Penname: Equinox Chick [Contact]
Real name: Carole
Member Since: 05/10/08
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What can I say. I'm a grown woman living in London but I'm obsessed with a teenage wizard and his friends. Am I mad? Probably Do I care? Hell no!
EDIT: Grown? Um, probably not

For my first foray into the realms of fanfiction I've chosen to write about the Marauders. I'll always stick fairly closely to canon as I think JK knows best. Although I've enjoyed reading about other ships I, personally, don't think I could write with conviction about Ginny/Crabbe or Hermione/Mclaggan relationships.

EDIT: ha ha ha ha ha - How I have changed! I'm now firmly in the rare-pair, SSP, and things that aren't quite conventional camp, although I still loves me some James/Lily.

My second chaptered fic (Apparently Asleep) has started a love affair with Tonks/Remus and confirmed my obsession for all things Sirius. *sigh*

I am indebted to Terri (mudbloodproud) for being a great beta and all round amazing person. If it hadn't been for her encouragement I would have thrown in the towel many months ago.

EDIT: I have made a lot of wonderful friends during my past three years on MNFF, including (in no particular order) Natalie, Kara, Hannah/Bob, Jess, Gina, Lea, Lori, Julia, Minna, Emmahhhh, and the fantabulous BB.

I hope Mugglenet and you enjoy reading my words as much as I've enjoyed writing them. Huge thank-you to my niece, Amanda, for being one of the first to catch the Harry Potter bug and nagging me into reading them.


I’ve written a variety of stories, so here is them arranged in categories. Some are cross- referenced. So a James/Lily may appear in Marauder or Canon Romance

Marauder
A Second Chance
Contemplating Lilies
Dancing Queen
First Date Disaster
Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand
It Takes a Wolf to Prank a Dog
Juggling
Learning to Fly
March Madness
O.W.L.s, Quidditch and the Added Distraction of Sirius Black
Peace in Heaven
Ribbons, not Strings
Sixth Time's the Charm
Thank you for your time, Professor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Sum of the Whole
Veils
Who's That Girl?
Wormtail on the Hogwarts Express



Canon Romance
'i'before 'e' (Percy/Audrey)
A Prize Above Rubies (Isla Black/Bob Hitchens)
Acorns (Bill/Fleur)
Apparently Asleep (Remus/Tonks)
Birthday Girl (George/Angelina)
Bound in the Beating of Each Other’s Hearts (Narcissa/Lucius)
Coup de Foudre (Bill/Fleur)
Dancing Queen (James/Lily)
First Date Disaster (James/Lily)
Five weeks (Remus/Tonks)
Forces of Nature (Ron/Hermione)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
In The Stars (Draco/Astoria)
Key of the Door (Ron/Hermione)
Kissing the Joy as it Flies (Seamus/Lavender)
March Madness (James/Lily)
Not Quite Perfect (Bill/Fleur)
Reconnaissance (Remus/Tonks)
Sixth Time’s the Charm (James/Lily)
Snowball Fights (Teddy/Victoire)
Until Death (Eaters) Do Us Part (Draco/Astoria)
Veils (James/Lily)
You Dance Divinely (George/Angelina)



Non (or rather tweaked) Canon (apart from one story, these don’t break any canon.)

Better than Chocolate (Charlie/Tonks)
Heat of Life (Harry/Katie)
Her Tomorrows (Harry/Parvati)
High (Scorpius/Lily)
Lavender, blue- A Gryffindor True (Lavender/Blaise)
Love At First Strike (Angelina/Terry)
Mirrors (Charlie/Penelope)
Misperception (Oliver/Cedric/Daphne)
Orphans of the Storm (Seamus/Parvati/Dean)
Passion Among the Primroses (Arthur/Mafalda)
Predictions of Love (Gilderoy/Sybil)
Ribbons, not Strings (Remus/Rosmerta)
Shrouds (Hermione/Draco)
Snapdragons (Charlie/OC)
Stars or Carousels (James/Dominique)
Summer’s Heat (Sirius/OC)
Swans (Mollyjnr/OC)
Teenage Witch (Charity/Myron Wagtail )
The Happy Couple (Harry/Ginny, Blaise/Lavender)
The Only One (Lavender/Blaise Teddy/Victoire)
The Untrodden Path (Draco/Hannah)
Where We Started From (Dean/Ginny)



Same sex Pairings
Apple-bobbing ( Lisa/Susan)
Close Your Eyes (Hermione/Lavender)
Drowning, not Waving (Oliver/Cedric)
Eyes That Know Me (Scorpius/Hugo)
Forbidden Colours (Tracey/Demelza)
Fracture (Theo/Justin)
Monochrome (Sirius/Remus)
The Dance We Do (Bellatrix/Amelia)
The Hat that Thinks it’s a Chair (Justin/Theo)
Truth Or Dare (Cormac/Zacharias)



Humour
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
Lockhart, Sprout and Two Smoking Goblets
Passion Among the Primroses
Predictions of Love
The Bacchus Book
Vampire - Ghost Child!

