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Real name: Carole
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What can I say. I live in London and am obsessed with a teenage wizard and his friends. Am I mad? Probably Do I care? Hell no!
EDIT: Grown? Um, probably not

For my first foray into the realms of fanfiction I've chosen to write about the Marauders. I'll always stick fairly closely to canon as I think JK knows best. Although I've enjoyed reading about other ships I, personally, don't think I could write with conviction about Ginny/Crabbe or Hermione/Mclaggan relationships.

EDIT: ha ha ha ha ha - How I have changed! I'm now firmly in the rare-pair, SSP, and things that aren't quite conventional camp, although I still loves me some James/Lily.

My second chaptered fic (Apparently Asleep) has started a love affair with Tonks/Remus and confirmed my obsession for all things Sirius. *sigh*

I am indebted to Terri (mudbloodproud) for being a great beta and all round amazing person. If it hadn't been for her encouragement I would have thrown in the towel many months ago.

EDIT: I have made a lot of wonderful friends during my past three years on MNFF, including (in no particular order) Natalie, Kara, Hannah/Bob, Jess, Gina, Lea, Lori, Julia, Minna, Emmahhhh, and the fantabulous BB.

I hope Mugglenet and you enjoy reading my words as much as I've enjoyed writing them. Huge thank-you to my niece, Amanda, for being one of the first to catch the Harry Potter bug and nagging me into reading them.


I’ve written a variety of stories, so here is them arranged in categories. Some are cross- referenced. So a James/Lily may appear in Marauder or Canon Romance

EDIT: I haven't written much Harry Potter fanfiction for a while. It is unlikely I'll update the two chaptered fics I first started as they became a little too long and unwieldy. Sorry about that.

Marauder
A Second Chance
Contemplating Lilies
Dancing Queen
First Date Disaster
Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand
It Takes a Wolf to Prank a Dog
Juggling
Learning to Fly
March Madness
O.W.L.s, Quidditch and the Added Distraction of Sirius Black
Peace in Heaven
Ribbons, not Strings
Sixth Time's the Charm
Thank you for your time, Professor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Sum of the Whole
Veils
Who's That Girl?
Wormtail on the Hogwarts Express



Canon Romance
'i'before 'e' (Percy/Audrey)
A Prize Above Rubies (Isla Black/Bob Hitchens)
Acorns (Bill/Fleur)
Apparently Asleep (Remus/Tonks)
Birthday Girl (George/Angelina)
Bound in the Beating of Each Other’s Hearts (Narcissa/Lucius)
Coup de Foudre (Bill/Fleur)
Dancing Queen (James/Lily)
First Date Disaster (James/Lily)
Five weeks (Remus/Tonks)
Forces of Nature (Ron/Hermione)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
In The Stars (Draco/Astoria)
Key of the Door (Ron/Hermione)
Kissing the Joy as it Flies (Seamus/Lavender)
March Madness (James/Lily)
Not Quite Perfect (Bill/Fleur)
Reconnaissance (Remus/Tonks)
Sixth Time’s the Charm (James/Lily)
Snowball Fights (Teddy/Victoire)
Until Death (Eaters) Do Us Part (Draco/Astoria)
Veils (James/Lily)
You Dance Divinely (George/Angelina)



Non (or rather tweaked) Canon (apart from one story, these don’t break any canon.)

Better than Chocolate (Charlie/Tonks)
Heat of Life (Harry/Katie)
Her Tomorrows (Harry/Parvati)
High (Scorpius/Lily)
Lavender, blue- A Gryffindor True (Lavender/Blaise)
Love At First Strike (Angelina/Terry)
Mirrors (Charlie/Penelope)
Misperception (Oliver/Cedric/Daphne)
Orphans of the Storm (Seamus/Parvati/Dean)
Passion Among the Primroses (Arthur/Mafalda)
Predictions of Love (Gilderoy/Sybil)
Ribbons, not Strings (Remus/Rosmerta)
Shrouds (Hermione/Draco)
Snapdragons (Charlie/OC)
Stars or Carousels (James/Dominique)
Summer’s Heat (Sirius/OC)
Swans (Mollyjnr/OC)
Teenage Witch (Charity/Myron Wagtail )
The Happy Couple (Harry/Ginny, Blaise/Lavender)
The Only One (Lavender/Blaise Teddy/Victoire)
The Untrodden Path (Draco/Hannah)
Where We Started From (Dean/Ginny)



