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a memory guilded in red and gold
beauty guarded and never sold
I keep it with me wherever I go
and I love you still
no matter how a story will unfold
you know I always will
have part of you here
in this souvenir
this sweet Spanish doll

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Visiting the Grave by Charmina

Rated:42 Reviews
Summary: “I’m such a wimp. It’s been two years and I still can’t come here without starting to cry,” he wiped of his face again and then looked down on the ground. “But I just miss you so damn much.” One-shot
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 11/28/04 Title: Chapter 1: Visiting the Grave

Beautifully crafted. My heart wrenched with each new line he said. I thought his characterization was portrayed wonderfully and I do think with all the pain and suffering he's gone through that suicide would be a possibility. Unlikely, but a possibility nonetheless. I loved your style throughout this and how you left the names for the end. Also, your description was fabulous. I hope to see more from you in the future. Thank you for this intriguing one-shot and keep up the great work.

Author's Response: wow, thanks for the great review :)

Faith [In the Hands of a Child] by Seren

Rated: Professors • 34 Reviews
Summary: "Regardless of what God, or Gods, they worship, or even if they don't," whispered Luna dreamily, "everyone prays." Ginny Weasley lies broken and bleeding by her own hand. But her friends and family love her, and they will lead her home. Not a death fic. Rated for graphic self-mutilation... but for a very good cause.
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 12/17/04 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Wow! I'm speechless. This story got to me, probably because I've been through something similiar... Anyway, the wording and feelings Ginny expressed were perfect. Very well summed up. This was my favorite line: They could move past the pain, and suffering, and tomorrow, they would wake with smiles on their faces. Great work, once again! And though I am not religious, I think it gave a good message that even if you are Agnostic, Atheist, Baptist, whatever! There's always something you'll believe in, no matter if it's religiously affiliated or not.

A Day in the Life of Crookshanks by Hermione200

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 49 Reviews
Summary: A Day in the Life of Crookshanks is... just what it sounds like! It is a one-shot story seen from the point of view of my favorate ginger-haired feline, as he spends time in the Gryffindor Common Room.
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 11/28/04 Title: Chapter 1: The Only Chapter in this Story

What a unique point of view for a story! Crookshanks personality is hilarious and refreshing and has attitude. I liked his arrogancy toward Ron, though I thought he could have been a bit nicer. His love for Hermione and the way he refers to her as "my girl" is just the way I think a cat thinks of their owner. How their owner knows all and is their world. And though I'm not a fan of Ron/Hermione, I thought the ending was perfect and very sweet. Great job!

Ultimatum by Marauder

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 66 Reviews
Summary: Sirius has loved Remus for a couple of years, and James is sick of watching his best friend suffer. So he gives him an ultimatum: Sirius has a few hours to tell Remus, or else James will. Fic also includes Peter, McGonagall, Andromeda, Tonks as a little kid, Regulus, and cameos from Filch and Lily.
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 12/21/04 Title: Chapter 1: Ultimatum

Wow! Greaty exposition of characters and plot. I loved how Sirius gradually told Remus, through the letter and everything. This was well-crafted and well-written. Stories like this are few and far, especially in slash-verse! I loved Lupin's reaction, even though I thought it was a bit OOC. Otherwise, awesome!

Harry Potter and the Study of Legilimency by Rita Writer

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 173 Reviews
Summary: Many new things will be learned this year, but the one thing Harry Potter knows not, is the one thing he wishes to know; What happens when one touches the forbidden grounds behind the veil? Set in Harry's sixth year. Please Read and Review!
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 02/21/05 Title: Chapter 2: Birthday at Grimmauld

The memories in the Pensieve and everything was very good. I really liked the characterization in the part. I liked that Harry could enjoy himself for once on his birthday, though I have seen this done in many fictions; yours is one of the better ones I have seen.

I loved Lupin's comments and that he's a part of this story. Most sixth year fictions seem to forget that he's around—well, the ones I've read. Kudos.

There were a few typos and grammatical/spelling mistakes, but it didn't take much away from the story. Do you a beta reader? Or have considered one? They are very good for seeing typos and helping with errors and such. You can bounce ideas off of them as well.

Though this part seemed very much a filler chapter, is was simple and heart-warming. The interaction between everyone was beautifully played out and flowed. Great job. Onto to chapter three, for me.

Author's Response: Actually I posted a topic for a beta reader in the forums but on one repsonded. :(

Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 02/21/05 Title: Chapter 1: Return Owl

Nicely done. I like the way this is progressing though there are a few continuation errors.

Harry's feelings are completely understandable and very in-character. I especially loved his thoughts toward the end. Almost everyone was in-character though I thought one of Lupin's lines was a bit OC, but not horribly noticeable. I also thought Moody was well-done in this part, too. Good job.