Historical
A Prize Above Rubies
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
An Outstretched Hand
Shadows Deep

Others (General, D/A, Post Hogwarts, Next Gen)
A Tangled Web (D/A)
All in the Genes (NG)
Chasing the Scoop! (Post Hogwarts)
Christmas on the Outside (General/Trio era)
Dean Thomas and the Reiver Curse (Post Hogwarts)
Diavol (Remus Trio Era)
Every Breath You Take (Post Hogwarts/Next Gen)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
Friends in Unlikely Places (Post Hog. Hermione)
Growing Old Disgracefully (Post Hog)
High (NG)
Lavender, blue (Trio Era)
Mere Wisps of Light (Post Hog. Draco fic)
Muggles, Magic and Misconceptions (Next Gen)
My Funny Valentine (Post Hogwarts)
Staring into the Fire (Trio Era)
The Waiting Game (D/A)
Whispers from the Past (Next Gen)



Mysteries
The Foolhardy Boys and Parvati, too
Who’s that Girl?
Xanthe Interrupted
Zeitgeist



Poetry
Askew
As They Watch
Beyond Beseeching
Celestina's Songbook: Christmas Edition, Volume 1
Cold Dreams
Draco's Journey
Enslaved
Fairytale of Hogwarts
Flying High
Forever France
Frozen Silence
Hexed!
Hey, brother
I Believed in Lily Evans
Master Barty Regrets
Phoenix Flames
Queen of My Heart
Sirius, Baby
The Daydream Pedlar's Song
The Four
The Labyrinth Mind
Unreconciled

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One Day in the Life Of by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: Happy endings? What are happy endings? They saved the world for the future, and the kids are here. Life, meanwhile, just goes on.

DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling. I just wish she would hurry up and publish The Scottish Book.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 3928 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
02/04/11 Updated: 02/26/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/27/11 Title: Chapter 2: Hugo

OOOOOOH, and we all know who that is - heh heh heh. When Hermione finds out, is she going to admit to having a dalliance with a certain person (Shrouds*)? Wow, I really must stop writing caron facts into your stories.

A joy, as always, to read, Natalie. I like the way the Next Gen children are coming alive under your touch and that they're note mere Weasley clones. Hugo is lovely and I'm pleased Hermione hasn;t gone all 'Fleur' on him - ha ha - not that she would.

Brillinat story. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Brillinat. I like that.

Hermione might admit to having been tickled by a certain dragon...if someone force-feeds me liquid helium. *cough*

I do want the kids to sound very different. They were so Weasley-Weasley in my mind before, but I've thankfully grown out of that phase. Lol. Thanks for the review! More on Fleur in the final chapters. :D

~Natalie

 

Hold Out Your Hand by MerrryD
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 3]

Summary:

He’s James.
He’s your best friend.
And you have nowhere else to go.


Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 1832 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/08/11 Updated: 02/12/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/15/11 Title: Chapter 1: Hold Out Your Hand

Oh, Mere, what a fantastic story. I love the raw emotions you deal with here. Sirius’ hurt and anger with his family and also his friends comes shining through.

I will start by saying that I’m not a fan of second person stories. I find they can be hectoring as they demand that the reader feels a certain way, so I’ll admit that my heart did sink a bit when I realised the ‘person’ you’d used. Having said that ... it does seem to work for this story. Partly because Sirius is a pretty self-absorbed character given to introspection, and also because it’s a reasonable lengthy fic. I doubt I could read a novel-length story in second person, although I could well be in the minority.

I think you dealt with the relationship between James and Sirius brilliantly. It was obvious they needed and wanted each other, but hazy as to how this would work long-term. Of course, in canon, we know it didn’t work long term – not least because James was chasing Lily and ended up marrying her. It does come across as two characters who aren’t necessarily gay, but do love/want each other. Did the distance between them necessitated by the Whomping Willow incident make their desire for each other far more intense? (Rhetorical question, I’m thinking aloud).

