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Hello! I'm so happy to be part of the MNFF community! I've enjoyed reading many stories here, and look forward to posting many of my own.

What might you want to know about me? Well, as for hobbies, I play two instruments, dance, and keep turkeys and chickens. Of course, I love to read and write, too. Why else would I be here? ;)

~*~

I've received several questions about the timeline of my story Eyes Wife Open, so I'd thought I'd do my best to explain it here. Although it may sound counterintuitive that Dudley's grandchild could be at Hogwarts at the same time as Harry's children, it actually is possible. Here's how.

In Eyes Wide Open, Dudley's ex-girlfriend shows up on his doorstep with their seven-month-old daughter in July of 1997, when Dudley is eighteen. This means that the baby, Ella, was born in December of 1996.

Ella gives birth to Dandelion in August of 2011. This means that Ella got pregnant right around her fourteenth birthday.

According to HP Lexicon, James Sirius started Hogwarts in 2016, Albus Severus started Hogwarts in 2017, and Lily Luna started Hogwarts in 2019. Since Dandelion was born in 2011, that means she started school in 2022. At that point, James would have been a seventh year, Albus would have been a sixth year, and Lily Luna would have been a fourth year. Thus in Dandelion's first year, all of Harry's children were in school with her.
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Thy Will Be Done by Gonz
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: et cognoscetis veritatem, et veritas liberabit vos.
“And you shall know the truth, and the truth will set you free” - John 8:32

Nathaniel Benn has always served peacefully as a friar in his small English village. But when an innocent Muggle is accused of witchcraft, Nathaniel is thrust into confrontation with a zealous Inquisitor and apathetic Wizards. As the situation worsens, Nathaniel must decide whether he will watch innocents burn or risk his life to tell the Church the truth about witchcraft.

Overrall winner in the Autumn Challenge!

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Violence

Word count: 5526 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/02/07 Updated: 11/01/07


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 06/30/09 Title: Chapter 1: Accusations

I'm in love again. I read your story a while ago, and just rediscovered it. It's wonderful! Your description of life in a small English village a few hundred years ago seems very accurate. Plus, the ending, where it is revealed that this is the story of the Fat Friar, is a neat plot twist.

Author's Response: Thank you for kind review. This is my favorite story, I had a lot of fun looking up the historically details for this fic.

 

Give Him a Mask by Marauder by Midnight
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 18]

Summary: Draco hates trick or treating, an occasion when ignorant Muggles pretend they are good enough to cross the line that separates their world from his. However, because of his role in the War, he is forced to accompany young Scorpius on a door-to-door expedition for Muggle candy. His only solace is that he can finally journey out of his manor without being stared at and hides comfortably behind his mask.

Just when he thought it couldn't get any worse, he finds himself being tailed by a strange, pregnant penguin.

Written for my friend Delaney (callmehermione) for SPEW's Halloween Swap.

Categories: Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4425 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/30/07 Updated: 11/30/07


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 10/06/09 Title: Chapter 1: Give Him a Mask

I always enjoy reading about Draco as a father, and I think you did a good job portraying him as such. He still acts like Draco, but I tell he really cares about the boy. (About his wife on the other hand, I'm not so sure...)

Actually, I think you captured an adult Draco well overall, not just as a father. He isn't a saint like in some stories, but he certainly has matured some and is trying to get by in a different sort of world than the one he grew up in.

I was surprised by Ginny's anger towards former Death Eaters, but I suppose it isn't that OOC. Survivors of people murdered often hold great anger towards the murderer, and Weasley women are well known for anger.

The ending was absolutely wonderful. It showed that all wounds certainly are far from healed in the wizarding world, but there is a bit of hope. Overall, good job.

 

A Raven's Song by indigo_mouse
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 17]

Summary: Muggles and Wizards alike have legends of Faerie, some grim and shadowed, some bright and beautiful. It is a twilight land between light and dark, where love and sorrow intertwine with enchantment. Twenty one years after the fall of the Dark Lord, a girl walks out of the legend and brings a very old magic to Hogwarts.

