Wow! That was suuuperb. You managed to paint a picture in my mind with apparent ease, you seem to be a natural writer :) The rhythm is melodic, and a good rhythm is essential in poetry, especially haikus. I also like that you taught a lesson. There were a few of your words that I really likes, including 'sickle'. :P Keep it up! Add some more. :)

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm writing on several stories, poems unfortunately not for the time being. There's going to be a very short one in a three-shot I'm writing, but I'm having a harder time with poetry at the moment. Anyway, thanks for reading and reviewing!