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Real name: Carole
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What can I say. I live in London and am obsessed with a teenage wizard and his friends. Am I mad? Probably Do I care? Hell no!
EDIT: Grown? Um, probably not

For my first foray into the realms of fanfiction I've chosen to write about the Marauders. I'll always stick fairly closely to canon as I think JK knows best. Although I've enjoyed reading about other ships I, personally, don't think I could write with conviction about Ginny/Crabbe or Hermione/Mclaggan relationships.

EDIT: ha ha ha ha ha - How I have changed! I'm now firmly in the rare-pair, SSP, and things that aren't quite conventional camp, although I still loves me some James/Lily.

My second chaptered fic (Apparently Asleep) has started a love affair with Tonks/Remus and confirmed my obsession for all things Sirius. *sigh*

I am indebted to Terri (mudbloodproud) for being a great beta and all round amazing person. If it hadn't been for her encouragement I would have thrown in the towel many months ago.

EDIT: I have made a lot of wonderful friends during my past three years on MNFF, including (in no particular order) Natalie, Kara, Hannah/Bob, Jess, Gina, Lea, Lori, Julia, Minna, Emmahhhh, and the fantabulous BB.

I hope Mugglenet and you enjoy reading my words as much as I've enjoyed writing them. Huge thank-you to my niece, Amanda, for being one of the first to catch the Harry Potter bug and nagging me into reading them.


I’ve written a variety of stories, so here is them arranged in categories. Some are cross- referenced. So a James/Lily may appear in Marauder or Canon Romance

EDIT: I haven't written much Harry Potter fanfiction for a while. It is unlikely I'll update the two chaptered fics I first started as they became a little too long and unwieldy. Sorry about that.

Marauder
A Second Chance
Contemplating Lilies
Dancing Queen
First Date Disaster
Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand
It Takes a Wolf to Prank a Dog
Juggling
Learning to Fly
March Madness
O.W.L.s, Quidditch and the Added Distraction of Sirius Black
Peace in Heaven
Ribbons, not Strings
Sixth Time's the Charm
Thank you for your time, Professor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Sum of the Whole
Veils
Who's That Girl?
Wormtail on the Hogwarts Express



Canon Romance
'i'before 'e' (Percy/Audrey)
A Prize Above Rubies (Isla Black/Bob Hitchens)
Acorns (Bill/Fleur)
Apparently Asleep (Remus/Tonks)
Birthday Girl (George/Angelina)
Bound in the Beating of Each Other’s Hearts (Narcissa/Lucius)
Coup de Foudre (Bill/Fleur)
Dancing Queen (James/Lily)
First Date Disaster (James/Lily)
Five weeks (Remus/Tonks)
Forces of Nature (Ron/Hermione)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
In The Stars (Draco/Astoria)
Key of the Door (Ron/Hermione)
Kissing the Joy as it Flies (Seamus/Lavender)
March Madness (James/Lily)
Not Quite Perfect (Bill/Fleur)
Reconnaissance (Remus/Tonks)
Sixth Time’s the Charm (James/Lily)
Snowball Fights (Teddy/Victoire)
Until Death (Eaters) Do Us Part (Draco/Astoria)
Veils (James/Lily)
You Dance Divinely (George/Angelina)



Non (or rather tweaked) Canon (apart from one story, these don’t break any canon.)

Better than Chocolate (Charlie/Tonks)
Heat of Life (Harry/Katie)
Her Tomorrows (Harry/Parvati)
High (Scorpius/Lily)
Lavender, blue- A Gryffindor True (Lavender/Blaise)
Love At First Strike (Angelina/Terry)
Mirrors (Charlie/Penelope)
Misperception (Oliver/Cedric/Daphne)
Orphans of the Storm (Seamus/Parvati/Dean)
Passion Among the Primroses (Arthur/Mafalda)
Predictions of Love (Gilderoy/Sybil)
Ribbons, not Strings (Remus/Rosmerta)
Shrouds (Hermione/Draco)
Snapdragons (Charlie/OC)
Stars or Carousels (James/Dominique)
Summer’s Heat (Sirius/OC)
Swans (Mollyjnr/OC)
Teenage Witch (Charity/Myron Wagtail )
The Happy Couple (Harry/Ginny, Blaise/Lavender)
The Only One (Lavender/Blaise Teddy/Victoire)
The Untrodden Path (Draco/Hannah)
Where We Started From (Dean/Ginny)



Same sex Pairings
Apple-bobbing ( Lisa/Susan)
Close Your Eyes (Hermione/Lavender)
Drowning, not Waving (Oliver/Cedric)
Eyes That Know Me (Scorpius/Hugo)
Forbidden Colours (Tracey/Demelza)
Fracture (Theo/Justin)
Monochrome (Sirius/Remus)
The Dance We Do (Bellatrix/Amelia)
The Hat that Thinks it’s a Chair (Justin/Theo)
Truth Or Dare (Cormac/Zacharias)



Humour
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
Lockhart, Sprout and Two Smoking Goblets
Passion Among the Primroses
Predictions of Love
The Bacchus Book
Vampire - Ghost Child!

