One night I found myself writing a fanfic...
Neville stared down at the smouldering scrap of parchment. There, in neat handwriting that was not his own, was printed the name NEVILLE LONGBOTTOM.
When Neville's name emerges from the Goblet of Fire, the Boy-Who-Lived is thrust into his most dangerous challenge yet. For how can a boy with such limited magical ability possibly hope to survive one of the most gruelling and violent competitions in the Wizarding world?
The new Defence Against the Dark Arts teacher takes Neville under his wing, but evil is growing nearer and not everyone is as they seem. Meanwhile new complications arise in Neville's life. How will he cope with these challenges, and what awaits him at the year's end? In Year Four, everything changes...
This has to be one of my favorite fanfics! I love the way Neville's such a clueless hero, and Moody is just awesome... The Remus/ Siruis switch is really cool, but I have the feeling that Lupin has some very dark stuff floating around his character... It might just be me but a couple of Sirius's lines are just dripping with foreboding.
Author's Response: I wonder what foreboding things you've seen in what Sirius has to say. There is a lot of dark stuff around Lupin anyway to begin with: werewolf, ostracised, in Azkaban for thirteen years among Dementors, on the run. That's enough for anyone to be getting on with!
I should warn regular readers there may be a delay in getting chapter 15 up - it was rejected first time out, for my usual trouble: abuse of the humble comma. I hope you'll find it worth waiting for!
That was pretty good. You've completely shredded the time space continuum of course, branching timeline and all that, but I still like it and I think that's kind of the point lol. Boy you couldn't have killed James any... worse? though ewww. I was also wondering what happened to Remus and Sirius in all this? They going to show up? Seems a bit odd that Harry wouldn't worry about his only non-alternate-timeline father figure. I did like Bella as the potions teacher, but it seems like snape would be out of a job by now due to the DDA curse. Oh and the Harry/Hermione stuff is pretty freaky lol.
Author's Response: Who needs time and space to make sense? LOL Yes, James's death had to be brutal - it was born from hatred of him and makes Harry hate his killer when he learns the details. Sirius and Remus are around but won't show up for quite some time, at the rate the chapters are getting approved. ;-) As far as the DADA curse, I'm sticking mostly to canon facts from the first five books, so that one wouldn't apply. As far as Harry and Hermione go, this is pretty innocent compared to...well hopefully you'll stick around to see what it could be compared to. Thanks for reviewing.
Just wanted to point out that the newspaper photo is black and white, harry comments on it in POA, so sirius wouldn't have noticed the hair.
Author's Response: Thanks for catching that mistake, I really appreciate it. Thanks also for the review.
Trick or Treat!
3. She clicks on her mouse and swipes her wand;
Some stories go up, and some stories are gone.
Stories of her own? Why, she has plenty!
Fewer than one-hundred, but far more than twenty.
That was pretty good. First marauder era fic I ever forced myself to read... but don't mind me, marauder era isn't really my cup of tea. I'm just waitng for you to get on with "Apparently Asleep" (;
Oh and the kiss of life scene was good enough, but the spell is anapnea (clears airways and restarts breathing, but I've butchered the spelling)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. The next Chapter of AA is in the queue so hopefully not long now (and I'm almost done with two further chapters, too). Yeah, I know the spell to clear the lungs but at that point James was beyong magic help and they were in so much shock that not even Remus could remember it - they are only Year 5 after all.
And that shadow of Harry thing... sorry... totaly a failure at time space continuum. And there I've failed at spelling again. But I did like Sirius in the muggle world, very realistic and funny.
Author's Response: Any break in the space/time continuum causes ructions. I'm just surprised Jean-Luc Picard didn't turn up with Wharf!. I'm glad you like Sirius in the Muggle world. I tried to be as authentic as possible, especially the 1976 references and London. (I'm a London girl, you see)
Oooh, I love it. I love the different perspective on the houses and snape and I can't wait for the next chapter! (really really like the snape/ lilly's hair) But the picture in the common room was so sad...
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I think the fact that I'm in Hufflepuff is slightly skewing the story *grins*. The bit with Lily's hair was something I thought about a long time ago, before I started writing this, so I'm very pleased you picked that out as one of your favourites.
Chapter 5 is in the queue *fingers crossed* Carole xxx
and sorry for the double post, but the "for sirius" bit was just brilliant :D
Author's Response: That's one of my favourite bits too!
I finally found where the title is from! I was sort of half trying to see where you were going with it, thought you might explain it later but then... I reread the seventh book... and I found it );
Author's Response: Yes, seventh book. Still makes me cry whenever I read it. *sobs*. Thank you for being interested enough to work it out *smiles* Carole xxx
Awesome chapter, moody was great! Glad to see he's not too much of a "Constant Vigilance" shouter because Alastor Moody never (that I can think of, correct me if I'm wrong) actually says "constant vigilance". That was Barty Crouch Jr's thing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. This was the chapter I've been most worried about - due to the lack of Remus so the fact you enjoyed it means a lot.
I like it, but the time frame is a bit off. Actually it could be Rowling's fault, but unless Rudolphus is considerably older than Bella (wich, he could be) but assuming they're roughly the same age, that makes Bella roughly Voldemort's age. So, for the sake of the argument, Bella is sixteen and Voldemort is twenty. By Harry's second year, it has been fifty years since voldemort's fifth year, making voldemort (if he still has an age by then) 65. Sirius Black is roughly 35 in Harry's second year, meaning that he and Andromeda probably wouldn't have been born untill bella was around thirty. If we do want this to work, the fixed ages have voldemort being thirty years older than sirius. If sirius is five (easily old enough to be a giggling hellion) then voldemort and Rudolphus are thirty-five, and rudolphus is 19 years older than bella... ewww. Oh well, under all this math I really did like your story.
Author's Response: LOL. There are easier ways to figure out the timeline. I remember when I used to use all that complex logic, but the Lexicon has a timeline with birth dates that is very helpful for this. However, I will admit that I didn't check it this round. I know the age difference between the Black sisters is right. There are two years between Andromeda and either of her sisters. Sirius was a fair bit younger than his cousins, but Narcissa would've still been in school when he started at Hogwarts, so when she was thirteen he would've been old enough to make a nusiance of himself. Rodolphus is older than Bella, but I don't think the difference is that harsh. Voldemort is older than Rodolphus and Bellatrix, by a fair amount. He went to school with Hagrid and McGonagall. I think McGonagall was even teaching when Bella started school so there would be at least six or seven years between Bella and Voldy, but I think it's more. Sigh. Here I am doing the complicated thing instead of checking the Lexicon myself. Silly me. Anyway, I'm glad you liked the story.
Omg I could hardly read this through my tears of laughter... That was brilliant...
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Chapter 2 is coming!
Aww, poor chudley at the end there. Other than that... slightly sick-minded lolz :D