Thanking EVERYBODY EVER for the runner-up QSQ given to The Cause. Honestly. It was amazing. Both Marty and I thank you! (I'm sure Remus would as well, but I can't claim ownership of him). I would put the banner up but for some reason it's not working (stupid HTML).
Order of the Janey fics (it doesn’t matter what order you read my other stuff in)
“It Unscrews The Other Way”
Trouble With Exams – A Janey Weasley One-Shot.
Everybody Loves Janey Weasley
Being Janey Weasley
Janey Weasley Springs; My Mother
Living In The Weasley-Springs Family ... Merlin Help Me
HELLO to my bestest friend Chomione, you're truly the best, and hi to my brother CheeseKing, too.
Anyway, I hope you enjoy my fics! I would reccomend the later ones; I only keep the early stuff because I can't bear to delete it. However, I can't bear to read it, either, but maybe you'll have some more luck. =)
Summary: Glimpses into Remus Lupin's life at Hogwarts, all trying to answer the question: Is Remus a normal wizard who just has a â€śfurry little problemâ€ť, or is he a werewolf among wizards, trying to fit in where he may never truly belong?
Now with more Snape down the Whomping Willow! Check out Chapter 10: A Highly Amusing Joke and Chapter 11: Skyfall
Okay, I came to see if you'd written anything and it turned out you had, so go you! Unsurprisingly it was about Remus ... but I'm glad! It's good so far!
Well, I mean, I was practically sobbing when they were being mean to him. Poor Remus was just ... sob. I wanted to give him a huge hug. But then, bizarrely, when James was like "That was bloody hilarious!" I started laughing along with them. I felt kind of guilty about it though, because BLESS LITTLE REMUS who was just SO adorable. What is it about Remus as a child that will just never ever stop being cute? Anyway, I'm going to carry on reading now. I'm afraid you've got me hooked!
Author's Response: OF COURSE it's about Remus! He's my favorite character! Sorry I made you sob, but I'm glad that you laughed when things turned around. Don't feel guilty about laughing; I laugh too. More because the Marauders are idiots than because I think what they did was funny...but, whatever. Now I'm off to read/respond to the rest of your reviews!
Cod, I LOVE James! I ALWAYS love James! Why do I always love James so much? If I met him in real life I'd probably hate him. Anyway. Loved James. Loved how he skipped out the word "not" every now and then. Loved how he set Snape's pants on fire. Loved how they started talking about stupid ideas. LOVED how he was avoiding his friends to read up on animagi. Loved how freaking ADORABLE the image of him sleeping was.
Also how they were fighting through Peter. That was cute. =D
Author's Response: *Pets Prongs* James is amazing, I agree. The "not" skipping thing just seems like his brand of cheek to me. I'm glad you liked the part where they fight though Peter. It's something I can totally see them doing. I would say "poor Peter" but then I would have to go stick a bar of soap in my mouth. Did I make James adorable in his sleep? I don't exactly remember... Thanks for reviewing!
SO. MUCH. FREAKING. LOVE.
Author's Response: MUCH. HAPPINESS. THANK. YOU.
*Smothers Remus in hugs*
So he has a younger sibling? Will we hear from them? I wanna hear from them! Or did something horrible and tragic happen? Please don't let something horrible and tragic happen!
Four year old Remus was freaking adorable AGAIN. =D I'm moving on now ...
Author's Response: Yes, we will hear from him or her. And besides the fact that it would break my heart to have something horrible/tragic happen to them, I also think it's a little overdone. I've read enough stories where Remus loses a sibing, thank you very much. *hugs Remus and never lets go* Thanks for reviewing!
REMUS!! Noooo! My love for Remus has slightly surpassed my love for James in this chapter. Although I did greatly enjoy reading them name each other. Reminded me ever so slightly of another scene in another fic which is called The Cause and which I wrote ... =D
I really, really like this fic. I hope you update it soon! And I have a horrible feeling about the baby, but I don't dare voice it. When Remus was four and he was crying in the hallway ... I think I about had a heat attack. I got very VERY maternal all of a sudden and wanted to just adopt four year old Remus and never ever let him go.
Anyway. I really hope you update soon. I'm looking forward to it.
