What can I say. I'm a grown woman living in London but I'm obsessed with a teenage wizard and his friends. Am I mad? Probably Do I care? Hell no!
EDIT: Grown? Um, probably not
For my first foray into the realms of fanfiction I've chosen to write about the Marauders. I'll always stick fairly closely to canon as I think JK knows best. Although I've enjoyed reading about other ships I, personally, don't think I could write with conviction about Ginny/Crabbe or Hermione/Mclaggan relationships.
EDIT: ha ha ha ha ha - How I have changed! I'm now firmly in the rare-pair, SSP, and things that aren't quite conventional camp, although I still loves me some James/Lily.
My second chaptered fic (Apparently Asleep) has started a love affair with Tonks/Remus and confirmed my obsession for all things Sirius. *sigh*
I am indebted to Terri (mudbloodproud) for being a great beta and all round amazing person. If it hadn't been for her encouragement I would have thrown in the towel many months ago.
EDIT: I have made a lot of wonderful friends during my past three years on MNFF, including (in no particular order) Natalie, Kara, Hannah/Bob, Jess, Gina, Lea, Lori, Julia, Minna, Emmahhhh, and the fantabulous BB.
I hope Mugglenet and you enjoy reading my words as much as I've enjoyed writing them. Huge thank-you to my niece, Amanda, for being one of the first to catch the Harry Potter bug and nagging me into reading them.
I’ve written a variety of stories, so here is them arranged in categories. Some are cross- referenced. So a James/Lily may appear in Marauder or Canon Romance
A Second Chance
First Date Disaster
Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand
It Takes a Wolf to Prank a Dog
Learning to Fly
O.W.L.s, Quidditch and the Added Distraction of Sirius Black
Peace in Heaven
Ribbons, not Strings
Sixth Time's the Charm
Thank you for your time, Professor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Sum of the Whole
Who's That Girl?
Wormtail on the Hogwarts Express
'i'before 'e' (Percy/Audrey)
A Prize Above Rubies (Isla Black/Bob Hitchens)
Apparently Asleep (Remus/Tonks)
Birthday Girl (George/Angelina)
Bound in the Beating of Each Other’s Hearts (Narcissa/Lucius)
Coup de Foudre (Bill/Fleur)
Dancing Queen (James/Lily)
First Date Disaster (James/Lily)
Five weeks (Remus/Tonks)
Forces of Nature (Ron/Hermione)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
In The Stars (Draco/Astoria)
Key of the Door (Ron/Hermione)
Kissing the Joy as it Flies (Seamus/Lavender)
March Madness (James/Lily)
Not Quite Perfect (Bill/Fleur)
Sixth Time’s the Charm (James/Lily)
Snowball Fights (Teddy/Victoire)
Until Death (Eaters) Do Us Part (Draco/Astoria)
You Dance Divinely (George/Angelina)
Non (or rather tweaked) Canon (apart from one story, these don’t break any canon.)
Better than Chocolate (Charlie/Tonks)
Heat of Life (Harry/Katie)
Her Tomorrows (Harry/Parvati)
Lavender, blue- A Gryffindor True (Lavender/Blaise)
Love At First Strike (Angelina/Terry)
Orphans of the Storm (Seamus/Parvati/Dean)
Passion Among the Primroses (Arthur/Mafalda)
Predictions of Love (Gilderoy/Sybil)
Ribbons, not Strings (Remus/Rosmerta)
Stars or Carousels (James/Dominique)
Summer’s Heat (Sirius/OC)
Teenage Witch (Charity/Myron Wagtail )
The Happy Couple (Harry/Ginny, Blaise/Lavender)
The Only One (Lavender/Blaise Teddy/Victoire)
The Untrodden Path (Draco/Hannah)
Where We Started From (Dean/Ginny)
Same sex Pairings
Apple-bobbing ( Lisa/Susan)
Close Your Eyes (Hermione/Lavender)
Drowning, not Waving (Oliver/Cedric)
Eyes That Know Me (Scorpius/Hugo)
Forbidden Colours (Tracey/Demelza)
The Dance We Do (Bellatrix/Amelia)
The Hat that Thinks it’s a Chair (Justin/Theo)
Truth Or Dare (Cormac/Zacharias)
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
Lockhart, Sprout and Two Smoking Goblets
Passion Among the Primroses
Predictions of Love
The Bacchus Book
Vampire - Ghost Child!
