Hey! The names Lexy.
I love a good old fantasy, and Harry Potter is my secret passion :)
'Falling from Grace' was pretty much written out but I lost it when an old computer broke (many years ago now!) So now I'm rewriting the whole thing!
I have a new story in the works but this time I think I'll avoid putting it up until I actually get somewhere far with it! It'll be called 'The life and times of Isabella Griffin'. Look out for it!
Teddy Lupin's first year at Hogwarts. Canon-compliant. Nominated for a 2008 QSQ for best Post-Hogwarts story.
The war is over, and all is well, they say, but the wounds remain unhealed. Bitterness divides the Houses of Hogwarts. Can the first children born since the war's end begin a new era, or will the enmities of their parents be their permanent legacy?
I actually cannot express just how much I loved this story. It's the first next gen I've read as I tend to avoid that cat. But really I just spent the whole day at work doing as little as possible to read this story... And I don't regret it!
Oh, wow, I loved this story.
I think this portrays Cho so well. The way that everything in her thoughts links to each other.
The fact that she has lost her colours, the fact that she has lost her dad, and the fact that she has lost Cedric.
I like the use of the colours, actually, I can't decide if she has literally lost them, or if she lost them in her mind, you know, like, because she lost so much, everything is black and white to her, no colour in the world.
I'm not sure.
I like they way that you made her thoughts so confusing, as well. You do it well, as you can follow them easily, yet they are still completly scrambled, without order or anything.
The best bit, in my opinion, is how you made it clear just how much she depends on these people she cares about. Without them, she isn't sure how to act, what to do.
I like that, it portrays the way she feels about people, how much she actually cares, really well.
Also, I liked the ending. She didn't get over it, and it wasn't any better, but she is still strong. She is still the same person as before, and she has to fight to stay that way.
She isn't totally wet, but she still has that determination left in her.
I liked that :)
Sorry, that one had me laughing so much.
But yeah, Amazing story..Again...
Ha! I forgot about that… just goes to prove that even in something as dark and serious as this, I have to put at least one joke in a story somewhere… Imagine that, Dementors with lipstick – quite a scary thought!
Thanks for the review!
Tim the Enchanter
Ha, I loved the Yeti joke at the end.
But yeah, wow, you must have done a lot of research!
But yeahh, wow, really good:)
Oh goodie - thanks for the review! As you can tell, I did a fair bit of internet-surfing on the subject of the People’s Liberation Army for this story, but I decided to stick a homicidal Yeti in it! Chapter Three is ready to go, but unfortunately I can only submit one chapter in a single category at a time – you’ll see it eventually, though.
Tim the Enchanter
Aha, absurd misfortune....
You have a really good, sarcastic sense of humor!
Beware of the fearsome butterflies – they’re vicious little blighters!
I’m glad you liked the story and my peculiar sense of humour, and thanks for reviewing!
Tim the Enchanter
Five hundred twenty-five thousand six hundred minutes
Every student plans on making their final year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry the most memorable one ever. Eight in particular want to make those minutes really count. Except, they each have a different idea of how to go about doing it.
James Potter would like to waltz into Lily Evans’s life and throw it completely off course. Julie McGuire didn’t exactly plan on rescuing Remus Lupin, but now that she has, why not just go with it? Marlene McKinnon should have know what she got herself into when she kissed Sirius Black the first time, but that boy has a way of knocking her senseless. Emmeline Vance had planned to just sit back and watch it all happen, until Roxanna Louchester, her ex-friend, barged in and turned everything upside down.
Suddenly they’ve gone from only wanting the most memorable year, to achieving it. It’s a year of love and lust. It’s a year of tears and fights. It’s a year of finding yourself. It’s a year of learning to lose. It’s a year that none of them are likely to forget.
Thats so amazing!
Your a brilliant writer!
The situations are all so lifelike, it could honestly be happening. And your charectarization is wonderful.
Its so good to see your not going all cliche, like most maurauders do!
*higgles and Huggles*
Author's Response: -squish-Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, Lexy! -blushes- Why, thank you. Yes, yes, I do tend to dislike cliches. :p -higgles and huggles back- Thanks so much! Again! ;) xo Mere
'And, lastly, thanks to you, for reading, for reviewing, and just being totally awesome.'
Thats okay, Mere, I do try! Lol
Anyway. WOW, amazing story. Even better than the last chapter, now you've got into it.
So amzaing! WOW WOW WOW!!!!
Honestly, and this is going straight on my favourites. I love your writing style, and the way you put it in the diary, then discribe it, ane everything, lol.
Lol, nothing compared to DD's speech? Haha, i've never heard that one!
