Summary: A sixth year fic that explores what might happen if Harry moves past the angst and starts to put his life together and has a few things break his way for a change.
Again, you writer's like to make everything more difficult than it needs to be. There are times when you need more side action/mystery, and times when you don't. This is one of the "don'ts". You almost make me want to forget reading the rest of the story. I'm sure you think it makes it more exciting, but it really just makes you want to throw up.
Good things are happening, Curious about Sirius little sidetrip. Ron has finally started to mature to the extent he knows he loves Hermione. And you writer's still put too many side plots and "exciting" events in your stories. When will any of you realize it's not necessary to have more than one or two crisis' per story? Three or four is more than overkill, it makes the reader just want to say f... it and go to another story.
Yeah, no huge crisis, just a small problem. We know Voldy is a disaster in the making anywhere, so I never count him as a new problem. I'm sure there will be another huge crisis soon, it's just a fact of life in the wizarding world and can't be helped. I just wish there was a way writer's could avoid them, but then it wouldn't be the world we all know and love. I'm liking the new family dynamics, but Uncle Severous? I'm thinking not.
I am so loving this story. I'm getting some thoughts about what might be going on, but I could be reading what I think should happen, not what you're writing. I'm thinking Dumbledore, Nicholas and probably Perenelle will be gone at the end of the year, as in dead, that at least Fawkes will move to Harry and I'm not sure but maybe Pymander also, and Praetor will somehow be there for Jamie. I don't think they will bring back those who have died, like James, Lily and Cassandra because that would be way to dark. Sirius was in a sort of inbetween place I think, so he hadn't really quite gone all the way to death. It's obvious Voldy wants Jamie for some reason, but I don't think he's going to get her and she's going to play a part in helping Harry in the final defeat of Voldy.
Dark magic at work everywhere. This is definitely a slight bit more intriguing than I originally thought. I am, of course, hoping everything will turn out for the best, as in Harry and the good guys win, but I'm thinking there is going to be a lot of stuff going on before that happens. Praetor belongs to Merlin, that I wouldn't have guessed, but I like it. Many more crisis are going to happen and I'm pretty sure I'm not going to like all of them.
Bad creature very good to go after Voldy. Better if bad creature killed Voldy. But we know that's not supposed to happen. Then again, it's your story. Molly is really the ultimate Mum. You definitely would have to have a death wish to go after one of her children. She would hunt you down and kill you. Jamie is going to become a very powerful witch one of these days, and as protective of Harry and Ginny as they are of her. That was a beautifully written scene between Molly and Jamie. And I'm guessing theh are going to give Albus some Elixer of Life. The thing with the three Phoenix' is baffling me. I keep thinking that Albus, Nicholas and Merlin are going to die and Fawkes, Pymander and Praetor are going to attach themselves to Harry, Ginny and Jamie? That sounds a little far fetched, but I'm not up to date on Phoenix lore.
I do believe Jamie is definitely her brother's sister. Harry would go and find out for himself, not just believe what other's told him and Jamie is proving to be the same. I don't necessarily have a good feeling about Cassandra being back. Voldy and friend's were just a little too eager to present her to Dumbledore. Decidely fishy. It would be interesting to know what she might have "seen" regarding Harry and Ginny, And maybe Jamie? Maybe in another life Ginny and Jamie were twins.
I like Hermione's parent's. They are very obviously not stupid and know their daughter has kept things from them. I think them meeting Harry, Ginny and Jamie will go a long way towards getting back on the right track.
I wouldn't trust Draco as far as I can throw him. He might not be ready to join Daddy and Voldy this minute, but he's still wrapped up in everything he's learned at Daddy's knee. He's wanting to play both ends against the middle and try to land on the winning side, and he still thinks Voldy is going to win.
There is a very big "something" going on and I have a lot of very farfetched ideas. And I'm sure none of them are anywhere close. I'm not sure Dumbledore is going to wake up. This might be his end in the tale.
Narcissa was definitely taken by Voldy and friends, probably to get Draco to cooperate in whatever they're trying.
Cassandra knows that what she's "seen" definitely involves Jamie along with Harry and Ginny.
I'm intrigued. I like the idea of Flammel still being around and at Hogwart's. He must have been quite a wizard in his day.
I, without reservation, absolutely love, adore, whatever other adjectives you can think of, Sirius letter to Harry. I can see him writing, re-writing, re-wording that letter to say what he wanted Harry to hear. I've wanted to be Sirius when I grow up since POA. I'm over 50 and never growing up, but I still want to be Sirius. Of the last four stories I started, this is the one I want to read.
There is no way I am not going to be a huge fan of this story. Unless you turn it into a mushy/angsty/revolting teenage soap opera. Good writing, great characters.
Uh oh, another crisis to deal with. I know, I kinw, lots of people love having them every other chapter, makes for exciting reading. I'm not one of those people. however the story is definitely worth reading so I will follow to the end.
Okay, it was a really great sort of crisis and I love the way it played out. I know there'll be more and I'll complain, but I'll read them anyway. The humor is everything I could ask for, extremely cynical, or dry, or sick, or something most people wouldn't appreciate or understand, just like my sense of humor. The Sorting Hat is, as usual, right again. And if you write as far as kids, James Sirius is a good name.
This is a really fun story. I'm sure it won't all be as much fun or as funny, but that's okay too. I have an extremely warped sense of humor and this fits that to a tee!
If you have finished this story on some other site please let me know so I can go there and finish it.
Very well written so far. Good plot/storyline, progression at a very believeable pace, characters all believeable. Well, the Dursley's acting like real people and Dudley having a conversation with Harry may take a little getting used to, but I can handle that.
Fascinating. This is an extremely well thought out and well written story.
Very touching. The entire chapter, even the twins. From the moment Harry met the Weasley's at Kings Cross I pictured he and Ginny together when they were adults. I'm not sure JKR could have written this better.
I think I woke up my neighbors because I was laughing so hard and loud. I have laughed at other stories on MNFF but not nearly as much or as loud as during this chapter. My goal is to be Sirus when I grow up ever since reading POA. Being over 50 and never intending to grow up I may not reach my goal, but i"m certainly going to try. You have portrayed Sirus exactly as I would have pictured him. I can't wait to read the rest. The Weasley's, Lupin, Tonks, and McGonagall deserve everything Sirus left them.
To repeat myself, I absolutely love this story and the way you have written it. The laughter is the best. My warped sense of humor fits perfectly with Harry's world in the first place, and this stoy in particular. I most certainly hope you have been able to finish this at another site and that I find that site.