A Prize Above Rubies
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
An Outstretched Hand
Others (General, D/A, Post Hogwarts, Next Gen)
A Tangled Web (D/A)
All in the Genes (NG)
Chasing the Scoop! (Post Hogwarts)
Christmas on the Outside (General/Trio era)
Dean Thomas and the Reiver Curse (Post Hogwarts)
Diavol (Remus Trio Era)
Every Breath You Take (Post Hogwarts/Next Gen)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
Friends in Unlikely Places (Post Hog. Hermione)
Growing Old Disgracefully (Post Hog)
Lavender, blue (Trio Era)
Mere Wisps of Light (Post Hog. Draco fic)
Muggles, Magic and Misconceptions (Next Gen)
My Funny Valentine (Post Hogwarts)
Staring into the Fire (Trio Era)
The Waiting Game (D/A)
Whispers from the Past (Next Gen)
The Foolhardy Boys and Parvati, too
Who’s that Girl?
As They Watch
Celestina's Songbook: Christmas Edition, Volume 1
Fairytale of Hogwarts
I Believed in Lily Evans
Master Barty Regrets
Queen of My Heart
The Daydream Pedlar's Song
The Labyrinth Mind
Summary: One failed photograph, two halved souls, and the numerous, marvellous machinations of destiny.
This story is a multi-functional product of four days' continuous typing and lack of sleep. It serves an entry for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion and a standby Birthday Present for Julia/the opaleye. More importantly, it marks my return to fanfiction after two months' hiatus, because that is kind of inhumanly long.
Thanks to Kara for reading the Prologue and motivating me, and Carole for Chipping-on-the-Wye.
DISCLAIMER: J.K.Rowling, I love you for giving me the HP universe, but you are not me and you definitely did not write this.
I love Dennis! OOOH, this is so inventive and clever - ha. His manipulation of photos reminds me of my photobucket attempts - mwahahahahahahahaha.
I'm enjoying the periphery details in this. The details of Gemma Davies' sex life made me laugh - ha ha - but poor Eloise getting her satisfaction vicariously. Sympathy ... ahhh ... yes (tell her to take a shower).
,br> Um, minor typo Till date I think you mean 'To date'.
Um, what else, what else shall I say that will get me a SPEW award. Oh, poo, I don't know, just ... this fic is lovely. It's beautifully written, has incredible characterisation, an attention to detail that I'm so envious of, and a plot that is intriguing me.
Quite brilliant, and brilliNAT. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you for catching the error! :D It has been changed. :) I'm happy that you're enjoying the story so far.
Brit here .... It's Sheffield, not Sheffields ... but apart from that I have no issue with the geography :)
Oh, now then, there's me thinking that Dennis is lovely and hot and cool, and then you say he's going to do something cruel and I was on edge. I'm not sure what he's done to the photograph, but it must be to do with the nose she accidentally hexed off. (I love the detail that she keeps touching it by the way) OHH! Hold on, ha - reread, his supposed cruelty in his mind is that he's known her all along, but she's not upset by that, but the actual photograph. (Me being a bear of very little brain, but it's late.)
I loved the scene on the beach and her slipping off her cardigan as he took photos. Somehow that really drew me in and I could see the whole scene before me. Oh, and I'm starting to detest Gemma.Smug b1tch with her perfect straight hair and model looks. UGHHHH!
Bring on the next chapter, my love. ~Carole~
P.S. This isn't a pity review, it's a promised review. There's a difference.
Author's Response: AAAARH I KNEW THAT :'( Alex Turner is from Sheffield after all. Why did my fingers betray me? :/ Hahaha! How did I know you'd dislike Gemma? :D About that last part, it shall be revealed what's happening in the next chapter. :) It might not be a very shocking reveal, mind. Lol. And thanks for the review! I know it's a promised one :)
And sorry it's taking me until now to read the rest of this.
The back story of Dennis and Colin is incredible, padfootically, this is amazing. I love the fact (well i don't love but think it's GENIUS) that Colin was cracking up and had lost it. Wow. Tell me, was that part of the Amelie story, or was this your complete invention. It doesn't matter because it's just brilliant anyway and opens up so much about the Creeveys especially Dennis decision not to go back to school and cutting himself off from that part of his life. I really like his Dad in this. He's only a brief part but you can see it tears him that Colin has gone and Dennis is now in decline. he must have been torn with wanting Dennis to stay with him but also knowing he had to return to the WW hence giving him the watch. Oh wow.