And use your sweeteness? Are you implying you want Alice to become a double agent and seduce the Death Eaters? LOL
Anyway. Update soon!!!!
Love!!! *higgles and huggles*
Author's Response: -hitsheadondesk- So it only took two months to respond to this.... oh, well. Thanks so much, Lexy! You are awesome. :D heehee. I love all your comments. Thanks so much, again. <3 -hugglesquishes- xox Mere
Oh, Ave. How beautiful. Like, heart wrenchingly stunning. You are such an amazing writer.
Sweet music floated in. Mummy said that when the birds are happy, they sing. I wanted to sing, too, to match my voice with theirs and mingle in their happiness. And I did, because there was nothing to stop me.
What an opening. I love the way you say it like, Mummy said it, so it must be true. That is so Luna.
I also like the last line of that paragraph. You have so got this girl, like, up to a T.
All beings do that, because everybody has to change to live life to the fullest. I want you to live your life, Luna. Whatever you have to do to get there, do it.”
Aww, what a beautiful message. :) That's a wonderful line. Although, I must say, it sounds a little bit Slytheriny. Lol
To Luna, the Blue was the emptiness that filled the space, the nothingness that surrounded her. Up high, it was blue, but here where she stood it was colorless. Maybe, if she stood at the top of the sky and looked down, it would be blue here, too.
Dude, where do you come up with this stuff. You are like, a genious. You should be a Ravenclaw. From the way you managed the charactarise Luna, you could proberbly even be that weirdo mystical one ;) Take her place. Aha.
It was a good day; you could smell the happiness. It smelled like sunshine.
[Sniffles] This is my favourite line. Like, from any story, ever. It's so beautiful, and wise. Lol. Wise Avery. [Sniffles again]
What had it done to deserve that wound?
Oh, that's deep. I can just imagine Luna being the type to think of things like that. Nice.
“It smells like the fwesh sweet honey stolen from a bumbuhbee.”
Okay. Aww. Another adorable line. Dude, this fic is too cute. I cannot do it justice.
After all, at least she would have died laughing.
Oh, Avery, that's so sweet, yet so depressing. I can see what you mean, but I also feel so unhappy. Lol. You're pulling all these emotions out of me >.>
Daddy said that weeds were just as beautiful as flowers, you just had to learn to appreciate them.
Haha, the ____ said thing again. I love have naive and cute you make her.
“Daddy, Mummy isn’t gone. She’s here in the blue.”
Mann, this is all so beautiful. It's all so Luna, and so sweet, and so childish.
Like, all so simply, yet effective. I just love your writing, Ave, where do you come up with all these lines?
And suddenly, Luna had an inexplicable urge to sing.
Okay, if that wasn't the worlds best ending, I don't know what is.
That whole fic was so beautiful.
Mann, I dunno what even to say, I so suck at this reveiwing buisness. Lol.
So I'm just going to tell you I adore it, and I think I will leave it at that. :)
Aw, dude that's sweet as :)
I really like the charactarization of Lily. I usually hate her in all fics. I dunno why, but there's something about her that just really gets me.
Great, Caus I'm going to write a James Lily fic soon. Lol.
Anyway. Yeah, one little nitpick. Harry, I think he was much to sharp and intelligent for his age. He spoke to well, too.
Now if he was three, it would have been completly accurate. But at one, he would have just learnt his first words, so.. I dunno.
That's just me being picky, lol. Other than that, it was absolutly amazing. Beautiful. Haha.
' I pictured myself packing him a PB&J sandwich for his first train ride to Hogwarts. I could see him passing his NEWTs with all Os, and throwing the Quaffle into a Quidditch Hoop for the Gryffindor Quidditch team.'
That was my favourite line. It was actually so cute. Especially if you compare it to what really happened.
Harry didn;t get his favourite sandwhiches, he got nothing. Instead, he met a boy who had his least favourite.
He never even took his NEWTs. Instead he dropped out and went Horocrux hunting ;)
And he never did Chase. He was always the Seeker. :)
Loved it :)
Author's Response: glad you liked it Lek! Yah.... I know he talks a bit too much... but I really needed him to be like that for the story :P And the sandwich thing was what I was trying to point out... :') SOMEONE GETS ME!
Whoa! Two chapters and I never noticed!
How could I?
Haha, I'm not entierly sure why, but I absolutly adored the line 'Tim would have to try harder than that if he wanted to alter their unyielding morning routine!'
Maybe it was just really clever, but that really made me laugh.