Author's Response: Ah yes, I remember that scene, something about James not wanting to be called "Horny" if I am correct. *sniggers* Don't be too hard on James, he's a good guy. I completely understand your maternal instinct to protect Remus. My heart breaks a little every time I read the line "Do you still love me, Mummy?" and I wrote the freakin thing! About updating: my computer's been having certain issues with saving things right now, so I'll have the chapter in the queue as soon as I put in the html formating...again. But you'll still have to wait for chapter seven to see the baby. Thank you SO MUCH for EVERY SINGLE ONE of your reviews!!!!!
Pride and Pre-Juiced Plums: A Potter's Pentagon Love Story by Schmerg_The_Impaler
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 266]
Summary: A companion piece to the Potter's Pentagon trilogy... it's better if you've read the Potter's Pentagon trilogy, but you don't necessarily have to.
It's five years after Emma Weasley and her chums graduated from Hogwarts. Ted and Ivy are married, Haley is working at Madame Puddifoot's while trying desperately to break into show business, Jordan's doing whatever it is he does, and Emma is an Auror trainee working as a guard at the Chudley Cannons' stadium. The Cannons have actually been doing much better lately, due to their new star Beater, Tyrone Thomas. Unfortunately, Tyrone is Emma's ex-boyfriend. OH, THE AWKWARDNESS.
Follow Emma through her awkward adventures told in her usual insane way, as she experiences angst, hilarity, obnoxiously strange people, misadventures involving a deceptively dashing cad, Haley's wedding, the birth of Ted and Ivy's baby, and her own eventual descent into LURRRVE.
Written for the marvellous Vindictus Viridian's Pride and Prejudice NEWTs class on the Fanfiction Beta Boards, based on Jane Austen's fantastic novel, "Pride and Prejudice.".
Nominated in the 2008 Quicksilver Quills Awards for Best Non-Canon Romance Story! And its lovely (haha) heroine, Emma Weasley, received two nominations for Best Female Original Character, while Haley Potter and Ivy Potter each received one! Thanks so much, guys!
I loved the P&P review! It was so funny! Bingley being not entirely straight, and Darcy being all huffy and emo while everybody panics about husbands is actually very, very accurate. Ha! It was hilarious!
Also, what's this "Hadrian Bellowes business"? a hint at the third book, I presume? Cool!
Anyway, I really enjoyed the chapter, and am immediately suspicious of that Antoly guy. Not because he was a Slytherin, but because he was described like a pirate, with the long hair and earring ... which will probably not end well.
Yay! I love this story! And isn't it good how I avoided mentioning Jordan once in this review? Well ... more than once. =D
Author's Response: Thank you! I had a little too much fun writing the summary... Hadrian Bellowes is the main antagonist in the third book... pretty much a clear villain from the start, so that will be no shocker. As for Anatoly... have you read the book \"Going Postal\" by Terry Pratchett? The main villain in that is a businessman who looks like a pirate... his name\'s Reacher Gilt. If you haven\'t read the book, you SHOULD. It is most definitely in my top three.
I remember I used to review this all the time, and then got caught up with life and university and all sorts, but just wanted you to know I always kept reading - couldn't possibly stop without getting to the end, I just love Emma and Tyrone too much. :D Although was very surprised to find out that they really did end up having a family etc! It was very sweet though, loved the giraffe.
Anyway, just wanted to sat I loved the entire Pentagon series, it feels like it's one little semi-canon universe in my mind, thanks so much for keeping it up and making sure it all finishes! :) I remember we were writing a couple of years ago at a very similar time, so I'm impressed that you're still going, it's awesome! :D PS. Apologies if that made me sound like a major stalker... I promise I just like the fics! :P xx
Author's Response: Hey there! Yeah, it's the same with me, life and university and all that jazz kind of kept me busy! I haven't actually read anyone else's fanfics in about four years! Yeah, I felt like Emma didn't want to have a family at first, but Tyrone did, but after Tyrone stopped playing professional Quidditch, she decided to give in, since their kids would have him at home to take care of them while she worked. And I feel like she actually loves having kids, even if she's not the typical 'mum.' It feels weird now that I'm done writing this whole series, since I really got to love these characters, and I think I'll miss them, especially since I think this means I'm done with all Harry Potter fanfic... though this does mean I'll have loads of time to work on my original fiction! But the MNFF stuff used to be a MAJOR part of my life, and I'm always going to have happy memories of it!
I do like the idea of Emma coming round to it, and any kids of her's and Tyrone's would be TOTALLY AWESOME, to use a quote from everybody's favourite musical.
