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Hello! I'm so happy to be part of the MNFF community! I've enjoyed reading many stories here, and look forward to posting many of my own.

What might you want to know about me? Well, as for hobbies, I play two instruments, dance, and keep turkeys and chickens. Of course, I love to read and write, too. Why else would I be here? ;)


I've received several questions about the timeline of my story Eyes Wife Open, so I'd thought I'd do my best to explain it here. Although it may sound counterintuitive that Dudley's grandchild could be at Hogwarts at the same time as Harry's children, it actually is possible. Here's how.

In Eyes Wide Open, Dudley's ex-girlfriend shows up on his doorstep with their seven-month-old daughter in July of 1997, when Dudley is eighteen. This means that the baby, Ella, was born in December of 1996.

Ella gives birth to Dandelion in August of 2011. This means that Ella got pregnant right around her fourteenth birthday.

According to HP Lexicon, James Sirius started Hogwarts in 2016, Albus Severus started Hogwarts in 2017, and Lily Luna started Hogwarts in 2019. Since Dandelion was born in 2011, that means she started school in 2022. At that point, James would have been a seventh year, Albus would have been a sixth year, and Lily Luna would have been a fourth year. Thus in Dandelion's first year, all of Harry's children were in school with her.

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Finding Her Voice by Belledeg

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 205 Reviews
Summary: Harper Riley is one of the most gifted young witches of her generation. However, since the traumatic events of the Battle of Hogwarts, she has not spoken a single word. Her Muggle parents were killed, along with her two wizarding brothers, and she is on the run from her squib guardian, a sinful and harsh man with a strong hatred of magic.

Harry Potter is recently married and settled, however, his life seems to take on another dramatic turn when he and Ginny find Harper. Her refusal to speak makes things a lot harder for them to discover how to help her. Luckily, Harry knows someone who owes him a favour. Someone who he and Ginny may not like, but they trust. Someone whose profession is to help those who suffer from the Battle of Hogwarts, no matter their story…

If anyone can get her talking again, it’s Blaise.

"I don't want to forget that night...but I don't want to remember it either."

A Blaise Zabini/Original Character romance

This story has the characters: Blaise Zabini, Harper Riley, Jimmy Peakes, Harry Potter, Ginny Potter, Ron Weasley, Hermione Weasley, Isabella Zabini, Draco Malfoy, Dennis Creevey, Leonard Wilkes, Theodore Nott and Minerva McGonagall plus many more.
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/11/09 Title: Chapter 11: Blaise n' Red

Alright, I suppose I don't hate you. I wrote my previous review, submitted it, and found a new chapter waiting for me. Ah, heaven! But I do still expect frequent updates!

I liked this chapter a lot, but I admit I liked Chapter 10 better. I did of course enjoy all the Blaise/Harper in this chapter, but the best line in it probably is, "Bilbo beamed and bowed, but not before muttering something that sounded suspiciously like, “About time, too”." I think he's a lot like how Kreacher would have turned out if he lived in better circumstances.

Author's Response: Updates are pretty regular, one a week usually. Gotta love Bilbo! :D

Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: Harper Riley

I have quite the guilty conscious! I'm been reading and loving this story from the start, but I previously haven't spent the two minutes needed to tell you how much I like your story. It's one of my very favorites.

It's rather fun (although slightly exasperating) to read the thoughts of Blaise and Harper. Your writing is very good -- I can literally feel the tension between the two. They like each other so much, yet they can't see what the other person would seem in them. Sometimes, though, I just want to bust into your story and knock some sense into your two characters.

It's also so nice to read something about a non-cliched Slytherin. Everyone just seems to assume that they're all evil, just because of what eleven-year-old Ron (from the most Gryffindor of Gryffindor families) said in PS/SS. I'm glad somebody has seen fit to right about somebody with Slytherin traits who is a perfectly good person.

I do enjoy the changes in POV so I know exactly what both Blaise and Harper are thinking in each situation, the changes could be a little more clearly marked. It's a little jarring to go from reading one of Harper's thoughts to reading one of Blaise's with no break in the story or anything.

Keep up the excellent original writing and frequent updates! I really appreciate it.

Author's Response: I hate it when Slytherins are all evil; it's so unfair. Hopefully, some progress will be made between them in the next chapter which is in the queue. :D

Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/18/09 Title: Chapter 12: Chasing Cars

Oooo, I really liked this chapter! I guess watching Blaise and Jimmy fight over Harper is surprisingly enjoyable.