You're rather mean, though. Why is it always the Hufflepuffs who are the worst off? What with the 'The Hufflepuff table resembled nothing more than a pile of matchsticks,'
[Is a Hufflepuff]
Another line that I loved, 'Yet you jump in there and take all the dialogue and paragraphs for yourself, not leaving any for the rest of us!”'
Haha, I love the way that you make all of the characters so similar to the original to make it funny, but still have those slight differences to stop it being too much.
One thing I really want to know, though, is why do you always insult your own writing? Like,
'badly written, subversive rant'
Is it all joking, or do you mean any of it? Cuz if you do, you should know, you're an absolutly amazing writer!!
And last of all, Haha, I loved the email part, that was such a brilliant idea! Seriously, I don't know who else would come up with that..
Wow, would you look at that? I wrote a half decent review to one of your chapters! Isn't that just amazing!!
Well, hello Lexyy! Thanks for the review! I have no idea why I made it a requirement for each chapter to start with the protagonists eating breakfast. I guess I just noticed that the first few chapters started that way, and somehow had the idea to turn it into a plot device. With that said… expect more chapters to begin with them eating breakfast – nothing I can do can change that!
Sorry I created the impression that I was picking on the Hufflepuffs, but I never had any intention to do so. I just wanted one of the house tables to be destroyed, and I just randomly picked the Hufflepuffs’ – remember, it could have been a lot worse. I haven’t killed off any named ‘Puffs, yet, have I?
And I’m glad you liked John’s “badly written, subversive rant” – I call it badly written because when I read his argument a few times, I can’t shake the feeling that it is slightly clunky and repetitive in places, so I had Wat point this out. However, I did nothing to change that aspect of his speech because I think it sounds much more like normal dialogue – we can’t all talk like Cicero, I’m afraid! Or maybe I just have low self-esteem and think my writing’s rubbish… NAH! Mindless optimism, hurrah!
As you undoubtedly noticed, I modelled many of my OCs off canon characters, because Tim the Enchanter is lazy and doesn’t want to bother making real characters – thus the revolt! Though I don’t think any of my OCs correspond exactly with Ron, I would say that John is the closest, if only for the reason that he’s the disgruntled sidekick, especially like the Ron of GoF and DH. On the other hand, he is a bit of a sarcastic git, which isn’t very Ron-ish at all! Bleargh.
Like almost everything in this story, I can’t remember how I came up with the idea for the insulting e-mail. At any rate, I’m glad I did, no matter what my motivation was! The responses I wrote were actually modelled after or taken directly from the mannerisms of my friends, so that’s a little arbitrary detail about that....
Anyway, thanks again for the review, and check out the next chapter whenever it’s approved!
Tim the Enchanter
Okay, I just did a proper reveiw, and now I'm too .. uh .. lazy to do another.
So I will just tell you how wickid this chapter was..
Although, really, you know it would be my worst nightmare ever to be bald. Poor Alice.
And your Angsty wierdo little girl was an excellent addition.
The sentence 'I’m the American exchange student from Salem Witches Institute – Serenity Sapphire! Don’t you recall how you were the only one to comfort me when I arrived and was sorted into Gryffindor, against the wishes of my adoptive Death Eater parents, the same people who murdered my real mother and father?”'
Was just perfect. Like, completly. Are you doing the cliche challange? Cuz you really and honestly should.
You would totally win.
Haha, I also loved the very end. The 'asked Chris near the conclusion of this chapter. '
You do have a way for pointing out the obvious. =)
Don’t feel bad about feeling to lazy to write proper review – remember, I was too lazy to write a proper story! For this chapter I essentially threw sanity out the window and let Skittles™ do the rest of the work. The only part of this chapter I actually put some serious thought into was the cameo of Serenity Sapphire, the stupidly perfect American exchange student girl. She represents every cliché I hate in Harry Potter fandom! I had enormous fun making her as over-the-top as possible (ridiculously beautiful, unnecessarily tragic past, etc.) in the few paragraphs of her existence, plus I took great pleasure in having one of my characters smash her face in with a pineapple – those hurt!
Oh, and THANKS FOR TELLING ME ABOUT THE CLICHÉ CHALLENGE! I had no idea there was one until you mentioned it – you’ll definitely see me running!
“Heh heh…” Tim uttered deviously near the end of this author’s response. Yep. Attack of the obvious! NEXT CHAPTER IS IN THE QUEUE!
Tim the Enchanter
*dies laughing...* *seriously*
That was amazing. Your so descriptive. And that story was so.... wow.
*still giggling slightly*
I'm not going to make much sence right now, so I'll just leave now.