I totally know what you mean about the other stuff, I'm exactly the same. Good luck with your original fiction, I'm sure it will be amazing. MNFF gave us a brilliant groundwork, I loved it, but time always comes to move on, as I'm sure you know. So good luck with everything, not just writing but uni and all the other jazz too! :D x PS. It's fun, isn't it? ;D
Author's Response: Yeppers! I recently wrote a very strange, silly play called "Pirates in Pantyhose" (I normally describe it as 'cross-dressing pirates!' but it's more like 'male ingenue disguised as female pirate on an all-female pirate ship!' Anyway, I'm performing it later this month with some friends. I play the fearsome Captain Bonnie. :D
Oh my cod, Emma's total destruction of P&P is just hilarious! It makes me laugh so much! I might have to revisit these parts in a few months when I'm studying it for school. I imagine it will be some light relief, because I've noticed that no matter how good a book is when you read it, as soon as you study it in class it's just wrecked.
But I also love that as Emma's being like "What a stupid book" the same thigns are happening in HER life. And you do it really well, by the way. I think "Hmm, in P&P this happens like this, so in this version it will probably happen this way" but then you just do something I wasn't expecting at all, but which makes even MORE sense. Uh. If that makes any sense at all ...
Moving on. That dancing game sounds SO MUCH FUN! It would be horribly awkward, but also really fun at the same time. Especially watching other people do it.
Oh, and prunes? Hilarious. =D
Author's Response: "Oh my cod." Hehehe. Oh, you have to read P&P for school? I usually don't mind dissecting a book I already liked, but I hated reading "Jane Eyre" in school, and when I gave it a second try a year later, I really liked it because I didn't have to analyze it. I HATE analyzing stories. Blehhh. Thanks so much for the compliments on how I adapted the storyline to real life! I put a lot of the plot elements in a different order to condense the storyline more, but I tried to keep fairly close to the original... though my story's more about dating than marriage, and I don't have any balls in the story. I had fun coming up with the dancing game. My favourite part was B.C. dancing with the little kid.
I love the fact that as well as hating Tyrone, she can't stand Mr Darcy. And at the same time, she's totally taken in by Wickham/Wolfgang. Very nicely done.
Also, RETURN OF THE TOADS FOR TYRONE! I love those darn toads already. I knew I wasn't the only one who thought toads needed a comeback. And poor Ivy with the whole Ted business! They're so adorably one person. Even if Ted is being kind of stupid. But he must be feeling JUST as bad as her, right? I mean, I can't really imagine him just dancing around all lalala because he'd left his wife and kid (ish - ha! I know someone who says that all the time too). I can't wait to hear more about Holly and Jonathon. They sound so cute. Only ... why ARE their names so similar? =D
I hope you get back soon and start updating again. *Does the get back soon dance*. Wow ... that was spectacularly random.
Where's Jordan? ^_^ I really, really hope he's not on a hobo bench or something.
Author's Response: Yeps, you totally caught onto the subtleties of Emma's "Pride and Prejudice" reading there. Though honestly, when I first started reading "Pride and Prejudice," I also hated Mr. Darcy! I love toads... I enthusiastically kept several frogs, so I always thought it was a little sad that toads are considered uncool.
We'll see a lot more of the whole Ivy and Ted thing in the next chapter, and you might feel better about Ted. We do get a glimpse into how Ted's feeling later. There's a LOT of mushiness in the next chapter, which may or may not be a good thing.
Yeah, I know someone who says 'ish' all the time, too! Terrence the Ishfriend is inspired by a real person I know. He doesn't actually like purple, though. Holly and Jonathan's names are so similar because I named them that when I was twelve, and I never bothered to change it because they weren't major characters until this story. Ophidias' name was originally Draco Malfoy Jr. or something, and Vladislav's name was originally Dmitrovich. A bunch of minor characters' names got changed as well.
We don't see much of Jordan in this story because it's really hard to write anything about him without giving spoilers for the third book. Granted, this is AU from the trilogy, and a lot of things ARE different, but I don't want to have to make up a million new things about Jordan that don't apply. We see him in about chapter ten or eleven, so you keep your eyes peeled.
Wait a second, WHEN DID THIS ARRIVE? And where did the three chapters come from?
Oh well. It's like getting three birthdays all at once.
I don't want to leave an insanely long review, because I want to move onto the next chapter, but I just had to quote one little thing so that I could mention how much it made me die (in a good way).
Jordan is actually a delightful person in a pedantic, obsessive-compulsive, vaguely terrifying sort of way, but don’t tell him I said that. He doesn’t respond well to compliments.