Same sex Pairings
Apple-bobbing ( Lisa/Susan)
Close Your Eyes (Hermione/Lavender)
Drowning, not Waving (Oliver/Cedric)
Eyes That Know Me (Scorpius/Hugo)
Forbidden Colours (Tracey/Demelza)
Fracture (Theo/Justin)
Monochrome (Sirius/Remus)
The Dance We Do (Bellatrix/Amelia)
The Hat that Thinks it’s a Chair (Justin/Theo)
Truth Or Dare (Cormac/Zacharias)



Humour
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
Lockhart, Sprout and Two Smoking Goblets
Passion Among the Primroses
Predictions of Love
The Bacchus Book
Vampire - Ghost Child!

Historical
A Prize Above Rubies
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
An Outstretched Hand
Shadows Deep

Others (General, D/A, Post Hogwarts, Next Gen)
A Tangled Web (D/A)
All in the Genes (NG)
Chasing the Scoop! (Post Hogwarts)
Christmas on the Outside (General/Trio era)
Dean Thomas and the Reiver Curse (Post Hogwarts)
Diavol (Remus Trio Era)
Every Breath You Take (Post Hogwarts/Next Gen)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
Friends in Unlikely Places (Post Hog. Hermione)
Growing Old Disgracefully (Post Hog)
High (NG)
Lavender, blue (Trio Era)
Mere Wisps of Light (Post Hog. Draco fic)
Muggles, Magic and Misconceptions (Next Gen)
My Funny Valentine (Post Hogwarts)
Staring into the Fire (Trio Era)
The Waiting Game (D/A)
Whispers from the Past (Next Gen)



Mysteries
The Foolhardy Boys and Parvati, too
Who’s that Girl?
Xanthe Interrupted
Zeitgeist



Poetry
Askew
As They Watch
Beyond Beseeching
Celestina's Songbook: Christmas Edition, Volume 1
Cold Dreams
Draco's Journey
Enslaved
Fairytale of Hogwarts
Flying High
Forever France
Frozen Silence
Hexed!
Hey, brother
I Believed in Lily Evans
Master Barty Regrets
Phoenix Flames
Queen of My Heart
Sirius, Baby
The Daydream Pedlar's Song
The Four
The Labyrinth Mind
Unreconciled

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Brazen by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 24]

Summary: Past Featured Story

*These are the times that try men's souls.

Well, that couldn't be any more real for Draco Malfoy than on the eve of his wedding. He was getting married the next day, but all he could think about is how his life was about to become so much more damned complicated.

He had no idea.

 

*Quote - Thomas Paine, American revolutionary.

 

This fic was nominated for a 2010 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Humour



Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 6829 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/02/10 Updated: 06/03/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/03/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

HOW VERY DARE YOU!

THIS IS AN OUTRAGE!

THIS IS A DISGRACE!

JK ROWKLING WILL BE TURNING IN HER .... er ... GRAVE?

THIS IS ... Bloody hilarious.

Jess, I adored this story. Draco was just wonderful and Astoria - ha ha ha - so different from my story (they had a surprise wedding in mine), but a touch of steel in her runs through both of them. Okay, I was trying to find some lines to quote, but there were far too many good ones. I did like the wedding ceremony and the symbolism of the palms together (It was very reminiscent of Klingon type ceremonies heh heh)- especially when Draco spent most of his time debunking it - ha ha. OH, and Potter was such a condescending prat! Thank you!

Right, calming down from the belly laughs, I do like the way the story flows. It's long, but I didn't get the feeling at all that it was too long. Draco was incredibly unpleasant, but I was still rooting for him and the touches you had about Goyle taking to drugs, Blaise with a blonde strop (Uh, Lavender isn't blonde btw - I forgive you *winks*) and Theodore with Susan (a nod to Sheena's wonderful story, perhaps). Pansy and the soap - ha ha - she is a stupid tart! All made an incredibly good and convincing tale.

OOOH, I've remembered my favourite bit now. The cake shop and him nibbling the cake decoration. How do you think up things like that? CLASS! GENIUS! and any other one word exclamations I can think of. Ahhh, I'm about to do something that I really don't do very often ...

*adds story to favourites*

~Carole~

Author's Response:

Ooh, I'm honoured to make such a presigious list. I think you see what I meant by probably unsuitable for humour for content. I was looking forward to making the humour rolls, though it will definitely be more read this way.

