I completed your amazing story early this morning and am completely enchanted by it. What an amazing piece you have created here - believable and interesting plot lines, new discoveries of feelings and sparks of electricity between Oliver and Hermione and the expert use of imagery/background to completely engross me in your words. The way you have written the progression between the two is nothing short of brilliant – you showed real reactions and uncertainties of this sort of arrangement, making their character that much more genuine. I also am impressed with the way you use the vernacular - writing the Scottish brogue is not an easy task. I read your bio and am ecstatic that you have not abandoned this piece. It is honestly one of the best fan-fics I have read. What a shame it would be for it to fall to the side and we never get to travel along their journey together up to fruition. Thank you so much for continuing this and for sharing your talent with us. I anxiously await your newest chapter and good writing to you.
I just read your entire story and I am completely captivated! The self-loathing that Draco has developed throughout the story, allowing his former mates to ruthlessly beat him and drinking himself into oblivion paired with Hermione’s conscience, her caring for him and him possibly slowly becoming a better man have kept me on a rollercoaster. The way in which you showcase Draco’s struggle to keep his old thoughts/misgivings at bay while grasping at the new feelings he is experiencing, keeps it all very realistic – a quick transformation into a NEW Draco would just not happen.
The character of Channing gives me the creeps beyond any creeps I’ve felt before – the dirty old man with a not so hidden (or perhaps one of those as well) agenda. I also sort feel that Draco’s actually your red-herring (so to speak) in regards to the “Dark Lord”, if I’m not mistaken only followers or former Death Eaters refer to Voldemort as that – nice bit of subtlety. So as you can probably tell, I think your story is brilliant and will continue to follow it closely. Thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: Ah, what an amazing review! I'm glad that you're finding everything realistic. It was a huge goal of mine to keep this story believable and slow-paced. Also, characterization was very important, so the fact that you find Channing creepier than anything is wonderful to me. Believe it or not, but he's a very interesting man to write. Your theory is interesting, but I cannot give credence to it one way or another. The story finishes in about , oh, seven-ish chapters? Maybe six? So you'll find out soon enough what's really going on. ;) Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!!
I thoroughly enjoyed this one-shot. I've never really considered Hermione with Seamus, but after reading your beautifully written story, I've been swayed. The way you capture Seamus is brilliant and so true to his character. Love the colloquial Irish brogue – you did an amazing job with it. In writings, that is not an easy task to perfect. Just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed this and to say, “Thanks for sharing”.
This was a beautifully written, heart wrenching and touching first chapter. I do hope you continue this, because I see immense potential for your story. I absolutely adore Charlie and feel the character of Hermione is better suited with someone older, someone to appreciate her brilliance and challenge her. So I am thoroughly looking forward to seeing where you go with this. Thanks for sharing.