Aaah! Jordan! Eee!
Also billiard cue. Now, onto the next chapter! Whee!
Author's Response: These were posted quite awhile ago... LONG before The Truth was accepted. *ANGRY FACE* And it\'s so cool to see a Jordan fangirl, I will never stop saying this... we just need some Tyrone fans soon, and I\'ll have the full set!
Love this one too! Lovelovelove! Expecially the part about how they pronounce words differently, because I am forever making fun of one of my lad mates (I have to sound so British when I call him a "lad mate" because I don't want any confusion that saying "boy friend" (even with a gap in the middle) would bring) for the way he pronounces certain words.
Anyway. Loving the chapter, and also Patrick, even if he is creepy. Because he used the term "hanky panky" which is also a term I love to use, only I'm never being serious.
Okay, moving onto the next one. I love this! It's so ... so ... arg! I just love it!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I usually just call my male aquaintances \"this guy I know.\" I hope you don\'t mind the INCREDIBLE American-ness of my stories... everyone is always super American because they all talk like me, and I am like the most obscenely American person on earth. YES! Haha! Someone else who sometimes says \'hanky panky!\' I personally loved it ever since I read a brilliant book called \"Blue Avenger.\" (GO READ IT!)
I forgot that this was based on Pride and Prejudice until just now, which made me start figuring out the characters. *Jumping up and down* Does this mean **** will get back together with ****** and that ******** is actually evil?
I substituted the names in case someone who hasn't read P&P (or seen the movie) is reading this, but it's possible that they figured it out anyway. Never mind.
Even though I now sort of know what will happen, I don't care, because I hate suspense, and now I'm just looking forward to it all playing out. Hopefully in a continuously hilarious manner!
I just read the summary again. WHO DOES HALEY GET MARRIED TO? I can't wait to find out. Also ... when does Jordan get back? Jooooorrrrrrrrdaaaaaan!
I love the little musical lyrics at the start of each chapter, because I adore musicals. I'm going to suggest "Oom-pah-pah" from Oliver! because of how much I've had it dancing around my head for an entire week (and consequently everyone else's apparently ... for which I can only say "oops").
Looking forward to the next chapter, where there will hopefully be roughly 95% of the storyline relating to Jordan. But I'm guessing probably not, so never mind. I'm still looking forward to it! Yay!
Author's Response: Yes, it does mean that, Pussycat123! I am glad you figured it out! As for Haley... you will find out! (Sorry about the suspense...) Jordan plays a small but important role in this story, because basically including him much at all would be a vast spoiler for the third Potter\'s Pentagon. This makes me sad because I love him. :( As for Oom Pah Pah... well, I already have all the songs figured out (they ALL involve the events of the chapter in some way), but all day, my friend and I have been singing songs from Oliver, Sweeney Todd, Les Miserables, and Beauty and the Beast. Especially, \"If you don\'t mind havin\' to deal with Fagin, it\'s a fiiiine life\" and \"Boooooooys, you\'ve got to pick a pocket or two!\" And I adore Mr. Bumble. ^_^
That is so RANDOM, I think we lead parallel lives or something, because I went on AudioFictions on iTunes for the first time ever today, and realised that yesterday the first of my Janey Weasley fics had been put up! I couldn't believe it, I'd honestly had no idea they'd even considered it, and for it to have been put up the DAY BEFORE I went on it for the FIRST TIME EVER was frankly just a bit spooky. And awesome. I also saw Long Distance Extendable Ears was there and squee'd, although I've not listened to it yet (because then I got the email that this had been updated). I actually adore that fic!
Anyway. To get back to this. As always, I absolutely LOVE the P&P summary, because it's just so funny! There are so many ... I dunno, hilarious things you've picked up on. I also love that Emma is as unaware that Darcy is the good guy as she is about Tyrone ... I know that's the point, but I just love it. Also the description of Darcy staring unblinkingly at Elizabeth like a reptile, but happily not licking his own eyeballs. Inspired.
As for the story itself, a lot of love for poor Ted (and then hilarity at "he's JUST TED!" Emma is so cool in this fic - I think I prefer this Emma to the one of the original Pentagon stories, actually).
And, of course, Tyrone continues to be fabulous and ridiculously charming, even when he's arguing with Emma. I can't wait for it all to start exploding as Emma finds out the truth about Wolfgang, and then he runs off with, um, *WHOEVER HE RUNS OFF WITH* (just in case anyone reads this who somehow doesn't know the story of P&P). Also, I look forward to more Haley.