I was sort of afraid when Harper got her voice back that the story wouldn't somehow wouldn't be as enjoyable, but thankfully my fears were misplaced. I absolutely love Harper's sarcasm, especially lines like "‘Oh, no,’ murmured Harper. ‘It thinks.’"

I have one little correction for you to make with the line, "'Jimmy, that’s enough,’ snapped Harper, aware that getting into a fight beside a busy road was not wise. Especially with so many Muggles circulating around as well. ‘Let’s go back in.’" The second sentence is actually a sentence fragment. It can easily be fixed by switching the period after "wise" for a comma and making the e in "especially" lower case.

Author's Response: Thanks for that. And Harper will continue to be nice and sarcastic :D

I Never... by Russia Snow

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 14 Reviews
Summary: It was only a kiss, how did it end up like this? It was only a kiss… It was only a kiss…

Draco Malfoy has been released from Azkaban. He is free to start a fresh. The only problem is, he doesn’t want a new start, he still wants one thing from his old life. He wants that one thing more than anything in the entire world. But she does not want him back. And he cannot accept that.

Nominated for 2009 QSQ's in " Best Dark/Angst"

Songfic: Mr Brightside by The Killers

Dedicated to an amazing beta, and awesome friend, Gabby. BeautyInTheBreakdown. Thankyou so much :)
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 1: I Never...

That really was a beautiful little story you wrote, Russia. I really felt Draco's utter desolation, which I'm sure was you intent.

When Draco sits and watches Ginny greet Harry when he gets home from work, I really felt that scene worked well, despite the fact that I'm not a Draco/Ginny shipper. It almost seemed like something Snape would do and how Snape would feel when Lily was with James after Hogwarts. (Lily/Severus is my OTP.)

My one nitpick is that towards the end of the story, the text as well as the song is centered. You might want to go back and fix that.

Other than that, terrific job, and congratulations on your first story accepted by MNFF!

Author's Response: Thankyou SoS! I have changed that bit now, tags hate me :-p I am glad you enjoyed the story, and yes, I can see the similarities to Snape/Lilly :-) Russia xxxxx

Torn by Russia Snow

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 9 Reviews
Summary: Jenna Lloyd is a normal Muggle; she has a normal name, and lives a normal life. Who would have thought that a shower of rain, a mysterious antique shop and a beautiful locket, would change her life forever?
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 08/15/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Locket

Russia, I really enjoyed this first chapter of your story. Your writing is lovely -- it manages to convey a sense of magic and mystery. I look forward to seeing what happens next!

Author's Response: Thankyou Laura! I am sorrry it has taken me so long to get around to writing this response... and not getting another chapter up! I will soon I promise! Thankyou so much for the review! Russia xxxxx

Memories by A H

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 21 Reviews
Summary: Harry takes Ginny on a trip down memory lane. Some memories should be cherished forever, and sometimes we have to put the past behind us so that we can make new memories.
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 08/17/09 Title: Chapter 1: Memories

Oh my goodness, Ari, what a sweet story! I absolutely love Ginny's confusion, countered by Harry's determination to pull her through all the landmarks in their relationship whether she likes it or not. So cute!

Yes, I realise this is a very gushing review, but what other kind of review is appropriate for a fluffly one-shot? :P

The Marauder's Map - A Beginning by Karaley Dargen

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 6 Reviews
Summary: On a lazy Saturday afternoon in their fifth year, two of the Marauders are staying inside talking – while the other two are outside and get an idea. Why not make a map of Hogwarts? It would certainly make their nightly wanderings easier, and who knows what could be done with a piece of parchment...

This is Karaley Dargen of Gryffindor writing for the final in the MWPP class on the beta boards.
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/27/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Kara, I really enjoyed this story overall. I loved what Remus had to say about escaping into the world of a novel for a time -- that's exactly how I feel about reading fiction. It was also really neat that you gave Peter the credit for the idea of the Marauders Map. He's usually so underestimated in fanfiction, and I'm so glad that you showed that he may have contributed some to the Marauders' plans.

However, I didn't feel like the two parts of the story fit together too well. It felt like you put together two drabbles together (one about Remus talking to James about books and one about Peter's idea) to make a piece long enough to submit to MNFF. I liked both parts, but they just didn't feel relevant to each other.