The cake thing...I just had to think about something a man would find to be an easy fix, but a woman would freak out over (the decorator). It just...happened. 

I'm happy that you like it and it's actually as good as I thought it was. Heart.

Jess

 

The Fall by Iguanarwhal
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: Sirius Black and Hesper Gamp learn about life, love and loss.

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1884 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/03/10 Updated: 06/06/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/09/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Fall

Hello there.

This is an interesting story, and unusual in the way you've set it out as a list rather than an actual story. I found it intriguing, although I have to admit I'm not sure it would have held my interest if it had been much longer. I'm wondering if a few more passages with some dialogue interspersed in the reminiscences would have helped as well.

What I did like was that this was a lovely tale of courtship and slow burning love that led to a very real love between your protagonists.

I did notice the odd mistake They never considered themselves great lovers of children, but they find that Sirius, Lycoris and Regulus a bright stars in often bleak lives. I think you mean Arcturus - not Sirius when you're listing their children, and instead of 'a' you should put 'are' (simple typo - excuseable) Also there were parts that seemed almost too modern for this pairing Sure, they’re nowhere near old, That sounds a too informal for a nineteenth century couple, but I understand the sentiment totally.

I was slightly confused by the end. Why can Hesper die in peace? It didn't sound as if Sirius was particulalrly tempestuous. From the story you've written, it sounds as if she can die 'happy' knowing that she'll be reunited with him (although that's phrased in a very cliched manner, but I'm sure you get my drift).

Did like this unusual story, though ~Carole~

 

A Birthday Kiss by Liandrin
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Ginny had seen him at the bar, laughing with his mates. She didn’t even know that he was capable of laughter, or having mates.



Dedicated to Draco Malfoy, since it’s his birthday today (June 5th)! ^^ Happy 30th!

Categories: Draco/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 1399 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/05/10 Updated: 06/08/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: A Birthday Kiss

Hi Lia,

This is the first thing I've read of yours, and actually (for my sins) the first Draco/Ginny. In general, I'm not convinced by this pairing (curse my canon soul), but I think you've made a good job of this. You kept both characters in character which is always a good thing (LOL).

You had some great touches in this, like the pub that subtly enlarges,and the spell on the Magic 8 Ball.

Nice story ~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole, You've never read my fics before, and you choose my worst one? Lol. It's okay. No worries, I totally understand how people can't warm up to D/G, and this is not a perfect example of how they could work. I think my only story that comes close to showing a plausible 'romance' is Shades of Grey.

I am very happy that you found my characters in character. ^_^ Thank you!

~Lia

 

A Flight to Remember by Liandrin
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Lily had often wondered why the older boy would go outdoors, alone, when it was raining. Amongst his friends, he was always playing the part of the dashing rogue - a dapper roué who was never without a female companion. If he was so comfortable in the company of others, why then did he seek solace in the rain?

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 1641 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/09/10 Updated: 06/13/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: A Flight To Remember

Blast, my last review disappeared ionto the ether. *starts again* I do love a good Lily/Scorpius. They're definitely my favourite Next gen pairing (but you know that). This is a very well written story, Lia, that neatly encapsulates a great moment for this pair.

I like Lily here although I agree that she does come across as a bit 'unhinged'. Still, I blame that mix of Marauder genes and Weasley recklessness - poor girl. She's a great character and her observations about Scorpius give a good insight into his character too. Your Lily is different to mine, but I still read and enjoyed and started nodding at their similarites (a certain recklessness and wish to annoy her brothers - LOL) .

I do have a brit pick, sorry. I feel very measley for pointing it out, but I'm a pedantic thing at times. We don't have 'cotton candy' in UK - we call it 'candy floss' . I love that image of her tasting like that confection though. (although I prefer apples *snorts*)

Great story. ~Carole~

Author's Response: I'm sure you'll find certain Americanisms or Australianisms sprinkled throughout my work (ah, a child of three worlds). ^_~ What's funny about my word usage for this one (cotton candy instead of candy floss) is because I had a body spray bottle beside my bed, and it's scent, listed on the label, is 'cotton candy'. I thought, Hmm, it'd be nice to taste like that. Okay, Lily, you're going to taste like my body spray! *starts typing* Lol. I'll go back and fix it though.

