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What can I say. I live in London and am obsessed with a teenage wizard and his friends. Am I mad? Probably Do I care? Hell no!
EDIT: Grown? Um, probably not

For my first foray into the realms of fanfiction I've chosen to write about the Marauders. I'll always stick fairly closely to canon as I think JK knows best. Although I've enjoyed reading about other ships I, personally, don't think I could write with conviction about Ginny/Crabbe or Hermione/Mclaggan relationships.

EDIT: ha ha ha ha ha - How I have changed! I'm now firmly in the rare-pair, SSP, and things that aren't quite conventional camp, although I still loves me some James/Lily.

My second chaptered fic (Apparently Asleep) has started a love affair with Tonks/Remus and confirmed my obsession for all things Sirius. *sigh*

I am indebted to Terri (mudbloodproud) for being a great beta and all round amazing person. If it hadn't been for her encouragement I would have thrown in the towel many months ago.

EDIT: I have made a lot of wonderful friends during my past three years on MNFF, including (in no particular order) Natalie, Kara, Hannah/Bob, Jess, Gina, Lea, Lori, Julia, Minna, Emmahhhh, and the fantabulous BB.

I hope Mugglenet and you enjoy reading my words as much as I've enjoyed writing them. Huge thank-you to my niece, Amanda, for being one of the first to catch the Harry Potter bug and nagging me into reading them.

I’ve written a variety of stories, so here is them arranged in categories. Some are cross- referenced. So a James/Lily may appear in Marauder or Canon Romance

EDIT: I haven't written much Harry Potter fanfiction for a while. It is unlikely I'll update the two chaptered fics I first started as they became a little too long and unwieldy. Sorry about that.

A Second Chance
Contemplating Lilies
Dancing Queen
First Date Disaster
Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand
It Takes a Wolf to Prank a Dog
Learning to Fly
March Madness
O.W.L.s, Quidditch and the Added Distraction of Sirius Black
Peace in Heaven
Ribbons, not Strings
Sixth Time's the Charm
Thank you for your time, Professor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Sum of the Whole
Who's That Girl?
Wormtail on the Hogwarts Express

Canon Romance
'i'before 'e' (Percy/Audrey)
A Prize Above Rubies (Isla Black/Bob Hitchens)
Acorns (Bill/Fleur)
Apparently Asleep (Remus/Tonks)
Birthday Girl (George/Angelina)
Bound in the Beating of Each Other’s Hearts (Narcissa/Lucius)
Coup de Foudre (Bill/Fleur)
Dancing Queen (James/Lily)
First Date Disaster (James/Lily)
Five weeks (Remus/Tonks)
Forces of Nature (Ron/Hermione)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
In The Stars (Draco/Astoria)
Key of the Door (Ron/Hermione)
Kissing the Joy as it Flies (Seamus/Lavender)
March Madness (James/Lily)
Not Quite Perfect (Bill/Fleur)
Reconnaissance (Remus/Tonks)
Sixth Time’s the Charm (James/Lily)
Snowball Fights (Teddy/Victoire)
Until Death (Eaters) Do Us Part (Draco/Astoria)
Veils (James/Lily)
You Dance Divinely (George/Angelina)

Non (or rather tweaked) Canon (apart from one story, these don’t break any canon.)

Better than Chocolate (Charlie/Tonks)
Heat of Life (Harry/Katie)
Her Tomorrows (Harry/Parvati)
High (Scorpius/Lily)
Lavender, blue- A Gryffindor True (Lavender/Blaise)
Love At First Strike (Angelina/Terry)
Mirrors (Charlie/Penelope)
Misperception (Oliver/Cedric/Daphne)
Orphans of the Storm (Seamus/Parvati/Dean)
Passion Among the Primroses (Arthur/Mafalda)
Predictions of Love (Gilderoy/Sybil)
Ribbons, not Strings (Remus/Rosmerta)
Shrouds (Hermione/Draco)
Snapdragons (Charlie/OC)
Stars or Carousels (James/Dominique)
Summer’s Heat (Sirius/OC)
Swans (Mollyjnr/OC)
Teenage Witch (Charity/Myron Wagtail )
The Happy Couple (Harry/Ginny, Blaise/Lavender)
The Only One (Lavender/Blaise Teddy/Victoire)
The Untrodden Path (Draco/Hannah)
Where We Started From (Dean/Ginny)

Same sex Pairings
Apple-bobbing ( Lisa/Susan)
Close Your Eyes (Hermione/Lavender)
Drowning, not Waving (Oliver/Cedric)
Eyes That Know Me (Scorpius/Hugo)
Forbidden Colours (Tracey/Demelza)
Fracture (Theo/Justin)
Monochrome (Sirius/Remus)
The Dance We Do (Bellatrix/Amelia)
The Hat that Thinks it’s a Chair (Justin/Theo)
Truth Or Dare (Cormac/Zacharias)

Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
Lockhart, Sprout and Two Smoking Goblets
Passion Among the Primroses
Predictions of Love
The Bacchus Book
Vampire - Ghost Child!