Stay Awake by ringobeatlesfan4

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 12 Reviews

The gang is at Zack’s house for one final week together before they all have to go their separate ways.

They’ve proven that anything can happen in five minutes; but what can happen to them in seven days?

'Tis the companion fic to Don't Leave Just Yet. I strongly recommend you read that one first.

Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 10/31/09 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

I think I like where you're taking this story, Becca. It's been a little fluffy for my taste, but it shows some real promise of becoming much more complex and interesting with Holly's conflict as to whether to let her dad back into her life. Keep up the good work and please update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks, Laura! Your review made me smile :D When I wrote it, I didnt' have it in mind to be fluffy....But I guess that's kinda cool, because I find it hard to write fluff. Anyway, I'm glad you like it and read it despite that! I'm not sure how soon I can update; chapter five isn't done and I'm doing NaNo so I'm putting my full attention towards that....But we'll see! :) I'm glad you like it! {BeccA}

The Howling Hall by Racing Co

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 2 Reviews
Summary: Damocles Belby has been searching for the answer to the centuries-old problem: what can stop man from becoming the beast? After years of failure and a developing penchant for drinking Firewhisky, the old Healer makes a startling revelation one moonlit night in the Stokely Ward.

This is Racing Co of Gryffindor submitting for the One Floo Over the Fwooper’s Nest challenge.
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 10/31/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Howling Hall

Wow! What an original story! It had never occurred to me to think about the Wolfbane Potion's invention, nor the fact that since it was invented fairly recently, there must have been many centuries of trial and error before it was brewed.

You conveyed the seeming hopelessness of the situation nicely right at the very beginning. From Belby talking about drowning out the sounds of the nightmare of transformation, the reader can tell how deeply he does care. However, I think you could have used a few less exclamation marks throughout the story and still made it just as dramatic.

It's quite funny that you show the inspiration for the successful potion's key ingredient coming from an "old wife's tale". It fits nicely with the interest in alternative medicine today with old remedies.

Author's Response: Thanks for enjoying the story. It was interesting to write with a different tone. I usually just stick with the light, Quidditch- or Lockhart-related stories. I really should go back and tone down some of the over-the-top-ness of the story. I got a bit melodramatic at times, admittedly. Thanks for reviewing!

Hermione by OliveOil_Med

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 51 Reviews
Summary: Hermione Wilkins is an explorer with an over-active imagination. So when a woman show up on her doorstep claiming she is Hermione too, no one believes her. In fact, she is punished! Of course, the fact that she was climbing on the roof at the time might have had something to do with it...

But when Hermione Weasley appears once again, she shares a secret with Hermione Wilkins; mostly because she needs her help if she is ever going to achieve what she came to Australia for in the first place.
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Expecting

What a neat premise, Molly! I've always thought that the idea that Hermione (Granger) would waltz in and fix her parents memories as easy as pie right after the end of DH was simplistic. It's fun to read about the similarities and differences between Hermione I and Hermione II. Right now, I'm guessing Hermione Wilkens seems to be perhaps more like her dad, and Hermione Granger more like her mum. Well, I can't wait to read more, that's for sure!

Author's Response: I'm glad you like the idea for the story, and I hope you will read future chapters. I suppose I am writing Hermione I to take more after her mother and Hermione II to take after her father, but the idea for HermioneII's character actually came from an J.K. interview that I read. She said Hermione Granger was an exaggerated version of herself as a child, and I suppose that is what Hermione Wilkens is to me; a caricature of myself at ten years old.

To Tell The Truth. by Russia Snow

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 4 Reviews
Summary: One mistake, one wrong number, can lead to lives torn apart. Secrets never solve anything, they only make things worse.Self harm warning for eating disorders.

This is Russia Snow of Gryffindor submitting for “One Flew Over the Fwooper's Nest” Bookbasilisk Summer challenge.

Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 10/31/09 Title: Chapter 1: To Tell The Truth

This was a really neat story, Russia. Your descriptions kept me engrossed, and I was amazed how much the plot twisted and turned. The ending was shocking and very touching. Bravo.