DEEEEEEEEEAAAAAANNNN!!!! yayayayaya - I love him. Okay, I am totally picturing Alfie Enoch here, but ha ha ha I don;t care, he's gorgeous and so is Dean. and he's with Daph who is one hot ball of sexiness (please finish that story so I may die happy).
OH GODDDDD! Dennis meltdown at the end. Thatw as so sad, The Girl was mortal and silly just like the rest of us :(.
Okies, I must crack on, but I have a pick.
Mr Creevey was also peering at it. “Why, I never saw her in any of Colin’s other photos.” “That’s because she didn’t take any. C’mon, Dean, you ought to-”
That, to me, makes it sound as if Eloise was taking the pictures. I think you need to tweak it so it's clear she didn't want photos taken of her.
OH!!! i loved the Harry and Ron banter. harry's line ablout Ron remembering something from school made me LOL.
OH! (I will go soon). Must mention how well the Muggle world slips into this. I usually hate mentions of Muggle things, but this makes total sense. Dean being cool and having a phone helps - ha ha.
Um, there was something else ... Oh yes. Ha ha ha - I died, DIED I tell you, when Dean slated all the people wanting to be Aurors or teachers. hee hee hee. I love this fic, and I love the way you've written it. I thought it was going to be a love story, and I knew coming from you it would have a twist, but the depth to this is incredible.
Author's Response: Thank you for catching the errors! :D I always picture Colin as somebody brave but also frail. His manic enthusiasm and hero-worshipping would build up too much expectations, and when those expectations come crashing down, I think he'd snap. Also, ALFIE ENOCH. No one else can be Dean for me.
If the people of Chipping-on-the-Wye could stomach ever-blooming pansies and inexplicable heat waves, then she was pretty sure they could live with a nose that had mysteriously gone crooked.
and just as I'm laughing, you do this to me.
Perhaps, she had been trained too well to hear the noise of other people’s lovemaking from afar; the sound of ecstatic moaning coming from the next room was unmistakable. She halted.
The lovebirds you heard were probably Dean and his girlfriend,” Yeah, sorry, we were a bit noisy.
and hahahahahhah - the smut is incredible. OOO-ER!
Sorry, incoherence reigns here. I need to ask a sensible question regarding the opening. I really liked the inventivelness of her talking to Terry - although I understand it's not actually Terry, but part of her ... um ... mind/psyche/subconscious - what have you, so ... why Terry? I loved that part a lot and I'm not questioning the subject choice but I'd love to hear your reasoning behind it.
I said inventive just now. I think this whole story is inventive and fresh and original and I hope it wins :) ~Carole~
Author's Response: The scene with Terry is a mirror of the interview scene. Eloise has shut her past up so resolutely that I imagine she'd find it hard to open up, even to herself. That is why I had her conjuring Terry's image. I also tried to make the parallel clearer with the line "begin at the beginning", which is how Terry started the interview. :)
Gemma Davies was at it again, shrieking in ecstasy as though the devil himself was about. Lucky Gemma.
Ahhh. perfect Epilogue. It ties a few things up and yet leaves me thinking about the characters long after I click away from the story. You tied it up well and Gemma had even more sex - YAY! I do like the way you've given other POVs here, so everyone gets an ending of sorts.
Ah, you've taken two characters that I really didn;t think much about before and given them life. Thank you.
Lovely story and now going to favourites so I don't forget it. ~Carole~
Author's Response: <33333333333 for following it to the end and leaving such enthusiastic reviews! It makes me want to continue writing. :) I think I will, after a nap lol. Thanks for all the reviews, love and support!
Summary: Escaping the overwhelming revelry of another miserable New Year's Eve, Draco Malfoy finds himself drawn to an old seaside resort from his childhood. He meets an unexpected ally there, and the shore soon becomes his escape from life, a place where he can be free of his past. Little did he know that it would also hold the key to his future.
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.
GINAAAAAA! this is so heartwarming. You have really drawn such a lovely picture of Luna and the way she redeems people in her startling innocence and clarity. I'm not keen on Luna fics as a rule, but you really made her much more than the ditz.
I did think he'd have recognised her earlier. In my mind she has a distinctive voice - plus she was held at the Manor (I loved the way she didn't hold that against him) - so I wonder if he should have thought there was something familiar about the voice, even if he couldn't see her face and eyes.