Even if James hasn’t said anything to you in weeks, even if he won’t for the rest of the summer,

I do have a timeline issue with the story; from Snape’s words and The Prince’s Tale we know that the Whomping Willow ‘prank’ took place before SWM. Lily is still talking to Snape after the WW incident because she talks about James ‘saving his life’. She was not on those terms with him after he called her a Mudblood. Now ... in the scene by the lake, it is clear that the Marauders are on good terms with each other. James, in particular, is very friendly with Sirius, so they must have forgiven him. I did, I have to say, have difficulty looking past that, but in the end, it barely detracted from the story because it was about far more than canon niceties. You could correct this, if you wanted to by having Sirius leave home at Easter.

I noticed a small typo.

Would it be so bad, anyway, if a care came right now? I believe you mean ‘car’.

And being a mean Brit-picker, I’d suggest changing ‘sidewalk’ to pavement.

I love the section where he’s first alone with James. It screams the awkwardness of teenage boys and the way they want to say things but can’t. The simple ‘thank you’ and ‘of course’ just speaks volumes about the discomfort they feel surrounding emotions. They are far more comfortable with actions rather than words – being Gryffindors and boys!

Mere, I know you were having some problems with certain points of the story, so please let me reassure you that this is a superbly written story. The emotions are powerful, the kiss is tantalisingly good, and I love the ambiguity of the relationship. For Sirius to not be able to admit he’s gay (and he might not be) was a masterstroke because it added a new layer to his personality and the relationship with James. I do wonder what on earth will happen next. Will they last? Or will they crash and burn?

Great story ~Carole~

Author's Response: Gah! You wound me when you say you aren't a fan of second person stories. I adore second person! It's definitely my favourite 'person' to use. I love how you can really explore emotions with it and yet there's this kind of detachment about it. And it's really challenging to write a story in second person that needs to be in second person, so I love the effort it takes too. :) Anyway, um, about the timeline issue--I didn't realise I was wrong. I don't have a copy of DH available to me and I didn't think about checking, so, yeah. I may change it so it is Easter. Thanks for that! And pointing out the typo and Brit-pick. :) Thank you for this lovely review though. I'm really glad that you liked it and you seriously made me blush when you said it was superbly written. <3Mere

 

Summary: On her first night of patrol, Molly Weasley was armed with the basic rules of how to be a prefect, but one guideline had been woefully omitted from the list: what to do when a handsome delinquent robbed her of her ability to think.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1173 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/08/11 Updated: 02/08/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/09/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Okay, so I have a major problem with this. ... Joshua Lake is dangerously close to a hero of mine in my OF - Joshua Blake. I went 'GAH!' a few times and then giggled because I realised you probably weren't a Legilimans, and your Joshua is a prig whereas my Joshua is ... uh ... far more like your Scorpius (a shagaholic in otherwords).

That was my only problem, apart from this really, really incredible urge to hex Scorpius' bollocks off for being such a cocky bastard.

So, in recompense for scaring me with your near Legilimancy skills, and evoking such strong emotions in me, can you write a follow up where Molly does hex his lips together or makes him look an utter prat? (pretty please)

Very entertaining, Jess, as always.

~Carole~

Author's Response:

Hehe, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I honestly just pulled a name out of a hat, where Joshua came in, and then I looked around the room, and thre was some geography special on TV, showing the lakes of Minnesota... yeah, not a very auspicious beginning, granted; me being a Legilimens sounds far better. XD

I just thought that far more teenage crushes and romances start like this as compared to the typical fire and ice formula or the kickass Gryffindor love!hating the Slytherin prince. And he is totally a git. He is very sharp, as he identified immediately that she was easily manipulated, but definitely smart enough not to stick around for Joshua finding them. 

I'm glad you liked it. It was a rather spur of the moment and a completely random pairing. Thanks for reading and dropping by. :)

~Jess

 

Spiral by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Tom did love once; it just wasn't meant to last.

This poem placed third in the February Apples and Oranges Challenge at Poetry Anyone. Features Tom Riddle/A Woman You All Know.

DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling. She wouldn't write this silliness.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 341 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/09/11 Updated: 02/09/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/11/11 Title: Chapter 1: This day was the day.

It is long, but very powerful, I love the repitition of The day is the day and then tis night is the night. It takes on such a sinister turn and I was wondering if anything else had happened apart from 'Obliviate' (shudder) Hmm, what had she discovered about him? Was it the Basilisk? Or perhaps she realised he was using her? I feel strongly for Minerva here, denied love and her memories. She comes across in the books as someone sadly thwarted in love but also one that has few regrets. i think you showed her character very well here.