Winner of the 2008 Quicksilver Quills Best Romance Between Other Characters.



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 15113 Chapters: 7 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/17/08 Updated: 06/29/08


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 10/31/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Wands Out

The idea of there being a magical world that the wizarding world doesn't know about is a fascinating idea. I also how you portrayed this Faerie world -- it was somewhat dark, but there still was some good. The romance was nicely written, though the timeline at the beginning was slightly confusing. By the end, though, I was rooting for the two lovers, and was heartbroken when Scorpius was left behind.

Author's Response: This was my first attempt at writing, and I know that you are not the only one who found the timeline slightly confusing. Its always so helpful to hear what didn't work out right, as well as what did, and gives me things to work on for the future. Thank you for taking the time to read and review! It makes my day.

 

Für Das Größere Wohl by Tim the Enchanter
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 70]

Summary: Past Featured StoryDieter Heydrich is a model German boy. He has perfect Aryan complexion, is an exemplary member of the Hitler Youth, and is fanatically loyal to his beloved Führer.

But on his eleventh birthday, Dieter discovers a hidden magical world led by an extraordinary wizard named Gellert Grindelwald…


Nominated for QSQ 2009, Best History/Mystery.
WINNER of QSQ 2009, Best Male Original Character.


Note: As you might have guessed, Für Das Größere Wohl is German, meaning: “For the Greater Good.” Yes, this story is from the perspective of the bad guys.

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 85950 Chapters: 15 Completed: No
Published:
08/18/08 Updated: 01/05/11


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 08/07/09 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter IX: Treppen

Wow! This is an amazing story you have going here! I'd chosen not to read it for a while, as I wasn't particularly interested in the bad guys. One day, though, I was bored and tried you story, and I'm so glad I did.

You say this story is from the point of view of the "bad guys," but really, you show that the bad guys weren't so bad. I'm not saying I'm a Nazi sympathizer or anything, but simply that you show how many Germans who wholehearted supported Hitler and his policies were perfectly normal people -- people like our neighbors, our families, even ourselves. You have an amazing talent that you can make the reader like a character that holds and frequently speaks of many views we call evil.

Your research on the era has simply blown me away as well. Everything feels very real in your writing. It often feels like I'm reading a published historical fiction novel, not Harry Potter fanfiction! One question -- were those fox and rabbit books (I'm too lazy to actually check and see the exact title) for little kids, about how Aryans were great and Jews deserved to be wiped out, were those books real, or did you make them up?

My one critique is your portrayal of Durmstrang makes it almost identical to Hogwarts. Every Hogwarts tradition seems to have a recognizable Durmstrang equivalent. These are different schools founded by different people at different times in different countries, so there should be some things that are completely unique to each school and have no equivalent in the other. But hey, that's just my opinion!

Otherwise, I'm loving your story, and I look forward to reading more!

Author's Response:

I’m glad you decided to read the story and ended up enjoying it. Also, I agree with you completely on the perceptions of what is good versus what is evil. Though I never intended to make a philosophical statement with this story, I wanted to show how Nazism was made up of millions of ordinary people who believed in its message, and not just Hitler and his cronies. It is very easy to pin the blame for Nazism on the leadership, and forget about the populace that supported them and made such crimes possible.

Concerning research, I have taken classes on Hitler’s Third Reich, so a lot of what I’ve learned from reading and watching Nazi propaganda and other documents has wormed its way into this story. Though I am not sure if specifically the metaphor of the rabbit and fox was commonly used, German children definitely were indoctrinated from birth in the ideals of National Socialism. There are several well known Nazi children’s books like The Poison Mushroom and You Can’t Trust a Fox in a Heath and a Jew on His Oath, which taught children to hate Jews from an early age. The Sky Captain Otto von Von books are entirely my invention, but their anti-Semitic messages would have been quite common.

I know there would inevitably be some similarities between Durmstrang and Hogwarts, but I hope to make it clear that Durmstrang is very different school. You’ll learn more about Durmstrang in subsequent chapters.