Another minor nit-pick (sorry). A few of the creatures you mentioned should be capitalised - Veela, Hippogryff, Plimpy, and I'd add Mooncalf because it's a creature I think you've invented.
I loved the ending (good call to reclaim your canon card - heh heh). Luna and Draco wouldn;t really have worked, but I love the fact that she was there to give him the nudge to change.
Back to the beginning. Draco's life was so well written. Present tense - I'm struggling atm, but this was effortless. I adored his POV; you caught him so well!
Loved Astoria at the end, but then I adore her anyway. Lovely story ~Carole~
Author's Response: Carole!! A belated thank you for the lovely review. I'm glad you liked Luna here when you don't often enjoy reading her, that means I did okay by her. I'll have to nip in and change those capitals someday, although I did not invent the mooncalf! As for Draco recognizing her, I see your point (you and Natalie) and maybe someday I'll tweak that too. I didn't really think of it until I was quite a ways into the story and thought I'd found a decent way to address it. I can see how mentioning it earlier would help, but I can also see Draco's guilt keeping him quiet. Or maybe he didn't have much contact with her when she was held there. Maybe his parents shielded him from that. Haha how's that for a coverup? I think I had some half-cocked answer for Natalie as well, lol! Ah well, can't win them all. Am still glad the present tense didn't bug you and that Astoria got me my canon card back. And I thank you once more for the review!! ~Gina :)
Summary: Sometimes, things happen. Things that you don’t want to look back at: things you never want to face again. But sometimes, the events of the past just present themselves before you unexpectedly, throwing themselves at you and threatening to haunt you forever…
So what will Hugo Weasley do, when he is faced with one such situation? What is the right option: flight or fight? And most importantly, does Hugo even have a choice?
This is Ginny Weasley Potter of Hufflepuff, writing for the Great Hall Cotillion.
Hmm, so my Poozy-Darls writing slash and Professors. I wasn't totally sure I believed my eyes - ha ha. Anyhow, I was intrigued and I also have a sneaky regard for Scugo (don;t tell Natalie that though) despite pairing Scorp with Lily.
First impression is that your 'smut' is very good. The rawness and immediacy are excellent and I really felt how intense it was between them. I wanted this to work out between them, but ... well ... it wasn't going to be.
for he’d be pre-warned about the, he would fine her right in the pool in front of him, entwined around Malfoy as the two of them moved vigorously in the water, completely naked. Pooja, this line doesn;t make sense. I think you mean 'them' not 'the' and 'find' not 'fine'. I'm also unclear as to the structure or I'd try and rewrite, but I think you need to fiddle with it a little.
“It’s about time you move on from it.” I think this should be 'moved' and not move.
As far as the story goes, I was interested in how this case had thrown them back together and the awkwardness over the cup of tea was excruciatingly good. But I did think Scorpius flipped a little quickly. I think it would have been better if they'd met again, say this had been spread over a few days, so that Scorpius going from 'I love Rosie and you need to move on' to 'Hugo I can't forget that night and I'm gay' didn't seem quite so rushed.
UGHH, and Hugo's advice sucks (this isn;t your fault - ha ha) Telling Scorpius to make it work with Rose just isn;t going to happen. Even if Scorpius doesn;t end up with Hugo, there's no way in the world that he's going to remain happy with Rose. He'll end up chasing other men and both will be incredibly happy. It's far better for her in the long run that they end it now. *sigh*.
Hmm, the modifying of memories. At this point I got very uncomfortable. Sorry, but this is such a gross invasion of privacy - letting a girl think you've slept with them and a boy forget you've had sex - it's akin to giving someone a date-rape drug. I really really have to question Hugo's morality here. He won't let Scorpius come clean to Rose because he won;t do that to his sister, and yet he was quite prepared to cover up his sexual indiscretions. I shivered at that bit - sorry - but it's so morally wrong, imo.