Great poem and well worth the read, Natalie. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole,

First of all, thank you for your superhuman effort!

It is very long. I wrote it when I was at the office, supposed to be working, but something possessed me to write this. Perhaps it was Gropius.

Seriously, though, I enjoyed writing it. Remember that In-house comp where we had to write fics based on banners? I picked BB's Voldy/Minerva, but never finished it (and have now lost the draft). Because I'm canon-anointed, I always knew it was going to end with Tom taking her memories, and then forgetting everything himself with the murders and whatever else he goes on to to.

She comes across in the books as someone sadly thwarted in love but also one that has few regrets

This is what I feel, too. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

~Natalie

 

One to Remember by Gmariam
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 73]

Summary: It's Valentine's Day, seventh year, and James Potter is determined to make it one to remember. Unfortunately, so many things go wrong that Lily Evans will probably remember it for all the wrong reasons.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 19091 Chapters: 7 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/10/11 Updated: 03/09/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/11/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One - How To Not Start The Day

OOOH, interesting. I can't wait for the next chapter.

"Ah, but you certainly had rhythm," I said, laughing at the memory. Sometimes I missed being able to get away with stuff like that. I fount that line really touching. Probably because we know they're all facing the big bad world and that James and Lily won;t last that much longer and so it was poignant that he had to grow up. :(

"Where's Remus?" I asked as we followed him downstairs. "He's gone early." "No idea," said Sirius with a shrug. "Probably some broom closet with that Hufflepuff."

That'll be me then - hee hee. Can we go somewhere other than the broom closet?

Gina, I like this story. James is wonderful and I adore all the extra details like tap-dancing all over Hogwarts to Gershwin and the moustache (hee hee). Great insight into Peter as well because he's so often ignored.

Great tale ~Carole~

Author's Response: You know, the idea that James had to grow up is almost becoming cliche, isn't it? Hm, maybe we should write some stuff where James stays young and innocent and keeps playing pranks...but I just don't think it went down like that, you know? So yes, it is sort of poignant, knowing what happens to them so soon after graduating. You'll have to fight Lea for the spot in the broomcloset, you know. ;) Thanks for reading this and for your ideas on LS. It helped me get back into it, since I've been sitting on this since October! I hope you enjoy the rest! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/17/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three - Playing With Numbers

Oh, noooo. I'm all upset now. That really was quite shocking seeing their future laid out on a chart. I know it could have been different, but ... oh, that sodding rat!

Gina, I was expecting a light hearted story, something to make me smile, but I ended up feeling forlorn. I'm pleased because you've added some depth to a story that was entertaining and fluffy, but is now more meaningful. I did smile as well, by the way. Oh and that girl with Remus - the HUFFLEPUFF (not GRYFFINDOR) - you spelt her name wrong. C.A.R.O.L.E.

Everyone knows who Potter's got it in for." Okay, nitpick here. I don't know if it's different in USA, but here if you've 'got it in for someone' then it means you want to argue, maim, murder them. So James has got it in for Snape, but certainly not Lily. He does have a thing for her though ... or a yen ...

Waiting anxiously for Chapter 4. And must add that I like Alan Diggory. Not sure why because he wasn't in it much, but he seemed cool. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Carole! I know what you mean about it being a light-hearted story, because that was my plan. I really didn't think something like this would come up, but sometimes it's inevitable when you think of how tragic these characters' lives ended up. It makes me feel bad too. I'm debating whether to continue taking it in that direction or keep it light-hearted. I should consult my chart, I suppose. ;) Thanks so much for the Brit-pick! And really, it's not that different here, so I've changed it. Thanks! I'm glad you liked this chapter and hope you enjoy the next. ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/14/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two - Another Adventure With Amortentia

Ha ha ha - very funny, Gina. I love Sirius cracking onto Slughorn. It made me giggle rather a lot (Oh, and I got the Snames reference, too, hee hee)

The attention to detail in this chapter is particularly good. I love the descriptions when they're making their potions and you kept the tension running throughout the whole chapter.

Hmm, I wondered for a horrible moment if Lily was going to start snogging Snape *shudder*. Please tell me she's not running off to see him?