Be happy, i left you a reveiw of my own accord =p
Thanks for the review, Lexxyy! Please, don’t feel pressured to leave a review for anything if you don’t want to, but I’m glad you liked the story! And feel bad for not making much sense in your review – this STORY doesn’t make much sense to begin with!
Tim the Enchanter
Hehe, So funny...
Your an amazing story writer, your really good at the 'hooking' thing
Heh, so heres your reveiw number one :)
Well, hello Lexxyy, thanks for the review, and I’m glad you like the story so far! Also, I really appreciate your comment on the literary hook – I had a lot of fun just writing the absurd, eye-catching summary!
Chapter Three, coming soon!
Tim the Enchanter
Haha, That was brilliant.
Wow, you obviously know an awful lot about weapons. I don't so I was pretty confused. Lol.
You know, I totally confused myself earlier. I was trying to work out the story, with the whole, so they rewrote it, but even if they were real, they are characters, so they can only write when you say so. But that means that you made them write, so they aren't rebelling. But that means-
And it went on a while. So i stopped thinking about it, and just accepted it as, well, absurd. Lol.
I absoloutly adored your last line. It was honestly so effective.
I also loved the '“WHERE’VE YOU BEEN? WE’VE BEEN FIGHTING FOR MORE THAN FOUR HUNDRED WORDS – THAT’S A LOT LONGER THAN ‘A FEW PARAGRAPHS!’”'
That actually cracked me up!
I'm wayy to tired to write a proper reveiw. So sorry about that.
That was brilliant, Tim, and I can't wait for the next chapter. You honestly never fail to crease me up.
Thanks for reviewing my story, Lexxyy! About the weapons thing, well… it comes to me as naturally as breathing, pretty much. Plus I included it in the story because I find it funny, for some incredibly weird reason!
Also you brought up a very good question. WHO wrote this story? ARE the characters even rebelling in the first place? Well, I don’t even really know myself. All we know is that IT’S ABSURD!
I’m glad the “THAT’S A LOT LONGER THAN ‘A FEW PARAGRAPHS!’” line made you laugh. I feel very clever and proud of myself for having come up with it now! And thanks for liking the last line – I surprised myself by weaving in poignant contemplations in such an absurd story, so it’s good to hear that it worked.
Once again, thank you for reviewing. The next exciting chapter is in the queue and will be approved whenever it’s approved!
Tim the Enchanter
Trick or Treat!
3. She clicks on her mouse and swipes her wand;
Some stories go up, and some stories are gone.
Stories of her own? Why, she has plenty!
Fewer than one-hundred, but far more than twenty.
Well, I'm reading (obviously) and I really like it.
At first I wondered if Remus was a little OOC, but well, with marauders, you know best!
However, I don't think McGonagall would use the word 'Stupid'. How about idiotic?
I loved the way you spoke of Promfrey, and I think that it would be so likely for her to have been like that.
I also love the way you referred to Harry, and the memory. That was genius! hehe.
Well, all in all, I think your writing is amazing, as is your story. So well done!
Author's Response: Thank you LeXXXXXYYYYYYY, Hmmm a few people have said that about McGonagall whereas I saw her saying that. I also figured that Remus woud flip once in a while especially after a careers talk. Glad you liked my Harr appearance - it had been buzzing around for ages ever since I read SWM. Ta lots Carole xxx
Wow, I loved your Fat Lady. What an amazing idea. I've never stopped to wonder what she would be like, if someone actually listened to her! Lol.
I love the way you charectarized Frank. Its wonderful, ad so is your poetry.
Sirius is exactly what i would have imagined him to be, although, I have to say, I can see a bit of you in him! Lol. James is also really good.
Peter however, I feel is a little cliched. I mean, he would have been just as good as his friends, albiet less talented, if he were to be such a large part of there lives. Remember, he was trusted 100% by both James and Sirius.
But like I said before, the Maruders are definatly your area!
I love your imagary though, like the dancing red hair, everything you wright, I can honestly imagine!
Andseriously! You can totally see how Comras McLaggen turned out the way he did! Lol
Author's Response: Peter is a little cliched at the moment but worry not he comes into his own in the later chapters. Thank you for my review!
Thats was good!
I liked your Peter in this one. Like the bit where he stood up for James. See, he was brave! I told you! Lol. I also liked the bit where James reffered to Peter as the one he expected to come after him. It shows why he trusts him so.
James was really good aswell, I really liked the part where he squeezed Peter's shoulder. It was a really small gesture, but it showed his personalitie well. I also loved the bit where he thought 'Great! I’ve got Mum’s friend, Griselda.' That shows him well aswell!