I'm glad you liked my crazy Lily though. For me, it's rather unusual to write anyone outside of Draco and Ginny, so it was a challenge. I think I might leave this pairing up to the experts, like you. ^_~

Thank you for the lovely review, Carole. ^^

~Lia

 

Changing Faces by coolh5000
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: Hermione knows Draco Malfoy - he is arrogant, mean and has been nothing but hurtful towards her ever since the first time they met. Called to testify at his trial, however, she sees something other than hatred in the face of her old nemesis and begins to wonder if there is something she has been missing all along.

Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1087 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/10/10 Updated: 06/10/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 10/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, interesting! Sorry, Hannah, I've only just seen this. I'm starting to read more Dramione these days, and I liked this because it's not set at school, and it's about redeeming the seemingly irredeemable, (which is kinda like my fic - ha ha)

I like the descriptions of the courtroom and Malfoy's desperation in that place. The touch at the end, where he calls her Hermione, was very well done. A subtle difference but very pertinent.

~Carole~

 

Through The Veil by the opaleye
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary:

It didn’t seem possible. He had been standing before her merely five minutes ago, but now he was gone. She stared up at the empty archway. He had mentioned voices, but there was no sound. Someone was holding her, pulling her arm, calling for her to run, but she couldn’t move. Where had he gone? Where had Sirius gone? Why weren’t they coming back?

Ginny thinks back to that fateful night in the Department of Mysteries—the night she lost Harry Potter.

Categories: Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Substance Abuse, Suicide

Word count: 1176 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/14/10 Updated: 06/14/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/02/13 Title: Chapter 1: That night seemed so long ago.

Banners do work. I saw yours and clicked :D.

Not sure how I ever missed this, Julia, possibly the AU tag - hahah. BUT IT'S GINNY/DEAN and that is win! Except your version isn;t and it's all very sad

This is a very plausible set up, actually, and you wrote this so beautifully. I loved the repetition of the word Greek. The double play here of Greek to mean something incomprehensible here, and Greek because they were in Greece, works very well with the mysterious atmosphere of the story. I loved the end, the feeling that we never quite know what is happening to Ginny and whether she has stepped through.

Well done ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you, Carole! I am glad I decide to trawl through my old photobucket folders :) This fic was actually written for the first SBBC Mix and Match Activity so it's a nice surprise to receive a review for it now after all this time. The couple I was emulating were The Doctor and Rose. I liked the parallel between their separation and the veil. In the original drabble it was Spain and not Greece but when expanding it into a one-shot I thought Spain was far too close to Voldemort for comfort and moved them to Greece. Greece seems much more fitting, I think. The romanticism it can often conjure within us because of it's ancient history and mythology is a nice contrast to the horror and fear Ginny is feeling, and her out-of-placeness. At the same time the themes in Harry Potter often draw from Greek mythology. Thank you so much for this review, Carole. It was a lovely surprise and brought a smile to my face :D Julia xoxo

 

The Right One by mgle_teacher
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: The right one isn't always the one we want or think it will be

Pairings: Harry/Pansy; Draco/Hermione; Ron/Luna

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1176 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/17/10 Updated: 06/17/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/31/10 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ... okay, you've possibly ruined the only AU I had in my mind (which was a Ron/Luna type thing) but this has just made me LOL rather a lot.

I loved the play on the blond/blonde and despite the fact that this was humour, they were all pretty much IC. You do have Draco down to a tee.

Merlin, that was good. Can we expect some more Pansy/Harry. I'm fairly sure that would be the kind of smut I'd enjoy ...

Thank you for making me laugh. ~Carole~

Author's Response: LOL -- I ruined your AU?! Not to be a show off or anything, but I specialize in Draco. XD I wrote some Harry/Pansy here: http://fanfiction.mugglenet.com/viewstory.php?sid=86236&warning=3

In case you're interested =] I'm glad I was able to make you laugh. My job here is fini.

 

Summary: Four years after the Battle, a strange desire draws Hermione Granger. What could possibly make her visit Malfoy Manor?

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 4777 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/26/10 Updated: 06/28/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Secret Diary of Hermione Granger

Hello, I thought I'd read this as I was intrigued by the summary and also was experiencing a moment of shock that you could possibly be writing a Dramione - ha ha. I should have known.

I like the story behind this. Hermione does need to face Malfoy Manor after all. I also think your characterisation of Hermione and Draco is good. Her memories of the event and the contrast of Andromeda and Bellatrix were superbly woven into the fic. I also adored the fact that the Malfoys weren't as grand and wealthy as we'd previously seen them. Down on their luck ... nice touch.

