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What can I say. I live in London and am obsessed with a teenage wizard and his friends. Am I mad? Probably Do I care? Hell no!
EDIT: Grown? Um, probably not

For my first foray into the realms of fanfiction I've chosen to write about the Marauders. I'll always stick fairly closely to canon as I think JK knows best. Although I've enjoyed reading about other ships I, personally, don't think I could write with conviction about Ginny/Crabbe or Hermione/Mclaggan relationships.

EDIT: ha ha ha ha ha - How I have changed! I'm now firmly in the rare-pair, SSP, and things that aren't quite conventional camp, although I still loves me some James/Lily.

My second chaptered fic (Apparently Asleep) has started a love affair with Tonks/Remus and confirmed my obsession for all things Sirius. *sigh*

I am indebted to Terri (mudbloodproud) for being a great beta and all round amazing person. If it hadn't been for her encouragement I would have thrown in the towel many months ago.

EDIT: I have made a lot of wonderful friends during my past three years on MNFF, including (in no particular order) Natalie, Kara, Hannah/Bob, Jess, Gina, Lea, Lori, Julia, Minna, Emmahhhh, and the fantabulous BB.

I hope Mugglenet and you enjoy reading my words as much as I've enjoyed writing them. Huge thank-you to my niece, Amanda, for being one of the first to catch the Harry Potter bug and nagging me into reading them.

I’ve written a variety of stories, so here is them arranged in categories. Some are cross- referenced. So a James/Lily may appear in Marauder or Canon Romance

EDIT: I haven't written much Harry Potter fanfiction for a while. It is unlikely I'll update the two chaptered fics I first started as they became a little too long and unwieldy. Sorry about that.

A Second Chance
Contemplating Lilies
Dancing Queen
First Date Disaster
Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand
It Takes a Wolf to Prank a Dog
Learning to Fly
March Madness
O.W.L.s, Quidditch and the Added Distraction of Sirius Black
Peace in Heaven
Ribbons, not Strings
Sixth Time's the Charm
Thank you for your time, Professor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Sum of the Whole
Who's That Girl?
Wormtail on the Hogwarts Express

Canon Romance
'i'before 'e' (Percy/Audrey)
A Prize Above Rubies (Isla Black/Bob Hitchens)
Acorns (Bill/Fleur)
Apparently Asleep (Remus/Tonks)
Birthday Girl (George/Angelina)
Bound in the Beating of Each Other’s Hearts (Narcissa/Lucius)
Coup de Foudre (Bill/Fleur)
Dancing Queen (James/Lily)
First Date Disaster (James/Lily)
Five weeks (Remus/Tonks)
Forces of Nature (Ron/Hermione)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
In The Stars (Draco/Astoria)
Key of the Door (Ron/Hermione)
Kissing the Joy as it Flies (Seamus/Lavender)
March Madness (James/Lily)
Not Quite Perfect (Bill/Fleur)
Reconnaissance (Remus/Tonks)
Sixth Time’s the Charm (James/Lily)
Snowball Fights (Teddy/Victoire)
Until Death (Eaters) Do Us Part (Draco/Astoria)
Veils (James/Lily)
You Dance Divinely (George/Angelina)

Non (or rather tweaked) Canon (apart from one story, these don’t break any canon.)

Better than Chocolate (Charlie/Tonks)
Heat of Life (Harry/Katie)
Her Tomorrows (Harry/Parvati)
High (Scorpius/Lily)
Lavender, blue- A Gryffindor True (Lavender/Blaise)
Love At First Strike (Angelina/Terry)
Mirrors (Charlie/Penelope)
Misperception (Oliver/Cedric/Daphne)
Orphans of the Storm (Seamus/Parvati/Dean)
Passion Among the Primroses (Arthur/Mafalda)
Predictions of Love (Gilderoy/Sybil)
Ribbons, not Strings (Remus/Rosmerta)
Shrouds (Hermione/Draco)
Snapdragons (Charlie/OC)
Stars or Carousels (James/Dominique)
Summer’s Heat (Sirius/OC)
Swans (Mollyjnr/OC)
Teenage Witch (Charity/Myron Wagtail )
The Happy Couple (Harry/Ginny, Blaise/Lavender)
The Only One (Lavender/Blaise Teddy/Victoire)
The Untrodden Path (Draco/Hannah)
Where We Started From (Dean/Ginny)

Same sex Pairings
Apple-bobbing ( Lisa/Susan)
Close Your Eyes (Hermione/Lavender)
Drowning, not Waving (Oliver/Cedric)
Eyes That Know Me (Scorpius/Hugo)
Forbidden Colours (Tracey/Demelza)
Fracture (Theo/Justin)
Monochrome (Sirius/Remus)
The Dance We Do (Bellatrix/Amelia)
The Hat that Thinks it’s a Chair (Justin/Theo)
Truth Or Dare (Cormac/Zacharias)

Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
Lockhart, Sprout and Two Smoking Goblets
Passion Among the Primroses
Predictions of Love
The Bacchus Book
Vampire - Ghost Child!