Anyway, I’m glad you enjoy the story, and I hope you like the upcoming chapters.

~ Tim the Enchanter

 

Apparently Asleep by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 276]

Summary: Nymphadora Tonks lives under a shadow. Both her cousin and her aunt are in Azkaban believed to be in league with Voldemort. She knows Bellatrix deserves to be there- but Sirius?
Remus Lupin is an outsider. He’d once had three good friends- now two are dead and the third has been locked up for murder and betrayal.
They had met once before, when she was a child, but as Tonks grows up they find themselves thrown together- far too closely for Remus’ comfort. He’s always yearned for a normal life but knows that is impossible. Can Tonks convince him that he deserves happiness?

Nominated for a 2009 QSQ award in the Best canon Romance category. Thank you.

Categories: Remus/Tonks Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 121429 Chapters: 21 Completed: No
Published:
10/20/08 Updated: 03/18/11


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 Tea at the Tonks' House

I think that this is my favorite chapter so far! It's immensely clever how you work the letter into your story, and I love the moment when she realizes the reason for her cousin's nickname. Oh, and I absolutely love Tonks's Nan!

Author's Response: I am so pleased you like Shirley King. She turned up in another fic I wrote (Reconnaissance - plug plug) and she just stayed embedded in my brain. Tonks had to get her earthiness from somewhere - Andromeda's far too refined. Thanks for reviewing. Carole xxx

 

Tale of the Pumpkin Thief by Kerichi
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 17]

Summary:

No one stole from Scorpius Malfoy unless he allowed it.

*A Scorpius/Rose Halloween story*



Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2037 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/20/08 Updated: 10/20/08


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 10/03/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I'm pleased to report that I enjoyed reading this story the second time just as much as the first! After reading in OLS that this is when Scorpius started liking Rose, I think it actually made the story all the more meaningful, although I also think it works well as a stand-alone piece.

It's so original to write a story about a pumpkin-carving contest. So often, special events for holidays in HP fanfiction are balls. Frankly, I think the pumpkin-carving contest seems much more fun!

Finally, I love the idea of Rose breaking all the rules because she's annoyed with James. I agree with Scorpius that Snape would have made a scarier pumpkin than the Shrieking Shack, but I can see where Rose would rightfully feel that other Gryffs, especially the boys in her family, don't listen to her.

Author's Response:

I'm more than pleased that you read the story a second time! I'm tickled scarlet. ^_~

Balls are mentioned in canon, so I understand why they're used (because I've used them myself, heh), but Hallowe'en and pumpkin carving go together like sweets and fizzy drinks (without the cavities or stomach aches).

Rose is a Gryffindor, so she takes bold action when it's needed...and when she can rationalize that it isn't hurting anyone and no one will find out. :D You're right, Rose felt like she had to find a way to make the others listen to her, and wanted to prove to them that her design had merit. 

Thank you so much for reviewing!

 

My Troubled Tyrant by Belledeg
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 516]

Summary: Past Featured StoryKeedie Dante has experienced many amazing things during her time at Hogwarts, including the hushed up drama that was the Chamber of Secrets. However, with two overachieving friends and a headmaster who does not even know she exists, Keedie feels that perhaps her seventh year will not be too spectacular. However, Dumbeldore sees her potential as a writer and enrols her in a simple writing course. Here, she meets the mysterious and terrifying Tom Riddle and they instantly get under one another's skin. She is drawn to his dark determination towards some unknown goal and he is fascinated by her, in every way. However, Tom's friends do not approve of Keedie and her unconventional ways and Keedie has many people trying to keep her away from the dark young man as well. Something inside tells Keedie that she can make him better, but even he assures her that this is an impossible task. But she's not one to give up easily...

"He is a dark one, Keedie. Try not to let him consume you entirely."