So, yes, I liked smut the smut in your story (heh heh), and the tortuous longing that both felt even after all those years. The reason they got together to chat was interesting, and didn't feel at all contrived. I liked these parts a lot, but I'm afraid the modified memories put me off, somewhat. (And now I feel mean :( - sorry)
Author's Response: Carole!!! :D Thank you so much for the long, descriptive review! :) And yes, Poozy-Darls has turned into Sleazy-Darls these days. :p So I've never written hardcore slash and I thought I must give it a try this one time. Of course, I loved doing it and will definitely try out Scugo again (do you know any nice Scugo fics? I have to read some now!) As for smut, three entries in the Smut-a-thon were mine. :p Actually when I wrote all the sex, I felt totally awful for Scugo because I knew they weren't about to get together, though they were perfect for each other. I'm so glad you liked the smut! That was the part which worried me the most. O.o I went through that particularly weird line and corrected it-- it was mostly typos, and I somehow managed to overlook all of it. I did that other correction too. Thanks for pointing those out to me! :) I took your your advice for most things, actually, I've corrected Hugo's morally incorrect decision with a better explanation too. I didn't realise the moral situation when I first wrote the piece! O.o Thank you so much, Carole, for helping me out there! As for Scorpius flipping, I tried to take that pointer from you too, but somehow I wasn't able to expand the timeline without any awkwardness. So I've inserted a couple of dialogues in between with Hugo saying, 'didn't you ask me to move on' and Scorpius awkwardly admitting his feelings after a couple of questions. It sounds better, I think. Actually, I remember something that came up while writing the story itself, which prevented me from spanning it over a few days. I just can't remember what that was... anyway, I've tried to correct that part as much as possible. That said, I'm glad the story intrigued you and that the smut impressed you (yay!). I also squeed and kinda did a jig when I saw the review. Thank you so much for your input, Carole! This one made my day! Really! *huggles*
Summary: Louis hadn't quite expected to fall in love with him, but he did.
A gift for my mistress, lucca4. Also, an entry for the Inaugural GH Cotillion Challenge.
Disclaimer: This is not J.K.Rowling. It'd be cool if she shipped Luna's son with Fleur's, though.
Okay, my heart dropped when I saw this was second person. I really can't like it as a POV because it spins me outside of the story instead of drawing me in, but what was so brilliant here, was that you swicthed to first person and so my interest didn't stray.
This is a gorgeous story. I love the initial set up. Lysander is wonderful. He is so Luna like in his confidence, and yet so unlike her in that he can face reality. I love seeing him through Louis' eyes.
Psst - I love the sex in this. Just enough to be hot, and yet tangled up with wondrous emotions. Gah, will they last.?
Hmm, this is odd, I don;t have much canon for Louis yet, although he;'s nagging at me. I need to get some before this becomes my reality - eeeeeep. Natalie, hestiajonesperson, you are ebil, but fabulous.
Well done! ~Carole~
Author's Response: Haha! I decided on second person as I am writing for Ariana, but I thought the first person was better for getting more intimate with him in the memories. :D Thanks for the review!
Summary: Summary: Christmas 1976. Lily Evans is standing in the shadow of a war that for the first time is affecting her Christmas spirit. A reprieve from the gloom comes in the form of a Muggle boy from her hometown, someone who the war cannot touch and is unaffected by the fear it causes. However, dark times lie ahead, and Lily begins to realise that there are some things she just cannot escape, however hard she tries.
This came joint first in the December Great Hall Challenge! Thank you to the judges!
Also nominated for Best Marauder Story in the QSQs! Thank you!
OHHHH, now, I wasn;t sure where this was going to begin with Sarah, and was expecting war filled doom and gloom, or even worse Lily ending up in Snape's arms - (you know how that would make me shudder), but this is good. I was totally surprised by the OC appearing and loved his characterisation. Mark seems to fit rather nicely into Lily's Muggle world and it is refreshing to see her with someone who isn't Snape or James. A good buffer between the pair of them. I particularly liked her recognition that if James had said the line she'd have been irritated beyond compare. Sometimes men just can't win, can they.
Good dtory, Sarah, and am adding to favourites now. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Carole! I could never have Lily ending up in Snape's arms. I don't think I could physically do it. But he pops up again in the next chapter for her to have a good old shout at, and unfortunately, the doom and gloom resurfaces a little. Poor old Lily. Thanks again for reviewing!
Summary: For three years, Oliver Wood was an important part of Hermione’s life. He had been there through all the fights, the tears, and the seemingly endless piles of homework. He was her constant when all else fell through.
And now he is leaving.
But how do you say goodbye to the boy who told you what to expect in terms of school and exams, who made your third year bearable, memorable even? Nominated for the 2012 Non-Canon Romance QSQ Award.