A Prize Above Rubies
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
An Outstretched Hand
Shadows Deep

Others (General, D/A, Post Hogwarts, Next Gen)
A Tangled Web (D/A)
All in the Genes (NG)
Chasing the Scoop! (Post Hogwarts)
Christmas on the Outside (General/Trio era)
Dean Thomas and the Reiver Curse (Post Hogwarts)
Diavol (Remus Trio Era)
Every Breath You Take (Post Hogwarts/Next Gen)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
Friends in Unlikely Places (Post Hog. Hermione)
Growing Old Disgracefully (Post Hog)
High (NG)
Lavender, blue (Trio Era)
Mere Wisps of Light (Post Hog. Draco fic)
Muggles, Magic and Misconceptions (Next Gen)
My Funny Valentine (Post Hogwarts)
Staring into the Fire (Trio Era)
The Waiting Game (D/A)
Whispers from the Past (Next Gen)

The Foolhardy Boys and Parvati, too
Who’s that Girl?
Xanthe Interrupted

As They Watch
Beyond Beseeching
Celestina's Songbook: Christmas Edition, Volume 1
Cold Dreams
Draco's Journey
Fairytale of Hogwarts
Flying High
Forever France
Frozen Silence
Hey, brother
I Believed in Lily Evans
Master Barty Regrets
Phoenix Flames
Queen of My Heart
Sirius, Baby
The Daydream Pedlar's Song
The Four
The Labyrinth Mind

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Whirlwind by hestiajones

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: "Do you remember me?" he asked.

She did, but she wasn't sure what to feel about a guy who had suddenly reappeared after a decade. But over the next twenty-four hours, her life was going to change, and all because of him.

Written as a birthday present for the too a*****e-for-words Carole/Equinox Chick, who has been a lovely friend and a lovely role model...in more ways than one. Here's hoping you have a great time reading this. HAPPY BIRTHDAY!

Heartfelt thanks to Kara who I repeatedly harassed on AIM. :D

DISCLAIMER: I am definitely not J.K.Rowling.

Nominated for a QSQ in the Next Gen Category.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/20/11 Title: Chapter 4: Epilogue

Ahhhhh, wonderful. But if she doesn;t take the tube again, then I won't see her, or all the little Scamander/Weasley children.

Perfect, perfect story. *sigh*

Author's Response: I'm planning an evil sequel, so she might take the tube again. Hmmm. Glad you enjoyed it!


Wild Card by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story

It was going to happen eventually: Oliver Wood had to retire. But when the decision was made for him, he allowed himself to be tricked into grooming his replacement. However, coaching proved to be a completely different animal, especially when the untried and unbridled Roxanne Weasley pushed his limits every step of the way.


This story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Non-Canon Romance.


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/21/11 Title: Chapter 1: In Between Days

I might read them, but then again I might write them. AGHHH! I love your Oliver. I love your Quidditch stories, I love your writing. Darn it, I love you, Jess.

This is really good. I am going to click on chapter two right now.

OOOh, it's Boy's Don't Cry, which is the first song on my Greatest Hit's album hee hee.

Thank you! (You must be on Top tens by now.)

Author's Response: I don't know where the hell this idea came from, but I was just chatting along with Gina on AIM and *poof*, there it was.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/21/11 Title: Chapter 2: Boys Don't Cry

OOOh, I love this and can't wait for the next chapter. This is so exciting, Jess. I'm wondering about the chemistry between them ... twenty five years between them but ... wow ... they're hot. Actually as magical people live longer, does that make and age difference less of a problem? *ponders*.

Brilliant. Love it. Fab. Incoherencefromreviewer. ~Carole~

Author's Response:

Haha, I bet when you woke up this morning, the idea that you'd be subliminally shipping Oliver/Roxanne would never have occurred to you. I just figured that since you ARE the best, you deserved the best that rarepairing had to offer that doesn't involve Snape, a Time Turner, or bestiality, lol. :D

Heart you. The rest will *probably* be posted before you go to bed. 

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/22/11 Title: Chapter 3: Just Say Yes

Wow! Wow! Wow! what amazing sex these two are going to have. (Blast, how can I write Oliver/Cedric now). Oliver is so bloody gorgeous in this. That kind of says far too much about my preference for cumudgeonly gits - ha ha.

Jess, thank you so much. I have so enjoyed this story and I am in utter awe of your ability to write 'Sexual Situations' - they're so vibrant Small typo Yes… no… how the hell should I know! I don’t know what love it, I think you mean 'is' and not 'it.'

I am giggling at the last line and I think I'm even more in love with the guy. He has a sense of humour - YAY!

thank you - again and again and again. This has been such a joy to read. Can't wait to see what George and Angelina say ... ~Carole~

Author's Response:

Hehe, methinks Daddy might not approve.

I was tossing around whether to have 'nice' romance or borderline 'Rawr! I is animal!' mating, but then I figured both would be good, plus I knew you could appreciate a bit of unique sexual encounter.

Oliver is such a tosser, isn't he? I think Roxy said it best when she said she'd idealised him when she was a teenager, but she actually loved him more when she found out he was a bit of a git. What girl doesn't fall for a handsome, rogueish older man at that age?