I have to pull you up about Blaise, though. I'm biased, I admit, because I write him a lot. However, I really dont think you've caught him at all. In HBP, he's aloof, scornful of women (although there's a hint of something that went on between him and Pansy) and he never once made any suggestive remarks towards any of the girls. He has scenes with Ginny, for instance, and he just glares at her. His mother probably killed seven of her husbands, and I rather think he'd be unable to trust women (and men probably) so wouldn't spend his time making crass comments. I get that this is a few years after the battle and that people change, but Blaise was such a reserved character in the books, even when with his fellow Slytherins, yet here he comes across like Cormac McLaggan trying to grope Hermione. /rant over Blaise (sorry) OOOH, except that 'seeing Blaise in his underpants' would not have traumatized me in the slightest - ha ha.

The inventiveness of the book was a brilliant idea. I love a good Weasley product, and can imagine the fun George and Ron had creating that.

Okay, review over. I did like the story ... just Blaise threw me rather. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole This is Dramione, isnt it? Its about the relationship between Draco and Hermione. (-; Ill be honest. Ive never had the slightest interest in Blaise Zabini (though Theodore Nott fascinates me). This story was written (very quickly) for a Draco/Hermione/Blaise challenge on another fanfic site and I did absolutely no research on Blaise. This shows, doesn't it? This story was not (of course) what was expected or wanted by the issuer of the challenge. Ill bow to your superior knowledge of Blaise. I did kill off his mother and leave him destitute. this is my defence against my unlikely characterisation. It obviously still doesnt wash with you, does it? Ah well, I enjoyed writing it. The portkey book is making its second appearance, in a way. The first appearance is in chapter 10 of Aurors and Schoolgirls which has yet to be submitted. Neil

 

The Best Team in East Anglia by minnabird
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Past Featured StoryEvery year, the best amateur Quidditch team in Suffolk faces off against the best team in Norfolk in the East Anglia Summer Tournament. Isobel Jones, one of exactly seven young witches and wizards in the tiny town of Eleigh St. Mary in Suffolk, decides that not only is she going to form a team for the tournament, her team is going to win it.

The problem? Well, let's see. One of her seven possible players is an utter klutz at Quidditch. Two others are often too busy with their school Quidditch teams to practice hard during the school year. And then there's just the little matter of getting to the finals, facing up against a team that's won two years running and isn't afraid to play dirty, and getting her team through the game unscathed...

"We'll win," she says. "We're going to prove that we’re the best team in East Anglia.”

People scoff. But her team believes - and that's all that really matters.



Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 10193 Chapters: 5 Completed: No
Published:
06/27/10 Updated: 11/27/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/22/11 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: From the Daily Prophet, 13 August 2009

Hey minna, I thought I should review your chapters as I read the prologue ages ago and forgot to review.

First of all, huge applause for tackling this story. You've set yourself a task of writing a story that is all OC's, and about something not Hogwarts based. That is hard because, first off, you have to make us care for the characters as well as introduce them, and secondly it's not in an environment we're familar with.

I think you're doing both these things well. I started to make a connection with the Ravenclaw boy - and I'm wondering if they'll be a bit of romance between him and Isobel (or maybe Julia?).

Interested to see where you take the story. Your knowledge of Quidditch is good and I can tell you've done some research on the region. I have relatives in Norwich ... so sorry, I'm a Norfolk fan!

Good luck and well done with this original slant on the Potterverse ~Carole~

Author's Response: Hey, Carole. Glad you decided to review. =D

-Flails- You have no idea how long it took me to come up with all the characters. I think I started working on it last summer and I didn't finish working out the MCs till like October. I'm usually fairly crap at characterization, though, so I'm trying to work on that with this fic. =) Not Hogwarts based is right up my alley though - every time I try to write Hogwarts I get stalled. >.>

I am very glad you think I'm doing well so far. As for shipping - well, you'll have to find out. ;)

Quidditch is fun and, as you know, research is my addiction. And haha, I seem to be meeting all Norfolk fans. Maybe I'll have to write a sequel where a good Norfolk team wins - the current reigning champs are Slytherin team-like ratbags. Haha.

Will take that luck - and thanks for reading and reviewing.