A Prize Above Rubies
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
An Outstretched Hand
Shadows Deep

Others (General, D/A, Post Hogwarts, Next Gen)
A Tangled Web (D/A)
All in the Genes (NG)
Chasing the Scoop! (Post Hogwarts)
Christmas on the Outside (General/Trio era)
Dean Thomas and the Reiver Curse (Post Hogwarts)
Diavol (Remus Trio Era)
Every Breath You Take (Post Hogwarts/Next Gen)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
Friends in Unlikely Places (Post Hog. Hermione)
Growing Old Disgracefully (Post Hog)
High (NG)
Lavender, blue (Trio Era)
Mere Wisps of Light (Post Hog. Draco fic)
Muggles, Magic and Misconceptions (Next Gen)
My Funny Valentine (Post Hogwarts)
Staring into the Fire (Trio Era)
The Waiting Game (D/A)
Whispers from the Past (Next Gen)

The Foolhardy Boys and Parvati, too
Who’s that Girl?
Xanthe Interrupted

As They Watch
Beyond Beseeching
Celestina's Songbook: Christmas Edition, Volume 1
Cold Dreams
Draco's Journey
Fairytale of Hogwarts
Flying High
Forever France
Frozen Silence
Hey, brother
I Believed in Lily Evans
Master Barty Regrets
Phoenix Flames
Queen of My Heart
Sirius, Baby
The Daydream Pedlar's Song
The Four
The Labyrinth Mind

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Taking Direction by WeasleyMom

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: What if the characters in the Harry Potter films were portrayed”not by actors”but by the book versions of themselves, as created by Rowling? How might things unfold on that set? What would the characters think of the changes made from the stories they’d already lived out… to the ones written for the script?

This fic is a series of one-shots, posted as chapters, each from the perspective of a different character who is dealing with the changes occurring between the book and the script.


Holy Movie Canon, Batman! This fic won the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Chaptered Humor Story. Thanks so, so much!


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 10/06/10 Title: Chapter 2: Babe Magnet

Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha!

I'm so glad you managed to get this on the site. it's wickedly funny and just what's needed to brighten up my day after the hideousness that is Kloves/Yates is unleashed on the world.

And now I know why you wanted Babe Magnet and 'on the pull'. Poor old Harry!

Great fun ~Carole~

Author's Response: Yes, and thanks for supplying the correct terminology for me. :) I hadn't considered the timing of this thing, but I'm glad it went through on the day we learned about the movie Harmony. Gives me an outlet for my rage. Hehe. Thanks for the review, Carole! I'm glad you think it's funny!

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/07/13 Title: Chapter 4: Fired Up

hahahahahahhahahahahahahahahhahahahhahahahhahahahahhahaha - SHOELACE!!!! Oh, Lori, this is so fabulous! You know, the Weasleys standing there in shock and not doing a thing whilst the Burrow burns has never seemed so wrong until you pointed it out. But, yes, I love Molly's outrage, second only to Arthur's enthusiasm for his workshop. That is so very Arthur.

It's easy to miss the glorious characterisation here hidden in the laughs, but you have it all. Albus is a love, Remus absolutely perfect, Minerva suitably calming. You've summed them up all so brilliantly. And got all the bits I ached over in the film into this chapter.

Can't wait for Ginny crying over Dean, the hideous RoR kiss, and Ron's lines being given to Hermione (that still rankles) .

Love this so much. And am giggling far too much.

OH!!!! You MUST do Draco's suit. you MUST! ~Carole

Author's Response: Yay, Carole, I'm so glad you liked it! This chapter gave me fits, but finally, it is done. I'm glad you reminded me about Ginny crying over Dean--I hadn't thought of that, and the next chapters is the last with content for HBP. Ron's lines and his utter Gargoyle-ness will be addressed, though the main issue with be the H/G kissy-poo.

(Oh, and I think you've already discovered that Draco's suit is covered in the previous chapters. But yes, that is one of the most obvious headdesk moments in that particular film. I will never understand it.)

Thanks so much for reading and for the fabulous review! <3

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 01/19/11 Title: Chapter 3: Saving It for Seven

ha ha ha ha ha - Oh My. Good on so many levels.

Shoelace - ha ha ha ha ha - yes, that was my utter, utter bete noir of that particular film (except for the end and ... grrrr.... you know the bit I mean Mute!Ron)

Draco in the suit just makes it so funny. At least they're able to laugh about something. You couldn;t possibly write a little consolation kiss for Draco with Hermione, could you? ..... No, I thought not. *ducks to avoid Lori's own Bat-Bogey Hex* .