Oh, and he was totally serious about the split thing. I even have the mechanics of it worked out in my head. Lots of shady things going on up in there. lolz

You know, when I thought of this, I assumed that you would like it, but after about 1000 words in, I actually faltered a bit. I just wasn't sure if I was treading on your future plans, so midway, I made a bit of an adjustment. I wove in a couple details from DNW -- small, seemingly insignificant things that no one would think twice about but you. For instance, his dad was an arse and played for Appleby, and he was in love once in his life. I even toyed with keeping them apart so as to keep true to Oliver's sexuality as portrayed by you, but when she tried to stick her hands down his pants, I knew it had to go all the way. I couldn't split them up; it felt wrong. 

So here you go. My gift to you is the rarest of rarepairs that doesn't require brain bleach or bestiality, as well as a bit of light-hearted smut and a happy ending (yay for double-entendre!). Have a lovely day-after birthday. 

And, as I've said and will continue to say to all reviewers of this fic...


~~'~,~~@ (crappy text rose... or a really disfigured pocket sausage -- your pick, lolz)

Carpe Diem by Karaley Dargen

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Carrie McKinnon, soon-to-be seventh year Hufflepuff, is not going to let the war get her down. However, it is going to affect her in one way or another – and maybe that's a good thing.


This is for Carole/EquinoxChick, and much less than she deserves. You are an incredible, magnificent person, and I still completely fangirl you. If I ever get close to what you are/have now, just talent-wise and with all the ideas you always have, I'd be happy. I really admire you and what you do a lot, so don't ever change.

Muchas muchas Gracias to Nat/hestiajones for helping me out, event though she should have been in bed.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/21/11 Title: Chapter 1: Carpe Diem

OOOOH, this is fantastic! I love the story because it's so natural. Sirius is gorgeous, and I was starting to feel sorry for him when she kept picking on everything he said - ha ha.

Carrie in Hufflepuff - Brilliant because we are obviously very cool. I liked the fact that she didn;t like Lily much but wasn;t sure why. Good rounded character. And Lily being scared of heights - nice one. I hope you're going to write that. because it would make such an interesting story.

Thank you, thank you, thank you. I'm lucky to have all of you as such great friends. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Carooole,
I'm so glad you liked this and that you had a good day, obviously. Yes, Hufflepuffs are very cool scarily (or rather intimidatingly) so. We should all beware...

Really happy you liked this thank you so much for leaving a review :D

The Other Woman by hestiajones

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: He loves his wife, but that other girl will never leave his heart.

Written as a birthday present for the vivacious coolcatelly/Elene. This poem was inspired by Equinox Chick's Shrouds. If you haven't read it yet, and if you ARE a Dramione fan, then shame on you! I mean, hey, it nearly converted me.

DISCLAIMER: J.K.Rowling is not me. HA!
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/29/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I love this poem and I want to write a really good review, but somehow I can't, There's no crit here, just awe.

You do have this amazing talent for scene setting. Although a metaphor, I can really see Draco sitting alone in a room beside an open window and perhaps indulging in a glass of Firewhisky as he thinks about his wife (who he adores) and his other forbidden love.

Thank you for the free ad fopr Shrouds. If I ever write a follow up (and I just might) then I shall reference this poem because you've just given me an idea ...

Gorgeousness in poetry. ~Carole~

Author's Response: This is the third Draco poem I have written. Man must be more interesting than I give him credit for. *Sigh*

Thank you for the lovely review! I am excited to hear it gave you an idea, and I eagerly await to read that sequel. Yes, I am asking for more Dramione. Who would have thought?


Playing the Game by Writ Encore

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Gideon and Fabian Prewett struggle to balance their lives and the demands of the Order of the Phoenix, and life throws everything off kilter in this equation.

This is Kuri of Ravenclaw writing for the 2011 Aprils Fools' Day Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt 3: Lonely Lists: Marauder Era

Betas: Annie (midnightstorm), Alex (welshdevondragon) and Chant (thegirllikeme)

For Annie and Google.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/30/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Taking the Scenic Route

Hi there, This is an interesting story. So few people write the Prewetts, yet they have an interesting story that should be told, so thank you for that. I'm not sure about your portrayal of Molly here. I know she is quite judgemental (all the Weasleys bar Arthur are) and her behaviour towards Fleur wasn’t good ... but she did welcome her (and Fleur wasn't the nicest of people, either). I just think your Molly is far too rude to Emmeline. I suppose she could be exhausted with all the children, but I still think Molly would be the type of person who would sit Emmeline down with a large cup of tea partly to impress on her the importance of her 'home-making' skills and fire off forty off questions. Molly is a very curious and nosey character, but displays none of that curiosity about her brother's new woman ... odd. Also, far from being annoyed that Emmeline had money, there is a part of Molly that is impressed by money and stature (her reaction to Scrimgeor). I liked the implication that she reacted when there was a threat to her family. Perhaps that is true at that time, but I do think she changed rapidly - possibly when her brothers were killed and she realised the threat was encompassing everyone. Plus, having young kids and twins is enough to narrow anyone's mind (then they get to the age of five and you bundle them off to nursery and start to have a life again). So, actually I think you're a bit harsh on Molly.

There were a few Brit-picks - generally in the dialogue that I wanted to point out.