Historical
A Prize Above Rubies
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
An Outstretched Hand
Shadows Deep

Others (General, D/A, Post Hogwarts, Next Gen)
A Tangled Web (D/A)
All in the Genes (NG)
Chasing the Scoop! (Post Hogwarts)
Christmas on the Outside (General/Trio era)
Dean Thomas and the Reiver Curse (Post Hogwarts)
Diavol (Remus Trio Era)
Every Breath You Take (Post Hogwarts/Next Gen)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
Friends in Unlikely Places (Post Hog. Hermione)
Growing Old Disgracefully (Post Hog)
High (NG)
Lavender, blue (Trio Era)
Mere Wisps of Light (Post Hog. Draco fic)
Muggles, Magic and Misconceptions (Next Gen)
My Funny Valentine (Post Hogwarts)
Staring into the Fire (Trio Era)
The Waiting Game (D/A)
Whispers from the Past (Next Gen)



Mysteries
The Foolhardy Boys and Parvati, too
Who’s that Girl?
Xanthe Interrupted
Zeitgeist



Poetry
Askew
As They Watch
Beyond Beseeching
Celestina's Songbook: Christmas Edition, Volume 1
Cold Dreams
Draco's Journey
Enslaved
Fairytale of Hogwarts
Flying High
Forever France
Frozen Silence
Hexed!
Hey, brother
I Believed in Lily Evans
Master Barty Regrets
Phoenix Flames
Queen of My Heart
Sirius, Baby
The Daydream Pedlar's Song
The Four
The Labyrinth Mind
Unreconciled

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Moons by Northumbrian
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 32]

Summary:
July 2010 and a young married couple are out for a relaxing and romantic day. An afternoon at the theatre, followed by a meal to bring back memories. It should be a fairytale day. Unfortunately, it is.

This is a sequel to Moon and is another story featuring Mark Moon (Best Original Character - Quicksilver Quills 2010). A lady named Lavender appears too.


Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 12941 Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/03/11 Updated: 05/06/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 07/17/11 Title: Chapter 2: Perturbation

OOH noooo, Lavender, don't follow them. You'll get caught by the moon.

I seriously am excited by this story. I love your Lavender, and Mark just fits so sweetly into your canon. Anyway, this is a clever story and I adore all the extra details you've added about the Wolfsbane and the law where she has to stay locked up.

I believe that last time I criticised some of Lavender's 'dirty talk', but here I thought it was really good and totally in keeping with the woman you've created here.

There were one or two places where you missed out a word or two.

Unfortunately, it not prevent the physical change at all. and

‘I’m sorry, Mark; sometimes forget that you can’t smell everything I can.

I loved the flashback to the bridesmaid scene and also this set of lines. He joked that it was the only time he could talk to her without being interrupted. It was a joke, but it was also true. Those nights were when he really opened up to her, when she couldn’t reply. Mark seems so unassuming, but it's lovely to see that Lavender really does appreciate him. (I've read Moon, so I know the back story to their relationship).

Oh, and she's quite right, thirty is not old! Great story. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks.
Next: Penumbra.
Will Lavender follow? What do you think?
I intended to amend the dirty talk in the last chapter, I forgot! I will do that tonight. I will correct these errors, too. Thanks.
There will be more snippets about the Mark/Lavender relationship, this time from Marks perspective, in the next chapter. We will also move further into the realms of fairy-tale (or possibly Stepney).
Im beginning to suspect that forty isnt old either!
Neil

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 05/12/11 Title: Chapter 1: Inclination

Usually I run a mile when I see a Lavender story. Most people still think she's a mush head who still carries a torch for Won-Won, and that irritates me because how many people remain the same twit they were at 16? But, I know you write a Lavender Brown who is not that mush head, so obviously I clicked on.