Very funny. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Ooh, I *should* have my own Bat-Bogey Hex! LOL. No kisses for Draco of any kind on my watch, friend. Hehe. I'm so glad you read this and thought it was funny. I did think of you with the Shoelace reference, and I intend to use your Gargoyle Ron at some point... something for him to pout about, at least. I'm so glad I asked the f-list... Draco's suit is a great point that I never would have thought of on my own. Thanks for the review, Carole! I appreciate it!

Swimming Lessons by WeasleyMom

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: Six weeks after the battle, Hermione puts on a bathing suit for the first time in nearly a year... scars are revealed as painful memories rise to the surface yet again.

I almost submitted this under dark/angst, but at the end of the day, I see it as Ron/Hermione. *shrug* Also, a gazillion thanks to my awesometastic beta Natalie, and to both Neil and Carole for helping me with all things British. :D

I'm thrilled to announce that this story was nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill in the category Best Canon Romance. YAY!
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

I think of Tonks and Fleur, how fiercely they loved and how little they thought of things as trivial as scars on the one they loved. Ron is like them, and suddenly, so am I. OH Merlin, Lori, that line is so bloody good. This whole story is wonderful. So very touching and true! I usually dislike first person, but it is absolutely the right choice here for Hermione and you really crept into her psyche.

Must stop fangirling or I'll never finish my *coughDramionecough* Brilliant, though. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Um, did you just say fangirling? Excuse me a moment... *faints dead on the floor and recovers as quickly as possible* Hehe. Yay, I'm so glad you like it! That was my favorite line in the original drabble, as I meant it to mark a point of healing for her. Not complete healing, of course, but I think every little bit matters. Thanks so much for the happy review!

Tales of the Battle by Northumbrian

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Over fifty people died at the Battle of Hogwarts. There are dozens of stories of loss, betrayal, heroism and sacrifice. These are some of those stories.

Nominated for: Best General (Chaptered) story – Quicksilver Quills 2011

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Calm Before

What a fantastic idea. Neil, I love this, especially at the end when you bring in the dreaded Irma Pince. This is so clever, and I look forward to reading many, many stories of those who didn't fight. PLEASE tell me you're going to do Trelawney.

You've caught the voice of the characters well. Irma's 'Best get something to drink now.' isn't grammatically correct, but it's the way people speak. PERFECT. Oh ... constructive criticism... ummm, make it longer? Apart from that, healers should be capitalised, I think. Great job. ~Carole~.

Author's Response:
Trelawney, I have 21 more names on my list but Trelawney isn't one of them. I''ll think about it. What about Augusta Longbottom? Many of the characters are combatants and three (at least) are Original Characters (one being Mark Moon, so I'd probably best let the Opaleye know (-; ).

So far nothing is longer than 3000 words.

On the Wings of Scarlet and Gold by lucca4

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
"All that is necessary for the triumph of evil is that good men do nothing."

A war is brewing in the Wizarding world. Hogwarts is not the safe haven it used to be. Students are beginning to consider the unthinkable, desperate to save those they love. The corridors are filled with eager spies who are too young to realise the severity of their decisions.

In the midst of it all, the Marauders are closing in on their last year of schooling. James is learning that letting go is sometimes the only way to move forward. Lily discovers that what she was looking for all along is right in front of her, while Sirius and Remus struggle to keep the group together, each in their own way. And Peter begins to realise that he can be more than a tiny piece of a large puzzle, perhaps the most dangerous epiphany of all.

Sides must be taken, a war must be fought, and prices must be paid—some higher than others. Choices are made that will undoubtedly change the course of the future. And from this darkness, the phoenix must rise.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/26/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Final Return

Hi there. I do like some Marauder action, so clicked on this expecting something light ad then you write something totally different. The warning at the end from Dumbledore was a timely reminder that the Marauder era was a dangerous one - so well done.

Not sure what to make of Sirius. He seemed vicious towards Lily, and I can't quite believe he'd bad mouth her to that extent, so i suspect there's something else going on here. Did James really take the rejection that hard? Or is something else happening in Sirius' world? Peter having a girlfriend is good. It seems to be breaking them up a bit, and that line about the trolley lady not recognising speaks volumes about his role in that gang. Great characterisation.

Not keen on Sirius calling the girls 'maraudettes'. I do hope they don't call themselves that and it's just his strange idea of a joke.

Matthew Parker seems a decent enough bloke (and a Hufflepuff YAY!)

Nice first chapter, anyway.


Author's Response: Thank you so, so much for reviewing! It made my morning :]. I'm glad you liked Dumbledore's warning. Sirius can be a little hotheaded at times, and he has a few issues with Lily. I might have overdone that scene, now that I reread it. And don't worry--the "marauderettes" is *not* what Lily and her friends call themselves! I'm happy you thought Peter was satisfactory, I've had the hardest time writing him. And I'm so glad you liked Matthew--there's more insight to his character in the next chapter. Thanks again for reviewing! xx Ariana xx

The Shopgirl by Apollonious

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Since she left Hogwarts a year ago, Verity Maddox has had four jobs. Now, nearly destitute, a month behind on rent, and able to afford only minimal food, she is desperate for a job.

