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Unplanned by annie
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 40]

Summary: It's the night of Christmas Eve, and James is enlisting Remus' help in formulating a plan to snog Lily. After a bit of talk and some trouble with mistletoe, though, something that definitely wasn't planned happens.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2511 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/02/06 Updated: 01/02/06


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 06/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: Unplanned

I really enjoyed this story! James/Remus is not something that I had ever imagined, but you wrote it very believably.
I have a slight issue with the characterization of Remus, but when writing slash the characterization is incredibly difficult, as the character is not really going to act like that.
You made this very interesting to read by incorporating humour and the tense, romantic bits were fantastically written!
It was a lovely "accident one xmas" stroy.

Russia xxxxx

 

A Tale of Two Matchmakers by Kerichi
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 1387]

Summary: Romance for three couples when Blaise and Luna use Shakespearean styled matchmaking to hook up Ginny and Draco. There's Much Ado about...something!

Nominated for a Quicksilver Quill for Best Romance-Non Canon 2007, 2008, and 2009. In 2010 mods changed the rules (they got tired of the same fics being nominated ^_~) so no more QQ hopes, but that's okay. No proof is needed that Draco/Ginny = love.  

* Written before the HBP, this tale presents an alternate sixth year in which Dumbledore lives, Draco is more than a foil to Harry, and Blaise Zabini is a girl. I hope readers who ship Draco/Ginny will enjoy the story which includes dancing with faeries, Celtic and Norse mythology, school holidays in London and Spain, and loads of fantasy and romance. "Is this a kissing book?" (to quote the Princess Bride) Yes, it is. *

(Warnings were added for safety, due to brief allusions in later chapters, not graphic content.)

 



Categories: Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 312843 Chapters: 52 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/06/06 Updated: 03/25/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 03/07/10 Title: Chapter 2: Let's Get it Started

Heyyy, Paige! Look who's baaaaack! Yes, you'd better get those dancing shoes on, because here comes a Russia review! XD

Another fabulous chapter, of course, I loved so many things about it!

Luna especially, is a big sticking point for me. Every time I read Luna, in anything, I keep waiting and waiting for her to go out of character. But in this fic, she is just... gah she is an amazing Luna! You don't try too hard to keep up with the idea that everyone has of Luna being so 'dreamy' and 'loopy' because you are exploring her character and giving her more depth than just the ditzy character we see in JKRs work. I love your Luna, Paige!

Draco. Wow. So arrogant and just exactly as I always saw Draco to be:

”Speechless, eh...I like you more already...not that I don't have that effect on most girls in this school...just the price I pay for being so...me”

That is a really great Draco line =D The way he and Ginny interact in this chapter is wonderful, you have really got inside Draco’s head and shown us how he ticks.

You also have a true gift for subtlety. I mean, you finish this chapter and get the distinct idea that Ginny has a serious thing for Draco. And you never even say she does! I think it has a lot to do with the way Ginny is so defensive:

"Oh...you...just because I fell for your stupid prank first year doesn't mean I'm going to do it again so...so...don't even try!”

You do have Draco saying that Ginny has a thing for him, and she denies it so furiously we know that it must be true :-p

The way you have structured this chapter gives the reader so many different view points on the same story. Most authors choose one main character to focus on, and stick to that the whole story through. But you show us several sub-plots through the eyes of nearly every character mentioned!

All in all, a fantastic chapter, but I will stop waffling now as I imagine your feet are getting rather tired from the “review dance” XD

~Russia xxxxx

Author's Response:

Are you kidding? You have a song from The King and I playing in my head!

Shall we dance?
On a bright cloud of music shall we fly?
Shall we dance?

Followed by a song from My Fair Lady

I could have danced all night!
I could have danced all night!
And still have begged for more.

Tired of someone who notices details and has an amazing insight into characterization and dialogue? To quote a dead sexy pirate who won't be seen for a few chapters yet: INCONCEIVABLE! 

*glomp*

 
Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 01/31/10 Title: Chapter 1: Matchmaker, Matchmaker

Kerichii! Yes, that's right, Russia is baack! I only came here to get the link so I could reccomend it, but then BAM I got sucked back into it. *resigns self to another 3 months of pure heaven* how am I EVER going to get any of my own FFs finished if I keep re-reading this one?! Anyway,

It was even better than I remembered! I contemplated starting afew chapters in, because I was like "The first few chapters will be boring, and just about getting into the story." But this chaoter ws SO good! I adore Draco's characterisation, and Blaise is amazing. I am quite surprised how you managed to have Luna and Draco's characterisations both so perfect! Luna's thoughts at the beginning about Dust Motes and Faeries and her whistling at the end, were so perfect!