Does Jordan turn up at all in this story? I know it's all secret because he's developing telemency and stuff, but now that we know more about that from The Past, could he make at least a guest appearance? Pretty please? I just want to know what he looks like. I'm hoping for stubble. =D
As always, it was great. Now, I think I'm going to go and listen to Extendable Ears, because it's just so wonderful and I absolutely adore it. But isn't it crazy hearing your own fic read out by someone else? Amazing, yes, and I loved it, but CRAZY ...
Author's Response: Haha, it's so cool about the audiofictions. I think I'm going to have to download yours. And I'm glad that you liked my summary, because THAT is the reason why I hadn't updated this story in so many months. I had the chapter completed, but I kept putting off writing the summary because it's so hard for me! But yeah, I DO love the fact that Emma doesn't like Mr. Darcy. That is fun for me... because Darcy was never my favorite, either. I'm more of a Mr. Rochester kinda gal. But let me tell you now that I DETEST Heathcliff. ^_^
I really enjoy writing Emma in this story because this is the better kind of vehicle to showcase her personality-- it's easier to understand her when I'm writing a whole story in her voice rather than having her as a supporting character in a story written in third person. But I feel so bad for Ted in this story. He really is such a lovely guy, and this story doesn't exactly portray him well. And... I can't wait until you read more about Wolgfang.
We will definitely see Jordan. His part is small, but he has a pretty big role in Chapter 11 and a few subsequent chapters. And... yes he does have stubble, haha. I love the fact that you'd ask about that, ya kooky kid, ya! But yeah, I thought it would be SO weird hearing my story read out loud, but Jessie Lights did such a spectacular job that everything was exactly as I imagined it, with the exception of Eglantine's voice. Thanks so much for the review!
Summary: The final installment in the Potter’s Pentagon Trilogy. Read “The Five” and “The Truth” first, myess? Okay!
WARNING! Contains Muggle adventures in Diagon Alley, unusual eyebrows, cheesy clichés galore, psycho Ted, the not-so-lost years of Merlin, a school-wide singalong, the old potato joke, Tyrone’s Princess Bride obsession, Emma’s stubborn denial of the existence of Tyrone’s mustache, a graphic death, a joke shop product as a major plot device, hobo Jordan, Jordan hugging, Jordan pulling pranks, time travel, the Love Shack, angst, and worst of all, Professor Zabini.
It’s the sixth year for Potter’s Pentagon and company, and our heroes learn that in the wizarding world, coming of age has a somewhat weightier significance. Students are busy with an Inter-House Unity Project, Jordan is having weird dreams, Pansy and Ophidias Malfoy have been released from Azkaban, Professor Zabini has a mysterious project of his own, and almost everyone is acting strangely. Meanwhile, at the Ministry of Magic, a man with a vendetta against Ron Weasley is trying his hardest to get him in the biggest trouble possible. Is the only way to save him to travel into the past?
New talents are discovered, new friendships form and old ones change, pasts are dredged up, and, of course, there’s lots of good old-fashioned snogging. And one of the five kills for the first time… while another becomes a casualty of war.
Starring 2008 Quicksilver Quills Best Male Original Character runner-up Jordan Potter, Best Female Original Character nominees Ivy Potter, Haley Potter, Emma Weasley, and Giorgi Anderson, and Best Male Original Character nominee Ted Lupin! Nominated for 2008 Quicksilver Quills Best Post-Hogwarts Story.
A whole chapter about Jordan? Oh, it's like a dream come true! Except that now I find Ted and Tyrone just as adorable, especially since Jordan no longer has tantrums; those were just the cutest things ever!
Speaking of cute, ARTHUR! Eeee! So sweet! It's actually kind of weird, because in England we currently have a BBC series called "Merlin" about ... wait for it ... YOUNG MERLIN! He's about twenty and he's very sort of bumbling and sweet. He's come to Camelot to be young Prince Arthur's manservant. And in case you were wondering, Arthur is pretty good looking. So now when I see the name "Merlin" I don't just think of an old guy, I think of THAT version. I think my point is that it's pretty cool that your story has young Merlin at the same time as this BBC show I like so much ... I love them both!