I loved the setting (I recently went to the Globe so could visualise it), and the plot is intriguing enough for me to look out for updates. I also adore Mark Moon who is such a good OC - very well fleshed out.

I noticed one or two typos But most of the time I think that sensible, predictable you don’t deserve someone as gorgeous and perfect as me! Have you booked a table in the restaurant?’ You've either missed out a word/phrase here (someone as sensible and predictable as you - perhaps) or you need to change 'don't' to 'doesn't'.

‘Kitty needs her sausage, I kind of cringed at that bit. It didn't seem very in keeping with Lavender, and I don't mean the Lavender from the books, or the one I write, but actually your one. It just strikes me as both not crude enough - it's twee - (she's an Auror and werewolf, she's have heard a lot worse), and also rather an odd thing to say (do cats eat sausages?) Yes, I do know this is a sexual reference but the metaphors are mixed. It was really the only thing that jarred me in the dialogue which up to then had been very good. I think she'd probably say something more sexual and less euphemistic, that's all.

I loved the end, and will no doubt click again when you update. ~Carole~

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

With two tiny appearances in the battle, JKR established (at least to my satisfaction) that Lavender did a lot of growing up in her final year. I hope that my Lavender is still a little shallow and obsessed with boys, and looking good.

You ask how many people are the same twit that they were at sixteen?
Sometimes I am accused of that offence.
Ill recheck for typos. I thought Id caught them, but obviously not.

As for Lavenders rather odd remark, youre right. I still have not learned that, if Im unhappy with something, even the smallest phrase, its because its wrong and I should not simply leave it in and hope that no one notices. Rewrite required!
-N-

 

it might not be, but still by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Before Remus leaves for the Battle, what goes on in his mind?

Winner of the Copycat Challenge; written after the style of e e cumming's it may not always be so;and i say.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 256 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/08/11 Updated: 05/08/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This poem fits Remus and Tonks so beautifully, and I didn't notice - at all - the words we had to add. That is truly a remarkable feat because Lumos was a bugger in this challenge.

I'm struggling to find my favourite part of the poem because it is all so good and sweet and relevant to the Potterverse.

Very touching and so very Remus.

~Carole~

Author's Response: This was such a sad poem to write because we all know how that night ended for them. :( And Lumos was a PITA, I agree. Thanks for the reviewwww <33 (I have lost count of the response number.)

 

Not Alone by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary:

Hermione never left Harry's side...

...But that doesn't mean she never thought about it.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 105 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/11/11 Updated: 05/11/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 05/13/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ah, poor Hermione and her dilemma. Obviously she couldn't do a Ron and leave, but there must have been times when she wished she could do a runner. You have portrayed her loneliness during those times quite brilliantly. Harry, the brooder, barely speaking. Hermione ever-hopeful that he'll gain some respite, and perhaps that Ron will return (at least the relieve the tension by letting her have a good old rant - HA!.

There are places here where I thought it a bit syllable heavy. Generally, where I think the lines work best is where you have an 11 or 12 syllable pattern, so it might be worth trimming some of the words from certain lines

Even when the dangers and prejudice of the world outside I'd cut 'prejudice' from this line. I don't think it's absolutely necessary to the feel of the poem and it makes the line a bit stumbling to read.

I love the images here - the 'serpentine dreams', 'Horcrux-poisoned thoughts,' and the first stanza immediately painted a picture of them in that awful tent.

Enjoyed the poem, Jess, I'd have just tweaked it a little bit. ~Carole~

Author's Response:

I so get how that bit is stumbly. I looked over it, trying to cull it down, but I couldn't put it together.Yay for that!

I'm glad you like the content and the feeling of it. I was hoping that Hermione contemplating skipping out wasn't too strange or inconceivable to portray in a hair over 100 words, lol.

Thanks for stopping in. :D

~Jess

 

Tooth and Claw by welshdevondragon
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 21]

Summary: Past Featured Story"It's really rather tooth and claw. Most things want to bite or sting or kill you," Gloria Greengrass tells Winston Flint, as they walk through the woods together after Lucius and Narcissa Malfoy’s wedding.

Shortly afterwards Gloria is found murdered. As the Auror Fabian Prewett begins to question the suspects, he finds himself asking who would want to kill a fifteen-year-old girl?

This is welshdevondragon of Gryffindor writing for the 2011 Mysterious May Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt number two

Due to the current MNFF glitch, I have changed the rating to 3rd-5th years BUT this is a 6th-7th years story, and therefore should be read as such.

Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mental Disorders, Non-Consensual Sex, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 20321 Chapters: 5 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/11/11 Updated: 06/07/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/10/11 Title: Chapter 5: Bluebells

Oh! I didn't think it was Regulus, although he always seemed to be there, didn;t he?

Very well plotted, Alex, and an intriguing mystery.It was all so dark as well. Poor Winston. I really hoped he'd be out of Azkaban ... couldn't Regulus have sent the Aurors a confession ...pretty please? Mind you, I don;t think Winston would have been happy without Gloria. I loved the writing by her grave, it was very touching. And the sex scene with Florence was really well written.

All in all an excellent mystery. Well done, and

HAPPY BIRTHDAY


~Carole~

Author's Response: Oh, I'm pleased you didn't guess who it was. And thank you for your help with chapters 2 and 3- it really did make this story so much better, and I'm glad you thought it was good enough to read the last two chapters and review it. I don't think Winston would have been happy Gloria either, but he still probably would have been happier out of Azkaban. I think Regulus confessing would have been OOC.

Anyway thanks for the lovely review and the birthday wishes- I really appreciate both :) Alex

 

What Money Can Buy by welshdevondragon
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Past Featured StoryFlorence Delaine thought that all she needed in life was a wealthy husband. When she marries the violent Edgar Parkinson, she discovers that money cannot buy her happiness and determines to thwart her husband in the few ways she can.

Florence is a very minor character in my story Thin Red Lines and a more important one in another story of mine, Tooth and Claw. This one-shot takes place before Tooth and Claw.

Nominated for a best dark/ angsty story Quicksilver Quill. Thank you!

Due to the current MNFF glitch, I have changed the rating to 3rd-5th years BUT this is a 6th-7th years story, and therefore should be read as such.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Non-Consensual Sex, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 1363 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/13/11 Updated: 05/17/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 05/17/11 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

OOH, Alex. Really powerful story here. I clicked because I have some prior knowledge of your Mystery story and am glad I did. You do write OC's very well. They're incredibly well fleshed out and I could picture them in my mind as I read on.

I should start on Thin Red Lines now. I don;t usually read OC stories because I find they rarely interest me, but this is good and you've hinted at enough of the canon characters for it to intrigue me. (I dislike Rabastan very much in my personal canon).

Well Done ~Carole~

Author's Response: I love writing OCs/ canon characters who are pretty much OCs, so I'm really pleased that Florence came across as realistic. She just appears very briefly in Thin Red Lines (Rabastan slightly more so) so if you blink you might miss her. I hope you enjoy Thin Red Lines (I won't hold it against you if it gets too OC-y for you :) ) Thanks for the review- reviews, particularly in mid-exam horror, really cheer me up. Alex

 

The Victory Day Victims by Sainyn Swiftfoot
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary:

Two successive Victory Day parties; two survivors of the War poisoned. Similar circumstances, similar poisons, similar modi operandi.

 

Henry Chumly is an old, callous, unaccepting, misogynistic and in every way completely unsavoury drunk. Almost coincidentally, he also happens to be the best detective at the new agency of the Ministry, the the Cadwallader-Hundert Agency for Response to Malmagic.

 

Padma Patil is young, pretty, talented and excited to work at the Ministry, cracking cases and nabbing criminals. Before her application is accepted, though, she has to spend the customary few weeks working under a professional detective. She expects ennui, tasks far below her talents and frustration; but nothing anyone had ever told her prepared her for Henry Chumly.

 

This is the story (if you ask him) of how Henry put up with the bint and solved the case single-handedly or the story (if you ask her) of how Padma stunned everyone by not only managing to avoid murdering her utter bastard of a superior, but also being the first probationer to play a pivotal role in solving a case. This being a mystery, and in tune with the essence of mysteries, if you wish to find out the truth, you’ll have to read on till the end.

 

[chaptered; OCs and minor characters; comic mystery]

 

This is Sainyn Swiftfoot of Hufflepuff writing for the 2011 Mysterious May Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt 2.

 

The views expressed by the utterly hateable Henry Chumly are not those of my own. Please do not take offense. 



Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Slash, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 29131 Chapters: 7 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/15/11 Updated: 07/13/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/02/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Where we are introduced to the dramatis personae

I'm going to go for Justin because he has a silly name.

