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Summary: Peter Pettigrew wasn't always a traitor. He was a Marauder, a prankster and a good friend.

Peter Pettigrew wasn't always called Wormtail.

Perhaps, one change led to the other?

Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling but I doubt you're surprised by that revelation.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4362 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/01/09 Updated: 04/01/09


Reviewer: grimlysirius Signed
Date: 04/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Wormtail on the Hogwarts Express

Good characterization of Peter! I like how you explored what led from him being such a shy person, to killing all of those people, and framing Sirius. I also liked that you included major moments for the Marauders during their time at Hogwarts. A job well done!

--Lauren

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I'm fascinated by Peter because he turned traitor, but for a long while I couldn't see beyong the 'traitorous rat'. I have to keep reminding myself that he was a fully fledged Marauder and was trusted implicitly.

Thanks again. Carole xxx

 

Rebellion! by Sainyn Swiftfoot
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: There is a rebellion-- at Hogwarts! But it is the most unlikely people rebelling...

A very silly and light-hearted poem where, in certain parts, I try to emulate Dr Seuss.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 197 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/26/09 Updated: 05/01/09


Reviewer: grimlysirius Signed
Date: 05/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Rebellion!

Okay, so you made my early!morning again with your strange, humorous poem.

At the beasts and beings and the student body,

Why is he looking at the student body? This just sounded awkward to me when I read it.

Meet our demands, or you'll see real gore!'

What violent little buggers!

I think my favorite parts were the first and last stanzas. With the pie... now I want a pie. >.> At the end, how all the teachers are just sitting there drinking tea cracked me up, and how they're like "Oh look, house-elf rebellion. Must've been Hermione." Haha.

Anyway, yo poems ah da shizz. (You feelin' da gangsta vibes, foo?) :)

--Lauren

Author's Response: I'm really making your morning, aren't I? Hee hee.

Frankly, I used "student body" there only because I wanted it to rhyme (somewhat ) with Nellie... And he's looking at the student body because it's in chaos.

Violent little buggers is right! You can see what they do to themselves, just imagine what they're capable of doing to others?

*gives pie* Is the three point one four nice? You cracked me up with the whole "Oh look," thing... Heehee.

Thanks fo da review, foo!

 

Having a Ball... Not! by Sainyn Swiftfoot
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary:

What's the one most fearsome aspect of the Triwizard tournament?

The First Task? The Second Task? The Third, at the very least?

No, it's the Yule Ball!

I'm Sainyn Swiftfoot and this is my entry into the Poetry category of the second task of the MNFF Triwizard tournament.


Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 115 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/01/09 Updated: 05/02/09


Reviewer: grimlysirius Signed
Date: 05/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Having a Ball... Not!

Haha... Very nice, BB. Very nice.

The only thing that is bugging me is that the first line of the actual poem isn't separated from the line you have before it. :P

Otherwise, you have made my morning with your poem of (Harry?)!angst. :)

--Lauren

Author's Response: Ich habe, um. Oh, forget it. I've separated it now.

It's previous title was "The Trials and Tribulations of a Generic Triwizard Chapion"... I guess that answers your question about the character in question. It's just a random champion, no one in particular.

Thanks for the review, and thanks for the praise! :D

 

Love Story by Radcliffefan07
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 40]

Summary: This is the story of true love. Over the course of the summer the unexpected happens and many things change in the lives of our three favorite characters. This is my take on the the way things should have been. Follow the trio through the summer after the battle, their seventh year at Hogwarts and beyond. H/Hr. Enjoy!

Categories: Harry/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Epilogue? What Epilogue?, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 15895 Chapters: 7 Completed: No
Published:
06/03/09 Updated: 01/17/13


Reviewer: grimlysirius Signed
Date: 06/16/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

I still think you're delusional... buuuut... I like it. There. Lauren said she likes a H/Hr. I'll even let you borrow my confetti spewing flowers. :P

Anyway, I nitpicked! Well... half nitpicked.

"They stopped talking as they saw him coming within in earshot of their conversation[...]" You put "within in."

"“Sounds great,” Ron said glad of the opportunity to spend some time[...]" I would stick a comma between said and glad.

So yeah. Keep writing, love. :D

--Lauren (who is contemplating further nitpicking)

Author's Response: Thanks Lauren. I'm glad you liked it. If I got you to like a H/Hr then I must be doing something right. I'll fix your nitpicks. Thanks again. -Ashley

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