Everything changes when she takes a job working for the Weasley twins. Not only can she live without fear of starving or being evicted; Verity herself is changing.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Weasley's Wizard Wheezes

Hellooo. This is interesting. Verity is an underused character - probably because we don't see much of her - but you seem to be developing a good back story for her. I like the differences between Fred and George. Fred obviously fancies her (tut tut he took Angelina to the ball, he shouldn't have been noticing other girls!) but George is obviously suspicious about something. What is it he doesn't like? One of the answers to the questions.

My only crit, really, is that I get twitchy when Muggle books are mentioned in the Potterverse. Hermione never read any, and although I think she would have done, using a real book just strikes me as not quite right. It's bringing RL into the Potterverse, if you see what I mean. But that's very, very minor and I know lots of people disagree with me.

The other nit-pick is that in the book, Verity's uniform was magenta coloured robes, the same as the twins.

Great idea, Olivia, and I can't wait to read the rest. Ughhh, and Larry is HORRIBLE! ~Carole~

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks for the review, Carole! I worked rather hard on Verity's back story, so I'm glad you like what I've done so far. Yeah, I agree, Fred really shouldn't have been looking at other girls, but he was a sixteen-year-old boy at that point. No offense meant to sixteen-year-old boys, I'm not that far off sixteen myself. The Muggle book reference is mainly to show the awkward juxtaposition Verity is in. She's a witch (obviously) but she isn't very good at magic and she's Muggle-born. I thought something like P&P would be relatively safe. I know about the magenta robes. Trust me, they're coming. Thanks for the review! Olivia

Magnetism by Nitwit Blubber Oddment Tweak x

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Magnetism.

This isn't love. This is an absorbing, compelling, compulsive addiction. Your thirst for him is unquenchable and all-consuming, yet his presence only makes you yearn for him more. There is no antidote, no remedy to these feelings. He is your drug. You are the addict. And the high he gives you is incomparable to any narcotic-induced hit.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nooo, evil manipulative Teddy. Can't have that. He's my utter love bucket. the pride and joy of my two favourite characters. Emma, what are you trying to do to me?

I have to say, I loved this writing, but I was a little bit distracted by desperately needing to know who the two lovers were. At one point I thought it was Draco and Ron (oh wow I want to see that!) then it was James and anyone I could think of with blue eyes, and I was a bit iffy cause James is a bit young. Ignore me I'm rambling ... Teddy and Fred. Mmm, interesting because you have the cousin connection there too. Good characterisation of Fed and through his eyes Teddy as well. So well done for that.You manage to convey some quite beautiful moments here. Fred's angst and his loathing for the situation are really apparant. And the allusion to it being like a drug is an apt one.

Second person. I'm not a huge fan, you know that, but it's well sustained and not too dominating in this fic, but on the whole I'd rather see this as a third person piece. Ignore me, I'm kinda cranky tonight.

Did enjoy this partly because I always love reading your work. So evocative, Emma. ~Carole~

Ascendio: The Untold Story of Anne Boleyn by Virgil

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •

Growing up fully immersed in the early sixteenth century English aristocracy, all Anne Boleyn ever wanted was the chance to make her own choices. When she is suddenly thrust into the magical world of wizards and witches, her life is forever altered.

The seventh son of a seventh son sifts through papers on his desk in the Headmaster’s Office. His cousin, the six son of a six son, toils in the shadows bring his brethren down. They both know that the support of Anne Boleyn will be essential.

This is the tale of Anne Boleyn, her efforts to preserve justice in the face of adversity, and her influence on society that continues to this day.

At the beginning of this tale, one may wish to note that Anne has five fingers on her right hand.

Everything is not what it seems.

This story is down for revisions. You can still read the prologue, though.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

OOOh, I like this! What an original idea, and I can't wait to see what happens. I take it this Zabinii is an old Gryffindor, so is his spiteful cousin a Slyth, I wonder? Really intrigued to read the rest of this. Well done! ~Carole~

Author's Response: I'm glad you're interested! Indeed, the spiteful cousin is a Slyth. There's quite a lot of non-canon Zabini family backstory in this, and it will be revealed as time goes on :) Thank you so much for reviewing! Peace, Virgil

All the Time in the World by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •

All Teddy Lupin had ever wanted was to be the kind of man his godfather was. He even followed in Harry's footsteps and became an Auror.

Harry wanted nothing more than to be the father that Teddy would never have, but work and obligations always seemed to get in the way. Before he knew it, Teddy was all grown up. How had he missed all those precious moments? He knew he had to make up for it somehow.

After all, they had all the time in the world, right?


This fic WON a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Post-Hogwarts Story

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Noooooo. What's happening here? Emma outs him, you kill him. Poor Teddy! Jess, this is very interesting and such a great story. I do like Harry not being quite such a perfect family man. His guilt over neglecting Teddy is obvious, but he still never does a bloody thing about it - tsk tsk - slaps his wrist at that.