This story has the characters Albus Dumbledore, Armando Dippet, Moaning Myrtle, Rubeus Hagrid, Aaron Dante, Harry Potter, Ebony Abbott, Minerva McGonagall, Melena Creevey, Ollivander, Gregor Holmwood, Horace Slughorn and, of course, Tom Riddle and Keedie Dante...enjoy!

Winner of "Best Romance Between Other Characters" and nominated for "Best Female OC" in the 2009 Quicksilver Quill Awards

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 152689 Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/08/09 Updated: 09/06/09


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 08/16/10 Title: Chapter 28: The Epilogue--My Immortal

I just finished an epic rereading of MTT in one day. Even though I left plenty of reviews when you were writing the story, I just wanted to quickly let you know that the story touched me as much reading it the second time as the first. I feel a tremendous sense of loss. It is both for Tom's loss of Keedie and mine for finishing this story. It's a sense of loss I'm happy to feel. I also wanted to let you know that a year later, MTT still shapes my sense of canon. Every time I read about "evil" Voldemort, I think, "No, but he loved Keedie!"

All in all, bravo!

Author's Response: Has it lly been a year?? Good to hear from an MTT fan. This fic needs loving, as people overlook it for being unlikely. So glad you like it second time around :)

 
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/07/09 Title: Chapter 28: The Epilogue--My Immortal

Oh my goodness, I'm crying so hard! I know people sometimes say things like this in reviews just to mean that the story is rather touching, but I literally had tears streaming down my face for most of the Epilogue and there's still a few coming down now.

I just decided to read this story today. I've enjoyed your story about Harper Riley so much that I thought, "You know, Belledeg has another story that people seem to like an awful lot. Why don't I try it?" I'm SO glad I did. I can't even begin to put into words how much I enjoyed this story. I admit that I wasn't a hundred sold on the whole Tom Riddle in love thing at the beginning, but it really grew on me throughout the story. Now I have to discern what's canon and what's MTT.

Something that really made your story shine was the little details. Biting the dust becomes the idea for Death Eaters, Tom the "Dark Lord of the Dance" becomes the Dark Lord, etc. These fine touches made Keedie's influence on Tom seem so much real and believable. It was very clever writing on your part.

I generally try to leave some critique of a story at some point in a review, because as an author, reviews that are simply gushing drive me crazy. Of course I like praise, but I like help even better. I just can't come up with something wrong with MTT, though. In the last chapter, I was quite disappointed that Keedie was murdered by the tramp. It just seemed so... anticlimatic. However, I now grudgingly approve, as Tom's reaction in the Epilogue was so perfect. The scene in Godric's Hollow is so heart-rendering, perhaps your best writing throughout the whole story.

The very end was perfect. "My Troubled Tyrant... You Know Who." It perfectly sums up Keedie's love, and ties together everything -- canon, this story. I don't think I've ever read a better ending in fanfiction (and that's saying a lot, since I've read a lot of fanfictioin!) Thank you so much for bringing me such a beautiful story.

Author's Response: I think you're the first person who's read the story in one go. Thanks for reading and reviewing. It means a lot. :D

 
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/08/09 Title: Chapter 28: The Epilogue--My Immortal

Things that I thought of after I submitted my first review:
1. Tom Riddle was so in-character throughout the story. If they had a best Male Canon Character award for the QSQ, your Tom should have been nominated!
2. I loved the debate about between Keedie and Tom about whether they're going to hell. (To paraphrase, "I'll be the one by the lava saying 'I told you so!'") Very funny!
3. The use of the Head's Dorm was quite cliche, but I'll forgive you because there wasn't much of anything else wrong with the story. :D

Author's Response: I'm so glad someone mentioned the lava comment. I was quite proud of that. :)

 

Every Breath You Take by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 27]

Summary: Breathing. It’s easy, isn’t it?
In. Out. In. Out.
Inhale.
Exhale.
Easy.
Natural.

But what if it’s not easy? What if your body struggles for breath? What happens if you cannot get enough oxygen into your lungs? What happens if your lungs contract so tightly that you’re forced to use all your strength simply to breathe?

And how on earth do a wizarding family cope with a Muggle condition that could kill?