Hmm... The O.W.L. results were not what I expected, but then again, most of the time I'm baffled by them. Also, though Harry has N.E.W.T. level classes now, I believe they would get their schedule with everyone else, during breakfast at Hogwarts, and the times were a bit off. The schedule seemed very American.

Overall, I found this quite enjoyable. The description was very good, though I would love to see more. Now onto to chapter two.


Rated: Reviews
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 02/10/05 Title: Chapter 1: Left Behind

Wow! What a beginning! It flowed well and the articulation of the words really followed through to me. Ginny's feelings are portrayed well and very in-character, as are Harry's. You also have very good description, very crips and concise and not overly done. Not only is the description perfect, but the emotions felt between Ginny and Harry in those last lines are momentous. They aren't saturated in teen angst and drama.

All in all, I say this is beautifully crafted. Though, I must admit I am not a Harry/Ginny shipper; since this is well-written, I can put my bias aside and really enjoy this. (I have nothing to say but good things.)

Author's Response: Thank-you. I'm an H/G evangelist... I WILL convert all non-believers! ;) (at least for this story, though I've been entertaining some Ginny/Draco ideas lately!)


Rated: Reviews
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 01/26/05 Title: None

Good beginning. I loved how everything flowed, especially the dialogue. So Harry and Ginny and Ron and Hermione are keeping their relationships secret except for from each other? Interesting turn out. It seems a bit OOC to me, but I believe it will bring some interesting conflict later on.

For such a short first chapter, you gave a lot of information subtely. Well done; not many people can pull that off. So here's what I got:

Harry and Hermione are head boy and girl; though cliche, I'm looking forward to seeing what kind of spin you put on it. It's been two years since Sirius' death and now Lupin's missing. Intriguing. I'm anticipating as to how you're going to weave this into your plot. I hope he's okay, and that the Order has success in finding our werewolf friend!

Though the story had a few grammatical/spelling and canon errors, it's nothing that a beta can't fix. So far this story has caught my interest. Keep up the good work. :)

Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 01/26/05 Title: None

I agree; it was a bit mushy in the beginning, but it did get interesting. I liked the conversations between the kids and the places they went to. (Though, the Three Broomsticks is in Hogsmeade, not Diagon Alley.) I was also glad to see appearances from Fred, George, Hagrid, and Angelina (which was a pleasant surprise!). So George and Angelina? Fascinating development.

Though I hoped for a bit more insight, the dialogue was a good change-of-pace and quite entertaining.

The only inquiries I have are how long have the couples been dating? If they have just begun dating, I feel they're moving a bit fast, but if it's been for a while, then I have no issues. And the other thing I'd like to touch upon is do not forget that not everything is gold and galleons; there's also knuts and sickles, and galleons are the most expensive of the three. ;)

Anyway, another great chapter, and now moving on to the next. :)

Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 01/26/05 Title: None

Hmm... The plot shined through very well in this chapter, and I must say my interests have been piqued a bit. I'm definitely wondering if Ginny's okay and why McGonagall asked them to accompany her to the hospital wing; though, it's probably quite obvious, you can never know for sure.

I have many questions, like why the Weasley's house was targeted and such, but I assume we'll be finding that out soon.

Though, I do not agree that Ron and Hermione would stop Harry or themselves from going back to the Burrow to get Ginny; I do find that Hermione's plan of action to go to Hogsmeade was definitely Hermione-like, especially how she divulged to who(m)ever was listening that they were staying right there.

Very intricate plot. I hope to see soon how all of this will come together.


Rated: Reviews
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 12/18/04 Title: None

Great story you have going here, SilverShadow. Your writing style is unique and fascinating, and your description is very good. I loved how it was through Remus' eyes and am floored at how well you portrayed his father (a very interesting person, might I add) through them.

I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter of this. Though, I have a few suggestions:

1. To make it easier on the eyes, due to the way this site is formatted, you might want to shorten your paragraphs. Always make sure the paragraph only pertains to one subject.

2. I know that spell check doesn't always catch everything, but make sure to read your chapter thoroughly beforehand. And don't worry, I didn't see many errors, just a couple. ; )

3. There were few run-on sentences/ sentences that needed commas.

All of these are easily fixable and other then that, this story is great. I, especially, love the plot line and the way the story is moving. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: I figured it out after I sent it in. I figured that if it didn' t get accepted I would fix the sentences. Don't worry I'm fining a way to make it clearer and the sentences won't be too long.