I liked all the action scenes and your DE's were suitably ebil. This is silly but my favourite bit was when he thought of Rowle as a 'lummox'. My dad used to use that word so I was giggling at that.

Mmm, nit pick - but not of the Brit kind - this is a canon pick. In the Epilogue (everyone groans) Harry mentions that Teddy comes round for dinner about four times a week, so I'm not sure they would have been so estranged. Although you could say the relationship had vastly improved in the past few years so that could account for the frequency of his visits. Perhaps you did and I'm not reading properly (excuse me, it must be catching *snort*)

I always enjoy reading your portrayal of canon characters, especially the ones we know so little about, because you always present them ion a fresh way.


Author's Response:

Hmm, so you're not throwing things at me for killing of baby Teddy. I feel a bit safer now, lol.

I wanted this to be sort of a moral story that teaches us to live in the now, because who the hell knows what tomorrow will bring. I was sort of inspired by the song Cats in the Cradle by I believe Harry Chapin. Harry keeps getting disctracted until he realises that he's missed so many of Teddy's most important years. He does improve, however. When Harry summons Teddy to his office and asks him to come over for dinner that night and as much as he likes, that was the start of the repairing of the relationship. That's when Teddy was 'over four nights a week' and found time to meet/fall for Victoire. 

Oh, and do be careful about reading properly. Some of that, er, literary, 'it makes me think' might get on you. I hear it burns like a mofo.

Lovely review, and I thank you for your glowing words. *hugs*

~Jess (who is going back to writing her Katie/Oliver smut)

Master of Midnight by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •

To most lycanthropes, it is a curse. To one, he relishes it and the power it gives him. Who is this one?

See Fenrir Greyback and his transformation from man to beast.


This tritina was written for the Department of Mysteries Challenge in the Poetry Anyone forum of the Beta Boards. By some miracle, it won first place. (love you, Jules)

This poem was also nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Poem

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You already have a review for this on PA, but another can't do you any harm .. I suppose. I really love this poem. It is so insightful and really made me think about the pain of transformation. Greyback's enjoyment of that pain was terrible to imagine, but so fitting for the depraved beast he was ... and makes Remus' revulsion of himself that much more meaningful.

The wonderful thing about your tritina is that the reader doesn't notice the repetition of the end lines - always the trickiest part. A well-deserved winner (she says through gritted teeth). No, I really mean it. Brilliant idea, and superbly executed. ~Carole~

Author's Response:

Haha, lovely review, dear. I still can't believe it won, because yours kicked so much more ass. I suppose I've always wondered why the hell someone could enjoy being a predatory monster so much. I've had this fixation with Remus lately, so thinking about what makes him, well...him, has become a ponderous affair to me.

I'm glad you liked it, considering I wrote it on my lunchbreak at work while watching Days of our Lives on TV. :D


Ariana by inspirations

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Who killed Ariana Dumbledore? This is about the pain, the guilt, the not knowing.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/19/10 Title: Chapter 1: Ariana

Hello Spire,

Well, this won't be a SPEW quality review, but a few lines to tell you that I like this poem rather a lot. You managed to convey a whole ream of emotions here from guilt, remorse, grief and the agony of not knowing. This was quite wonderful. I', supposing that this is from Albus Dumbledore's POV but actually it could fit Aberforth as well. I think he probably felt some guilt too, although Albus would have shouldered the majority of the burden, I imagine.

As a poetry form, the tritina is hard to get right because it can sound repetitive. I think you avoided that trap by using some normalish words at the end of the lines. It didn't come over as forced in any way. I'm not sure about the last line, though. I think it's too long - and although I love the sentiment expressed I'm wondering if you could chop off the last part (hoping I'm being deceived). The trouble with that is that you lose his hope that he didn't do it. Hmmm, not sure now, perhaps it doesn't matter.

Lovely lyrical poem, Spire. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks, Carole. :) Personally I imagined this to be from Aberforth, but when I read it afterwards I decided it could really fit either brother. I guess it depends on the reader. -hugs- xx

Different in the Morning by Gmariam

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Seventh year is almost over, and after indulging in the kitchen a bit too much, James inadvertently reveals his deepest fears for the future. Lily realizes he is not quite who she thought he was, and admits to something she had never really considered before.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 10/01/10 Title: Chapter 2: Part Two-The Day After

"Game?" she asked, eyeing him curiously. "I guess so. Our game." She seemed to think about it. "I like it, our game," she offered. My utter, utter favourite line that just about sums up the whole 'thing' between James and Lily. OMP (adfoot) You have so totally caught this pair. I'm shamefullyfangirling you because you've done this superbly in such a short story. Okay, I had reservations about Lily last time, but here, she's just brilliant. Hmm, I said that was my favourite line but then they went and kissed and I was laughing with them, (and crying too because they're going to die) Damn it, I'm all sad and happy now. I need to get back to some good old James/Lily.