I am always surprised when i read Harry or Hermione saying anything, because I don't remember them being much of a part in this fic, but them AS WELL are so well characterised!

I think I should stop fangirling now?

Expect LOTS more reviews from me as I work through each chapter =D

Lots of huggles!

~Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: I heart you, woman! You have a gift of encouragement and positive critique. Have you ever considered joining SPEW? The requirements have gone down to 2 reviews a month (if one of your reviews is of a SPEW buddy or author of the month, since that counts as both an activity and a review).

 
Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 02/02/09 Title: Chapter 52: The Long Goodbye Part Three: Draco and Ginny

That was an amazing story! i really didnt want it to end, i'm very glad there is a sequel to look forward to! i have been reading this story for so long, how will i cope without it?! more fanfiction! Great story! Russia xxx

Author's Response: ill0;k4;km0;, Russia! Thank you so much for not wanting it to end. You're right, there's always more fan fics to read, and (at least for now) I'm the most prolific author on the site. :D

 

Summary: The Final Battle is one year past and on the eve of the one year anniversary there is much to be noted. The sacrifices made, the lives lost, the futures changed. And there, if you look, two lives, so intertwined, so connected for so long that are about to collide.



Please note: All warnings do not apply to all chapters, but I would hate to get someone involved and then turned away. This is a Dark Work. You have been warned.

Categories: Hermione/Snape Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Dubious Consent, Non-Consensual Sex, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 18041 Chapters: 11 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/17/06 Updated: 07/13/06


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 11/02/09 Title: Chapter 11: Epilogue

I just finished this, so I thought I owed you a review! I won't bore you with grammer shizz, because, to be honest, I enjoyed the story too much! I am proud to say that I do like Snamione, but only when I can find a good one.This, was a GREAT one! It was just so.... Darn, I lost my words. I really really enjoyed it. And two D/A prequels? Well i'm gonna have to go and read those! D/A is my fave, and I know they will be awesome. Well done again for a fantasticv fic.

I usually am VERY uptight about Americanisms, but I, barely, noticed them in this fic. (not because they werent there, but because i was too excited to read on!) I will still note about them though. "realiSE" no 'z' and "coloUr" basically, if you are typing a 'z' during a HP FF, it is almost certianly wrong :-p But, that is it from me. Well done, it was a brilliant fic, and the best Snamione I have ever read.

Russia xxxxx

 

Someone To Watch Over Me by MagEd
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 1663]

Summary: Past Featured Story2009 QSQ Awards Winner for Best Chaptered Canon Romance

Before the chosen one was ever born, his parents had to meet, fall in love, and defy Voldemort three times. Easier said than done. Things were never easy for Harry Potter's parents, but it gets a whole lot harder when Death Eaters kidnap Lily. This is the story of Lily and James, the trials they face, and how James finally wins Lily's heart. (pre-Deathly Hallows)

*Completed*

“I’ll always protect you.”

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 185106 Chapters: 34 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/17/06 Updated: 01/16/09


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 10/30/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

I really liked this prolouge, The fight with the Slytherins was really well done. You are a really good writer, the things you write all seem so real, I love Lily's character in this.

A few nit-picks though! Lily wouldn't have braces in the wizarding world. Even Hermione, who had dentists as parents, didn't wear her brace at school. If she had a problem with her teeth, she simply would have gone Madam Pomfry to fix it. having braces myself, I know they don't work very well unless you have them tightened every six weeks or so, and that isnt really something you could do while at Hogwarts. You also say about Petunia that she had "thick blonde hair" which we know from Canon inst strictly true, (unless of course she dyed it) and you say that Lily and Petunia hated each other. As far as I can tell, that is in no way true. Petunia may have thought her sister was a freak, but as far as I know, Lily always loved her sister, even if they grew apart after Lily began Hogwarts. Also, you have Alice as her best friend. A fic of mine recently got rejected for the same thing, Alice Longbottom wasn't in the same year as Lily, she was actually older. I appreciate that you can't change her character now, i just thought I;d tell you for future reference. Watch out for those Americanisms as well "Realized" doesn't have a 'z'

I do really like the idea of the whole 'transformation' thing for Lily though, it is something I have never seen before.

I am very very sorry that my reviews may seem a little harsh, but I really do love your writing and am only trying to help you improve! and I look forward to reading the next few chapters! Sorry again if I seem harsh!

Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the writing, and never feel bad about constructive criticism! This first chapter was written so, so long ago that I'm sure it has a lot of problems. I can hardly read it myself anymore because there are many, many things that ought to be changed. I'll have to bear it and take a look to fix what you suggested! :)

 
Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 10/30/09 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3: Soap Suds and Back Rubs

Wow. That was amazing. There was SUCH emotion in that part about Beverly, I mean obviously we knmew which it would be, but honestly? I wanted to cry. Really really well written! Well done!
See? I can be less harsh >.<

Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: Thanks very much! Yes, it was pretty obvious I wasn't about to kill Lily or Emma, but I'm glad you still liked it :)

 

A Sense of Serenity by Mind Games
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: She returned to the place she had gone the first time. She came searching for the feeling of closure and to allow herself to be healed.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Suicide

Word count: 1482 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/18/07 Updated: 01/20/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 05/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: A Sense of Serenity

Hey, Katty =)

I really liked this story, well done! I see you already have a lot of very detailed reviews for this story so I won’t bore you with repeating everything the others have already said!

The way you waited until the end to reveal her name was very effective and you handled it really well. Your descriptions were just

 

Sixteen Candles by Kerichi
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 30]

Summary:

Ginny looks forward to her birthday the way other kids count down to Christmas. This year, when she blows out the candles, will her birthday wish come true?



Categories: Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3040 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/11/07 Updated: 02/11/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 02/10/09 Title: Chapter 1: Sixteen Candles

Awwww! that was really sweet! keep writing out takes! A tale of two matchmakers should never end! Its an epic in my house as i have been reading various bits for months! i think that is the last one now :-( write some more please! also methinks i will go and read Princess Bride and watch Sixteen Candles now.... Thanks for such great entertainment over the past 2 months!
Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: You're sweet to want more outtakes! I personally prefer the film version of The Princess Bride over even the "Good Parts" version of the book (Cary Elwes inspired Wesley) but I'm so glad you were entertained. I have a lot more stories, including a Rose/Scorpius I'd love you to read. I can't write Lily/Scorpius when in my alternate universe Draco and Ginny are married. :D

 

Summary:

Sequel to A Tale of Two Matchmakers

Seven years later....


Blaise fears Terry wants a divorce, Luna is hiding a secret from Wesley, and Draco is tired of idiots saying his son has pink hair! Ginny's solution? Call the curls reddish blond and invite their friends to the Malfoy mansion for Christmas.

 



Categories: Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 8081 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/27/07 Updated: 03/27/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 02/09/09 Title: Chapter 1: Christmas Reunion

Awww i'm so gutted that its over!
More sequels please!!! this story should NEVER end!
Russia xxx

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much for telling me that! I've wanted to write a sequel, even tried to cast an writer Unbreakable Vow that I'd do it (thankfully it wasn't an actual magic spell or I'd be dead, LOL), but the Muse has eluded me. I'm still (as of now) the most prolific writer on the site, though, so there are plenty of more stories for you to read if you like my style!

 

Think of Me by sheriden
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: He didn’t really want his sweater back. He just wanted the sweater-stealer to think of him. If he could get both the sweater and the thief back, and achieve world peace, then that was even better. One-shot.

Categories: Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 3663 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/28/07 Updated: 06/29/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 02/07/09 Title: Chapter 1: Think of Me

that was so good i was all geared up for a sad ending and that was really so happy! all heroic deaths and amazing survival stories i really enjoyed it!
Russia xxx

 

Firewhisky by sheriden
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 13]

Summary: The war was more than anyone had expected. Ginny drinks Firewhisky. Draco can’t stand the stuff. Ginny dies. Draco lives. And the war continues. One-shot.

Categories: Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Substance Abuse

Word count: 5178 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/06/07 Updated: 07/13/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 02/07/09 Title: Chapter 1: Firewhisky

wow that was really powerful amd really sad it was amazing

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!

 

Luna, or the Lethifold? by Islander
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 34]

Summary: Voldemort and his Death Eaters have taken over Hogwarts. Ginny and Draco are captured trying to escape, and they are brought before Voldemort himself. Now Ginny must make a horrific choice that will determine the fate of her lover. D/G, AU

Categories: Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Sexual Situations

Word count: 3504 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/23/07 Updated: 08/24/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 02/04/09 Title: Chapter 1: Luna, or the Lethifold?

That was really good! i love the cliffhanger ending! or did i hate it? i cant decide which i wanted him to choose?!

