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Real name: Carole
Member Since: 05/10/08
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What can I say. I'm a grown woman living in London but I'm obsessed with a teenage wizard and his friends. Am I mad? Probably Do I care? Hell no!
EDIT: Grown? Um, probably not

For my first foray into the realms of fanfiction I've chosen to write about the Marauders. I'll always stick fairly closely to canon as I think JK knows best. Although I've enjoyed reading about other ships I, personally, don't think I could write with conviction about Ginny/Crabbe or Hermione/Mclaggan relationships.

EDIT: ha ha ha ha ha - How I have changed! I'm now firmly in the rare-pair, SSP, and things that aren't quite conventional camp, although I still loves me some James/Lily.

My second chaptered fic (Apparently Asleep) has started a love affair with Tonks/Remus and confirmed my obsession for all things Sirius. *sigh*

I am indebted to Terri (mudbloodproud) for being a great beta and all round amazing person. If it hadn't been for her encouragement I would have thrown in the towel many months ago.

EDIT: I have made a lot of wonderful friends during my past three years on MNFF, including (in no particular order) Natalie, Kara, Hannah/Bob, Jess, Gina, Lea, Lori, Julia, Minna, Emmahhhh, and the fantabulous BB.

I hope Mugglenet and you enjoy reading my words as much as I've enjoyed writing them. Huge thank-you to my niece, Amanda, for being one of the first to catch the Harry Potter bug and nagging me into reading them.


I’ve written a variety of stories, so here is them arranged in categories. Some are cross- referenced. So a James/Lily may appear in Marauder or Canon Romance

Marauder
A Second Chance
Contemplating Lilies
Dancing Queen
First Date Disaster
Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand
It Takes a Wolf to Prank a Dog
Juggling
Learning to Fly
March Madness
O.W.L.s, Quidditch and the Added Distraction of Sirius Black
Peace in Heaven
Ribbons, not Strings
Sixth Time's the Charm
Thank you for your time, Professor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Sum of the Whole
Veils
Who's That Girl?
Wormtail on the Hogwarts Express



Canon Romance
'i'before 'e' (Percy/Audrey)
A Prize Above Rubies (Isla Black/Bob Hitchens)
Acorns (Bill/Fleur)
Apparently Asleep (Remus/Tonks)
Birthday Girl (George/Angelina)
Bound in the Beating of Each Other’s Hearts (Narcissa/Lucius)
Coup de Foudre (Bill/Fleur)
Dancing Queen (James/Lily)
First Date Disaster (James/Lily)
Five weeks (Remus/Tonks)
Forces of Nature (Ron/Hermione)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
In The Stars (Draco/Astoria)
Key of the Door (Ron/Hermione)
Kissing the Joy as it Flies (Seamus/Lavender)
March Madness (James/Lily)
Not Quite Perfect (Bill/Fleur)
Reconnaissance (Remus/Tonks)
Sixth Time’s the Charm (James/Lily)
Snowball Fights (Teddy/Victoire)
Until Death (Eaters) Do Us Part (Draco/Astoria)
Veils (James/Lily)
You Dance Divinely (George/Angelina)



Non (or rather tweaked) Canon (apart from one story, these don’t break any canon.)

Better than Chocolate (Charlie/Tonks)
Heat of Life (Harry/Katie)
Her Tomorrows (Harry/Parvati)
High (Scorpius/Lily)
Lavender, blue- A Gryffindor True (Lavender/Blaise)
Love At First Strike (Angelina/Terry)
Mirrors (Charlie/Penelope)
Misperception (Oliver/Cedric/Daphne)
Orphans of the Storm (Seamus/Parvati/Dean)
Passion Among the Primroses (Arthur/Mafalda)
Predictions of Love (Gilderoy/Sybil)
Ribbons, not Strings (Remus/Rosmerta)
Shrouds (Hermione/Draco)
Snapdragons (Charlie/OC)
Stars or Carousels (James/Dominique)
Summer’s Heat (Sirius/OC)
Swans (Mollyjnr/OC)
Teenage Witch (Charity/Myron Wagtail )
The Happy Couple (Harry/Ginny, Blaise/Lavender)
The Only One (Lavender/Blaise Teddy/Victoire)
The Untrodden Path (Draco/Hannah)
Where We Started From (Dean/Ginny)



Same sex Pairings
Apple-bobbing ( Lisa/Susan)
Close Your Eyes (Hermione/Lavender)
Drowning, not Waving (Oliver/Cedric)
Eyes That Know Me (Scorpius/Hugo)
Forbidden Colours (Tracey/Demelza)
Fracture (Theo/Justin)
Monochrome (Sirius/Remus)
The Dance We Do (Bellatrix/Amelia)
The Hat that Thinks it’s a Chair (Justin/Theo)
Truth Or Dare (Cormac/Zacharias)



Humour
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
Lockhart, Sprout and Two Smoking Goblets
Passion Among the Primroses
Predictions of Love
The Bacchus Book
Vampire - Ghost Child!