This is Lily Luna Potter's story of living with asthma.

I am Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry for the Written World Challenge, Spring Term 2009. It has been written to garner support for Asthma UK.

I do not own any of these characters - they all belong to JK Rowling.

FACT: Asthma can kill.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 6265 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
04/11/09 Updated: 04/17/09


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 04/20/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - It's a Girl!

I've really been enjoying your story! As others have commented, as I agree, it's wonderful to a story with a really original plot. Plus, I think your Harry is the best grown-up Harry that I've read, second only to Harry in the Epilogue of DH.

Author's Response: WOW! Thank you for that. I honestly don't write a lot of Harry or Ginny but they suited my story so well with harry having a Muggle connection and Ginny being totally clueless about Muggles. I should be updating soon- I just need to find the time to get it all down from head and notebook to laptop. Thanks again for the review - it is much appreciated. Carole xxx

 

Rebellion! by Sainyn Swiftfoot
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: There is a rebellion-- at Hogwarts! But it is the most unlikely people rebelling...

A very silly and light-hearted poem where, in certain parts, I try to emulate Dr Seuss.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 197 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/26/09 Updated: 05/01/09


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 05/01/09 Title: Chapter 1: Rebellion!

I was enjoying the poem when I got to the last stanza. I wondered how it could be the last. How could you sum it all up in only a couple more lines? You did, though. "Hermione!" Perfect.

Author's Response: Reading your first sentence, I thought this was going to be a negative review.. But thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed the twist at the end (I definitely liked the twist at the end of your review), and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Hermione was a stroke of inspiration that occured to me suddenly while writing the poem, I hadn't really planned on that. :D

 

Dark Blood by fruitandextranutcase
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: It's 1935, and when Ysabelle Rosier's brother is the victim of a grisly murder, she vows to get her revenge. As her sixth year at Hogwarts dawns, she encounters not only muddled clues and the whims of her N.E.W.T. level teachers but also the unwanted affections of Hyperion Malfoy - not to mention the more intriguing ones of Muggle-born Will Roberts. Unwittingly sucked into the world of pureblood, Mudblood and murder, Ysabelle finds herself sinking helplessly out of her depth…

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 7448 Chapters: 3 Completed: No
Published:
05/14/09 Updated: 07/15/09


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 05/28/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One - Sermons and Secrets

I remember reading some of what you had to say about your story on the beta boards, and was interested. When I saw you'd posted the first chapter here I started reading right away. Now, after reading that and the summary, I must say that I'm intrigued, to say the least. Your writing is very descriptive and draws the reader right in. I can't wait to find out more about why Ysabelle's brother's death was covered up, and who killed him! I'm sure I'll enjoy future updates whenever they come.

Author's Response: Firstly, thanks for the review! It makes me all warm inside to know that my stories are appreciated. I'm also really glad that the description had the desired effect (yay!), and I'm currently drafting out the next couple of chapters, so it shouldn't be too long until the next update. Once again, thank you, and please keep reading! :D

 
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 07/15/09 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Back to Hogwarts

Oooo, I was thrilled to see that you have a new chapter up! My mom's going to be calling me for bed any minute, so I don't have time for a detailed review, but I promise one tomorrow. (Now that it's in writing I can't forget! I've made a commitment!) I just wanted to say quickly that this is certainly the best chapter yet.

Author's Response: Oh, sorry sorry sorry for not responding for so long! For some reason, I thought that I'd already responded... but obviously not! Thanks for all your support - though I'm still waiting for that detailed review! ;-)

 
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 06/19/09 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two - At Malfoy Manor

I was so happy to see that another chapter was up that I almost did a little happy dance, but I restrained myself. *blushes*

Overall, the second chapter was good, but I have a few nit-picks.

'On the fourth day before my departure to Hogwarts, Father sprung some news upon the family.

We will be attending a small gathering at Malfoy Manor tonight,” he announced flatly, undoubtedly missing the brandy from which he had only just torn himself.'