Author's Response: Lol, that line between love and hate can be very fine indeed! I tend to love cliffy endings, if done right, like the original story was.

 

Summary: Ginny is involuntarily helped by a very unlikely person, which causes her to have a few reconsiderations.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 1853 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/14/07 Updated: 10/19/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 04/15/09 Title: Chapter 1: Entangling the Snake in Lion's Fur

I got the link for this story from you beta boards banner. I really enjoyed it, it was a great one shot and i love Ginny/Draco's! (Love the banner too!)
Russia xxx

Author's Response: Thanks so much! ^^

 

Yellow Skirt, White Blouse by LittleMissZeep
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 26]

Summary: Eight years following the end of the war between good and evil, the wizarding world once again find themselves in hiding. In the bustling city of London on an average Wednesday, a man who had been caught up in the midst of the battle suddenly finds his past standing on the opposite side of the street in a white blouse and a yellow skirt.

Disregard to book 7.

Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 1053 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/17/07 Updated: 11/24/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 06/19/09 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

I really like this story, It had a really original plot and it was really well written. This is the second time I have read this story, and I was still suprised at the ending! I loved how you explained the background to the story, and it made the ideas behind Draco's thoughts really believable. There were maybe a few sentences that could have been improved by extra punctuation, but over all it was very well written, and I really enjoyed it.
Russia xxxxx

 

A Weasley Christmas by PadfootnPeeves
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: Based on the famous 'Twas the night before Christmas' with a Weasley twist, and told from Ron's POV.
No DH Spoilers!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 528 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/10/07 Updated: 12/17/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 05/24/09 Title: Chapter 1: A Weasley Christmas

I really enjoyed the twist you gave the poem, it made me smile, especially the "He spoke not a word, but went straight to work,
And filled everyone’s stockings, even Percy the jerk." This made me giggle.
I maybe would have added a few words to some of the lines to improve the flow for instance "Away to the window I flew like a fly
I went so fast I thought I’d die." I would change that last line to "Thought that i'd die" As i think this extra word improves the flow of this line. But I really enjoyed how you took a well known poem and made it totally your own.I loved some of the words you thought to rhyme! Well done, and keep writing!
Russia xxxxx

 

Meaningless by Hesperia
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Bellatrix survives the final battle, having been stunned by Molly Weasley’s curse. She wakes up in Azkaban to the news that the Dark Lord is dead. Now, faced with the chance to end it all, will she go through with it? Or will she find a reason to live without him? Post-DH oneshot.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1733 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/16/07 Updated: 12/26/07


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 06/29/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really liked this story; I have always been interested to see what Bella felt after the war was over, and I think you wrote it very well. Your description of Azkaban was really good, and it was interesting to see Bella’s real feelings, and to see that maybe she isn’t all evil.

Bella’s characterisation was lovely. You really captured her love for the Dark Lord, and how she felt when she found out he was dead. I liked how you used the possibility of suicide to look at Bella’s thoughts, and how you used third person when talking about Bella. The cross cutting you used was very clever, and made me want to read the rest of the story, to find out is she jumped or not. I liked how you included bits like, “after he had taken her chin in his hand and promised her…” This sentence really enhances the feel of Bella’s almost childish dedication to her master. The use of further flashbacks in italics to show her thoughts was also really cleverly used. The way she thought about the Dark Lord now he was dead, trying to picture him in the afterlife, was a really clever addition to the story.

The only small points of critique I have are about the word choice and flow; “only to breathe once more the sea air” - I think this would flow better as “only to breathe, once again, the sea air”. I also noticed a space missing between “certain” and “he” in this sentence: “until he was certainhe had enough power [...]”. Other than that it was a very well written story.

Russia xxxxx

 

Rain by ravenclawslostdiadem
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Andromeda Black had always been different, and that got worse when she was sorted into Ravenclaw. Shunned from her family, she leans on a boy named Ted Tonks for support. *ONESHOT*

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1607 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/30/08 Updated: 02/02/08


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 06/28/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really liked the plot of this story. I was surprised at how much time you could fit into just one chapter; it was written very well. The gap between one year and the next was very smooth, it flowed excellently. I think you described Andromeda’s family and school experience very well. I liked how you described the differences between the three sisters, and how Andromeda’s parents felt about how different she was. “My parents were worried. I was unique. I was different.” I love how this line describes her parents; I think it shows, very simply, how her parents are feeling.