“After five kids, I’d say he needs something,” added Fabian. “I’m just saying. Are you done yet?” “You know this isn’t going to work, right? Dying these things.” Molly waved her hand at the stuffed toys. "Does your friend know anything about raising children?” “Shut up, Molly,” said Gideon warned her with an air of forced calm.” Let’s enjoy ourselves for one weekend, yeah? For me? For the boys? It’s my birthday. Fake it.”

Take this exchange. It sounds, to my ears, both a bit modern for 1978 and also rather American. Molly ending her sentence with 'right', is something that I can't see her ever doing. She doesn;t speak like that in the books. Fabian saying 'I'm just saying.' is very modern. I baulked at that, because it was so similar to the oft-used phrase on the boards 'just sayin' '. It would be better if you used 'Just thought I'd mention it.' The other one was 'Fake it.' which comes across as a bit modern - to me, but I'm struggling to think what else he'd say 'Just pretend' perhaps. The last thing was that we'd be far more likely to say 'torch' than 'flashlight' but as it's Emmeline giving the gift and she's French, then there's a reasonable assumption that she speaks American English. - Sorry, that's my Brit picks over. I'm afraid I am very annoying when I read stories but it's the type of thing I notice.

Brit picks aside, (and my defence of Molly) I did enjoy the story, although you have left this very open-ended. Is Emmeline pregnant? What will happen now she’s fallen? Are her and Gideon actually involved in a relationship? ( I wasn't sure because it seemed they got together for convenience.) Anyway, I enjoyed this and good luck in the challenge ~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole. I was going to answer you because this was so thoughtful, and as that was what it was, I needed to think. You bring up interesting points; the thing about Molly is something that I needed to explain; I did not mean to represent her as a cow. Yes, she sounds like one, yes, but I think that even if we follow and marry characterization, we let out for an initial reaction. Perhaps I am wrong, as I often I am. I do not know. I think that we dont give way for initial reactions. Sometimes, we, as people react differently, and as Molly was seeing her brother for the first time in forever (who could very well be a whore), I see this as a just response. Their lives as brother and sister are so different, yet they come to terms. Can I share what I was thinking here? I was thinking, How awful would that be if that were the last time she had a heart to heart with her brother? Her brother. I mean, in movies, you get those clich, good-bye scenes. But, in reality, what do they show? Nothing. We dont often get that second chance. It is here, I believe, that all three of these people, Gideon, Emmeline and Molly are in the wrong. Yes, I believe that Molly would eventually sit Emmeline down to tea or whatever, but here, its the initial reaction. I see Molly as neither a good or bad person. She may not be a woman married to chickens and popping out child after child, but why cant an outsider not view them that way in their own tunnel vision? Gideon sees the world thus; she sees it this way. The point of this passage is indeed that Gideon is harsh. Im glad that you understand that, I think.  We dont have to write what we think as writers; we portray, or, at least, try to show that through our characters. Not everyone loved Professor Dumbledore, yes? And in life, we view those who we love or sometimes like in different ways depending on life. It doesnt mean we hate them or shut them out. Oh, yes, as always, I slipped on the British English. Forgive me. Oh, they are married, but you are right, its for convenience and other favors because he didnt want to leave her. They do love each other as good friends, so its not lovey dovey, no. I hope that you stay with me. Thank you for your points and insights. Youve given me a view. Hope this was worth the wait of a response, if you care. - Jenn

A Captain Captivated by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •

Even the jubilance of a Quidditch Cup could become taxing on Percy's nerves, but it seemed almost cruel when he couldn't even take a shower in peace, despite it being well after midnight.

Driven out of his own dorm and to the prefects' bathroom that he scarcely ever visits, Percy finds that the room hadn't yet been vacated by its prior occupant. 

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/29/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ha ha - I love it. Sorry, this will not be near enough recompense for the wondrous review you've just left me, but I had to leave something because I just adored the story.

I have to admit, I was half hoping Cedric would turn up. That particular night is the first time they seriously got together in DNW and you know how one's own stories become imprinted as canon. Anyway, the mark of a good writer who is writing alternative canon is that I found it very believable. I loved Alicia's characterisation here as viewed by Oliver. 'Bonkers' is such a good word. Oliver was still recognisably JKR's obsessed captain and my Oliver, but you added a complicated kind of chivalry. He's avoiding Alicia, but he didn;t screw her over. He's trying to be honest.

Percy was brilliant. The same prig. The boy who craves peace and can't join in with fun. I really felt for him and his confusion over both the bathroom incident and then Oliver kissing him.

I like the end very much. You've left me wanting more ... but ... I don;t think they'll meet up. I get the feeling that they might have an awkward drink in a pub, and perhaps a fumble, but then no more. Just too sad.

What is it about Oliver Wood that we all love. Perhaps it's the sketchy canvas, but he lends himself to so many pairings and stories.

Thank you for writing another great story for him. ~Carole~

Author's Response:

I think the thing that draws me to Oliver the most is that he's a driven athlete with no discernable past in canon. I love athletes and I love giving story-less characters a life that dwells inside what we know about them for sure. Plus, movie!Oliver was the first character from the Potterverse I ever crushed on. :D

And as for Percy, I was going for slightly confused and perhaps a bit tittilated. I don't know if he's attracted by men in general, or just by Oliver, whose stuff he had inadvertently seen and maybe even admired. I agree that nothing would've ever come from it, save for your aforementioned drunken fumble, but I do want to hold out hope that Oliver could lighten up the ever-stiff Percy.