To me, springing a question on somebody requires some sort of malicious intent. "Malicious" may be too strong a word, but I think it's hard to spring a question on somebody flatly.

'Hyperion Malfoy was a vindictive fellow Slytherin, also sixteen, who had ‘taken to me’ in our first year. Yes, I liked him well enough - he was smart, he was handsome, he could be entertaining - but I was in no mood to fend off his misguided advances tonight.'

Usually, I don't describe describe somebody who I "like well enough" as vindictive.

My third little complaint is the way the pure-blood men are acting. If this event is about social climbing, it doesn't seem that saying your wife is suicidal would be too impressive.

Still, these are just small criticisms. I really did enjoy the chapter, and I'm certainly going to keep reading!

Author's Response: Firstly, thanks for your comments! Actually, I don't really like this chapter. I agree with you on most of your points, and I think that in general, the whole thing is a little weak. I just couldn't really think of another way to put it. Now that I think about it, your 'springing' nitpick is a very good point, and the 'vindictive' thing also makes sense. I should probably edit those. ;-) I had many qualms over how I should portray the purebloods from Ysabelle's point of view, as well - the conversation between Ysabelle's father and Mr Malfoy all went slightly to pot, basically! Consequently, I just thought "well, they're being blackmailed together anyway, why not say what I want?" Not a great way for a writer to think, I know... *hangs head in shame* Anyhoo, I appreciate your comments and have taken them into account (as well as the good stuff - thanks for that, by the way :-D)!

 

Paint Me Eternal by grangergurl
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Kherington Squires has been around for a long time. She has personally witnessed every historically important event in wizarding history, but has done it quietly. She understands that nature's course continues to move forward.

But what happens when she falls in love? Will she let nature keep moving, or try to stop it before time continues to kill all she loves?

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 6299 Chapters: 7 Completed: No
Published:
05/24/09 Updated: 07/26/11


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 06/07/09 Title: Chapter 3: Paint Me a Train Ride

Why did Kherington suddenly decide that after all these years as posing as various reclusive Hogwarts students that she suddenly wants to make friends? Aren't friends a complication, because they generally want to keep in touch after school? It's a little suspicious if you don't age at all, but it's also a little suspicious if you stop communicating with them and seem to vanish of the face of the Earth.

I do love Twilight, but I'm glad that isn't the inspiration for this story. I liked "Tuck Everlasting" a lot when I read it a few years ago, and it's neat that you thought of it in creating a story. I'm eager to find out what's going to happen with "Paint Me Eternal"!

Author's Response: One of these days, I hope Kherington tells ME...no, seriously, I'm planning on developing that part over the whole story. And thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 06/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: Paint Me a Prologue

Intriguing. The premise of the story, especially of the second chapter, seems suspiciously like Twilight, but I have confidence that you'll take it in a wholly different direction than I'm expecting. I'm looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response: *sigh* I'm very unenthused now. But grateful for your review, nonetheless. I'm glad for your confidence and excited that you're "looking forward to reading more." It really does mean a lot. I guess I'm going for that Tuck Everlasting feel above a Twilight-y one.

 

Diavol by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Twelve years after three of his friends have died, and another has been incarcerated, Remus Lupin is drifting. Unable to pursue a long-term career due to his lycanthropy, he has finally found work in a dragon reserve in Romania. He is accepted here and begins to find a kind of peace. But one day something happens that threatens this calm existence, and the other workers are calling Remus Lupin -- diavol.

I am Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff writing for the Third Task of the Triwizard Tournament.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4668 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/01/09 Updated: 06/06/09


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 06/03/09 Title: Chapter 1: Moon River

Nice start. Remus seems in character, and your writing is engaging! Is this by any chance somewhat of a companion to "Apparently Asleep"?