Very enjoyable. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Ha ha, thanks! The bit with Sirius and Slughorn really came out of nowhere, I swear. I'm glad you got the Snames reference, I left it in just for Natalie, lolol! Don't worry, that's probably the last of Snape you'll see. You know I don't ship him and Lily, not even in a messed up Valentine fic amok with love potions and such. So no, she is certainly not running off to see him. She's going to read her tea leaves in Divination. Thanks for reading and helping me with a bit of Brit-speak! Oh, and I hope the attention to detail continues in the next chapter, since I've worked in a bit of Arithmancy after all.. Thanks again! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/20/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Four - Back in the Hospital Wing Again

"Oi, Prongs!!"
,br> Ha ha ha ha ha - your Sirius has immaculate timing. Gah, I love him! Gina, brilliant chapter. I really felt for James because he's trying so hard ... and he probably doesn't need to because Lily seems to be thawing very, very quickly.

I thought the dream was very effective. Great piece of writing there, with Sirius being annoyingly Sirius, Remus attempting to help, and Peter lurking in the shadows. Snape appearing and that green light - WOW! Is James seeing the future - he sure seems to be.

Wonderful chapter and wonderful story. I can't wait for Hogsmeade :) ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks, Carole! I'm so glad you liked the dream. Hm, I wonder if you picked up on something else about Peter? ;) Thanks for your help with the next chapter. You know what's coming so I hope you enjoy it! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/27/11 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter Five - A Boy, A Girl, A Bar, and A Blizzard

Yay, great chapter. I love the tunnel hidden by the mirror. that was a brilliant piece of thinking and sounded very JK-like. I'm starting to feel very sorry for James but am not surprised that Lily's getting annoyed with having to bail him out all of the time. He gets himself into too many scrapes and this time CANNOT blame my two beloveds.

This is rapidly turning into my go to fic when I need a pick me up. Thank you ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks, Carole! I'm glad you liked the mirror bit. I can occasionally come up with something original, lol. I really am beating up on James, but I took your suggestions for the next part so it will start to lighten up a bit. Well, at least in terms of everything going wrong. I swear I think I have a psychosis about it or something. I'm glad it picks up you. You should try the author I recced on my LJ as well, she's wonderful! I hope you like the way the next part goes, thanks again for your help! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/11/11 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter Seven - Reservations Not Required

The chapter title is brilliiant - I'm glad it stuck!

Gina, I thought this was a great ending to a wonderful story. I've really enjoyed following their rather tortuous journey through Valentine's Day and it will be a story I'll remember.

Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad you like the chapter title. I sort of makes sense, I suppose. I just liked it and had to go with it. Thanks for coming to read the end, Carole. I'm so glad you enjoyed it enough to remember it. I'm also glad the ending worked. I told you there would be light smut. Maybe someday I'll take it further. ;) Thanks so much - oh look, another review! Squee! Thanks again! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/11/11 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter Seven - Reservations Not Required

OH! It chopped half my review off ... I've just realised. Basically, I loved the whole plot of this story. It all seemed so very 'right' and natural. I particularly adored the way that James missed the kiss when it happened - ha ha - and how they decided to keep the RoR secret. Ha! that'll stop Sirius spoiling their fun.

I had another thought about the Map. James may have wanted to plot the room ... but Filch confiscates it sometime in their seventh year ... so maybe he doesn't get the chance.

Like Lori, I feel the poignancy of the precious days they have left. It's heartbreaking knowing what we do :( What I do like is that it's Lily forcing the pace here - not the normal fanonised version of her at all. - Thank you.

It has been a great story. Sorry this is more squee than review though. ~Carole~

Author's Response: That kiss was my one last bit of beating up on James. Another thing I couldn't resist, heh heh. I'm glad it didn't seem out of character for Lily to suggest keeping it secret, or the other things she did. I'm starting to wonder if there really is a fanon Lily out there who is stuffy and stuck-up, or if we just think that. Anyway. Yes, I suppose there is some poignancy there. I guess knowing their future colors their past a bit, at least for my writing. Thank you so much for your help with this story, I really appreciate it! I need to just visit London so I can soak up Briticisms and not have to bug you about them so often. And thanks for the lovely review, I really appreciate it!! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/05/11 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter Six - The Shrieking Shack and The Long Walk Back

OOOOH, I love the ending. Wow, I had no idea you were going to include it in that story, and the way he discovered the RoR - fantastic.