Gina, sorry for the rubbish review, but this is just ... love. I am adding to favourites. *sob* ~Carole~

Author's Response: Ah, I'll take a rubbish review like that any day! Thank you so much for reading the second part. I'm really glad I could get them right (especially considering I hadn't really planned on continuing.) It took me a little while to really figure out the very end. Your comments about Lily did make me think and I fleshed her out just a tad here to get it right. Did you see my use of 'clever dick'? Was that okay? Thanks for that! And thank you so much for the lovely review, it really makes my day. ~Gina :)

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Part One-The Night Before


Yes, it's me! Had to read your story because a) it's J/L and I'm on that ship and b) it's written by you. *beams* I like this. I love the premise, and James comes over as wonderfully tortured and very different from the irresponsible prat we usually see. James, in fact, is wonderful here. You have a great understanding of his character.

Your writing as always is wonderfully descriptive. I adore the scenes by the lake and when he's swimming. The plot too is good, simple but very effective.

I do have a nit pick or two (sorry) Sirius's uncle died. Apparently he was also blasted off the family tree, so Sirius was keen on going to pay his respects to a fellow black sheep." Sirius in OOTP says Alphard was blasted off the tapestry because he left him some gold. So, I don't think he'd have been blasted off at the time of the funeral because wills take a month to process according to Hermione and Scrimgeour.

The other thing was that I was unsure about Lily here. She came over as very naive about what was happening in the world. She's going to be in far more danger than pure-blooded James and Sirius, despite them being blood traitors and fighters. Yet she seems almost disconnected from what is going on in the outside world. As a witch who has a real connection with the outside world due to her Muggle parents, in my opinion, she would be far more aware than those who were brought up solely in the magical world. At one point I wanted her to get really angry with James because he was banging on about his worries, whereas she's the one who faces persecution. I'm not saying that James didn't have a right to moan because I think it's clear that he was worried and scared for all the right reasons - including his concern for her. James, as I said, was bang on the money, but Lily felt a bit off in places.

Damn! I feel mean now, because I genuinely loved the story. It flowed well, and had a great story. The moments when he was puking were so funny, I was so pleased he didn't try to kiss her - ha ha ha. I can't wait for part 2.


Author's Response: Hi Carole! Don't feel mean, lol. I appreciate the review and am just glad you came to read this. I really, really enjoyed writing it. Do you remember when Natalie's status said something about writing a drunk character? That's where I got the idea. I don't mind your nitpicks. As for Sirius's uncle, I will reread that bit in OotP. I can tweak that line easily. I still imagine him being a bit of a black sheep (ha - I just got my double meaning, lol!) but perhaps he wasn't blasted off until later. Easy fix, that's why you are the timeline queen! :) As for Lily...hm. I can totally see your point, that's for sure. All I can say is that I deliberately wrote her that way because I wanted them both to be slightly different than usual - ie, James with his fears for the future, and Lily with her slightly naive but hopeful plans for the future. She is ready to move on, excited to be starting her own life - she doesn't share James's trepidation about the future, she's far more positive. I guess that comes across as ignorant, but she doesn't see it affecting her in terms of having to fight like James does. Talking with James makes her realize just what life post-Hogwarts will be like with the war. I address it in the next part but I'll be sure to flesh it out a bit so she is more the character readers know and recognize (even though she is in my head - just got to get that out.) I hope that makes sense, and I hope that you enjoy the next part and how things resolve. Thanks so much for reading this story and leaving such a nice, detailed review! I really appreciate the feedback!! ~Gina :)

Patterns in the Smoke by Inclination

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: "Regulus thinks it’s better than way, easier. He tries not to think of fragile bone-masks and bodies that are already dead when they hit the floor with a hollow thump. " Regulus introspective, Regulus/Snape.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I clicked on this because the pairing intrigued me and I'm glad I did. I like your style of writing very much and thought you portrayed Regulus brilliantly. I think this shows how he got in far to deep to something he didn't fully appreciate when he first became a DE and his reliance on alcohol at the end shows a soul beginning to change.

I'm unsure about Snape. Not because of his eternal 'love' for Lily blah blah blah, but because I can't really see him making the first move like that. I almost feel that it would have been better if Regulus had kissed him first. He never made any moves with Lily and he knew her very well, so to suddenly launch himself at Regulus seems almost out of character.

The scene back at his flat was excellent especially Snapes revelation that he knew the people Regulus had killed. Made me think he'd just killed Lily's parents. I'm slow on the uptake, so was I right?