You obviously have this all very well planned out and the relationship between Padma and Henry is brewing nicely. Obviously, I find Henry obnoxious, but there's a part of me thinking he's putting some of this on. He seems to want to deliberately provoke her which is vile, but his provocative statements sometimes seem a touch bizarre. I'm actually thinking of the attack against women having a drink. It seemed to be a bit out of place to suddenly come out with that and I wondered if it would be better if he was thinking that, or mumbling it at no one in particular. When it came to the homophobia, that was done much better with him thinking about 'the pointy ends' rather than saying it.

That's quite minor,but I wanted to mention it because otherwise you risk turning him into such an anti-Gary-Stu, that he becomes a caricature. He hasn't at all, yet, by the way. At the moment he's just thoroughly objectionable, but I hope to see one or two redeeming qualities in him.

I'm enjoying the mystery aspect of this, very much. Why would someone want to murder two former DA members? Would it really be a DE out for revenge? They weren't that effective, were they? Hmmm, keeping us guessing - good job. ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/02/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Where Padma finally stands up to Henry and we meet more people

Okay, I'm a bit lost and too lazy to read the first chapter, but was Hannah at Susan's party? I thought she would be because they were friends, and I wondered if any other DA members were there as well? Obviously Padma wasn't or she could have described the scene, so was it just Puffs there...and why Avery? Hmm, this is intriguing. has Padma made her DA coin into a ring? Susan's parents annoy me (not your fault), but throwing her a party and inviting their friends and not wanting her to live a little after that hideous year they had a Hogwarts, they make me angry. Grrrr.

Small nit pick

Henry presumed he that he supposed to feel angry, or hurt, or some other unnecessary emotion. This sentence doesn;t make sense, too many 'he's' and a missed 'was', I think.

I like Padma in this chapter. The fact that she's started to fight back is good, and I am very pleased that her POV is coming into play now. OOOH, the touch with the wine made out of elves - joke or not, that is spooky.

Okay, I'm up to speed now. The story is getting very interesting. ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 05/20/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Where there is a dead body

Yay, great start, BB. I love Henry - well I don't love him because he;s obviously an utter git (ugh to the bedwetting) but he is a great character. Actually I have some sympathy for him. Padma sounds a little idealistic and he could well be trying to unsettle her.

Hmm, not many suspects yet (but then I haven't got many either), but I'm pretty sure you're going to expand on this and introduce some others soon.

I love your little extra touched here - the CHARM agency, Justin working for a politician, it all fleshes the story out beautifully.

“We’re married,” said Lavender. “We got married three months ago. I’m a journalist for the Prophet—“ Yay, you gave Lavender a career and she's not a mush head. small nitpick Grumbling, Harry unwillingly got up and tried to dig out the robes he had been wearing the day before, which could only possibly be less dirty than the ones he was wearing at the moment. I know Harry is a nickname for Henry, but I really think you mean Henry here ...

Look forward to reading the rest. I can tell this is going to be a bumpy, yet intricate, ride. ~Carole~

Author's Response:

Caaaarole! Thanks for the review! You'll find out how Henry turns out in the future chapters, don't worry :D About the suspects, you'll be introduced to them all in the next chapter, so no worries.  You're going to get more Lavender as well.

 

Kara already pointed out the Harry/Henry thing to me, I think I've changed it >.< I can never really be sure with the crappy, on-and-off internet connection here, but I think I have xD Thanks again for the review, and I'm glad you liked this chapter :D

 

The Last by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: In a world destroyed by bitter hatred, where magic is gone and her family dead and buried, a young woman makes her way to the Department of Mysteries, where she finds the one thing she was least expecting.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3228 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/15/11 Updated: 05/15/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 05/16/11 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Very bleak, but you at least left us with the hope that they can repopulate the world we love.

Great writing, as always, Gina. I'm not sure I needed all the chapter end notes because you weaved the story well enough that I'd picked up most of the back story.

Who was the Squib - evil, evil blighter! Was he a Malfoy or .... a Lestrange?

I want to say enjoyable read, but it wasn't enjoyable exactly. It was, however, enthralling and gripped me. Great job. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole - that was exactly the point at the end, that they could repopulate the world. Yay! The Squib is actually a Greengrass - Daphne's granddaughter, if I recall correctly from my scribbled notes in a notebook somewhere upstairs. So, you were close. I'm thinking the Malfoys in particular treated him poorly. Thanks for reading this. I know it's not enjoyable, exactly, like you said, but I'm glad it worked and the things I wanted to come through did. Maybe I'll edit the end notes since no one has questioned the thing yet. Thanks again! ~Gina :)

 

Because You Came by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 37]

Summary: As soon as he saw her, Draco knew she was the one. But Astoria wasn't like any girl he had ever met. To get her, he would have to become something beyond who he was. He would have to get his life back in order and change for good.