I love missing moments stories, Maple, and what you have here is a story packed with the types of things that could have happened when we weren;t following Harry. Hermione is great here. I love the nervousness when she first arrives at Hogwarts and the terror that she''ll get lost and the way she studied so she wouldn't feel out of place (but she still was alone :( ) I'm glad she had a friend in Oliver, who let's face it is so obsessed with Quidditch he probably needs someone talking to him about other things. (I love him really, you know that.)
And what she saw was both wonderful and absolutely terrifying. In that moment, she saw something in his eyes that she had never thought she’d see. It looked as if he wanted to kiss her.
Gahh, such unresolved tension there, but she's so young and scared and ... he wouldn;t have done it in front of everyone, but that was such a lovely moment. My favourite, I think, in the story.
I do think there were places where the dialogue took over a little. I know you were going through the books, and you did so very effectively, but sometimes I thought there was too much talking. (only a little, though)
,br> You retold the events very well. I had to check some things because I'd totally forgotten that she'd got on a broom as well when they were after the key. I'm too used to playing the PC game where it's just Harry - LOL.
nit pick“I heard that you, Ron, and Harry managed to cpture Flitwick’s key. By flying.” (capture)
Good luck in the challenge. This is a lovely story about friendship that could blossom into something more, but hasn't yet. I'm rather glad you resisted the temptation to turn it into a full romance, but still left the option for them to take up at a later date. Well done ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Carole. I definately think that this is one of the sotries I was most happy with, for sure. I can definately see that dialogue does become a little too dialoguy. Definately something I will work on as I continue to write. ACK! how did I not notice the capture thing?? Thanks again! Maple
Summary: James Potter shares a moment with one of his best friends the night before his wedding.
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.
Oh .... Gina, this is so so beautiful. I had my doubts because I know you were really struggling at one point, but this is so in keeping with their characters, and fits canon, and ... and ... and ... it's just lovely.
I love the simple pleasure they get in each others' company, the banter and ease they feel. And there's no bitterness, at all, (or I don't sense that) from Remus that James has moved on. I suspect that Remus has moved on, too, and yet there's a part of both of them which will be connected to water and the lake and everything wonderful and bright about Hogwarts.
How do you do it, make me cry a little with such a great story?
Okay, sorry, but I have a minor nit-pick.
There will fewer late nights at the pub, fewer midnight runs with the stag and the dog, fewer times spent with just him and not all four of them.
First, it should be 'will be' but also, this is confusing. James is thinking this, but he's saying he's going to run 'with' the stag and the dog. He's the stag. So you either need to change it to 'the wolf, rat and dog' or change 'with' to between - or something.
Anyway, that in no way at all detracts from such a beautiful story. Very touching, very bittersweet. *sigh* I have to go to work now, and all I want to do is curl up and shed a few tears over the loss of the Marauders *sob*
You wondrous witch. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank so (very late) for such an amazing review, Carole! I'm so glad it worked for you. I barely remember why I struggled with it now - I deleted what was pretty much a completely different story. It turned out rather well in the end, though. It is sad, to think of these sorts of things between them and then realize what happens later on. Very bittersweet, as you said. Sorry to make you cry. And yes, that line is confusing so someday I'll fix it, lol. Thanks again for the lovely review, it still makes me squee! ~Gina :)
Summary: 'You'd die for her. I see it in the way you look at her. You'd kill for her. You wouldn't do that for me, would you?'
It ought to be a rhetorical question, but for Michael Corner suddenly it isn't.
This is h_vic of Hufflepuff writing for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion
I wasn't going to read this. Nothing against your stories, Hannah, which are always a joy to read (so well-written) but because it features Tracey and I'm writing her as well for the same challenge - HA! Anyway, I have started and am in two minds. I love the story, it's beautifully written and is well plotted. I also love the back story and your characterisation. The downside is that I'm now thinking 'Oh' at my own story and seething a touch with jealousy. *sigh*
The only bit of characterisation I didn;t like (and this isn;t your fault because this is your Tracey) is this line-
You never stopped loving her. I don't mind. Really, I don't. I understand. It's stupid really, but I love you enough that I'm willing to accept the scraps on the off chance that one day you might give me more.'
I'll admit that the reason I don;t like it is because it makes me feel so uncomfortable reading about a woman staying with a man who she not only knows loves another woman more, but tells him that. Has she no pride?! Again, this is your character, so it's not a fault of the story just me getting riled. See - your Tracey has got under my skin.
Oh good lord, what is happening at the end. I'm shivering as I read and re-read. Very well written. I'm creepily intrigued and an on tenterhooks to see where this is going. darn the queue snafu, I do need to read more.