I really enjoyed this chapter. It was sad seeing Remus' predicament through James' eyes and then Lily working it all out. You've conjured such a great story here. I know it was supposed to be light-hearted but it's become a wonderful read. *sigh*. Can't wait for the next chapter ~Carole~

Author's Response: Ha, you mean all my RoR questions didn't tip you off to that one? ;) Thanks so much for helping me out with the Shrieking Shack, I hope my solution works well enough. I still think it's pretty light-hearted. It's not dark, but I don't think I can write these two without giving it a bit of depth when it comes to all the other things going on in their lives that were fairly serious at the time, ie. Remus and his predicament. It just sort of made it's way into the story that way, since he HAD to take her through the shack. I'm glad you are enjoying it and hope the last chapter makes you smile. Thanks again for your help and the lovely review! ~Gina :)

 

The Valentine's Day Auction by Fynnsmom
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Bella participates in a Valentine's Day auction. Will she get what she wants and take home the prize?

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1894 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/10/11 Updated: 02/13/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 10/20/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OOOH, very sneaky, Bella! Gabe sounds gorgeous, so I can see whay she went to all that trouble. I did like the way she dealt with each bidder - quite ingenious!
,br> That was fun. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Bella's such a naughty girl. She was just doing what we'd like to do at times to some people but we have better manners than to bully and prank people like that. Bella wants what she wants and she wants Gabe. She will do anything to maintain her Muggle toy. She needs to be careful though, she might fall in love:D

 

The Two Left Behind by the opaleye
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 13]

Summary: Past Featured StoryIn the dead of winter, two friends continue their hunt for something they may never find.

Nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award in Best General Story.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 1014 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/16/11 Updated: 02/16/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/17/11 Title: Chapter 1: Is it any wonder I can't sleep?

Ah, you just gave a reason for that scene in the film - thank - goodness for that, because quite honestly I really didn't like Dan's flat-footed dancing at all and found myself cringing. It also seemed purposeless in the movie, but here it was natural and so very right.

Julia, I have long been a fan of your poetical prose. You have this way with words that makes me weep with frustration at my own lack of poeticism. AGHHH! Anyway, this seems to be turning into a review that's far more about me and not the story and that would never do.

I'm not familiar with the song, but that didn't matter. The lyrics seemed to meld perfectly with the sentiment of the story. I particularly enjoyed the flow that swam along with a rhythm as perfect as their dance.

A touching story and one that seemed to fit well with the book and the desolation of their predicament. The line from the book that keeps reverberating with me is the one about 'being scared teenagers in a tent.' Utterly grim and yet you managed to find the occasional chink of light.

Loved the end. The bonds between the Trio are so strong that when one of them breaks away, it's heartening to see how Harry and Hermione manage to stay together.

Sorry, this was stream of conscious stuff, but put plainly - WONDERFUL story. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Oh thank you so much, Carole :D I'm glad I've been able to give meaning and reason to this. You know I don't much like the H/G relationship but I don't deny that, in the books, Harry does care for her a lot, and I wanted to show that. It's funny that you bring up that line because I was thinking about that while writing. I guess what I wanted was to give them a brief moment to get away from that, and I really believe that was what the scene in the film was trying to do rather than perpetuate the H/Hr pairing. Although, I guess we'll have to agree to disagree on that front! Again, thank you so much for the lovely review :) Julia x

 

Dreams Made of Green by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: He is haunted by the thoughts of green.

Written for the Apples and Oranges challenge at Poetry Anyone.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 182 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/02/11 Updated: 03/04/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Unlike a previous reviewer, I do read slash. It's possibly the best type of romance available on this site being far more honest than fluff.

Enough of that. Your characterisationand portrayal of this relationship is so good in so few words. Draco's inability to act on his feelings and desires is actually pretty pitiful, but then Harry, here, isn't offering him anything. He's haunting him, and doesn't even know it. Possibly that's the best revenge he could ever have.

Brilliant. ~Carole~ (4)

Author's Response: Wow. I never even thought of that revenge part, but it strangely makes sense. Damn. I want to write more Drarry now. Thank you so much, once again! And SLASH FTW!!!

 

The Final Cause by Pussycat123
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: When Marty Price entered the lives of the Marauders, they never expected her to come to mean so much to them. Their last years at Hogwarts were idealistic and beautiful. But a few years in the harsh outside world soon forces them to change. When faced with so much, it is unsurprising that they are tired and lonely and almost broken. Even optimists like Marty struggle to remain true to themselves - so what hope do the rest of them have when she leaves on a vital secret mission? Especially when everything else, if possible, begins crumble even further ...

