that then :D

Author's Response: Ah ha, so it was me after all. *giggles*.

As Fate Wills... by wistful_sage

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: James struggles to make a mark in the Gryffindor Quidditch Team and woo the one girl who is not interested in him, Sirius struggles to throw away the image he's gained as a Black and start over with a new bunch of friends, Remus struggles to hide his 'furry little problem' from the first friends he's had in a long time, and Peter struggles with school work and to keep up with his cool friends. The only thing these boys have in common is their house. Facing the exasperation of their teachers, the enmity of Severus Snape, the ire of Lily Evans and the plottings of Voldemort's followers, the four unlikely friends find it hard to keep afloat, but bear everything with the Marauder spirit - something Remus must remember to do years into the future, as he faces the biggest struggles of his life - coming to terms with his last friend's death, and figuring out what his feelings for Tonks are. But in the end whatever happens shall be fate's will...
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 06/24/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Ah, I just found this, and I'm worried that you won't keep updating unless you get more reviews - I don't even know why this story only has one! Probably you would get loads more if you made it past the Prologue-stage. It sounds so promising - I really liked the way you showed Tonks and her clumsiness (in every way), and Remus, too. For your first piece of FanFic, this is really great - please do keep writing!

Vampire - Ghost Child! by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Rosalburga Aphrodite Black is no ordinary Hogwarts student. First - she's American. Second - she's only just discovered she's a witch. Third - her mother is a Vampire. Fourth - her father is Sex!God Sirius Black.

Things are about to get very exciting for the new R.A.B.

This is a tale of high dram and passion. This is a tale of extreme cliche's. This is a tale that may never be seen again.

Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling or even Stephanie Meyer
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 04/01/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue - How they met.

That was awesome!! I really get so much info about those Twilight characters! I'll really have to read the book.
Your characterization is great too! Especially the one of Sirius Black. THis is how I've always imagined him talk to a real woman! Keep writing and update soon! I'll definitely fav you

Author's Response: Uh-huh, that's why Sirius is soooo successful with all the hot!babes he manages to pull. Even when dead he's a fully fledged vamp-magnet. *swoon*

The Doll House Girls by youaremylifenow

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: This story is for the Written Word Challenge (Spring Term 2009).

Rose can purge her feelings. Cho can eat until she can't feel. Andromeda can starve herself until she feels nothing at all. These three girls have one thing in common. An eating disorder.
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 04/26/09 Title: Chapter 1: Rose Weasley - Post Hogwarts - Prologue

I wanted to tell you that your story is really well written. I read your WWC thread and with that and the way you wrote that first chapter, I feel that I really get to... feel with Rose's character and her struggles... Are you going to show the way to the ED with one of your other characters?

My thoughts really are with you right now. I hope so much that you'll manage to get out of there. i know that this probably sounds ridiculous coming from a complete stranger, but if you ever need any help, or anything, you can always PM or email me via the forums.

Unwanted Gifts by jenny b

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Lily Evans and Severus Snape were best friends. Always had been, perhaps always would be. But there is a thin line between them – a line that has always held Severus back from showing Lily how he really feels about her.

One Christmas, he steps over the line, and gives Lily a simple gift she did not ask for. A kiss.
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 04/29/09 Title: Chapter 1: Unwanted Gifts

I never feel sympathetic for Severus a lot, but this was sooo sad... Awfully well written, really.

Author's Response: I'm not usually a Severus fan, either, but with Lily/Sev I can't help but pity him. :( Thank you for your kind compliment, dear!

Involuntary Volunteer by Racing Co

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Gilderoy Lockhart devises the perfect plan to help boost morale after a young Gryffindor student is Petrified by the “horror within” the Chamber of Secrets. Despite his best attempts at rudeness, Severus Snape unwillingly becomes a part of Lockhart’s scheme.
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 07/13/09 Title: Chapter 1: Involuntary Volunteer


I enjoyed your story a lot. It is very interesting to see the teachers' PoV of the events during CoS, and I've always wondered how Snape ended up in that Duelling Club with Lockhart. I imagined that he was hoping to "accidentally" put Lockhart in the Hospital Wing or something, but your Involuntary Volunteer-scene sounds more realistic. I particularily enjoyed the last two paragraphs of your story, they really made me laugh.

Before I continue with content related things, a small nitpick: Why, Professor Flitwick was just telling me about how a fourth-year Hugglepuff girl accidently dispelled him across the room during lessons.”

