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Good characterization of Peter! I like how you explored what led from him being such a shy person, to killing all of those people, and framing Sirius. I also liked that you included major moments for the Marauders during their time at Hogwarts. A job well done!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I'm fascinated by Peter because he turned traitor, but for a long while I couldn't see beyong the 'traitorous rat'. I have to keep reminding myself that he was a fully fledged Marauder and was trusted implicitly.
Thanks again. Carole xxx
Okay, so you made my early!morning again with your strange, humorous poem.
At the beasts and beings and the student body,
Why is he looking at the student body? This just sounded awkward to me when I read it.
Meet our demands, or you'll see real gore!'
What violent little buggers!
I think my favorite parts were the first and last stanzas. With the pie... now I want a pie. >.> At the end, how all the teachers are just sitting there drinking tea cracked me up, and how they're like "Oh look, house-elf rebellion. Must've been Hermione." Haha.
Anyway, yo poems ah da shizz. (You feelin' da gangsta vibes, foo?) :)
Author's Response: I'm really making your morning, aren't I? Hee hee.
Frankly, I used "student body" there only because I wanted it to rhyme (somewhat ) with Nellie... And he's looking at the student body because it's in chaos.
Violent little buggers is right! You can see what they do to themselves, just imagine what they're capable of doing to others?
*gives pie* Is the three point one four nice? You cracked me up with the whole "Oh look," thing... Heehee.
Thanks fo da review, foo!
Haha... Very nice, BB. Very nice.
The only thing that is bugging me is that the first line of the actual poem isn't separated from the line you have before it. :P
Otherwise, you have made my morning with your poem of (Harry?)!angst. :)
Author's Response: Ich habe, um. Oh, forget it. I've separated it now.
It's previous title was "The Trials and Tribulations of a Generic Triwizard Chapion"... I guess that answers your question about the character in question. It's just a random champion, no one in particular.
Thanks for the review, and thanks for the praise! :D
I still think you're delusional... buuuut... I like it. There. Lauren said she likes a H/Hr. I'll even let you borrow my confetti spewing flowers. :P
Anyway, I nitpicked! Well... half nitpicked.
"They stopped talking as they saw him coming within in earshot of their conversation[...]" You put "within in."
"“Sounds great,” Ron said glad of the opportunity to spend some time[...]" I would stick a comma between said and glad.
So yeah. Keep writing, love. :D
--Lauren (who is contemplating further nitpicking)
Author's Response: Thanks Lauren. I'm glad you liked it. If I got you to like a H/Hr then I must be doing something right. I'll fix your nitpicks. Thanks again. -Ashley