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. It is similar to Apparently Asleep, but unfortunately in the next chapter you'll see why they aren't compliant with each other. I like to think they compliment each other. Thanks again. Carole

 

Invisible Magic by laurskii
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: The note fluttered up through the air, arcing gracefully over the windowsill to her lap. Her eyes found the photograph attached to her vanity mirror as she unfolded it – his eyes smiled out at her. I love you, Lils. I always will.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1391 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/20/09 Updated: 06/28/09


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 06/28/09 Title: Chapter 1: Invisible Magic

*wipes away tears*

Reading the story, I sense sadness and melancholy. There isn't any particular phrase, but rather the mood you manage to convey. Thumbs up.

*wipes away another tear*

Author's Response: That's what I was going for - Thanks for reviewing!

 

Finding Her Voice by Belledeg
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 205]

Summary: Harper Riley is one of the most gifted young witches of her generation. However, since the traumatic events of the Battle of Hogwarts, she has not spoken a single word. Her Muggle parents were killed, along with her two wizarding brothers, and she is on the run from her squib guardian, a sinful and harsh man with a strong hatred of magic.

Harry Potter is recently married and settled, however, his life seems to take on another dramatic turn when he and Ginny find Harper. Her refusal to speak makes things a lot harder for them to discover how to help her. Luckily, Harry knows someone who owes him a favour. Someone who he and Ginny may not like, but they trust. Someone whose profession is to help those who suffer from the Battle of Hogwarts, no matter their story…

If anyone can get her talking again, it’s Blaise.

"I don't want to forget that night...but I don't want to remember it either."

A Blaise Zabini/Original Character romance

This story has the characters: Blaise Zabini, Harper Riley, Jimmy Peakes, Harry Potter, Ginny Potter, Ron Weasley, Hermione Weasley, Isabella Zabini, Draco Malfoy, Dennis Creevey, Leonard Wilkes, Theodore Nott and Minerva McGonagall plus many more.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 87463 Chapters: 21 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/21/09 Updated: 01/16/10


Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/11/09 Title: Chapter 10: Don't Call Me Red!

I HATE you! (Okay, not really, but still...) How could you end the chapter with such a dramatic cliffie? Of course, I'm always waiting for the next chapter of FHV, but now I simply cannot accept that I'll have to wait a whole week to read more. (It better not be more than a week!) You are a truly sadistic author.

Alright, now that I've expressed my annoyance with you for ending the chapter with such a cliffhanger, I can actually comment on the chapter itself. I really enjoyed it. The surprise party for Ron was truly sweet, especially the part with little Teddy. I think I'm really falling for Blaise (me and every other girl on the planet :P), and although I've always liked Harper, she grows on me more and more every chapter. I am oh so fond of her withering looks, something I can sympathize with from having several friends who are boys.

Another reason I "hate" you is for ending MTT, but I suppose I am glad you'll have more time to work on this story. Just be warned that I'm waiting for that second sequel...

Author's Response: MTT had to end at some stage. But I wouldn't worry, a certain character from MTT will be making an appearence in this story soon enough. :)

 
Reviewer: sorrow_of_severus Signed
Date: 09/26/09 Title: Chapter 13: Snape, Dumbledore and Keedie Dante

Oooo, I love how you're adding references to MTT to your other stories. It's so much fun, and the fact that story is now over more tolerable. I would have minded if Keedie had said a little more, though.

In these lines:

"The portrait of her fallen headmaster nodded and smiled. She then noticed the portrait nearest his.

‘Why’s he on the wall?’ she spat.

‘I know what you’re thinking,’ soothed Minerva, coming up behind her. ‘But remember what Potter said on the night of the battle? Snape was always Dumbledore’s.'"

I sort of expected Snape's portrait to make some comment worthy of Phineas Nigellus about Harper being disrespectful. However, I was very happy when later in the conversation, you write:

"‘That was a great lesson…’ she mused.

‘Not…for me,’ replied Snape."

I could completely hear Snape saying that! It made me smile.

The fact that Leonard Wilkens is a wizard doesn't surprise me somehow. I have a feeling a be finding out a lot more about him soon.

Author's Response: Mmm...yep, Leonard's a tad more scary now. I always liked Snape, even before he really became a goodie. :D

 
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