Written as a birthday present for two fierce lawyers of Ronald Weasley - Amanda/ahattab33 and Lori/WeasleyMom.

Disclaimer: I am not J. K. Rowling.

Winner of the 2011 QSQ's Best Canon Romance Story (Chaptered)



Warning: This story is originally rated 6th-7th year for excessive swearing and sexual situations. The rating has been changed temporarily only because we're having some technical problem with stories that have higher ratings. So, please click at your own discretion.

Categories: Draco/Other Character Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 17419 Chapters: 7 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/19/11 Updated: 08/10/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/26/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

YAY! he has a job!

Okay, this is a total squeeeee review, because I actually know the whole story - ha ha - but also because I've had a glassa (and I saw Glee today so my head is full of Mr Puckerman (and Santana)

You know I love this story.It's a great take on Draco after the war. Not utterly redeemed but getting there. And again, your story is very entertaining. LOVE IT.

Author's Response: YAY for glassas and squeey reviews! <3

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 05/19/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Thank Merlin and Salazar that there are more chapters. I thought this was a one shot, and then I'd have had to kill you.

I like this al lot. Draco is fast becoming one of my favourite characters - not the leather pants version beloved by Dramione lovers, but the one that realises he needs some form of redemption and is a git.

I love Goyle here. He's got his life back together in sharp contrast to Draco ... tell me, does he write poetry? (hee hee). It's good that he has a voice, I can't recall him speaking much.

Astoria is glorious. I am expecting big things from you about her.

All in all, I like this very much. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank Merlin and Salazar the first four chapters are already finished. Or else, I'd have to hide from you, and it would be impossible to do that. I am so happy you liked it YAY.

Goyle reads Shakespeare's sonnets. As someone wise and all-knowing said, Shaxy was a wizard. And I hope you like my Astoria - she's different from how I usually write her. D: She's no longer a Healer. Thanks so much for the revieeeew!

~Natalie

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/02/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Dear oh dear, I swear I'm going mad. I clicked on this and thought ... this is really familiar. *snort* Of course it is, you daft bint, you read it before - ha ha ha ha.

Love the story, but do have a nit-pick (Sorrryyyyyy)

“Ria has always liked fashion,

It's Tori - not Ria. Okay!!!111!!!!!

~Croll~

Author's Response: RIAAAA!!!111!111 And HAHAHAHA I couldn't believe my eyes when I saw your review. Thanks a lot!

~Natalie

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/11/11 Title: Chapter 7: Epilogue

When he didn’t answer, she continued. “I like you because you broke away from all that. You started afresh. You took a huge risk. That’s something I respect. Now, I love you. I can’t let that change because of things you did years ago, things you regret this night. Neither should you.”

Perfect!

You know I love this story, so I don't have much more to say. The blonde ferret seems to be haunting me again, and this portrayal is feeding that. GAHHHHHHH! Love this. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Redeeming the blond ferret is a good waste of time. :D Thanks for the reviewww!

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 05/21/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Credit for Draco's little rhyme goes to fabtastic Equinox Chick/Carole/Croll. Shhhh, Julia will kick me out of PA.

Really enjoying this story. I like the background into Goyle and his change from gormless chump to reasonable chump.

Your Draco is great. He's still as selfish as he is in the books, but he's starting to face up to his utter fuckwittage.

Intrigued to see where this is going ... ~Carole~

Author's Response: *cough* Just realised I never responded to this. D: I like that you like the story. : D (Dunno what else to say as you've read the full story hahaha.)

~Natalie

 

The Journey Back by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 79]

Summary: Hermione is working for the Department of Magical Law Enforcement on repealing old laws that favor purebloods, while Ron has recently left the Auror Office to join his brother at Weasleys' Wizard Wheezes. When Hermione decides to move to Australia to be with her parents, Ron is forced to confront the reasons behind her abrupt decision. Yet there is more going on than he realizes, and a simple proposal takes him to the other side of the world, where they will face one last test of their love. This story is now complete!

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 27879 Chapters: 10 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/20/11 Updated: 06/30/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 05/21/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

Yay, you've put it up on the boards! I love this story - especially because I have a little foreknowledge. Your characterisation is perfect - especially Arthur who is a joy.

Go, Ron, Go!