While I enjoy the "Hugglepuff", I don't think it is a term Snape would use. I also wondered about "dueling", because I always thought it was "duelling" with two l-s, but I guess that's one of the American/British things.

Now, on to the content of your fic. I think you did a really good job showing Snape's thoughts and feelings, especially those about Harry. I also like your characterisation of Flitwick; although we never hear him talk much (except for PoA), I can really imagine him talking like that to other teachers, and I think you characterised him quite well.

The only thing I can criticise here is your characterisation of McGonagall. While I generally like the way you wrote her, in my opinion she trusted Snape. While I agree with you that she only trusted him because Dumbledore trusted him, I think she trusted him fully because Dumbledore said he had his reasons. I don't believe she doubted Snape's allegiance or was easily angry with him. Actually, from the books I always got the impression that they got along quite well.

Now, I thought your story was quite nice, until Lockhart entered – then it really had me cracking up. You wrote him so well! I particularily liked the sentences

“Everyone! I’ve just come up with an idea! Stunningly brilliant!”


“Good man,” Lockhart remarked loudly as Severus exited the staffroom door, “but he’s rather big-headed, don’t you think?”

It shows perfectly how convinced Lockhart is of himself without actually realising that he himself is the one who keeps bragging all the time.

Also, the way he wriggles out of duelling Flitwick (because, of course, Lockhart would lose) was very in character. He pretends that he doesn't want to humiliate Flitwick, and Flitwick, who doesn't want to duel him, plays along although of course he does know better. I also really liked how you remembered and included the information about Flitwick being a duelling champion in his younger years.

Overall, a really nice and enjoyable story, and I had great fun reading it!

*toaster huggles*

Author's Response: Sorry for the belated reply! I only just remembered that I never responded! Anyway, thank you for the review and the very good things you pointed out. I had a sudden fright when I read the dueling/duelling thing, but in the American dictionary, it's just dueling (which I thought very strange). I should have thought more about McGonagall's characterization in that one part I guess I was trying to further the story more than keeping in step with the character. Anyway, Lockhart was by far the most fun to write! I hope to do more with him because he's both jolly and idiotic... a dangerous combination indeed. Thanks for reading!

I Never... by Russia Snow

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: It was only a kiss, how did it end up like this? It was only a kiss… It was only a kiss…

Draco Malfoy has been released from Azkaban. He is free to start a fresh. The only problem is, he doesn’t want a new start, he still wants one thing from his old life. He wants that one thing more than anything in the entire world. But she does not want him back. And he cannot accept that.

Nominated for 2009 QSQ's in " Best Dark/Angst"

Songfic: Mr Brightside by The Killers

Dedicated to an amazing beta, and awesome friend, Gabby. BeautyInTheBreakdown. Thankyou so much :)
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 07/14/09 Title: Chapter 1: I Never...

Oh Russia, Russia, Russia! It was so amazing. I had to reread it twice to find remotely appropriate words to express my awe; I hope I can do your story justice with this review.

It is (and I'm being honest, I'm not saying that just because I love you, it's my true opinion) one of the best stories I've ever read on here, and definitely the best Draco/Ginny one – though that may be due to the lack of D/G (Drinny?) fics I read.

Like PnP, I originally intended to copy and paste my favourite parts to show you what I particularly enjoyed, but it is impossible. You just keep up one level of awesomeness from the beginning right to the very last line. It doesn't get slow or boring or hard to read, and you connect every paragraph perfectly to the next one.

I also really liked how you fit the story and the song together – you did a really amazing job with that. There are songfics where the song just represents the general feeling of the story etc., but with your fic, the song actually describes the story and the other way round.

I honestly can't believe that this is your first story on the archives, because it's so incredibly good. Your writing is fantastic, and has – in the way it flows – almost something Rowlingesque to it, which you will, I hope, take as a compliment.

I also thought your plot was really good. This story could even be considered canon – well except for the ending, although in a way it isn't clear if he doesn't live on ;P (btw I liked that you didn't make this explicit).

I got the feeling that Draco talked himself into the "relationship" with Ginny during his years in Azkaban, as this was the only thing he could hold on to. She, of course, doesn't remember a thing, as he obliviated her. Ah, it's so tragic, so moving – and that for me; I don't even like Draco usually! *prepares to be skinned alive*

I can't find a proper word to describe your story. Awesome? Brilliant? Fantastic? It definitely is beautiful in a tragic and sad way. And I really admire your writing.

Now, to end this on a less soppy note, nitpicking :D

He could never let go of the though of being with her; he would always be her slave, a slave to her un-imaginable beauty.
I think you mean "He could never let go of the thought..." here.