Author's Response: O.O you liked it? Wow. Thankyou SO much Laura, when I saw I had an other review I was like "Aw, man. I bet they hated it." but it was you and it was lovely. Thankyou SO much! I am so happy you liked it! Thanks again. Russia xxxxx

Fascinating Facts About Scorpius Malfoy by Kerichi

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 17 Reviews


Rose used a blank journal to list practical information about the boy she intended to bring home for holiday and pass off as her boyfriend: Scorpius’ favourite colour, his favourite food. As their pretend relationship became real, the entries became longer and more intimate. And then one day—to her horror—she misplaced the journal.



Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/18/09 Title: Chapter 1: Lessons Learned

What a fun one-shot! "Our Little Secret" is one of my favorite stories on MNFF, and this was a great extension of it. It was very sweet, showing what a great relationship Rose and Scorpius have. Of course, I wouldn't have minded if this one-shot was longer. ;) I eagerly await the next one-shot.

Author's Response: I'm so glad to hear OLS is one of your favorites! This was definitely a missing moment where Rose learns a lesson about herself and Scorpius, so it's shorter than the next one shot will be. I hope knowing the next one will be longer is happy news. :)

Ignorance by ringobeatlesfan4

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 4 Reviews

Ignorance is your new best friend.

Will she say it, or won’t she? You’ve been waiting for half of your life to hear her say those three words. But no. She’ll just continue to hurt you, and you know it, deep down. Know it, but refuse to believe it.

Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/26/09 Title: Chapter 1: Stranger

Wow, Becca, I'm very impressed by this story! You really manage to make the reader feel Charlie's pain. The ending (Cass's death) was quite shocking, but somehow felt oddly appropriate, something not often said about a character's death. I guess I feel she kind of had it coming. However, the note, and especially the obituary, managed to make her death heart-wrenching.

Author's Response: *squees* Laura, this made my day. Thank you sooo much! I'm glad you felt that way about Cass dying; I really hated to do it, but she did sort of have it coming in her own way. I'm so happy you liked it though; I wasn't sure what kind of reaction I would get. But as it's my first foray into Dark/Angst, I think it worked. *smiles* Thanks again! *huggles* {BeccA}

Agnes by Russia Snow

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 10 Reviews
Summary: Dolores Umbridge is evil. Everyone hates her and she hates everyone. That is the way it has always been - or has it? Are people born evil? Surely there are reasons for her actions. We only ever hear the tale of the hero, what about the ememy?

This is the untold story of Dolores Umbridge.

This is Russia Snow of Gryffindor writing for The Untold Story Challenge in the Great Hall on the Beta Forums

Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 12/17/09 Title: Chapter 1: Dolores Umbridge

I love your explanation for Umbridge's abnormal fear and hatred of part-humans, but I'm not sure if the story explains that well her love of order and authority. Nobody helped her that much in life -- you'd think she'd be a big individualist, not a loyal Ministry employee. However, perhaps an explanation of her loyalty to the Ministry was not your goal in the first place.

Author's Response: Thankyou for your review, Laura! I think Kara answered your question about her Ministery loyalty lol. Really, I was aiming to show why she had such a thing against half breeds and against muggles. *hugs* ~Thanks, Laura! Russia xxxxx

About Last Night by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 5 Reviews
Summary: James Sirius Potter was two years out of school, taking his first steps toward a brilliant Quidditch career, but on a night of drunken celebration, he meets his match in the form of a Hufflepuff bombshell who sets him straight.
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 11/22/09 Title: Chapter 1: About Last Night

I loved this story! Your writing was excellent, and the situations you portrayed both realistic and at times very funny. Because of this story, I decided to try "The Vindication..." and I'm so glad I did.

Author's Response:

Why thank you! There are so many stories about Harry's kids during school, but there are virtually none set during their adulthood. They're like brand new characters, and my only real restrictions with them are their ages, some of their physical features, and of course, the multitudes of cousins!

I'm terrible about feeling the need for my characters to suffer a bit. It only seems fair, after all of the sorrow Harry had to endure. I hope you keep reading VoJP, because I have 19 chapters written, and it's close to being finished, so as fast as the queue will spit them out, I'll be posting them.

Thank you so much for your review. I love reviews so much, I wish more people left them! (especially glowing ones like yours, lol)

Jump by IckleRonnieX

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 7 Reviews
When you lose someone you love, people start staring at you with pity in their gazes. They start shooting you sympathetic smiles. They all offer you their condolences, but that doesn’t make much difference to you now. Nothing will.

Your brother is dead.