Good luck in the challenge and well done with this. ~Carole~
Summary: Albus Severus Potter is not like his father. He can't defeat unimaginable evils. No matter how hard he struggled, he couldn't overcome the evil surrounding him.
Mr. Potter, your son was possessed.
Oh, this is sad and it tells a story. I love the way you've plotted this with so few words, and yet the tale is there before us.
You've managed to capture the despair that Harry must be feeling at seeing his son like this, and also Albus' helplessness because he can hear what is going on and yet is powerless to prevent what is happening to him.
Oh, I didn;t think he'd die, though. :( - Although that is probably preferable to being stuck in this terrifying limbo.
Lovely poem. I liked the structure, too. It flows very well and it's clear who is talking. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, Carole. :)
I can't imagine what Harry would be like, but I think it would hit him very hard- but the italics POV is the healer . . .
As for the death . . . anything would be preferable. And who's to say it was the actual possession that killed him? ;)Anyways, thank you so much for the lovely review!
OH! This is all different - ha ha. I didn;t expect this at all, Soraya, and am gasping somewhat. In a good way, I promise, it's just that this isn't how I envisaged your story. There's some intrigue (Scorpius had a daughter? Louis' family are dead? Scorp and Rose are together .... NOOOOOOOO) and there's also the tension that we know somehow Scorpius and Lily will end up together - even if it is alcohol induced.
So no, this isn't a crappity fic. It has a decent plot and original characterisation.
Rose however, is a poo and doesn't deserve the love of the fair Malfoy.
Author's Response: CAROLE!!!! I really do <3 you, you know that, right? :D
Once again, you came to my rescue when I was deprived of review!love, and on Valentine's Day too :) Yay to that. And yay to you gasping, lol. The thing is, I had always imagined Scorpius and Lily to get together, somewhat briefly, yes, but it had to fit in with my head canon which means some healthy Scorose and Loulily too. And yeah, Scorpius having a daughter and Louis's family basically all dying except for Victoire are things that I covered more thoroughly in Blood and Roses (not that I'm pimping or anything, and besides, it's Scorose so I don't know if you can stomach it, lol -- though, if you were to read it, I promise it's not too shippy and they aren't even together, really, in the story).
Thank youuuuuuuu, for the lovely review, though Rose does NOT appreciate being called a poo, haha. She's broken up with Malfoy, anyway! Hehehehehe. I don't know if I'll finish this in time for the Cotillion's deadline, but if I don't, I should hopefully post the second (and third, if I decide to) chapter (s) by Marchish.
<3 you lotsly!
Summary: Ernie Macmillan has had a difficult year, suffering three losses in two months’ time. Life is dreary, and each day seems far too much like the one before and the one to follow.But on any regular day, extraordinary things can happen, can change the course of a journey… especially when an obligatory dinner party, a meddling best friend, and a familiar face from the past come together at just the right time. This is WeasleyMom of Hufflepuff, writing for the Great Hall Cotillion Challenge. Thanks to Natalie/hestiajones for beta reading this in a quick turnaround.
OH OH OH OH OH - Who is it? I neeeeeeed to know who the girl is. My mind is buzzing now. It can't be a Hufflepuff, he'd remember them. Ummmm, Leanne? Lisa? (thinking of 'L's now) Demelza (no she's with Tracey - giggle).
Lorriiiiiiii I love this story. You've captured Ernie brilliantly, but not just him, your Hannah and Neville are so perfect - s right (and not a mention of her tits anywhere - snigger). Seriously, that scene in the kitchen between the three of them had me gulping. Neville was just so fantastic. I think it's the sign of a really good writer that even the minor players can make such an impression, and he was so so good.
Looking at Hannah now, pretty even with the sheen of sweat from cooking visible at her hairline, he wondered why he couldn’t have just fallen in love with her. Life would have been so much simpler in his estimation.
This passage is particularly good. I love how Hannah isn;t perfect, yet he still recognises that she's pretty and, yeah, perhaps it would have been good for him to fall in love with her,but then we wouldn;t have the fabulousness that is Neville and Hannah. - ha ha.
Lori, please never doubt yourself again. This is lovely. Somehow you always manage to get to the heart of these characters with such ease and gentleness, my heart melts. Fabulous!~Carole~
Author's Response: Have you figured out who it is yet? Mwahahaha! I won't tell, but it may be the first line of the next chapter, so you'll at least know by the end of February. Hehe.