Historical
A Prize Above Rubies
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
An Outstretched Hand
Shadows Deep

Others (General, D/A, Post Hogwarts, Next Gen)
A Tangled Web (D/A)
All in the Genes (NG)
Chasing the Scoop! (Post Hogwarts)
Christmas on the Outside (General/Trio era)
Dean Thomas and the Reiver Curse (Post Hogwarts)
Diavol (Remus Trio Era)
Every Breath You Take (Post Hogwarts/Next Gen)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
Friends in Unlikely Places (Post Hog. Hermione)
Growing Old Disgracefully (Post Hog)
High (NG)
Lavender, blue (Trio Era)
Mere Wisps of Light (Post Hog. Draco fic)
Muggles, Magic and Misconceptions (Next Gen)
My Funny Valentine (Post Hogwarts)
Staring into the Fire (Trio Era)
The Waiting Game (D/A)
Whispers from the Past (Next Gen)



Mysteries
The Foolhardy Boys and Parvati, too
Who’s that Girl?
Xanthe Interrupted
Zeitgeist



Poetry
Askew
As They Watch
Beyond Beseeching
Celestina's Songbook: Christmas Edition, Volume 1
Cold Dreams
Draco's Journey
Enslaved
Fairytale of Hogwarts
Flying High
Forever France
Frozen Silence
Hexed!
Hey, brother
I Believed in Lily Evans
Master Barty Regrets
Phoenix Flames
Queen of My Heart
Sirius, Baby
The Daydream Pedlar's Song
The Four
The Labyrinth Mind
Unreconciled

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A Splendid Fate by hestiajones
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: One failed photograph, two halved souls, and the numerous, marvellous machinations of destiny.



This story is a multi-functional product of four days' continuous typing and lack of sleep. It serves an entry for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion and a standby Birthday Present for Julia/the opaleye. More importantly, it marks my return to fanfiction after two months' hiatus, because that is kind of inhumanly long.

Thanks to Kara for reading the Prologue and motivating me, and Carole for Chipping-on-the-Wye.

DISCLAIMER: J.K.Rowling, I love you for giving me the HP universe, but you are not me and you definitely did not write this.



Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 14642 Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/15/12 Updated: 01/23/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/17/12 Title: Chapter 5: April 2008

If the people of Chipping-on-the-Wye could stomach ever-blooming pansies and inexplicable heat waves, then she was pretty sure they could live with a nose that had mysteriously gone crooked.

Hahahahahahahahahaha

and just as I'm laughing, you do this to me.

Perhaps, she had been trained too well to hear the noise of other people’s lovemaking from afar; the sound of ecstatic moaning coming from the next room was unmistakable. She halted.

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

The lovebirds you heard were probably Dean and his girlfriend,” Yeah, sorry, we were a bit noisy.

and hahahahahhah - the smut is incredible. OOO-ER!

Sorry, incoherence reigns here. I need to ask a sensible question regarding the opening. I really liked the inventivelness of her talking to Terry - although I understand it's not actually Terry, but part of her ... um ... mind/psyche/subconscious - what have you, so ... why Terry? I loved that part a lot and I'm not questioning the subject choice but I'd love to hear your reasoning behind it.

I said inventive just now. I think this whole story is inventive and fresh and original and I hope it wins :) ~Carole~

Author's Response: The scene with Terry is a mirror of the interview scene. Eloise has shut her past up so resolutely that I imagine she'd find it hard to open up, even to herself. That is why I had her conjuring Terry's image. I also tried to make the parallel clearer with the line "begin at the beginning", which is how Terry started the interview. :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/17/12 Title: Chapter 6: May 2008 - Epilogue

Gemma Davies was at it again, shrieking in ecstasy as though the devil himself was about. Lucky Gemma.

Ahhh. perfect Epilogue. It ties a few things up and yet leaves me thinking about the characters long after I click away from the story. You tied it up well and Gemma had even more sex - YAY! I do like the way you've given other POVs here, so everyone gets an ending of sorts.

Ah, you've taken two characters that I really didn;t think much about before and given them life. Thank you.

Lovely story and now going to favourites so I don't forget it. ~Carole~

Author's Response: <33333333333 for following it to the end and leaving such enthusiastic reviews! It makes me want to continue writing. :) I think I will, after a nap lol. Thanks for all the reviews, love and support!

 

Beyond The Sea by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Escaping the overwhelming revelry of another miserable New Year's Eve, Draco Malfoy finds himself drawn to an old seaside resort from his childhood. He meets an unexpected ally there, and the shore soon becomes his escape from life, a place where he can be free of his past. Little did he know that it would also hold the key to his future.

This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.

Categories: Draco/Other Character Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 5422 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/16/12 Updated: 01/16/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 01/18/12 Title: Chapter 1: Somewhere, waiting for me

GINAAAAAA! this is so heartwarming. You have really drawn such a lovely picture of Luna and the way she redeems people in her startling innocence and clarity. I'm not keen on Luna fics as a rule, but you really made her much more than the ditz.