Sequel to 'The Cause'

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 27739 Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/03/11 Updated: 06/10/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/13/11 Title: Chapter 1: Part 1

AHHHH, you're back!" YES *punches air*. I loved The Cause and it still remains one of my favourite fics. This is different - obviously - it seems darker, but then these are dark times.

Honest to Merlin, I grinned widely when Luanne turned up - ha ha.

And then we reached the end, and amongst all the banter it turned dark. I'm intrigued and can't wait to read more.

Good to see you back. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Aw, I'm glad you still remember it, I was so doubtful of putting this up - I've had it for months but was convinced no one would remember the first, or care what happened - but I'm glad you've proved me wrong! It is a lot darker, it's a very different style for me, so I'm glad you don't hate it so far!

 

Remembering Lily by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 39]

Summary: Past Featured StoryA lonely figure walks down the street, long auburn hair trailing behind her in the blustery wind. She pulls a red wool coat snug around her, gloved hands tucked into pockets as she wanders the sidewalk, glancing up at the shop fronts. She is young, but her face is lined with sadness, as if searching for something she has lost. Her green eyes long for answers.

Across the way a young man stops and stares at the woman in the red coat, hardly daring to believe it might be her. And yet as she turns and walks back up the street, he knows it is, and his heart stops beating for a moment. He blinks, just to see if she will disappear from his life once more, like she did over a year ago.

She doesn't.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 13306 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/05/11 Updated: 04/08/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/06/11 Title: Chapter 1: Part One

Oh, hmm, okay ... ha ha - I'm hesitant in a good way, Gina, I assure you - ha ha.

Present tense third person. I was sure this wouldn;t work, but I barely noticed it, so yes I really do think it works for this story. My reasoning is that things are happening so immediately for Lily (her lack of memory) that this tense is her. She has no past ... so no past tense. (I'm reading too much into this - ha ha)

I was chewing my lip rather at the suddenness she accepted James. If I'm honest she seemed too comfortable with him, too quickly, but I see that James was surprised too (the arm linking). I was still unsure until I came to the line about her hating the fact that everyone thinks she's dead. That made her acceptance of him much more 'acceptable' although ... it soes still seem a bit too quick, if I'm honest. (I don't mean the kissing and possible sex, I mean the initial arm taking, conversation and willingness to go off with someone who is in effect a stranger). As I got to the end, I realised it wasn't OOC because probably she's recognising the core of James' character rather than the image she had of him at Hogwarts.

Sorry, I'm wittering. I like this story, Gina. It shows a different take on the pair of them and in this overstuffed genre, that is very hard to do.

Well Done! ~Carole~

Author's Response: No worries, Carole! I'm glad it was different, though. I'll be honest and admit I had not considered what you said about Lily having no past and hence the narrative having no past tense. I did start this is past tense but almost immediately I moved it to present tense, because I just felt compelled to do so. I think you've probably articulated why. As for Lily accepting James a bit too fast - yes, I can see your point. But then you did pick up on several other things that go to it, so hopefully it's not too OOC. For one, I see this Lily as being a rather different person for not having discovered magic. Yet she knows she's lost something and is searching for it there near Diagon Alley and that is also a part of her accepting James-someone from her past who can connect her back to her former life. And like you said, she recognizes his core character and has no memory of the boy he was at school. And as a firm believer in the soulmates theory, I think that is a part of it too. I do hope you'll read a bit more to see what you think. It will be short, more a series of vignettes of their rediscovered time together. Thanks so much for the review - and thanks for the Britpicking, as usual!! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/13/11 Title: Chapter 2: Part Two

Good inclusion of Snape here. That was a very exciting chapter. I do have a bit of a quibble with Snape. He seems to be in charge, and I'm not so sure he would be ... not yet. I do know he's a formidable wizard, but him giving the orders seemed a little bit off. Meh, that's my opinion and it doesn't detract at all from the story. I loved his reaction to Lily and staring into her eyes - just wow!

Your latest J/L is another winner. Very entertaining. Loved it ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks, Carole! Oh, I like the word 'exciting' because I was rather going for that. Didn't want things to get too mushy. Hm, I can see your point about Snape, but I see him as simply in charge of this mission, this little cell, nothing more. And he might be posturing a bit, too - puffing himself up to be more than he really is at this point. I'm glad it didn't detract too much. I just loved the idea of a confrontation between him and Lily after Lea suggested it. Thanks for reading this, I hope you enjoy the next part! ~Gina :)

 

Listen by Ars Letalis
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Luna isn't a pretty girl who plays Quidditch. She's just a quirky little thing who loves the color orange and hearing stories; luckily, she's a very good listener. One-shot, LL/FW, character death.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 5102 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/05/11 Updated: 03/16/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/17/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hi there,

I clicked on this yesterday because the summary intrigued me, and I'm pretty pleased I did. I liked this very much. I think you captured a side of Luna that we don't see and it was an interesting read.
I particularly liked the hint that she liked/loved Harry and that caused some tension between her and Ginny. The smattering of jealousy towards Cho was very good.