Andromeda’s characterisation was superb. It really was perfect, things she said, “My sisters turned their backs on me. I was completely ignored by Bella in school, and eventually, when she arrived, Cissy acted like I was nothing but a bit of dust on the flood, nothing better than the “Mudblood scum” that roamed the school.” This described the family bond excellently; I loved the simile you used here, about the dust and the flood, and how you added the “Mudblood scum” to show how disappointed her family were with her.

The only critique I have for this story is to do with your word choice and flow. “They would do anything to ruin my happiness, yeah?” I don’t really like the “yeah?”-part on the end of this sentence; I don’t think it fits in with the feel of the rest of the story. If you wanted to include it I think it would have fitted better at the beginning of the sentence: “Yeah, they would do anything to ruin my happiness,” or I would just take it out completely. “One I could tell my secrets, or tell stories about my family.” To me, this sentence didn’t make a lot of sense, I think there is a “to” missing “One I could tell my secrets, or tell stories about my family to” I might even re-write this sentence to something along the lines of “One I could tell my secrets to, someone to tell stories about my family”. I’m not sure, it just didn’t sound quite right to me. “I sat there, slightly gaping, and realized then that there was much more to Ted Tonks than what met the eye.” I think this sentence would have more effect if you split it up. I sat there, gaping slightly. I realized then, that there was so much more to Ted Tonks than what met the eye”. I think having the shorter sentence at the beginning adds more effect; I also changed around the order of “gaping” and “slightly” as I feels it makes more sense like that.

Other than that, I loved some of the words you chose, and your use of similes was fantastic “the spotless puppy in a world of Dalmatians, it seemed.” I particularly liked that one. Your description of rain was also beautiful, and I loved the ending.

I really enjoyed this story.

Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: Your review is quite possibly the best review that I have read, and subsequently received. It is honestly, what seems to me, the prototype of everything that a review should be. Thank you so much for the constructive criticism, pointing out particular things you liked, and characterisation comments! It is GREATLY appreciated.

 

Someday Never Comes by R_Ravenclaw
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: Every day Draco and Ginny take walks. Even though they are physically apart, those are the only times they share.

Fully compliant.

Categories: Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 2797 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/26/08 Updated: 04/09/08


Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 06/21/09 Title: Chapter 1: Someday Never Comes

Hey, Okay, since I last reviewed, I have learnt how to actually review well, so I came back!

Okay, I thought the plot for this story was very clever, it was a really good idea, and I liked how it could have actually happened without it having to be AU. It was really well written, and you captured Ginny’s and Draco’s feeling and emotions perfectly. I liked how you had both characters still in love with their husband/wife and having a family, and yet still having very deep feelings for each other. However I thought there was a small issue with a slight plot hole. The flashbacks were very useful in explaining the feelings they had for each other, but I wasn’t sure exactly how the characters feelings jumped from distaste to love. I think may be a small paragraph at the beginning of the flashback would help to explain this.

Ginny’s characterisation was very well done. “The world was a large place and she only saw the smallest part of it. Her home was expected to be her world, and she was supposed to be happy, like her mother” This really shows how different Ginny wants to be. It shows that sometimes she feels pressured to be like her mother, but really she is a very different person; I think this is exactly how Ginny would feel, and you described it very well. I also really liked the metaphor of the cage; I think it is very plausible that Ginny thought like this, it was really cleverly done.

Draco’s characterisation was also good. You showed his more lonely, separate side with things like: “But he was different on his walk, and didn’t want company.” I can definitely imagine Draco feeling like that, and wanting to be by himself to think about things. I loved how you had the flashbacks to explain the background to the story, and how you described their love for each other, even though they knew it could never happen. The feeling of him being trapped was also very strong in this story; I thought the line “the place that showed his mistake, his biggest mistake” was very powerful and is the first insight into the rest of the plot of the story.

I liked how you switched PoV between each paragraph too, clearly showing that both characters felt the same. The timeline confused me slightly however; at the beginning when they were both writing, was that just after they had settled down? And then later on, when it was just Draco, how long has passed?

I thought there were a lot of powerful sentences in this story, and I truly loved the idea of Draco feeling like something was wrong, and seeing the red of the leaves, and the fire not lighting. This was a particularly powerful part of the story, and I thought you wrote it very well.

Russia xxxxx

 
Reviewer: Russia Snow Signed
Date: 02/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Someday Never Comes

wow. how tear jerking was that? havent cried like that in a while! that was fantastic, i really enjoyed it!
Russia xxx

 
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