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Carole. You do have an idea of what's coming so I hope I can actually manage it. Thanks for all your help and the comment on characterization, I appreciate it! And yes - Go, Ron! Get her! Thanks, again! ~Gina :)

 

The Lost Weeks by the opaleye
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Past Featured StoryHermione sits and thinks of the boy who left and why she did not follow.

Tied in first place for the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award in Best Poetry.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 416 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/25/11 Updated: 05/31/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/02/11 Title: Chapter 1: Her thoughts linger on those silent weeks.

This is so beautiful and really brings a tear to my eye. hermione isn;t my favourite of the Trio (although I love her really), but this brings the pathos of her situation home. Of the three she was necessarily the outsider because she was the girl and just didn;t share as much the pair of them, but here she shows again and again her true worth to the group. Of course it's always been there, but your words high light her sacrifice, patience and loyalty. She gave up a lot for those boys, for Harry. I hope they appreciate it (yeah, I'm sure they do.)

Julia, your poetry moves me in a way no one's else does. The way this is written is so lyrical and effortless. I forgot the form and the repetitive words because I really didn't see them. It's seamless and beautiful.

Well done. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Carole :) My heart always aches for Hermione after Ron leaves so it's satisfying to know that I was able to evoke that melancholy through the poem. As for the actual sestina form, I'm so happy that it wasn't jarring or tiring to read. It took quite a bit of time to get it right. Sighhhh. Anyway, thanks so much for the lovely review, Carole!

 

Summary: An incredibly valuable item has gone missing, and everybody is completely stumped. There is no way a stranger could have entered the room! How was the crime committed? More importantly, whodunit? Were those blue beads on the floor before? What about those two mugs on the table? Why is Pansy sitting on Blaise’s lap?

Theodore Nott investigates.

This is Northumbrian of Ravenclaw house writing for the 2011 Mysterious May Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt #1 “ The Amateur Sleuth.

Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 10705 Chapters: 5 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/28/11 Updated: 10/16/12


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/30/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Observations of Theodore Nott

Hi there, I enjoyed this. It was an inventive mystery and I thought your take on the Slytherins and Susan with the five POVs was very interesting. I particularly like Pansy and the scene with the girls - ha ha to Millicent and Marcus being 'eterned' - not sure who I feel most sorry for.

As far as characterisation goes, Draco was a little too cocky and full of himself for my taste. Yes, I know he's an arrogant a-wipe but after he failed to kill Dumbledore, I'm not quite sure he's king of the hill, anymore. However, your opinion and reasoning is, I suppose, that back at Hogwarts, he'd be back to his arrogant self, so I can't complain too much on our difference of opinion.

I loved Theo. He's an intriguing character. Somewhat out of the loop but with the same background as Draco. I was interested in his father telling him NOT to get involved. I also adored his interractions with the Slyth girls and Perdita in particular.

Um ... okay, you know this is coming - ha ha - I am so predictable. I don't like Blaise much here. I cannot reconcile the aloof and sneering boy in the books with this one who chats up three birds at once - even if it is for gain. Plus, I sincerely doubt that Romilda and her friends would be quite so open with him. He's a Slytherin - she's a Gryffindor and whatever we think of her chasing after Harry, she's not going to flirt with the enemy - that's akin to collaboration. Him using his good looks is a reasonable supposition but being that free with his favours ... um ... I can't see it, not when you look at the canon of the books. Arrogant and perhaps smooth, but not a letch. He has far too high an opinion of himself, and he's very choosy.

I got a bit confused with how Susan managed to get away with the Sketch Mirror, but that's possibly because I read this all in one go and had the TV on). I really did love the inventive Weasley products and magic spells you used. The Magic Eye had my stomach churning. I was very pleased you had Blaise and Theodore working out who did steal it and not informing Draco because Draco would have Crucio'd poor Susan into insanity if he'd found out. It shows that Zabini has some humanity as well, although I have a feeling in his case it's about politics and biding his time (much like Theo).

Interesting mystery and a well crafted plot. I've hated writing these mysteries and yet I still did. You seem to have relished it. ~Carole~

Author's Response:
Carole, thanks for the review.

This is a late reply, sorry. Excuses: holiday (me and mine ban computers on holiday); and the length of your review.

I have plans for Millicent and Marcus (they appear in Tales of the Battle, too, but theyll have a much larger role I another story. Why feel sorry for them? Draco is an interesting character and, personally, I believe that hes a narcissist. He sucks up to Snape until he becomes a Death Eater, at which point he treats his Professor with contempt. Draco has two default settings (overlord and snivelling) neither of which are particularly pleasant. Hes more complicated than that, of course, and to some extent his cockiness is a front, but Draco knows that he is superior and needs people to know that. I wish Id given Theodore (does anyone ever call him Theo in canon? I suspect not) more thought before now. I really like the quiet shifty, scheming character Ive made him. I also wanted him to remain canonically little and weedy and to make him completely hopeless with girls.