Thanks for fuelling my Oliver addiction. He's fast becoming one of my favourite characters to write. 


Light by MissMeg

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: A poem about the deaths of the Potters.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/30/11 Title: Chapter 1: Light

This is so simple and yet such a lovely poem. There is a real sense of the event here happening in slow lotion. The death of the Potters is still something that makes me sad (although without it there would be no series) but they were so selfless in their sacrifice *sigh*.

Great poem, Meg ~Carole~

Author's Response: I think the deaths of the Potters makes everyone sad. Thank you so much for the review. -Meg

Commencement by hestiajones

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: There is a boy in this orphanage, and something is not quite right about him.

Written as a birthday present for lily_evans34/Rachel, who is lovely, talented and wonderfully funny. :) I hope you have a great day.

Nominated for a QSQ in the Dark/Angsty category.

Thanks to Kara and Carole for their help! This story would still be full of holes if it weren't for you two.

DISCLAIMER: J.K.Rowling is not me. :p
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Creepy .... the story, I mean, not you. *snort*

This is a great story. So dark.

Then, he looked down at the victim and felt the hum of its body warming his arms.

That line made me shudder. It's almost as if that's his last chance to behave like a decent person, and yet he doesn't take that chance. *shudder*

Well Done ~Carole~ (3)

Author's Response: I am creepy, too. :o And yes, that is the exact moment where Tom begins to descend into dehumanity. Urgh. Thanks for reading this, Croll. I didn't think you will. :)

Lost in August by Padfoot Patronus

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Something happens on a full moon night that James Potter didn't see coming.

This is for you, Kuri, for your remarkable patience as a beta and the endless hours on gmail.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/08/11 Title: Chapter 1: Lost in August

Hi there. I rather like this story. The set up is good, and the characterisation in general is excellent. I loved James and Sirius in this and Peter was masterly, carefully sowing the seeds for the Marauder dynamic to destruct.

Didn't like the Remus/Lily relationship. I'm canon bound, it's true, and this doesn't go against canon, but it's not Remus. He was loyal to an absolute fault to James (hence the reason he doesn't intervene when they're bullying Snape) and although I can see how he'd be fond of/in love with Lily, I really can't see him acting on it. And Lily is being rather dumb here if she wants him to carve his initials into the tree and not have James suspect anything's going on. Is she two-timing him in your mind? It's not clear, although it is in their seventh year so it could go either way. That doesn't fit with my version of her ... but that is only my opinion. Sorry, I just don't like the pairing. It didn't ruin the story at all, though because it did give a very good reason for James' mistrust. Although ... *sigh* why on earth couldn't they see through Peter. (Dragon Di really caught that in Edges. Must go and re-read ... )

There are one or two nitpicks (sorry) .

And he’s juggling jobs in both his hand. This is confusing. Either he's juggling two jobs in both hands, or juggling both jobs in one hand. Your phrasing is a bit off at that point.

And the evil Brit in me is raising eyebrows over a basket of muffins bought at the Leaky Cauldron. Firstly, the Leaky Cauldron is a salubrious type of place and buying any sort of food seems to be a risk to health. And then there's the era issue of muffins (and yes this is petty, I admit it). Muffins in that era, meant the bread ones that you'd have for breakfast (English Breakfast Muffin). We didn't start eating American type muffins until shows like Friends appeared on the screen and suddenly we decided we were American. Baskets of muffins are still fairly rare ... and I don;t think you can buy anything like that - to take away - from a pub. Maybe Madam Puddifoots (or whatever that twee cafe is called) instead, or some magical bakery shop.

Liked the end very much. If James had survived Voldy, then he'd be a werewolf. Clever.

Good luck with the challenge ~Carole~

Author's Response:
Hey you! Lovely to see you here. I suppose I might get the honour more often except I don't seem to write very much AND I keep deleting my old embarrassing stuff. I did one yesterday. Ahem. So.

The fact that you say excellent characterisation means so much. This wasn't going to be light-hearted, and I was only slightly ashamed that I had nothing half way uplifting to offer for April Fools. Dark/Angst comes easier to me and here it is.

Let's see the things you bring up here. First off, you mention Peter sowing the seeds, but Im curious if you got that Peter is not actually there? He presence there, if you will, is a voice in James' head. That's why I neglected to write Peter's (to borrow Kuri's expression) "mannerisms" to show subtly that James is imagining him. Peter's conversation with James reflects an argument that James conducts inside his own head there in the forest and has most probably done before as well when Lily was attacked etc. All the things Peter says to James could most certainly pass off as his own thoughts. Because he's trying to reassure himself that he must have faith in his friends, his subconscious takes the form of Peter because Peter is the friend who ultimately seems harmless to James, who almost always seems to agree with him.

In the end, I think the friendship combusted because of what was in James' own head or the way each of them thought about the other. Peter, the real Peter, may or may not have a hand in prodding the Marauders' individual fears - that's for another story or maybe that's not a story for me to write - but here I wanted to explore how sometimes without wanting to, without meaning even, some bit of our own personality triggers the way our relationship with others wear apart. In this case, it is that James wants very badly to believe that it is NOT Remus and it that stops him from seeing the truth about who is.