Anyway, back to your story. I love it! It's just a shame you're so busy. Don't worry though, because I completely understand. I have a feeling I'm in the english equivalent of junior year (although I'm not sure) and it's tough. Having said that ... when do you think Pride and Pre-Juiced Plums will be updated? Because I really love that. Also ... is Emma really going to die? That's just so sad! And not really fitting with the rest of the series at all! On the other hand, this one is quite a bit darker I guess, what with all this Jordan stuff going on. Speaking of which ... Jordan! So cute! All his crazy new seer powers are really cool, but I can see how it would be hard for him to see his friends' deaths and stuff ... it makes me love him more!
I think I may be too into this whole Jordan thing. My English teacher told me off today for seeing characters as real people, rather than representations of real life, or whatever. Except I can't help it! To me it's like they ARE real!
Anyway, this review has rambled on quite a bit too long already. I've not structured it very well or thought it through at all, but never mind. I hope you update when you're ready, and yay for Jordan!
Plus, do you know when the QSQ are announced? Because I'm a bit confused.
Author's Response: Oh, wow, I've never heard of this MErlin thing. I need to check that out! Because I got sick of Old Scraggly Merlin... I had no idea such a thing existed, and I totally need to check it out.
IIIII want to update PnP very, very soon. I actually have quite a few chapters written-- the only thing holding me back is that they are too long for the site's word count, and I'm having trouble editing them to an acceptable length. And I have to add in the Pride and Prejudice summaries.
Dude, I love that you love Jordan. He has a very crazy moments in this story that I quite enjoy... and also tell your English teacher she's a dooodoohead! (Actually, don't, but I see nothing wrong in loving fictional characters, as long as you don't insist they're your husband or something dumb like that!)
QSQ results were supposed to be announced on Nov 30. So I'm a bit confused, toO!
*Gasp* No! You can't do that!
I can't even think of anything to say. Well, "Why the hell did she climb onto a roof?" is one thing. And "If you really have killed Haley then I'm never speaking to you again." But the latter is probably not true.
Even though I hate that you did that, I still loved the chapter, and when Haley was saying goodbye to Jordan, I nearly started crying, because I just KNEW you were going to do that. At first I was also kind of disappointed that the final battle wasn't at Hogwarts, because that's where I'd always imagined it, even before DH, but I think you made it work. I also had no idea your Neville was in a wheelchair, or your Luna was blind! Well, you probably mentioned it before, but I guess I just never really remembered it.
... I seriously can't believe you just did that! *Weeps*. I hope you're going to update soon, so that we can all see Haley jump up and declare that it was only a flesh wound *threatening glare*. =)
PS: This review may sound negative in parts, but I assure you it's not. It's a testament to your awesome writing that people feel so connected to your characters!
Author's Response: I'M SO SORRY! I FEEL SO BAD! BUT... I kinda had to do it. You can't really say you didn't see it coming! And seriously, Ted kind of sacrificed himself for her in the first book, and I wanted to show that Haley's grown to a point where she can sacrifice herself... kind of prove her bravery at last. She climbed onto the roof because she wanted to keep Rookwood from killing Jordan-- because like she said earlier, she feels Jordan's life is much more important than her own and she just wants to keep him safe at all costs.
Yeah, for some reason, I never thought the battle would be at Hogwarts, simply because there was a battle at Hogwarts in the sixth book. But I feel bad that you didn't know that about Neville and Luna-- I kept trying to emphasize it throughout the story because it's important in the next chapter, but I guess I didn't mention it enough times.
I still feel really bad, but I promise, there are some happy parts (and some scary parts) to come.
LOL about Star Trek! I've never seen it, so I wouldn't have known without that note, I'd have just sat there thinking how smart you must be to have come up with something so complicated, yet managed to fit it into JKR's world so seamlessly.
Anyway. I know you said you didn't like this chapter, but I honestly think it was one of your best ever! I don't know why, maybe because I was really in the mood to read something dramatic and angsty like the first scene or two with Ron and Emma. But then when Emma was cheered up by Tyrone (love him), so was I. Although I wouldn't mind some of those throwing frogs ...
I also, naturally, loved Jordan's bit. Yay for Jordan! And I'm very excited about what's to come - going back to the final battle, proving Ron's innocence, kicking Bellowes out into the street and HIM becoming the pathetic hobo instead ... well, that's I hope it will go down, anyway. =)
Looking forward to the next chapter already - Go Team Jordan!