Good old Blaise is such a contentious character, although his appearances in the books are little more than Theodores. He discusses Ginny, and girls, in the train in HBP. My reasoning behind his personality is that he is really good looking, and girls approach him (not something I have personal experience of). Im fairly certain that Pansy made a move on him and I suspect that Ginny gave him the brush off (Ginny is no fool) hence his comments. I think that he likes to be surrounded by adoring girls (what bloke wouldnt?). Was he being free with his favours? I dont think so. But an eighteen year old bloke who isnt in a relationship would probably take whatever he was offered (from a Purebloodlike Draco, he is a racist).

I thought that Id adequately explained how Susan got away with the sketch pad. There are three or four paragraphs around Pansys appearance which deal with it. This story could have been longer, but with my collab story (Unspeakable), plus Haunted Houes and MLT, I was running out of time. Perhaps Ill do a Moon with this and rewrite and expand it into five or six longer chapters after the challenge has been judged. Im rather proud of the Invisible Eye, disgusting and disorientating though it is. You are correct about the motives of both Blaise and Theodore, for them it is politics, not humanity.

I really love mysteries, I had a great time writing these challenges so Ill be writing more thriller/mystery/adventure stuff in future.

Neil

 

Remember by Apollonious
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Past Featured StoryOn 1 September 1998, Harry calls members of the wizard community together at Hogwarts. He speaks about the sacrifice they have all experienced in the fight against Voldemort, and the determination they must have to build a better future.

This was written for the PA? challenge for April 2011.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 289 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/28/11 Updated: 05/31/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/01/11 Title: Chapter 1: Remember

I love this poem, but really don;t know where to start. You quite rightly won this challenge because this just felt so right. Not a canon moment, but it should have been. Harry giving a speech, but the memories are still on the other man who made a difference.

There's a wonderful conversational quality to this poem as well. It made me smile, and then smile sadly because Dumbledore died before he could see the job done.

Wonderful poem, Olivia. ~Carole~

 

Hollow Soldiers by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary:

"This is how the world ends, not with a bang but a whimper."
 
-- T.S. Eliot,  The Hollow Men
 
Michael Corner was just one of many who fought for everything he believed in at the Battle of Hogwarts. He went in with all the right intentions and on the side of good, but the enemy he never thought he'd have to face proved to be fiercer than any curse that he would encounter during the fight.
 
And that enemy was himself.
 
 
 
This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Dark/Angst Story.


Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 5530 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/31/11 Updated: 05/31/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/02/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OOOH. Dear God. That's why he became a drug addict. Jesus, the emotions here are so real and raw. Wowzers.

Confession, I didn;t read this before because it's D/A and I was too busy to get into something intense, but the pace has slacked off, so I foraged around a bit. This is brilliant. I love stories about the fighters that weren;t sure they could fight. Not everyone is as brave and fearless no matter what they say beforehand, no one really knows how they'll react when the fight is actually on. So Lisa's dilemma really struck a chord with me. And Bloody Hell, Michael, you got her to stay. That is a shed-load of guilt to be carrying around with you.

I love the end. Killing Miles made me want to punch the air. He needed to do it at that moment, but I know he's going to suffer so badly longterm. And the fact that the incident has now sullied the rest of his life, the way he brushes off Harry's victory. Just. No. Words.

Well done (and Happy Birthday) ~Croll~

Author's Response:

Well, his tumble into addiction and bad behaviour couldn't have been for normal war trauma, I think. He was always a good kid at school, so for him to actually kill someone, it takes a monumental event. Murdering your cousin because he's pushing your buttons at the very wrong time and in all the wrong ways isn't something anyone would ever want to believe themselves capable of, but it's something he could never take back. The worst part of it between this story and Azure in the Snow is that it was wartime and no one judged him for it. He never paid for it in penal terms, so he tortured himself for it instead.

Not everyone has a pair of brass balls and can fight in a battle. They do because they must, but their lives are never the same. Michael isn't cut out for fighting because he had issues controlling his impulses, and Lisa certainly wasn't. And he has to live with that.

Lovely review, Croll of the Dungeon. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :)

~Jess

 
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