Remus/Lily. I like to say that I'm a canon girl but that's not entirely why I read fanfiction. My OTP is James/Lily but I love Lily/Sirius, Lily/Remus, Lily/Snape just as equally. But here's my thing. There are so many levels at which a relationship can be written. I don't see this "/" between two character names as indicating that they are both definitely in love or will resolve by the end of the story. I don't just see Remus as being loyal to James but I think in some way Lily was too. But then I also see her as unsure, experimental, cheeky and at times, a little manipulative even. I'm not saying that ultimately applies to how it led up to the kiss. In my mind, that scene could have been anything. Yes, one could say nothing gets more explicit than a kiss. Of course. But James is seeing it. This is first person. The fact that he thinks about that kiss but dismisses it, shows that he's strong and it doesn't matter and that he really understands that Lily and Remus share something. He's the jealous type, yeah, but I see him as being more. She says your turn but what do you know if Remus actually put their initials on the tree. I know that putting names on a tree is exclusive often to a particular kind of relationships. Yet. If it makes it easier, I can tell you that James is totally honest in this narrative. What did he feel then? Maybe anger. Maybe betrayal. Thats another story. What does he think now? He wants to really believe that Remus cant be the traitor. In my mind, he was looking in that memory for reassurance that Remus feels a level of love for Lily and he that would never voluntarily do something that would hurt a hair on her head.

About the Briticism. Can I tell you I wrote this story first without adding a single prompt? I do all things out of order really. I did try to be inspired by the prompts. But nothing ideal sprang up. A very good friend pushed me to do this. So after its completion, I sprinkled in the prompts. There. My secrets out. Haha. You know I went for muffins but I was thinking of buns. I remember this rhyme from nursery: hot cross buns, one a penny, two a penny. *hides*So embarrassing. I might come to change this. But you must understand I was REALLY desperate! Hah. Its nice to have this pointed out though. I think basket would need changing too, because an entire basket (I ask you!) is rather misleading if Im not trying to give you the impression that Remus is making some statement by bringing her favourite snacks home while pretending to be thoroughly oblivious about what it might mean.

Glad you liked the ending, I saw James as being hurt mostly and even if he did survive Voldemort maybe he wouldnt turn into a werewolf. Hes feverish really and claustrophobic and an hour or so ago had been very scared. I think all those things have him seeing things. Poor guy.

I wrote a monster. Thank you for taking the time to review. Akay

Azure in the Snow by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 6th-7th Years •

The harsh realities of life separated them, but the even harsher realities of death brought them back together. But could an apology bring back the loss of innocence?


A companion piece to Hollow Soldiers.


This story has been nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Dark/Angst Story.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/06/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really like this. I mean seriously, really, adore the story. I clicked on, not knowing what this was going to be about, but imagined - ah, it's Jess, bit of decent smut here to take the edge off my day. Instead I find a very powerful tale. The drugs came as a complete surprise, but they shouldn't. I doubt anyone came out of the battle unscarred, and I applaud you for not going down the usual route of Firewhisky.

I was a bit confused about Michael's relationship towards Lisa. Was Anthony's anger directed at him because he felt that all the Claws should be there for Lisa? Or was there something else he blamed Michael for? Was it Michael's fault that Lisa was in the coma, perhaps? Sorry, I'm rambling because there's a raging plot bunny hopping around in my head.

Padma knew she never could’ve dealt with seeing the blanching corpse of someone who used to laugh at the stupidest jokes yet had a wit sharp enough to cut. Gah, amazing line. I love it. Poor, poor Lisa.

Great story, ~Carole~

Author's Response:

I realised that I've never written drug fic before, but I've always wanted to. Every day, people surrender their lives and their futures for a bag of white powder, so it makes sense that someone we know from the Potterverse would have done. I picked Michael because he seems to be my Ravenclaw scapegoat, as he was in Seeds of Indifference as the douchebag, abusive boyfriend. I really must be nice to him at some point, though.

Anthony was mad at Michael for what he did to Padma. In my brain universe, Anthony and Padma had dated for a while before she pulled the see other people card and already had one in mind. I'm sure you can guess who. On top of that, Anthony is one of those judgmental people who thinks everyone with an addiction is weak and stupid, sort of like non-smokers who sneer and say, "Why don't you just quit?" 

And as for what happened to Lisa, her story comes with a pre-story. I might even use my Trio Era prompt to write it. I fascinated myself while responding to The_Real_Hermione's review below.

Glad you liked it, and I'm guessing you got the reference to drugs in the title now that you've read the story, hehe. I'm wagering no one else got it. :/



Somebody Loves Me by Snowlily

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Al and Rose contemplate how to say those three little words.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/25/11 Title: Chapter 1: Somebody Loves Me

Hi there

I wanted to leave a review because you seem to be getting it in the neck for writing about cousins. In the Potterverse there are many examples of cousins marrying, and as a Brit, I really have NO issue with this whatsoever. Comments like 'gross' are actually laughable.