I did think he'd have recognised her earlier. In my mind she has a distinctive voice - plus she was held at the Manor (I loved the way she didn't hold that against him) - so I wonder if he should have thought there was something familiar about the voice, even if he couldn't see her face and eyes.

Another minor nit-pick (sorry). A few of the creatures you mentioned should be capitalised - Veela, Hippogryff, Plimpy, and I'd add Mooncalf because it's a creature I think you've invented.

I loved the ending (good call to reclaim your canon card - heh heh). Luna and Draco wouldn;t really have worked, but I love the fact that she was there to give him the nudge to change.

Back to the beginning. Draco's life was so well written. Present tense - I'm struggling atm, but this was effortless. I adored his POV; you caught him so well!

Loved Astoria at the end, but then I adore her anyway. Lovely story ~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole!! A belated thank you for the lovely review. I'm glad you liked Luna here when you don't often enjoy reading her, that means I did okay by her. I'll have to nip in and change those capitals someday, although I did not invent the mooncalf! As for Draco recognizing her, I see your point (you and Natalie) and maybe someday I'll tweak that too. I didn't really think of it until I was quite a ways into the story and thought I'd found a decent way to address it. I can see how mentioning it earlier would help, but I can also see Draco's guilt keeping him quiet. Or maybe he didn't have much contact with her when she was held there. Maybe his parents shielded him from that. Haha how's that for a coverup? I think I had some half-cocked answer for Natalie as well, lol! Ah well, can't win them all. Am still glad the present tense didn't bug you and that Astoria got me my canon card back. And I thank you once more for the review!! ~Gina :)

 

Testimony by Ginny Weasley Potter
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Sometimes, things happen. Things that you don’t want to look back at: things you never want to face again. But sometimes, the events of the past just present themselves before you unexpectedly, throwing themselves at you and threatening to haunt you forever…

So what will Hugo Weasley do, when he is faced with one such situation? What is the right option: flight or fight? And most importantly, does Hugo even have a choice?

This is Ginny Weasley Potter of Hufflepuff, writing for the Great Hall Cotillion.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash, Strong Profanity

Word count: 3020 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/16/12 Updated: 01/19/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 01/21/12 Title: Chapter 1: Testimony

Helllooo.

Hmm, so my Poozy-Darls writing slash and Professors. I wasn't totally sure I believed my eyes - ha ha. Anyhow, I was intrigued and I also have a sneaky regard for Scugo (don;t tell Natalie that though) despite pairing Scorp with Lily.

First impression is that your 'smut' is very good. The rawness and immediacy are excellent and I really felt how intense it was between them. I wanted this to work out between them, but ... well ... it wasn't going to be.

for he’d be pre-warned about the, he would fine her right in the pool in front of him, entwined around Malfoy as the two of them moved vigorously in the water, completely naked. Pooja, this line doesn;t make sense. I think you mean 'them' not 'the' and 'find' not 'fine'. I'm also unclear as to the structure or I'd try and rewrite, but I think you need to fiddle with it a little.

“It’s about time you move on from it.” I think this should be 'moved' and not move.

As far as the story goes, I was interested in how this case had thrown them back together and the awkwardness over the cup of tea was excruciatingly good. But I did think Scorpius flipped a little quickly. I think it would have been better if they'd met again, say this had been spread over a few days, so that Scorpius going from 'I love Rosie and you need to move on' to 'Hugo I can't forget that night and I'm gay' didn't seem quite so rushed.

UGHH, and Hugo's advice sucks (this isn;t your fault - ha ha) Telling Scorpius to make it work with Rose just isn;t going to happen. Even if Scorpius doesn;t end up with Hugo, there's no way in the world that he's going to remain happy with Rose. He'll end up chasing other men and both will be incredibly happy. It's far better for her in the long run that they end it now. *sigh*.

Hmm, the modifying of memories. At this point I got very uncomfortable. Sorry, but this is such a gross invasion of privacy - letting a girl think you've slept with them and a boy forget you've had sex - it's akin to giving someone a date-rape drug. I really really have to question Hugo's morality here. He won't let Scorpius come clean to Rose because he won;t do that to his sister, and yet he was quite prepared to cover up his sexual indiscretions. I shivered at that bit - sorry - but it's so morally wrong, imo.