This is IckleRonniex of Gryffindor, submitting my final for the Watching the Mirror class

Thanks to my AMAZING betas Annalise (Annalise28), Andi (LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVeR) and Sarah (Sapphire at Dawn)
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 12/16/09 Title: Chapter 1: Jump

There have been so many stories written in fandom about George dealing with Fred's death. Though it is something we've all probably wondered about at one time or another, the topic has started to become over-used. It's refreshing to at least not read about as a chaptered story. I think you've convinced me that it's somewhat better as a one-shot. It isn't worth it to spend so many thousands of words on angst. A thousand or so is about just right.

Yet this doesn't have to be about George, does it? I skimmed it again and realized it could be about any Weasley brother dealing with Fred's death. Indeed, it could be about Dennis Creevy dealing with Collin's death. It could even be about anyone who fought at the Battle of Hogwarts dealing with a brother's death there. It is a very clever mind trick that you played on your readers!

Yet I almost would have preferred that you mention your characters by name or somehow make clear who they are. The lingering questions at the end of the story (Who were the characters? What was the siblings' relationship like? What was the relationship between the surviving sibling and the girl/woman?) do not allow the reader a sense of resolution, despite the otherwise perfectly acceptable ending.

Looking back at what I've written, I realize I sound rather harsh -- very uncharacteristically so. It isn't like I disliked your story. Though your writing style is slightly abrupt -- perhaps you could have drawn out the story a little longer?-- it didn't detract from my interest or enjoyment too much. I realize that this is only your second story on MNFF, and I simply want to help you realize your potential is a writer. Trust me. You have a great deal of it.

Author's Response: Hi Laura! At first, I was writing it about Dennis Creevy, actually, but as I wrote, I started thinking about Percy. I imagined him to feel guilty about Fred's death and that it would be, in my opinion, a bit worse to him than to George. So, this was written about Percy and Audrey but I didn't mention the names because I wanted the reader to assume who was I talking about. I was also very oblique concerning the characterization because of the same thing. I could have elaborated about the relationships with the brother and with the girl, but I was actually on a rush and needed to send it to beta as soon as I could because of the deadline :o. I know that I kind of leave those questions lingering but I guess that kind of is my style because when I write OF and I show it to my friends, I end up with those same questions. I think that I should start correcting that :p You're right about it. And you didn't sound harsh at all, honestly. I love this kind of reviews! It makes me thinkg of my writing and of ways to make it better. Thanks a lot, by the way! :) -Ronnie xxx

Thievery by Belledeg

Rated: Professors • 30 Reviews
Summary: Percy Weasley has finally found, at age twenty-one, a decent place to live and a level ground with his family. The only thing troubling him in his life is not knowing what is holding him back from promotion at the Ministry.

His life is as uncomplicated as he could ever want. That is until a homeless young woman with the ability to make him as nervous as a schoolboy shows up on his door. His Gryffindor chivalry demands he help her and her terrible situation, but the feelings she stirs in him are far from gentlemanly.

Audrey Sparks has a job to do. An undercover job involving Percy Weasley. But she soon learns that her conscience won't let her merely steal from him and then leave.

Hearts may well be stolen instead. A Percy Weasley/Audrey Sparks Romance
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 08/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Head Boy and the Pickpocket

Your story has left me with a smile on my face. I think I'm already in love with the way you write Percy/Audrey. I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you, plenty more to come. Thank you for a lovely and encouraging first review :D

Bit of a Nasty Shock by hestiajones

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 17 Reviews
Summary: ‘I’m half and half,’ said Seamus. ‘Me dad’s a Muggle. Mam didn’t tell him she was a witch ’til after they were married. Bit of a nasty shock for him.’

You'd love to hear this story, wouldn't you?

Thanks to Emma (Amortentia_x) for the Irishpick! :D And I am not J.K.Rowling, though they all belong to her.

Nominated for a QSQ in the Best Humour category.
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 08/13/10 Title: Chapter 1: Some witches do know how to bewitch!

Oh, that was laugh-out-loud funny! Your little introduction at the beginning was so clever, and your characterization of Mr. and Mrs. Finnigan (especially the former) really made minor characters come to life.

Author's Response: Hi Laura!

I am glad I was able to make you laugh. :) I am also happy you liked my introduction because I felt I took some risk with it. Thanks for reading and reviewing. :D