Author's Response: Bahaha, no I didn't really GET the idea from Star Trek per se. I was kind of kidding. I made it up, but then I saw the movie Star Trek, and I was like 'hahahaaa, he reminds me of Jordan,' and then he did the Mind Meld thing, and I flipped out. And my mom told me that I probably subonsciously got the idea from Star Trek, because even though I'd only seen two episodes and never liked the show, my best friends and family are Trekkies.
Okay, I'm going to slpit this review in half for the two parts to the chapter, what with them having such incredibly different tones and everything.
Best. Thing. Ever.
Poor Ted! I can't believe that happened when he's just so nice and adorable and Ted ...
The last paragraph (about the, um, "strawberry milkshake" was just horrible though, because I'm a big wimp and I just hate absolutely anything like that.
Can't wait for the next one! =)
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked the first part of the chpater! As for the second part... sorry about the strawberry milkshake imagery! It was the best way I could imagine it, since I remember going to Jamestown in fourth grade and seeing how the Indians tanned skins or something with deer brains, "Which looked like strawberry milkshakes." Eurgh. Erm, there is some pretty dang graphic violence later in this story... I hope it doesn't freak you out too much....
Wahey, quick update! Also P&P, which we're finally starting in my English class ... I can't wait! Although I was reading the first chapter in the lesson yesterday when I should have been finishing an essay on Hamlet, and when I got to the name Mr Bingley I started telling my friend about how adorable he is, but kept accidently calling him "Bing-Bing" which she found hilarious.
Anyway I really liked the chapter! It was so fun and Christmas-y, it made me want to start wrapping presents and singing yuletidesongs - although my mind was warping at the thought of all those people staying in the same house!
Speaking of staying in houses, I was cheering for Ivy to stand up to Pansy all the way ... silly woman. Or at least, at first I was thinking of her as a silly woman, but then I got to the torture part and thought of her as ... grr! Not silly at all, just evil! But at least Ivy came out of it with the Potters etc for her friends and with the lovely Tedward for her more-than-friend (speaking of which, I want a Ted of my very own! I do, of course, also want a Jordan of my very own, but he wasn't around too much, and my affections are just so darn fickle).
Well, anyway, I'm already looking forward to the next chapter! Also to P&P-JP! Wahey! And the QSQ being announced, but who knows when THAT'S going to happen. Jordan got nominated for best male OC, right?
Jordan to win! (See what I mean about fickle?)
Author's Response: I know, fast! Hey, you're reading P&P in English class? That's really cool! We're reading "In Cold Blood," which is about two guys who killed a whole family and their backstories. It's interesting, but not exactly 'fun.' (And "Hamlet" as well? Man, I want to take your English class? I am a Shakespeare fiend!)
I'm glad you liked the chapter. As for so many people staying in the house, I thought that might be fun, to pack it full with as many people as possible. But it must have been torture for poor solitary Jordan! Speaking of Jordan, yes, he did get nominated for best male OC! I don't think he has much of a chance, though, nor do any of my other crazy creations-- there are just so many great OCs out there.
*Howling cackling laughter* Smith-Smythe! Possibly the most hilarious surname I've ever heard in my life. Sorry I haven't reviewed any of this so far, I have been both busy and forgetful.
Also, toads ARE cool. Tyrone running around yelling just that is perhaps the best thing ever ... I had a character who had a toad, too! Only hers was a girl toad called Lionel. Yeah, those were good times.
Oh, and before I move onto the next chapter, I'll just squee over Jordan for a moment for old times sake.
Okay, that's enough. *Pats Jordan on head* =D Although I'm having a hard time imagining Haley to be quite that glamorous. For some reason, it's much easier to imagine Jordan as a hobo. I really, REALLY hope this is the sort of glimpse into the future that can be prevented with hindsight.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I love the name Smith-Smythe... I've wanted to use it for a character since I was about six. I wrote a play awhile ago where the main villain was a man named Malvolio Smith-Smythe who was driven mad by not being able to find a place where he could buy tea and resorted to evil methods to obtain tea, none of which worked, and all of which were extremely far-fetched (most of them involving bad things happening to the actor Patrick Wilson).
You know what? I totally remember your girl toad named Lionel, because I'm a huge fan of your Janey Weasley stories! Silly! ^_^
Yeah, Haley's not really that glamorous, it's just she's slightly more glamorous than she is as a teenager. She pretty much looks the same, but she's wearing a dress and makeup instead of jeans and a pockety jacket. Hobo Jordan is lots and lots of fun.