So, yes, I liked smut the smut in your story (heh heh), and the tortuous longing that both felt even after all those years. The reason they got together to chat was interesting, and didn't feel at all contrived. I liked these parts a lot, but I'm afraid the modified memories put me off, somewhat. (And now I feel mean :( - sorry)

~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole!!! :D Thank you so much for the long, descriptive review! :) And yes, Poozy-Darls has turned into Sleazy-Darls these days. :p So I've never written hardcore slash and I thought I must give it a try this one time. Of course, I loved doing it and will definitely try out Scugo again (do you know any nice Scugo fics? I have to read some now!) As for smut, three entries in the Smut-a-thon were mine. :p Actually when I wrote all the sex, I felt totally awful for Scugo because I knew they weren't about to get together, though they were perfect for each other. I'm so glad you liked the smut! That was the part which worried me the most. O.o I went through that particularly weird line and corrected it-- it was mostly typos, and I somehow managed to overlook all of it. I did that other correction too. Thanks for pointing those out to me! :) I took your your advice for most things, actually, I've corrected Hugo's morally incorrect decision with a better explanation too. I didn't realise the moral situation when I first wrote the piece! O.o Thank you so much, Carole, for helping me out there! As for Scorpius flipping, I tried to take that pointer from you too, but somehow I wasn't able to expand the timeline without any awkwardness. So I've inserted a couple of dialogues in between with Hugo saying, 'didn't you ask me to move on' and Scorpius awkwardly admitting his feelings after a couple of questions. It sounds better, I think. Actually, I remember something that came up while writing the story itself, which prevented me from spanning it over a few days. I just can't remember what that was... anyway, I've tried to correct that part as much as possible. That said, I'm glad the story intrigued you and that the smut impressed you (yay!). I also squeed and kinda did a jig when I saw the review. Thank you so much for your input, Carole! This one made my day! Really! *huggles*

 

Something Strange by hestiajones
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Louis hadn't quite expected to fall in love with him, but he did.



A gift for my mistress, lucca4. Also, an entry for the Inaugural GH Cotillion Challenge.

Disclaimer: This is not J.K.Rowling. It'd be cool if she shipped Luna's son with Fleur's, though.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 2236 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/16/12 Updated: 01/16/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 01/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Okay, my heart dropped when I saw this was second person. I really can't like it as a POV because it spins me outside of the story instead of drawing me in, but what was so brilliant here, was that you swicthed to first person and so my interest didn't stray.

This is a gorgeous story. I love the initial set up. Lysander is wonderful. He is so Luna like in his confidence, and yet so unlike her in that he can face reality. I love seeing him through Louis' eyes.

Psst - I love the sex in this. Just enough to be hot, and yet tangled up with wondrous emotions. Gah, will they last.?

Hmm, this is odd, I don;t have much canon for Louis yet, although he;'s nagging at me. I need to get some before this becomes my reality - eeeeeep. Natalie, hestiajonesperson, you are ebil, but fabulous.

Well done! ~Carole~

Author's Response: Haha! I decided on second person as I am writing for Ariana, but I thought the first person was better for getting more intimate with him in the memories. :D Thanks for the review!

 

Battlefields by Sapphire at Dawn
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: Past Featured StorySummary: Christmas 1976. Lily Evans is standing in the shadow of a war that for the first time is affecting her Christmas spirit. A reprieve from the gloom comes in the form of a Muggle boy from her hometown, someone who the war cannot touch and is unaffected by the fear it causes. However, dark times lie ahead, and Lily begins to realise that there are some things she just cannot escape, however hard she tries.

This came joint first in the December Great Hall Challenge! Thank you to the judges!

Also nominated for Best Marauder Story in the QSQs! Thank you!


Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Violence

Word count: 9484 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/19/12 Updated: 03/20/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 01/28/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OHHHH, now, I wasn;t sure where this was going to begin with Sarah, and was expecting war filled doom and gloom, or even worse Lily ending up in Snape's arms - (you know how that would make me shudder), but this is good. I was totally surprised by the OC appearing and loved his characterisation. Mark seems to fit rather nicely into Lily's Muggle world and it is refreshing to see her with someone who isn't Snape or James. A good buffer between the pair of them. I particularly liked her recognition that if James had said the line she'd have been irritated beyond compare. Sometimes men just can't win, can they.

Good dtory, Sarah, and am adding to favourites now. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Carole! I could never have Lily ending up in Snape's arms. I don't think I could physically do it. But he pops up again in the next chapter for her to have a good old shout at, and unfortunately, the doom and gloom resurfaces a little. Poor old Lily. Thanks again for reviewing!

 

Summary: For three years, Oliver Wood was an important part of Hermione’s life. He had been there through all the fights, the tears, and the seemingly endless piles of homework. He was her constant when all else fell through.

And now he is leaving.

But how do you say goodbye to the boy who told you what to expect in terms of school and exams, who made your third year bearable, memorable even? Nominated for the 2012 Non-Canon Romance QSQ Award.

Categories: Hermione/Other Character Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 5855 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/22/12 Updated: 01/29/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/03/12 Title: Chapter 1: What the Stories Say

I love missing moments stories, Maple, and what you have here is a story packed with the types of things that could have happened when we weren;t following Harry. Hermione is great here. I love the nervousness when she first arrives at Hogwarts and the terror that she''ll get lost and the way she studied so she wouldn't feel out of place (but she still was alone :( ) I'm glad she had a friend in Oliver, who let's face it is so obsessed with Quidditch he probably needs someone talking to him about other things. (I love him really, you know that.)