Remus was brilliant aswell. The bit where you said 'However, it wasn’t his friend, Moony, he saw before him. It was an authoritative Remus Lupin who stood there. '
It shows that there was a good reason why he was picked as Prefect. And it worked, because it would be somthing that he himself, would be unable to see!
The entire paragraph about the swimming worked so well. The charectarization of all four of them worked so well. It's exactly like what you would imagine them to be like!
Sirius was especially amazing around these parts. You highlighted his immaturaty, and slight harshness. But you also made clear his loyalness, and how good a friend he was! It was amazing. Although I suppose you would be good at writing him by now *wink wink*
Well anyway! I love it! Lol
Author's Response: Thanks Lexxyyy, I had a long big think over this chapter because of James' Boggart so I'm pleased you liked it. I like the swimming scene too because it's lighthearted and I so wish I was one of the girls at the lakeside. I'm glad you can see that Peter's not a cliche anymore. He's not just a tagalong because Sirius and James trusted him implicitly but there's so little to go on in the books. Next Chapter is The Bowtruckle Challenge and I had fun with it.
Chapter Three has been validated!
Heyyy there, Allie, Love.
This is really rather amazing.
I love all of this story, as I must admit, I do rather adore Harry-with-a-twin storys, and there just aren't enough!
I'm glad you agree...
I love the detail and description of the first part, the dream, although it is a bit odd that a one year old baby remembers all of that.
I also love your characterization of Sanpe. You have him so IC.
I love your story, so update soon missy!
Author's Response: Lol. Lexy, love, it's about time. *snickers*
Yay! I love my story being amazing! *squee*
Ok. Time to be professional again. *holds back laughter*
I believe I already told you about how Alex remembers the dream so well. Remember, it was through aim. Anyway, I should probably make a note of that somewhere before I forget. *hugs Lexy for the reminder*
Severus. Oh what am I going to do about him. I'm surprised you didn't ask about why he openly showed his left arm in chapter two. And the characterization of him, it's hard keeping him IC. It's definitely going to be hard in later chapters, and I mean like in the middle of the story.
I'm going to update as soon as Sarah(chained) gets back to me with chapter three, and then I have to change some stuff that I know doesn't make sense already and then send it back to her. So it's going to be a while. A month, at least.
Love you! *squishes*
I love this. Allie.
I love the way that Alex ( I kinda wanna call her Allie, lol) is so much her own person, instead of just living for Harry, like some fics do it.
I also like the way she has her own relationships and all that.
Well done, my friend.
Author's Response: Lol. Lexy, another review? I was only expecting one! *cherishes(sp?) review*
Once again I'm surprise you didn't say anything about Severus' arm. Then again I was only expecting that one review. *sti;; cherishing(sp?)*
That Allie comment made me laugh, no lie, and she really is her own person. There is so much to Allie that will be revealed that makes her somewhat different from Harry. Ok, that was an odd line.
By relationships I take it you're talking about her attitude towards Sev and how she and Remus are together. Hm. I wonder if you thought I was pairing Alex and Remus together. *questioning look*
Well two reviews just brighten up my day. Maybe they'll keep my cold away.
Arabella is a normal girl, from a normal wizarding family. A worry is constantly sitting on her stomach, though, and soon that worry has to be confirmed.
*Profanity minor, and one incident only*
Ohh! Wow. This was amazing!
I have one small nitpick, ‘Don’t threat, Mistress Arabella.’ Do you mean, don't fret?
Other than that, it was such an amazing portrayal.
My favourite bit was at the start.
'The setting sun darkens as it dies away, framing Fiona’s dark head of curls - I decide that is magic too.'
It makes a slight connection, that you don't need to be able to cast magic, to understand the beauty of it in the real world.
The end, is also brilliant. The 'Olive Figg'. I love how you made the connection from her maiden name to her married one.
The emotions in this story are wonderful. How she's sad, but resigns herself to her fate. Its nice to see that you avoided the general cliche, of just having them upset, still convinced that the letter will come.
I would write a longer review, but i have to go now, so I'm sorry, but I hope this is okay.
All in all, I absolutly loved this story! Well done!
P.S, before I was a 'Puff, I read your Prongs story, that was AMAZING! Although I didnt review it, I wanted you to know!
Author's Response: Thanks, Lexy *waves* And yeah, I did mean 'don't fret' - I don't know how I overlooked that... I haven't read all that many Squib fics, but I've always thought - 'well they have no choice, so they'd just get on with it'. And Arabella's an interesting character to work with - I wish we knew more about her. And you have wrote a long enough review - it doesn't have to be pages to be great! And your review was great XD And I'm pleased you enjoyed Prongs, too. Thanks again!