Two minds or one? It is hard to tell where one ends and the other begins.
As a fellow sufferer of AD (I think we need a support group), then of course I shall review you. That and I don;t think I did the first time, and I should have done because this is a wonderful poem.
Forgive the squeee, but 'GAHHHHH' I love your poetry so much. You really do have this extraordinary way with words that create fantastic images.
A necrotic cantata of joyous evil, Within the bounds of immortality Just amazing.
It was hard to choose a line/lines to quote here because they're all so good, but that set just awed me. The whole poem just sums up Harry's life and sacrifice so much. Yes, we know he survived, but he didn't know he would. He was certain he was walking to his death, and that still gets to me, every single time. *sigh*
Your poetry always seems to encapsulate feelins and moments so brilliantly. Thank you for sharing. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Carole. Harry's sacrifice seems to be basis for a lot of my poetry. There is just something about what he went through that gets to me every time and I have to write about it. Sigh. Yes, we really do need a support group!
Summary: Filius has seen her all his life: the Woman. She has been drifting through time, drawn always towards him, never aging or changing.
She is the one thing he does not question.
OHH, very intriguing, and I'm glad you picked up this gauntlet of Kara's and wrote it, too.
Beautiful imagery, minna, I really loved the constant ebb and flow of the tides as the background to their love affair.
,br> Very well written and entrancing. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review <33 I'm glad I picked up that gauntlet too
Summary: Huddled in a cellar, fugitive Muggle-borns wait as Death comes closer...
Nominated for Best Poem in the 2012 Quicksilver Quills Awards
How have I not reviewed this before? Minna, I really like this. You've captured a very intense edge here for the Muggleborns. The claustrophobia and fear they must be feeling is so intense. So well done for that.
I like the fact that this isn't quite a villanelle and think you've played with the usual structure very cleverly. The lines and their sense that you repeat are very haunting, again it makes me thing how much fear they lived in every single day when they knew they faced death.
The only thing I'd maybe change (and it's purely a personal preference) is the last line. I'd probably remove either the 'and' or the 'then' because leaving a syllable out makes it more emphatic, when I read it. But that's a very minor suggestion.
This is wonderful, and I still can't believe I missed it. ~Carole~
Summary: A young girl muses on the difference between her Muggle grandmother's charms and her wizarding uncle's.
Oh, this is so beautiful. We get so caught up in the Magical world of Harry Potter that we forget Muggles have their own magic, and charm and love.
Minna, this is so effortlessly written and flows so well. Seamless, elegant, amazing.
br> Fantastic. ~Carole~
Summary: Charlie Weasley is sitting at his brother's wedding when he meets a beautiful reporter covering the nuptials. Daphne Greengrass is more than she appears, however, and he finds himself quickly entranced. Is she interested in him as well, or is he just another story?
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Inaugural Great Hall Cotillion Challenge.
I LOVED IT!!! Awwwwww, I really enjoyed this story, Gina (despite the FALL),. It's lovely to see a Post Hogwarts story featuring Charlie because he's so lovely and deserves to be written about more. Obviously he's actually with Penelope (Percy's ex - ha ha), but I can forgive you that - hee hee.
Seriously I did enjoy reading this. there was a moment whenh I thought Daphne had given up her secret a little fast but you actually explained that PERFECTLY with the lines that she recognised in Charlie something that she wanted, and of course confessing all to a stranger is so much easier than to a friend/family member.
The other thing I really enjoyed was that this was a Charlie and George banter type story, with none of the Trio - yayayay! Ha ha - I just like to read stories without them barging in.
The end was good. George's prank wa sperfect (lovely to see him happy and not moping).
Then because I was squeeing so much, I realised I hadn;t read the end properlyyyy. Noooooo, Daphne, you stitched him up. But he's happy and she won;t fool him again. I LOVED the last line, and now please introduce me to Charlie. I want to make him mine.
Author's Response: Once again this review makes me smile. A very belated thank you for this, Carole. I really appreciate all your comments. I'm glad it turned out and had it's moments, esp. George. I have to admit, it was nice to write about a minor character (and not a Marauder for once, lol) and not have the trio turn up. The end is a bit rough on Charlie but I have other plans for him. Sorry, they don't include Penelope. So maybe someday I'll give him a go again. Thanks again for the lovely review!! ~Gina :)