Lots of love and hugs and kisses

Author's Response: There are no words Kara. Seriously, no words! from me! Russia! I always have words! You actually just made me cry, tears of happiness, don't worry lol. But seriously, thankyou so much. That reveiw means so much to me! Lots of love, hugs, kisses and tears! Russia xxxxx PS. see?! NO words!

Renaissance by Wolf By Night

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Harry never expected to find out that Remus had a twin sister; nor did he expect the appearance of his mother's best friend. And he certainly didn't expect the history they, and Sirius, all shared. But perhaps these four links to Harry's parents can help him in his ever-lasting war with Voldemort - and in the process, give him the family he never had. AU OotP, with some canon left intact. NOT a Mary Sue fic.
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 07/15/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Fallacious Continuance

Just a short review, and I shall leave a longer one when I have more time (with the next chapter, for example *hinthintupdate*).

I thought your story was really great so far, and the character of Fera is so intriguing. It just makes me want to find out all about her – why is she so bitter, what does she do for a living, how well did she know Sirius... I'm dying to read more! I don't read many AU fics, but this one really looks promising. You can actually pull the "Remus has a sister"-thing without creating thousands of clichs and a Mary Sue. Fera really is a believable character, and I think it's amazing that you managed to show that with just the prologue so far.

Keep writing, I need to

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your interest and your praise! It means absolutely everything to us to know that people are watching and keeping up with the story. I'm SO glad to know that you love Fera, as she's like a child to me (sad, but true, especially since I've had her in my head for FIVE YEARS). Thanks again for the love, and stay tuned, because it's about to get exciting! <3 Wolf By Night

Daddy's Little Girl by Sagen

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: In every little girl’s life there is someone special –a role model. In Lily Evans’ it was her father.
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 08/09/09 Title: Chapter 1: Daddy's Little Girl

I've procrastinated reading this story for some time now – even though I read about it on the forum and noticed the banner.

And now it made me cry :( It was very short, but very much on the point too.. It fits so well with Lily, and it breaks my heart to feel her loss...

Man I really wanna call my dad now >.<

I also liked the way Petunia treated Lily in the first bit (the christmas-one) it's only a brief glimpse into their relationship, but it's really how I imagine an older sister to treat her younger one – careful, explaining everything...

I'd like to leave you a more detailed and constructive review, but I can't think clearly enough at the moment..

I loved your story a lot.

Author's Response: Aww, thanks Kara! Peace, Gen. :) xo

Torn by Russia Snow

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Jenna Lloyd is a normal Muggle; she has a normal name, and lives a normal life. Who would have thought that a shower of rain, a mysterious antique shop and a beautiful locket, would change her life forever?
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 08/06/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Locket

Oooooh I can't tell you how happy I am right now. It's so amazing to see this story up here... I love you *huggles* I don't know what to say right now... *tacklecuddles*

Author's Response: heh! *wins* I finally got Kara lost for words! I am so glad you like this story Kara, your opinion means the most to me in the world :-D *Tacklesquish* thankyou so much! This story owes averything to you, it really does. Russia xxxxx

The Waiting Game by Equinox Chick

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: The waiting room at St Mungo's is a dreary place. Ginny knows it better than many people, for she spends her days there waiting -- and hoping.

This is Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff writing for the extra credit One Floo over the Fwoopers Nest category in the Bookbasilisk Summer Challenge.

I would like to thank Apurva (DracoGurlFurever) for beta'ing this for me and making some great suggestions.

I am not JK Rowling - I doubt that shocks you.
Reviewer: Karaley Dargen Signed
Date: 08/23/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh Carole, this was almost too touching... Especially your dedication, together with the whole story, almost made me cry, and that's saying something.

For a brief moment, I thought, hoped, that the dream sequence was real, that he had just been hit by a bad memory charm or something, that he really was recovering. How horrible it must be for a family like the Weasleys, who are so close, to slowly lose their father like that.

I think you made a great choice with the characters; that you picked the Weasley family (the closest and strongest family we meet in the HP books) to show a father not recognising his wife and children just emphasises the horror of the disease.

Thank you for this story, even if it made me sad and scared. Or maybe because of that.


Author's Response: Thanks Kara, it means a lot that this was read and reviewed. The dream sequence made me cry writing it, but it's something that happens to me. Anyway, I felt awful subjecting Ginny and the other Weasleys to this, but it's such a horrible condition and if I'd inflicted it on Lucius, for instance, I don't think there'd be as mucg sympathy. Thank you again. Carole xxx