I do have to Brit pick though (sorry, it's what I do). Rose using words like 'gotten' and the whole set of sentences ' I don't wanna! I don't wanna!' etc make her sound like a kid straight out of Glee. (Also Hogsmeade has an 'e' on the end.) "Oh, I think, ah, shoot. I forgot,” Rose said. “That happens to me so much it’s not funny. I mean, I’ll have my hand up in class, for a while, then by the time the teacher calls on me, I’ve forgotten what I was going to say, and then I have to tell everyone, ‘Sorry, I forgot what I was going to say,’ and look all stupid.” That whole stretch of dialogue is very American, and really didn't ring true to me at all. It might help if you got a brit-picking beta for future stories (there are a few on the beta boards). Then again, I'm just one of a handful of Brits on the site.

I thought you set the story up very well, but it was pretty short. I think it would have been nice to expand this so we see how they got to the point of going out together.

This was sweet and I'm pleased Al loved her back. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks! I guess it's pretty obvious (to British people) that I'm an American...he he.... I'm really glad you don't have a problem about the cousin thing, because even though she doesn't, LukiLaeta's my friend and I told her what to say....hehe....Thanks for the Hogsmeade thing, because I've been confused for a while....=) Actually, I'd love to have you as a beta reader, because I really need help with that sort of thing, and you're really nice with it! Thanks again! =)

Not Alone by The_Real_Hermione

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Teddy Lupin appears to be surrounded by love and happiness, yet sometimes death and loneliness overshadow everything he does.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/19/11 Title: Chapter 1: Not Alone

Aww this is so sweet. I love this look at teddy's life. Although he had Harry and Andromeda, it cracks me up that he never had Remus and Tonks who remain my favourite characters in the book. I still rail at JK for offing them.

I was intrigued by the POV, because at first I thought you were writing second person - which isn't one I like much, but the first person and the fact it was Victoire was lovely.

Great fic ~Carole~

Author's Response: Hi Carole, Thanks so much for reading/reviewing one of my fics!! I'm glad you thought it was sweet and I did justice to Teddy. I think he would feel guilty about being lonely and missing his parents, because he has Andromeda and Harry and so he shouldn't complain, so that's what I was trying to show here. I know, Remus and Tonks are great characters, I was pretty upset when they died too. I'm glad you liked the perspective - I sort of did it in a mixture of first and second person because it follows the song. Although personally I actually really like stories in second person haha. ~Katrina

An April Goodbye by PoeticallyIrritating

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: It’s April Fools’ Day. Lily Evans wants nothing more than to escape, but she's caught off guard by someone she'd prefer to forget.

This is PoeticallyIrritating of Ravenclaw writing for the 2011 Aprils Fools' Day Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt 3(A).
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/11/11 Title: Chapter 1: An April Goodbye

Hi there, I think this is an interesting story. I like your characterisation of Lily here, and the fact that it's a Lily-centric story that actually doesn't involve too much of James bugging her, or feature the Marauders too much.

You have a timeline error. You say she's fifteen and then, when she's thinking about Snape, she remembers him calling her a Mudblood. You also have them discussing their OWL's. The 'Mudblood' incident was right in the middle of OWL's after the DADA exam.. And at that stage both Lily and Snape were sixteen years old (It's 1976- both were born in January 1960) If he'd called her a Mudblood before the DADA exam, then I really don't think she'd have rushed to his defence when James and Sirius were attacking him.

Timeline aside, I really liked their conversation (her not wanting to ask after his friends) and the description of that kiss was so good (the chapped lips). I loved the confusion writing inside her - poor Lily. I also liked the banter at the end with the Marauders. Her observation that Peter called her Lily was rather good, although (sorry nit-pick again) I would think it more likely that Remus would call her 'Lily' and Peter would be more inclined to ape his friends. That's just my opinion, though, and in no way invalidates yours.


Author's Response: Oh, dear! I tried to find out the timing of that bit, but I didn't have my book with me and I was concerned about deadlines. >.< Well, that's embarrassing. Thank you so much!

How to Wait by WeasleyMom

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Though the trials of war are behind them, life will always include difficulties that must be faced.

This fic won the 2011 Quicksilver Quill in the category Best Canon Romance, one-shot. Thank you so much! :)
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/11/11 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

OOOH, this is so lovely. I always had this feeling that having kids didn't come easily to Hermione and Ron. It's not something you can get out of a book, after all.

This is a really heartfelt fic, Lori, and it made me sad (just a little bit) although I know that it all ended happily for them.

Ireally like Ron in this. He knows how to react and it shows how he's matured as a person. I don;t find it at all OOC because I think we saw this side emerging in DH - the screams for Hermione when she was being tortured, his return to the tent, saving Harry's life and becoming more of a leader when Harry was brooding. It's all there in canon and you've extended that fantastically.

Really lovely story. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks, Carole, I'm glad you liked Ron here, and am relieved that you don't think I've stretched his maturity too much in this. I imagine they are well into this particular trial with many months more to go of it, and I do think he would have an understanding of how she is feeing, as well as dealing with his own feelings on it. It's so interesting that you thought they had trouble, too... not sure why, but I always imagine them getting married rather quickly (after taking so long to figure out their feelings), waiting a a couple of years, and then wanting to start a family, never considering that it might not happen according to their plans.

Anyway, thanks so much for reading this and taking the time to review. :) I'm thrilled you liked it.

