I confess, I'm kind of in love with this story. I know it was intended to be a one shot, but it's so wonderful that I can't help wanting more. Great job. I'll definitely be rereading this one a few times!
Oh my god, you updated! The minute I saw the new chapter I got a huge stupid grin on my face. I love this story so much.
Author's Response: Hi-- good to hear from you again! I hope I'm doing an OK job of not turning his life into a complete and utter black hole of angst (unlike the actual canon in which, let's face it, it is.) :) Anyway, glad you're still liking it!
How do I love this story? Let me count the ways.
"First of all, they’re mostly Muggles..."
I think this is quite possibly one of my favorite lines/pop culture references in the entire piece, and I'm willing to bet anyone anyone that the wizard in the Stone's lineup is undoubtedly Keith Richards.
I adore the burgeoning friendship between Severus and Mary. I don't ship them, not yet, but I'm so pleased that he actually has someone in his life to give a damn. Her question in the previous chapter about whether he even had any friends broke my heart in the best way possible, and this chapter's gesture with the candy was adorable. Not to mention the banter and entire bet sequence. I'm eager to see her reactions when (if?) she learns of his own muggle background. Also, I've mentioned before how much I love the fact that you work in the 70's pop culture references, and that Severus is aware of them. As a halfblood who, as far as we know, was raised muggle he would be just as immersed in that world as a muggle born, and I enjoy that you go there. One wonders if the Marauders would ever pick up on the fact that the Slytherin was spouting off very non-pureblood-oriented slang, but I suppose that requires brainpower beyond Sirius's current mental facilities.
Also, your entire discussion on music now has me wondering what exactly Snape does choose to listen to. Curious and curiouser.
One other thing that I like about this fic are the flaws that you instill in your main characters. Lily isn't some perfect angel, and Snape isn't a poor misunderstood boy (well, not entirely). The flashback library bit was nice because it gave more credence to Lily's complaints about Severus, and really helps build up to the mudblood incident as a final straw, rather than Lily just arbitrarily deciding to end the relationship. There's a history there, and Lily, for her flaws, didn't just abandon Snape over a single mistake.
Author's Response: Hi Val-- good to hear from you again, and sorry it has taken me so long to reply (and to post another chapter.) So busy. Anyway, on to your review-- yay, someone picked up on the Rolling Stones comment. :) And yes, you're correct in your supposition. As for the pop culture references-- I know Lily would be clued in to them, and I think Severus would be despite himself. Of course, he'd have a more conflicted and pompous relationship to things like, say, ABBA. ;) And I'm glad you like Mary-- I was trying to come up with an OC whom Lily would reasonably be friends with but who would get along with Severus-- easier said than done. That said, she's fun and interesting to write-- and he deserves a decent friend besides Lily. Finally, the library scene-- I could so easily see Severus and Lily having a fight like that in their past. If they actually ever do get together, it would be despite having a significant amount of baggage, I think. Anyway, thanks as always for the review! I'm really trying to finish the 11th chapter-- hopefully soon.
So this morning I visited your fic with the intention of rereading my favorite parts (a rather frequent pastime, I must admit) and lo and behold, imagine my joy when I discovered a new chapter! I may have even squealed a bit.
I've said it before (though not recently--I've been a bit lax in reviewing, I'm afraid) and I'll say it again, I adore the way you write young!Snape. He's not a villain but he's also not a hero, and while he's trying to make positive changes in his life, the going is tough. Between the examination of his relationship with Lily and his observations about her mother's muggle status I think you do a nice job of reminding your audience of this.
I also love how your Severus is fairly well-versed in all things muggle--the music, the pop culture references, the fashion. Because he *would* be given his background, and so few people touch on that detail. I can't wait for Mary to catch him in the act one day.
And finally, words cannot describe how much I love, love, LOVE the ending line of this chapter. I literally laughed out loud, the setup was that awesome. Poor Severus, this can only end in tears. Or copious amounts of frustration. Though I wonder how he wound up with the position. Might Llewellyn have had any say in the matter? Hmmmmmm.
All in all, a fantastic chapter. I eagerly await more.
I beg of you, please please PLEASE don't let this story be abandoned. It is truly one of the best Snape fics I've ever read. I still check it all the time in hopes of an update.
I click on this story far more often than I should, hoping for an update. It's just that good.
God, this is goooood. It just builds and builds. I'll admit, I had a little bit of trouble buying James Potter being okay with his pregnant wife (and later child) disappearing for so long, but the rest of the story is so great I was easily willing to overlook that detail.
"But the truth is that Harry Potter is more Severus's child than James's, and he can't make his legs step aside. He just can't." This line nearly gave me chills. My favorite part of the whole piece.
Author's Response: Everything with James does seem a little suspicious, but I'm writing a piece from his POV that might help with that! I'm glad you liked the story nonetheless :) Thanks for the review.