Enough For An Angel by Seren

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 27 Reviews
Summary: "Even when I was little, I was slow. I started walking months later than I was supposed to, and I spent the first three years of my life babbling nonsense that no one but I could understand. It was a well known fact - Gregory Goyle was stupid. " Goyle has always known he was stupid - until someone told him there was a different name for it. Written for the Special Needs, Special Love Project @ Project Aparecium. Not a shippy fic.
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 12/16/04 Title: Chapter 1: Enough For An Angel

A very profound and extremely well written piece, Seren. I loved your portrayal of Goyle and Luna, and found them to be very much IC. Luna's persistence was almost like an investigation to figure out Goyle; she's definitely the type not to judge a book by its cover, and that perspective in itself made this story great. Goyle's struggle, I believe, outlined his Slytherin ambition for normality, and his drawings gave cunning the spotlight it needed. You have given me a new outlook on Gregory Goyle, even if it isn't canon, and have done justice to your Special Needs Project. Give yourself a pat on the back, Seren. You deserve it!

The Simple Evolution of a Faceless Butterfly by Seren

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 21 Reviews
Summary: In the evolution of a person, our personality grows, shifts, dies and is reborn again. Our views morph and grow, like a butterfly from its cocoon. But there's a price to pay for everything. Evolution is always painful. Contains Blaise/Hermione and Neville/Padma. Pre-HBP.
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 12/23/04 Title: Chapter 1: Avalanche

As usual, your work is inspiring. At this rate you're going to convert me into a Blaise/Hermione shipper!

The interaction between Blaise and Hermione is plausible and her crumbling friendship with Harry and Ron is understandable. It's interesting how it's the school against this small group, specifically the narrow-minded houses versus the budding friendship of the interhoused group.

I am loving your portrayal of Dean in this. It's like he has a heart of gold! Might I add that I loved the allusions to the butterfly and how well it's been woven into the story.

I am definitely looking forward to the next chapter of this!


Rated: Reviews
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 01/28/05 Title: None

Wow. That was a great beginning; very descriptive and eloquent (as mala so kindly put it). The paragraphs and everything about this chapter flowed well, and you definitely have a way with words. Nothing was overly done or overly descriptive, which is hard to come by. I commend you on your skills.

You've captured Harry and Mrs. Figg's personalities very well. Though, we have not much to go with Mrs. Figg, it's easy to tell you have taken much consideration into your characterization of the batty, old woman.

I can tell you truthfully I am not a big fan of sixth year fictions, but this story has definitely caught my interest. I'm going to be patiently waiting for an update on this. ::begins to twiddle thumbs:: I can already feel this is going to be an awesome story, so I feel no need to say 'keep up the great work.'

Author's Response: The characterization of Mrs. Figg is thanks almost entirely to my wonderful beta AlexisTaylor. I am very glad you liked this! Next chapter we see a bit of Dudley--there’s someone who I’m not looking forward to keeping IC. Thanks for the wonder, in depth review.

The Sun by Seren

Rated:9 Reviews
Summary: Each of them had a reason to leave. There were lovers, and mothers, and siblings waiting for them in the safety of their home. They had goals, and dreams, and wants yet to be fulfilled. Everyone has a reason to leave- but everyone has a reason to stay. Il sole si leva anche.
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 02/17/05 Title: Chapter 1: The Sun

Well, I'm glad to see you finally post this damn story. You must have been at least satisfied with this draft to have actually posted it, and I must say, it turned out well enough. Anyway, onto feedback, which I'm giving a small critique for each.

Seamus: This was probably my favorite one out of the series of vignettes. The repetition and his thoughts really set the tone in this. I especially loved his series of musings about all the things that could go wrong. The line "If only things were ever that simple" triggered an incomprehensible emotion within me. It's such a simple line and so bothersome and thought-provoking. I couldn't count how many times that thought alone has crossed my path. Anyway, Seamus was a perfect person to begin this with.

Arthur: His part was very fitting. The line about him being "one who cherished peace above all other things, but love" about killed me. God, what a fitting line. Damn you, Seren. You're making actually feel. I loved the line about "his Molly," too. How sweet! (What have you done to me, woman? I'm saying cutsie ootsie stuff now.) Well, lovely vignette.

Remus: Of course, my second favorite... hehehe. Yet again, you about murdered my emotional factor with him remembering the good ol' days. It's so sad, especially this being his second war. His thoughts of this second war were very well-done. "Why was he doing this?" and all those lines really tugged at my heart strings. Poor Remus.

Snape: The best written part, I thought, was definitely Snape. It made a lot of sense to me that you made him best friends in school with Rabastan. What a feeling to have to betray your best friend and having a two-sided wish: either Rabastan coming to the good side, or he not having bothered with the good. This piece was very, very well-done. Wow.

The Students: Though I loved this along with the rest of the story, it didn't get through to me like the others, and I remember you having trouble with this before. I can't pinpoint why I can't feel as emotional with this as the others, but it was still well-done. Though, I absolutely loved those last three lines. Beautiful.