And what she saw was both wonderful and absolutely terrifying. In that moment, she saw something in his eyes that she had never thought she’d see. It looked as if he wanted to kiss her.

Gahh, such unresolved tension there, but she's so young and scared and ... he wouldn;t have done it in front of everyone, but that was such a lovely moment. My favourite, I think, in the story.

I do think there were places where the dialogue took over a little. I know you were going through the books, and you did so very effectively, but sometimes I thought there was too much talking. (only a little, though)
,br> You retold the events very well. I had to check some things because I'd totally forgotten that she'd got on a broom as well when they were after the key. I'm too used to playing the PC game where it's just Harry - LOL.

nit pick“I heard that you, Ron, and Harry managed to cpture Flitwick’s key. By flying.” (capture)

Good luck in the challenge. This is a lovely story about friendship that could blossom into something more, but hasn't yet. I'm rather glad you resisted the temptation to turn it into a full romance, but still left the option for them to take up at a later date. Well done ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Carole. I definately think that this is one of the sotries I was most happy with, for sure. I can definately see that dialogue does become a little too dialoguy. Definately something I will work on as I continue to write. ACK! how did I not notice the capture thing?? Thanks again! Maple

 

Nothing More by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: James Potter shares a moment with one of his best friends the night before his wedding.

This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 2562 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/23/12 Updated: 01/23/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 01/25/12 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Oh .... Gina, this is so so beautiful. I had my doubts because I know you were really struggling at one point, but this is so in keeping with their characters, and fits canon, and ... and ... and ... it's just lovely.

I love the simple pleasure they get in each others' company, the banter and ease they feel. And there's no bitterness, at all, (or I don't sense that) from Remus that James has moved on. I suspect that Remus has moved on, too, and yet there's a part of both of them which will be connected to water and the lake and everything wonderful and bright about Hogwarts.

How do you do it, make me cry a little with such a great story?

Okay, sorry, but I have a minor nit-pick.

There will fewer late nights at the pub, fewer midnight runs with the stag and the dog, fewer times spent with just him and not all four of them.

First, it should be 'will be' but also, this is confusing. James is thinking this, but he's saying he's going to run 'with' the stag and the dog. He's the stag. So you either need to change it to 'the wolf, rat and dog' or change 'with' to between - or something.

Anyway, that in no way at all detracts from such a beautiful story. Very touching, very bittersweet. *sigh* I have to go to work now, and all I want to do is curl up and shed a few tears over the loss of the Marauders *sob*

You wondrous witch. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank so (very late) for such an amazing review, Carole! I'm so glad it worked for you. I barely remember why I struggled with it now - I deleted what was pretty much a completely different story. It turned out rather well in the end, though. It is sad, to think of these sorts of things between them and then realize what happens later on. Very bittersweet, as you said. Sorry to make you cry. And yes, that line is confusing so someday I'll fix it, lol. Thanks again for the lovely review, it still makes me squee! ~Gina :)

 

To Kill for Her by h_vic
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: 'You'd die for her. I see it in the way you look at her. You'd kill for her. You wouldn't do that for me, would you?'

It ought to be a rhetorical question, but for Michael Corner suddenly it isn't.

This is h_vic of Hufflepuff writing for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 1523 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
01/23/12 Updated: 01/26/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 01/28/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I wasn't going to read this. Nothing against your stories, Hannah, which are always a joy to read (so well-written) but because it features Tracey and I'm writing her as well for the same challenge - HA! Anyway, I have started and am in two minds. I love the story, it's beautifully written and is well plotted. I also love the back story and your characterisation. The downside is that I'm now thinking 'Oh' at my own story and seething a touch with jealousy. *sigh*

The only bit of characterisation I didn;t like (and this isn;t your fault because this is your Tracey) is this line-

You never stopped loving her. I don't mind. Really, I don't. I understand. It's stupid really, but I love you enough that I'm willing to accept the scraps on the off chance that one day you might give me more.'

I'll admit that the reason I don;t like it is because it makes me feel so uncomfortable reading about a woman staying with a man who she not only knows loves another woman more, but tells him that. Has she no pride?! Again, this is your character, so it's not a fault of the story just me getting riled. See - your Tracey has got under my skin.

Oh good lord, what is happening at the end. I'm shivering as I read and re-read. Very well written. I'm creepily intrigued and an on tenterhooks to see where this is going. darn the queue snafu, I do need to read more.

Good luck in the challenge and well done with this. ~Carole~

 

Drowning by iLuna17
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Albus Severus Potter is not like his father. He can't defeat unimaginable evils. No matter how hard he struggled, he couldn't overcome the evil surrounding him.


Mr. Potter, your son was possessed.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mental Disorders

Word count: 157 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/28/12 Updated: 02/11/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/29/12 Title: Chapter 1: Drowning

Oh, this is sad and it tells a story. I love the way you've plotted this with so few words, and yet the tale is there before us.