Bicie Serca by BlueJoker

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Sofia seeks refuge within the walls of Hogwarts from the bloodied and terror-filled streets of Krakow. Yet she is not entirely welcomed. The moment she reaches the cold shores of England she experiences jealousy, loss of identity, the perils of war and the question of her right to exist.

Nominated for Best Historical in the QSQs 2011.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/15/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Four, The Train

Hi there. Okay, I know I've taken my time, but I'm here to review again.

This is a good story, so don't have any doubts about that, and your writing is well done. The tension through this last chapter holds throughout to a gut churning extent. Despite knowing that she's going to be at Hogwarts, I thought they were about to be shot.

I am glad that you've promised the next chapters won't be as dark because it is quite a depressing read at times - but necessarily depressing because of the subject matter. However, I am a reader who tends to stay away from D/.A type stories, but I'm probably in the minority.

I know you've been asking about the lack of reviews. I think there's a number of reasons which are all unfortunate but don;t reflect on your story. Put simply: it's historical and about OC's - that's two factors that straight away put people off. I have a Historical on the boards about Isla Black that won the QSQ last year, yet still only has 4 reviews (it's only a one shot, mind you). If you want to write a populist story, then canon characters and Marauder or Trio era are the way to go. Ron/Hermione fluff is very popular. However, I'm not suggesting that you scrap this and start writing pink candy floss romances because this is clearly your niche, I'm just explaining why you haven't picked up that many reviews. I can't tell you how odd it's been seeing an incredibly ridiculous mystery that I wrote pick up 12 reviews whereas others that I think are far better and have more integrity barely scrape 2.

That's by-the-by. This is a good story, well-researched and heart breaking. It deserves more reads and reviews, but it's hard to get people hooked into a story.

Keep writing and don't give up. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you :) I did figure that it was perhaps because I was writing this for myself; the reader doesn't come into mind until I actually submit it, and thinking about it I can't say that I've ever willingly clicked on an OC story. I happy that at I at least have some loyal readers, that's enough for me now. I think what upset me a few days ago was that chapter three only had two reads! But this has obviously risen, so I'm not feeling so insecure!

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/16/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1, The Zimmermaanns.

This is a wonderful idea for a story. You're dealing with harsh issues here - the harshest, infact - and intertwing them pretty darn well with the Potterverse.

Your style and use of language is very good and the scene setting at the beginning is so intense. I was immediately brought right into the story and the atmosphere.

there were one or two places where I thought the phrasing a bit clumsy.

But she was a Jew, and Jews were not welcomed there any longer, by the influence of Grindelwald. I think this should either be 'by the order of Grindelwald, if he's in charge. Or 'under Greindelwalds influence. I'm also not sure about the comma before 'by' but I'm not going to argue with the redoubtable Kara!

She knew the war had Grindelwald’s influence, but she had not considered the extent to which magic may be involved. This didn't make sense to me. 'had been influenced by Grindelwald, perhaps? I'm understand what you're saying, but I think there's a missing word somewhere. (Just not sure what.)

I am very intrigued by the wizard turning up at the end and have no idea who it is (unless it's Tom Riddle). I look forward to reading more. This really is a good story. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you so much :D You're so very helpful and lovely :D

Witch Switch by Gmariam

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: When Sirius's plans for Hogsmeade backfire, he ends up taking Lily Evans to Madam Puddifoot's instead, only to find James is not at all happy to see them sharing a tart. And when James's date kisses Sirius, Lily storms off as well, leaving him on the floor covered in chocolate. Yet things are even more complicated than they seem…

This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the 2011 Aprils Fools' Day Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt 3, Marauder Era.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/12/11 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Ha ha ha - what did I unleash in you, here? This is so funny. You, Gina, my love, have not only made Sirius/Lily a pleasure to read (I LOVED when she removed the chocolate crumbs from his lips), but you've given the exchange student cliche a new twist that WORKS! YAY - Brilliant. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks, Carole. I barely remember the thread this idea sprung from, but you definitely started it and I just twisted it to my means. Thanks again, because it was fun! A new twist on the exchange student? I didn't think that was possible, lol! And I'm shocked you enjoyed a Sirius/Lily moment, since I know how loyal you are to J/L, hee hee. It was fun, though, to prank Sirius for once (and not beat up on J). Thanks again for your help, I'm glad you enjoyed it! ~Gina :)

A Family Matter by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •

Bachelor life suited Zach Smith just fine, and the lack of expectations on his time and attention suited him even more.

But his life changed in an instant with a knock on the door and an unexpected delivery.

This story has been nominated for a 2014 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Post-Hogwarts Story.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/12/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ha ha ha ha ha - what a wonderful fic. I almost feel sorry for Zach when faced with the social worker. I definitely know what it's like having a 3 year old hanging around when I'm rather the worse for drink ... but Zach's a git, so he deserves the pain - hee hee.

I was giggling at his 'escorts' name. Mitzy is just so classy.

Great story, Jess. ~Carole~

Author's Response:

This should be interesting to find out how or if Zach can adjust to daddy life. I agree that he so has it coming, and the social worker could sum him up in about three seconds.

I may have to pick your brain at some point for toddler behaviour. Children scare me, so I've not observed them much. DX

Top of the mornin' to you, EQ!