Good story ~Carole~

Author's Response: Wow. Thankyou so much... it may sound cheesy, but I'm a huge fan of your work, so the fact that you said you liked my writing style is a huge compliment (and this is my cue to turn bright red). I'm really glad you enjoyed Regulus' characterisation... and as for the Snape, part, I guess as I was writing it, it just felt like the right thing to do. I think Snape and Regulus are just two very lonely people... to me, it made sense to throw them together somehow. You were right about the couple Regulus killing being Lily's parents... I wondered if people would notice that, seeing as even my beta didn't :P Thankyou again for your review, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

What We Lost in the War by solemnlyswear_x

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Susan Bones reflects on coming home.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/21/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh Oh Oh! I remember you writing the drabble for this in the TTB comp two years ago. It was the line about the pudding that did it. Ha ha.

This is such a lovely piece. So evocative of the feelings she must have been going through. And I love the way you seemed to catch the very essence of the Houses in their reactions to being back. The Gryffs made me laugh as they were starting a food fight, I was grinning and thinking of the Marauders (I know they were all dead, but nice to think they live on in spirit)
,br> I have a small question about Justin. He makes a comment about being a 'seventh year again' but he didn't go to Hogwarts in that year because he was a Muggle-born and so in hiding. You also mention him losing two cousins and I don't think he would have done because they'd have been Muggles. That's not to say no one from his family would have died, but I think you could possibly expand that bit slightly to show that not everyone who died was someone magical.

This is a lovely story though. So thank you for expanding it and giving me the chance to read it again. ~Carole~

In the Ashes by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story

In her seventh year, Katie Bell knew what it was like to fear death. A year later, she learnt what it was like to see it in front of her. Nothing she had ever experienced had prepared her to deal with the aftermath of that. And then he came.

Caught in a whirlwind of Quidditch, heartbreak, and a rivalry, Katie struggled with her jumbled mess of feelings, one of which she hadn't expected but was growing certain that she could never live without.




Oh my freaking Salazar! This story WON TWO 2011 Quicksilver Quill Awards: Best Post-Hogwarts Story and Best Non-Canon Romance Story. *flail*



This (late) update was brought to you by the (belated) birthday of the ever-lovely Hannah / h_vic. She is a star and an excellent friend!

Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/26/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Despite the fact that Oliver is clearly gay *snigger* I suspended my disbelief and horror at his heterosexuality to read your story. Pretty damn glad I did as well.

Fairly fabulous start. I really am impressed with Katie in this and the fact that she hid. Okay, I don’t mean I’m impressed with her, but I do love the way you’ve written this. We have this idea that Gryffs are always brave, but she was scared – and not surprisingly when she’d just seen Fred die.

Katie had never seen anyone die before. It felt like something filthy that couldn’t be washed from her skin, almost as if she had done it herself. That was when she realised that she was a coward. Incredibly good set of lines there, Jess. I think your writing here sets the tone perfectly for the piece and the conflicts in her mind.

I giggled at the Confunding of the taxi driver. It added a slightly lighter moment, but also introduced a touch of magic at the beginning. In general, apart froma bit of Apparition, I find a lot of fanfic authors somehow ignore the magic to concentrate on the plot. You haven’t so thank you!

I liked Fred’s funeral (well, not like exactly) and the idea of the jokes was good. I was also pleased that Katie couldn’t think of a joke. It seems fitting that although this was what Fred would have wanted, some people wouldn’t be able to cope with the idea of jollity.

Hmm, no mention of George, though. I think I understand because if you start writing George then it could take over, however you didn’t reference him at all – did you? That felt wrong, somehow and it was a jarring note to what was a good chunk of the story.

When Oliver kissed her, I did start thinking that this was a bit too soon, and his offer to put her up felkt rushed because I didn’t understand his motives. However, remembering a chat with you, I do know a bit more about his side of the story, so I’m aware that there is a story to Oliver that isn’t just about him being kind. The sex scene (or nearly sex scene) was well done. Again, I was twitching a bit at the sooness of it, but then again, both had faced death and just come back from a funeral, so in the end it felt right. I was pleased Oliver pulled away, though – he does have some chivalry left – ha ha ha.

Nit pick time (but not Brit-picks)

the only wizarding establishment anywhere her hometown in South Leigh. There’s a missing word here.

Kenwick, - you said Keswick earlier.

I am impressed with the mention of Quidditch and will be very interested in the rest of the story. Knowing you as I do, this isn’t going to be fluff or mere smut. I reckon there’s a cracking tale coming out over the next few chapters. Please make sure you finish it. I am adding this to favourites – NOW! (and I don’t do that very often)


Author's Response:

Hello, EQ! I'm glad that Bartender J was able to deliver at least to some degree on the story that has taken over her life. :D

I know it seems weird in retrospect that George wasn't mentioned, but Katie really wasn't bothered to think about anything at the moment. Her brain was stuck on how she saw her friend be murdered and how much she really didn't want to be there.

And then Oliver kissed her. Why did he do that? Well, he definitely didn't mean to take it that far. It was supposed to have been a light, sweet kiss meant to show support, but damn it all if they didn't find latent sexual attraction, not to mention a hell of a good reason to want to change the current subject. I suppose when two people are attracted to one another and they're already in the mode of not being bothered to think much (and Oliver's side of the story is coming next chapter), they do things that are...ill-advised (although fun to read/write).