I do have one or two issues. First, I don't think Harry would ask her if Cho liked him. He only seems to talk to Hermione about that sort of stuff, and he's only known Luna for a matter of months at that stage. He doesn't, for instance, know that she can see Thestrals, so there's no connection between them. It seems OOC Harry, there.

The other point is about Fred at the wedding. You have him ordering Charlie to escape with Ginny. That's his older brother ... and Fred is giving the orders. I can't see that happening. I kind of think it would be the other way around, or Bill telling Fleur to look after Ginny and Gabriellle. I get that you wanted to show how Fred is protective of his sister, but I don't think it's up to him to assign protection duties to Charlie. Sorry, that was actually a very minor point, but it jarred with me in a story that was pretty darn good.

The use of present tense is quite a tricky one, but I think it suited the voice of Luna in your story.

Great job ~Carole~

Author's Response: Oh, poo, I'm prone to making those kinds of mistakes. And I guess I just assumed that Harry's brain was like, "Cho = Ravenclaw and Luna = Ravenclaw so therefore they must be friends." Or it was a rubbish plot device. :P Thanks for the feedback, it's much appreciated.

 

Education by LollyLovesick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Severus Snape, barely out of Hogwarts and hungry for knowledge, joins the Death Eaters to gain more. A loner, he does not consider himself anyone’s servant.

On the same night he gets branded with the Dark Mark, he meets with Albus Dumbledore who begs to differ.

Thanks to the lovely Alex aka welshdevondragon for beta'ing this!



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Substance Abuse

Word count: 1302 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/08/11 Updated: 03/11/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/12/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hi there. This is a well written and well-crafted story. I'll admit that it's not my usual type of fic, but I was intrigued by the summary, and I do like fics exploring Snape.

I do have a bit of an issue with his motives for joining the Death Eaters. Whilst I agree his fascination for the Dark Arts was fired largely by his intelligence, I think there was a compulsion for him to belong to something. He was desperate, after all, to make become part of Lily's life. Although it could have been seen as a childhood whim, he kept up the friendship for five years at Hogwarts when he could easily have let it drop. But he didn't, he wanted to be a part of smoething and that as much as his deep need to prove himself is a large part of who Snape was. I'm also of the opinion that he had huge admiration and fascination for Voldemort - not as fanatical as Bellatrix, admittedly, but there is an attraction to him. I think his need to be accepted is largely why he told Voldemort of the Prophecy.

Your use of first person (not a POV I usually like) is very well done here. Snape is such an obsessive/self obsessive character that the first person POV suits him.

I really liked the scene with Dumbledore - you wrote him very well (and he can be a hard character to get right). I have a bit of a quibble about the knowledge of the Dark Mark. They weren't common knowledge. Sirius, in GOF, has no idea what Karkarov is showing Snape on his arm. Now, if Dumbledore had known about the Mark, then he would have shared that knowledge. he only kept secrets when he had a good reason.

Meh, sorry, I sound very picky and negative and I don't mean to because this really is a well written piece. And it is your interpretation that counts. What I've said is merely my opinion ... and that can, of course, be wrong.

Good story, well done ~Carole~

Author's Response: I agree with you on that Snape is a very lonely (and in this story young) man who has never really felt communion (is that the right word?) and that this is a huge reason for why he joins the DEs. However, I think he's way too proud to admit it to himself. I don't think that inside Snape's head he would be going: I'm so mad because people have left me and sad because the girl I want doesn't want me, I think I'll go join the DEs to feal truly a part of something<--- That's an exaggeration but still.

Therefore ihe gnores this part of himself and rationalizes instead. That was why I incorporated Dumbledore into this, to show the reader that Snape has deluded himself and is NOT as independant as he thinks. He says: Do you think youre the first man who thinks he has only become involved for academic purposes? He uses the words "thinks he has become involved" rather than simpy "has become involved". I guess it was too vague :)

About the Dark Mark, however: I forgot. Ah, now this will bug forever :P

Anyway, thanks for reading! Truly makes me happy that you found it worth to comment on!:)

 
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