You've managed to capture the despair that Harry must be feeling at seeing his son like this, and also Albus' helplessness because he can hear what is going on and yet is powerless to prevent what is happening to him.

Oh, I didn;t think he'd die, though. :( - Although that is probably preferable to being stuck in this terrifying limbo.

Lovely poem. I liked the structure, too. It flows very well and it's clear who is talking. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, Carole. :)

I can't imagine what Harry would be like, but I think it would hit him very hard- but the italics POV is the healer . . .

As for the death . . . anything would be preferable. And who's to say it was the actual possession that killed him? ;)Anyways, thank you so much for the lovely review!

Ellie

 

The Highway of Regret by xxbabewithbrainsxx
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary:

The storms are raging

on the rolling sea

And on the highway of regret
*


Lily Luna Potter is tired of sneaking around with her lover, but when she asks him if they can live together, she is unexpectedly rebuked.

Meanwhile, Scorpius Malfoy is forced to choose between his girlfriend and his job, and things take a turn for the worst when she tells him of her decision.

What will happen when the two, by chance, meet under the influence of both liquor and rejection?

*Taken from Make You Feel My Love, written by Bob Dylan (but I prefer the Adele version :D)

This is babewithbrains of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Cotillion Challenge 2012.


:O This story has been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next Generation. Thank you!

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 7026 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/31/12 Updated: 02/23/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/14/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Rolling Sea

OH! This is all different - ha ha. I didn;t expect this at all, Soraya, and am gasping somewhat. In a good way, I promise, it's just that this isn't how I envisaged your story. There's some intrigue (Scorpius had a daughter? Louis' family are dead? Scorp and Rose are together .... NOOOOOOOO) and there's also the tension that we know somehow Scorpius and Lily will end up together - even if it is alcohol induced.

So no, this isn't a crappity fic. It has a decent plot and original characterisation.

Rose however, is a poo and doesn't deserve the love of the fair Malfoy.

~Carole~

Author's Response: CAROLE!!!! I really do <3 you, you know that, right? :D

Once again, you came to my rescue when I was deprived of review!love, and on Valentine's Day too :) Yay to that. And yay to you gasping, lol. The thing is, I had always imagined Scorpius and Lily to get together, somewhat briefly, yes, but it had to fit in with my head canon which means some healthy Scorose and Loulily too. And yeah, Scorpius having a daughter and Louis's family basically all dying except for Victoire are things that I covered more thoroughly in Blood and Roses (not that I'm pimping or anything, and besides, it's Scorose so I don't know if you can stomach it, lol -- though, if you were to read it, I promise it's not too shippy and they aren't even together, really, in the story).

Thank youuuuuuuu, for the lovely review, though Rose does NOT appreciate being called a poo, haha. She's broken up with Malfoy, anyway! Hehehehehe. I don't know if I'll finish this in time for the Cotillion's deadline, but if I don't, I should hopefully post the second (and third, if I decide to) chapter (s) by Marchish.

<3 you lotsly!

 

Ordinary Magic by WeasleyMom
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Past Featured StoryErnie Macmillan has had a difficult year, suffering three losses in two months’ time. Life is dreary, and each day seems far too much like the one before and the one to follow.

But on any regular day, extraordinary things can happen, can change the course of a journey… especially when an obligatory dinner party, a meddling best friend, and a familiar face from the past come together at just the right time.

This is WeasleyMom of Hufflepuff, writing for the Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.

Thanks to Natalie/hestiajones for beta reading this in a quick turnaround.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 3202 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
02/06/12 Updated: 02/06/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/06/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OH OH OH OH OH - Who is it? I neeeeeeed to know who the girl is. My mind is buzzing now. It can't be a Hufflepuff, he'd remember them. Ummmm, Leanne? Lisa? (thinking of 'L's now) Demelza (no she's with Tracey - giggle).

Lorriiiiiiii I love this story. You've captured Ernie brilliantly, but not just him, your Hannah and Neville are so perfect - s right (and not a mention of her tits anywhere - snigger). Seriously, that scene in the kitchen between the three of them had me gulping. Neville was just so fantastic. I think it's the sign of a really good writer that even the minor players can make such an impression, and he was so so good.

Looking at Hannah now, pretty even with the sheen of sweat from cooking visible at her hairline, he wondered why he couldn’t have just fallen in love with her. Life would have been so much simpler in his estimation.

This passage is particularly good. I love how Hannah isn;t perfect, yet he still recognises that she's pretty and, yeah, perhaps it would have been good for him to fall in love with her,but then we wouldn;t have the fabulousness that is Neville and Hannah. - ha ha.

Lori, please never doubt yourself again. This is lovely. Somehow you always manage to get to the heart of these characters with such ease and gentleness, my heart melts. Fabulous!~Carole~

Author's Response: Have you figured out who it is yet? Mwahahaha! I won't tell, but it may be the first line of the next chapter, so you'll at least know by the end of February. Hehe.