I will go back and fix my little city slip-up. I spent nearly an hour with my face stuck in maps, trying to find the town. I'll be damned if I can actually remember the one I actually picked. >.> :D

And Quidditch will play a HUGE part in the rest of the story. The next chapter is filled with it, actually. I might have to make a glossary of sports terms, or at least extend an invitation to ask me all the question one might need to follow some of it. Prepare to be immersed in sports culture. :D

As you read this, Chapter 2 will be added to the queue. Hopefully this time, though, it doesn't take six days to escape. 

Heart you for being my first (and I suspect only) review. Until we meet again in The City.

~Bartender J

Jealousy by hogwartsbookworm

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: What caused Ron's sudden hatred for his favorite quidditch player?

What made Hermione ask out a boy who "makes Grawp look a gentleman"?



Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Green Represents More than Slytherin House...

OH, hello. Yes, I did like this. I think i preferred the Hermione part of the story to the Ron (although I liked Ron as well) because you nailed Hermione. I love that she had a plan, and then turned to another plan to make Ron hurt.

Ron was sweet. I did smile over the fact that he refused to believe he felt anything for Hermione and was annoyed because she was with his hero - ha ha.

Nice job ~Carole~

Author's Response: Wow, hi, Carole! Thank you for reading my one-shot!

"You nailed Hermione." I've been told I have a knack for writing her. That makes me very glad that you thought so to. Thank you for stopping by!

Well Worth The Trouble by Gmariam

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: When James becomes the victim of Sirius's Valentine's Day prank, Lily is forced to watch over him and keep him out of trouble for the evening. Yet even after a rather long night, she can't help but wonder if perhaps it had been worth it after all.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/24/10 Title: Chapter 1: Well Worth The Trouble

Aww, this is brilliant. Umm, if I made a list of the bits I loved, I'd basically be copyingh the whole story. Suffice to say I think you caught Lily brilliantly and James was a love. I was surprised at Sirius because you often say you can't get him, but this is very good. He's arrogant and also has that touch of spite and thoughtlessness that I'm sure he possessed. It was typical of him not to consider the feelings of the girls involved, especially poor Henrietta who would have been the most badly affected (the other girls and McG could handle James ... but her?) So, great job with Sirius.

I did giggle and smile, notably when James told McG she was the best cat at Hogwarts and the thought of Sirius speaking Swahili .

I do hope they pay back Sirius and get together this valentines day (pretty please, write some more even though it will take you beyond my reach *sigh*)

I loved this very much and it cheered me up. So, thank you. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Hi Carole! Thank you so much for such a really lovely first review. It was so nice to wake up to. :) I hope you are not going easy on me because I've been whining on LJ lately! ;) I thought for sure you might Brit-pick a thing or two - in fact, I made one change from the original just so you wouldn't catch it, lol! I'm really glad you liked it and it cheered you up. This was the story I was excited about capturing a bit of a snarky tone, so I'm glad you liked Lily. I had a blast with it, and with her epithets in particular. I actually have started writing a sequel for the next Valentine's Day. Apparently there are infinite possibilities for the way they get together in my sad little brain. So someday. Maybe Valentine's Day? Thanks again, I really appreciate it!! ~Gina :)

Lady by armagod679

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: There are certain indispensable rules in the house of Black. You must stick with purebloods. You must disdain Muggles. You must keep up decorum at all times. You must show off your magic. You must appear to be a lady so a good pureblood boy will want to marry you.
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 09/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is an original idea. I like the reinforcement of the rules over and over again to Narcissa. Through Bellatrix's eyes we see a sister who was given very little choice about her way forward, but appeared to want her way of life anyway.

I have a bit of a quibble about your time line and ages. Narcissa was born in 1955 (according to JKR's Black family tree). Sirius was born in 1960, so when Cissy was seven, he would have been two. I doubt whether they'd have been able to deduce from that age that he wan't following rules. Also you say that Lucius was several years old than Narcissa, but he was a prefect when Snape and the others were Sorted, so at the most was only two years older than Narcissa. I'm also pretty sure that Narcissa was never a Death Eater. She supported them, but didn't have the Dark Mark on her arm.

I think you captured both sisters well in this fic. Bellatrix isn't totally over-the-top mad, but has a wry way with words. The bit where she's facing the Potters and exclaims that Potter was always too fast, made me smile slightly.


Author's Response: Thank you for your response. The Black Family Tree is not my strong point-- for more details, see my long work "Marauders to the End." I've gone round and round with mods about it and have finally given up since I can't add anyways. It never says in the book whether or not Narcissa was a Death Eater. That's another thing I argued with the mods about, since the Lexicon has her listed as a supporter. I thought she was and it works either way. Thank you for reviewing!