Neville: This part at first was quite heartbreaking, and it's a good thing you put "uncharacteristically" because it was uncharacteristic for Neville, though understandable. To have the woman who made your parents insane at your mercy, is quite a big thing to handle and grasp. I loved that he didn't kill her, though. I don't think I would have either. As you put, "he was no killer," and that line is so true to Neville. His parents would not have wanted him to do it.

That's courage.

Luna: This was the most significant scene, to me. Luna losing faith really hit home, but her gaining it back absolutely tore a hurricane through my home. (I remember you have Servabo Fidem in your signature weeks before you wrote this.) Even in darkness, Luna is an optimist. (I wish I could say the same for myself, being a self-proclaimed pessimist.)

Ginny: Wonderful ending! ::claps:: I feel I've just finished watching a movie. Ginny's thoughts were utterly heart-breaking, how she heard Ron's voice and believed he wasn't coming. It's so human. I almost believed her until Ron came bursting like a knight in shining armor to save her. And as I said at Scriptor's Altus, that ending line "The sun also rises" reminds me a lot of Hemingway's book, one of the few novels I liked of his. It's also a great title to use because it builds up to this point.

Whew! That took me a while. Anyway, overall, I loved this series of vignettes. Well-done and masterfully portrayed. I think I outdid myself with this review. Time for me to rest, LOL. Anyway, lovely as usual, Seren. Great job.


Rated: Reviews
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 06/05/05 Title: None

As I read the chapter, I was a tad apprehensive about your character, Juliet, but, by the end, found her somewhat enjoyable. The chapter was an easy read, and flowed beautifully. Everyone seemed within canon boundaries, and I loved the trio and Juliet's conversation on the train. Wonderful start.

Author's Response: Thanks, Kay. Glad to see you're reading my story!

Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 06/05/05 Title: None

This chapter was interesting. Though Juliet is a bit of a Mary-Sue, she's not an exact replica of one. She's actually human, and you portray that well. The chapter went along nicely, though through the middle to the end I felt there was a lot of information given in too little time. Other than that and a couple grammatical errors, I found this chapter as enjoyable as the first. I'm intrigued by her curse.

Author's Response: I had fun making up her curse, as well as her entire character. And thanks for the insight as well!

Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 06/06/05 Title: None

I found this chapter to be very dramatic. Juliet's curse is intriguing, and quite painful. (The curse is like a physical, extreme version of empathy.) I admit that I found a couple of the lines a bit cheesy and slightly out-of-character (like Madam Pomfrey shouting for Dumbledore in the fireplace, in the hospital wing...). But otherwise, the chapter was good. Moving onto chapter four now... :)

Author's Response: I'm glad to see you're reading the rest of my fic. :D And Madam Pomfrey's shouting because she, of course, has never encountered the curse before, and doesn't really know what to do. I suppose all in the medical field, Healer or nurse, have to know instinctively they can't panic, but she goes a bit extreme in this one. However, I can fix it a bit. Thanks for your help!

Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 06/06/05 Title: None

I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. I loved the interaction between Juliet and Hermione, and the introductions in the dormitory. A couple lines I found a bit questionable, or came off a bit too strong (like Juliet's insult to Draco). I hope that Juliet's being advanced to sixth year. As someone already mentioned, it's too convenient. Anyway, a wonderfully light-hearted chapter.

Author's Response:


I'm tempted to leave it like that, but... you know. Well, I had hoped that Juliet wouldn't come off that strong, but then again, she's learned to build up her defenses. She's also a bit overprotective of her new-found friends - she doesn't keep them for long. Thank you so much for your kind help. Hope you read more!


Rated: Reviews
Reviewer: Lycanthropist Signed
Date: 02/17/05 Title: None

Brilliant! Your imagery, writing, and vocabulary are imepecable and leave me with a sense of longing. This is incredibly written and Harry's thoughts are so simple, yet profound; thoughts that enter our own musings each time we want to give up-quit. The build-up of suspense, from beginning to end, had me bouncing on the balls of my heels.

Needless to say, I have no bad con. crit. for this. It's deep and masterfully flows.

Author's Response: Yay! I know that sounds anti-climactic after such a wonderful review, but really that's what immediately popped into my child-like brain. This short story gave me the opportunity to really dig into how I would feel in Harry's shoes. I think I should start working on another short piece. You've inspired me. Thank you.

Author's Response: Yay! I know that sounds anti-climactic after such a wonderful review, but really that's what immediately popped into my child-like brain. This short story gave me the opportunity to really dig into how I would feel in Harry's shoes. I think I should start working on another short piece. You've inspired me. Thank you.

Author's Response: Yay! I know that sounds anti-climactic after such a wonderful review, but really that's what immediately popped into my child-like brain. This short story gave me the opportunity to really dig into how I would feel in Harry's shoes. I think I should start working on another short piece. You've inspired me. Thank you.