I'm so glad you liked Neville and Hannah. They are just after Ron/Hermione when it comes to my OTPs, and writing them is starting to feel a bit more natural lately. I'm glad they seemed substantial even though their roles here are small. Hannah will actually show up some more, but Neville is getting a bit part in this saga. :)

This review is just love, Carole. I'm thrilled you like the fic, and I am quite unable to express how much I appreciate the encouragement you continue to give me at every turn with regard to writing in general (not just this story). I admire your writing and your barmaidy skills very much, so it means that much more coming from you. *hugs*

 

Neither Can Live by the opaleye
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: Past Featured Story

Neither can live while the other survives

Two minds or one? It is hard to tell where one ends and the other begins.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 117 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/06/12 Updated: 02/06/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/06/12 Title: Chapter 1: Possession.

As a fellow sufferer of AD (I think we need a support group), then of course I shall review you. That and I don;t think I did the first time, and I should have done because this is a wonderful poem.

Forgive the squeee, but 'GAHHHHH' I love your poetry so much. You really do have this extraordinary way with words that create fantastic images.

A necrotic cantata of joyous evil, Within the bounds of immortality Just amazing.

It was hard to choose a line/lines to quote here because they're all so good, but that set just awed me. The whole poem just sums up Harry's life and sacrifice so much. Yes, we know he survived, but he didn't know he would. He was certain he was walking to his death, and that still gets to me, every single time. *sigh*

Your poetry always seems to encapsulate feelins and moments so brilliantly. Thank you for sharing. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Carole. Harry's sacrifice seems to be basis for a lot of my poetry. There is just something about what he went through that gets to me every time and I have to write about it. Sigh. Yes, we really do need a support group!

 

Time and Tide by minnabird
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Filius has seen her all his life: the Woman. She has been drifting through time, drawn always towards him, never aging or changing.

She is the one thing he does not question.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1518 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/06/12 Updated: 02/06/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/07/12 Title: Chapter 1: Oneshot

OHH, very intriguing, and I'm glad you picked up this gauntlet of Kara's and wrote it, too.

Beautiful imagery, minna, I really loved the constant ebb and flow of the tides as the background to their love affair.
,br> Very well written and entrancing. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review <33 I'm glad I picked up that gauntlet too

 

Death Came Knocking by minnabird
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Huddled in a cellar, fugitive Muggle-borns wait as Death comes closer...

Nominated for Best Poem in the 2012 Quicksilver Quills Awards

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 143 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/06/12 Updated: 02/06/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 11/30/13 Title: Chapter 1: Poem

How have I not reviewed this before? Minna, I really like this. You've captured a very intense edge here for the Muggleborns. The claustrophobia and fear they must be feeling is so intense. So well done for that.

I like the fact that this isn't quite a villanelle and think you've played with the usual structure very cleverly. The lines and their sense that you repeat are very haunting, again it makes me thing how much fear they lived in every single day when they knew they faced death.

The only thing I'd maybe change (and it's purely a personal preference) is the last line. I'd probably remove either the 'and' or the 'then' because leaving a syllable out makes it more emphatic, when I read it. But that's a very minor suggestion.

This is wonderful, and I still can't believe I missed it. ~Carole~

 

Grandmother's Charms by minnabird
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: A young girl muses on the difference between her Muggle grandmother's charms and her wizarding uncle's.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 177 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/06/12 Updated: 02/06/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/07/12 Title: Chapter 1: Poem

Oh, this is so beautiful. We get so caught up in the Magical world of Harry Potter that we forget Muggles have their own magic, and charm and love.

Minna, this is so effortlessly written and flows so well. Seamless, elegant, amazing.
br> Fantastic. ~Carole~

 

Last Man Standing by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: Charlie Weasley is sitting at his brother's wedding when he meets a beautiful reporter covering the nuptials. Daphne Greengrass is more than she appears, however, and he finds himself quickly entranced. Is she interested in him as well, or is he just another story?

This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 3995 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/06/12 Updated: 02/06/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/06/12 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

I LOVED IT!!! Awwwwww, I really enjoyed this story, Gina (despite the FALL),. It's lovely to see a Post Hogwarts story featuring Charlie because he's so lovely and deserves to be written about more. Obviously he's actually with Penelope (Percy's ex - ha ha), but I can forgive you that - hee hee.

Seriously I did enjoy reading this. there was a moment whenh I thought Daphne had given up her secret a little fast but you actually explained that PERFECTLY with the lines that she recognised in Charlie something that she wanted, and of course confessing all to a stranger is so much easier than to a friend/family member.

The other thing I really enjoyed was that this was a Charlie and George banter type story, with none of the Trio - yayayay! Ha ha - I just like to read stories without them barging in.

The end was good. George's prank wa sperfect (lovely to see him happy and not moping).

Then because I was squeeing so much, I realised I hadn;t read the end properlyyyy. Noooooo, Daphne, you stitched him up. But he's happy and she won;t fool him again. I LOVED the last line, and now please introduce me to Charlie. I want to make him mine.

SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!! ~Carole~

Author's Response: Once again this review makes me smile. A very belated thank you for this, Carole. I really appreciate all your comments. I'm glad it turned out and had it's moments, esp. George. I have to admit, it was nice to write about a minor character (and not a Marauder for once, lol) and not have the trio turn up. The end is a bit rough on Charlie but I have other plans for him. Sorry, they don't include Penelope. So maybe someday I'll give him a go again. Thanks again for the lovely review!! ~Gina :)

 

Come Away With Me by lucca4
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary:

Come away with me and we'll kiss

On a mountaintop

Come away with me

And I'll never stop loving you

Evan Rosier and Dorcas Meadowes swore that they would not let the war come between them.

But things change as they realise that love cannot always come first.

Written for the GH Cotillion Challenge.

A million thanks to my beta Alex/welshdevondragon who is lovely and brilliant.

Nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Marauder Era Story.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 4173 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/06/12 Updated: 02/11/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/11/12 Title: Chapter 1: Come Away With Me

ARIAAAAAANNNAAAAAAHHHHH, This is such a good story. I adore the forbiddenness of it, and how torn Dorcas is. I always find it a bit of a stretch to read pairings where two people from opposite camps come together, but you've made this incredibly plausible. Of course, Evan has this way of compartmentalising his life, so he can detach her from his Death Eater activities, but Dorcas' dilemma and the way it tears at her is so well done - especially as we see this from his POV. So subtly written.

The sensuality between them is gorgeous. I love the intimacy and the way it encompasses all the senses (I do think smell and taste are really powerful and oft overlooked senses). But what I also love is that this isn;t just a story about a pairing - you have a plot - and a very sad plot.

I do have a quibble (sorry). Okay, how did Evan get into her bedroom when they have alarms on the staircases? This is, obviously, me assuming that Dorcas is a Gryff or that the Claw and Puff staircases have the same system. The canon part of me twitched a little, that was all. This really doesn't in any way impact on the overall gorgeousness of the story, so feel free to ignore me (or moan at my pickiness).

OHHH, and I remember what I was going to say. At the beginning of this month when I was attempting to set a challenge for TTB, I was going to do a songfic challenge. This song by Norah Jones was one of the ones I was going to use. HA! I kind of jumped out of my bed when I clicked on your story, although I was already singing it when I read the title. It's such a wispily melodic song and really suits this story.

Lovely story. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Yay! Thank you so much for this lovely review :). I'm so happy you liked it and thought it was plausible - I wasn't really sure how it would turn out, given that I had only written the end of their relationship in a drabble and none of the in-between stuff. And I'm awful at plots usually, constructing something that's completely hole-free, so it makes me so glad that you thought it worked.

Also, don't be sorry for quibbles! I am absolutely horrible at remembering canon information and I do often ignore it in my stories. I'm going to add a sentence (or two) that fixes that - hopefully, if I can think of a good reason :).

I like this song a lot, too - it probably would have made for a great challenge. I do like the idea of songfic challenges in the TTB…not lobbying or anything, just commenting :). Thank you so much, again, for your review! It meant a lot. xx Ariana

 

Fading Light by PotterGirl5
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: George is trying to recover from Fred's death, he really is. But everyone can see he's not doing well, and George begins to wonder if he will ever stop grieving.

A poem from George's perspective.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 130 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/07/12 Updated: 02/11/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 11/30/13 Title: Chapter 1: Faded Light

Oh, this is sad. I love the way you've caught George's grief so poignantly, ad crafted a lovely poem in so few words. The repetition of the lines about the light fading from his eyes were really touching and aided the structure of the poem.

My own tiny bit of peace, a moment of happiness, A candle inside of me, refusing to be blown out, just like his memory.

That line was lovely, and really helped set the hopeful tome of the end. Of course, Fred wouldn't have been able to let George suffer. He'd want him to find some form of happiness, even if he was never the same again.

Well done ~Carole~

 

Advice (The Bogey Man) by minnabird
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Advice to a child: keep away from werewolves.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 120 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/07/12 Updated: 02/11/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 10/27/13 Title: Chapter 1: Poem

I remember this challenge and I remember reading your poem and marvelling at it. You managed to keep a certain lyricism from the original poem, and yet you created something very Potterverse. It also reads very much like a poem that should be chanted like a catechism.

It’s a grim subject matter, summed up by that end line that the child would be better off dead than cursed to be a werewolf. I hope Remus would disagree, but I have no doubt there must have been times in his life where he thought death would have been the better option.

I love the alliteration in the second line because it helps the rhythm. I also liked the repetition of flesh in lines four and five, which added to the horror of what a transformed werewolf can actually do to its victim. It’s always horrified me that Greyback would do these things whilst still human, and it’s werewolves of his ilk that give the voice of the poem some validity.

I loved this very much, minna. Well done. ~Carole~

 
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