Minna

 

Forget Me Not by SaladOrCellarDoor
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: This story of Frank and Alice Longbottom's blossoming relationship at Hogwarts reveals the origins of the gum wrapper mystery that surrounds their time at St. Mungo's.

Frank/Alice

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1212 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/28/10 Updated: 06/29/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 07/24/10 Title: Chapter 1: Forget Me Not

What a beautiful story, made all the more poignant because we know what happens to this pair, but still a really good read. I do like how you've fleshed Frank and Alice out, so she's quirky and he's just really rather sweet but obviously worth so much to her. I like that they're friends and teasingly edging towards a romance. Lovely ~Carole~

 

Things Change by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 78]

Summary:

James Potter has changed: no longer an arrogant, irresponsible prankster, he has matured into a responsible Head Boy with tops marks in Transfiguration. Lily Evans has changed as well: normally studious and in control, she has lost focus as she struggles with Head Girl responsibilities and N.E.W.T level studies. An unexpected encounter in the corridors one weekend leads to several startling realizations, the least of which is that things have definitely changed between James Potter and Lily Evans.

This story was nominated for a 2010 QSQ and is now complete.



Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 30679 Chapters: 11 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/07/10 Updated: 11/26/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 07/10/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

OOOOOOOH, Gina. I.ADORE.THIS. Wow, I was completely brought up short by the fact that she was pissed - brilliant. You're building up a lovely story here. And the extra details that you write add to the depth of the story.(Remus preferring Julia, Lily catching snowdrops on her tongue) The fact that she was forcing the pace ... and was also a rather funny drunk - made me giggle. I also adored the shift in James. Yes, of course he wants to snog the girl (and more) but he knows that it could mean the end of anything between them before it had begun. Awww, I want to hug him.

Sorry this isn't a very comprehensive review, but I am adding to favourites. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole! Thank you so much for reading this! I've thrown so much of it at you I'm thrilled you liked the final product (although I'm sorry if I've spoiled any of it for you, lol.) I'm glad you didn't find Lily too out of character in this state (although if you had I would have asked you to wait for the next chapter) I too like the mature, responsible James, since it must have happened at some point for him to become Head Boy! Thanks for your suggestions on that bit of dialogue, I'm glad it worked. And SQUEE to the kiss, lol! I had so much fun writing this, I can't wait to share the rest. Thanks so much for reading it, your review made my day! *hugs* ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 07/23/10 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Four

IT MEANS YOU'RE SOULMATES, YOU DAFT GIRL!
,br> Awww, Gina, I do love this story. It's just so heart-renderingly lovely and James is just wonderful (can I have him now ... I can be that glamorous Hufflepuff?) I did enjoy the scene with the Patronus (when Remus got her to conjur it). and the memory of her walking back from Hogsmeade. Ahhh, first kisses - just lush.

~Carole~

Author's Response: Hee hee, thanks so much Carole! Can't you just see Remus all embarrassed about whispering that sort of thing in her ear? And no, you can't have James, he's all Lily's. :D I quite like how he's turning out. I'm trying to write him a bit differently elsewhere, though, just to broaden the spectrum a bit.. Oh, and I did write a Hufflepuff...except she turned out to be a giggly airhead, sorry. Thanks so much for reading this story, I really appreciate the reviews! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 07/18/10 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three

Awwwwww, Nooooooo, she's not using you, James. She really does like you.

Gina, what can I say except get a move on with this story because it's utterly delish. Sorry, I can't give any real crit today, but just wanted to point out this line:- ames rolled his eyes and cast a silent jinx at his friend, quieting him with a mouthful of bubbles. He grinned when he heard Sirius cough.

That line is just one example where your little details just add so much to the richness of this story. Brilliant!

~Carole~

Author's Response: Oh Carole, thank you so much for sticking with this! I am glad you liked it. Like I said, this was the first time James went and did his own thing, which is why this story is three times as long as I originally intended. I'm afraid I've probably spoiled some of the upcoming bits during our conversations, so I hope you enjoy the rest. Most of it is done so it won't be too long. I really appreciate your reviews, it's so great to know someone is reading this story! Thank you! ~Gina :)

 
Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 07/14/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two

Ah, Chapter 2 - lovely. I'm really enjoying this story. I adore the interaction with Remus (and he's coming across as pretty sexy, too) and Lily is interesting. She's struggling to kepp up, but not too proud to ask for help. I like the touch of asking Remus for help with the Patronus.

Okay, I have a not pick, which is probably related to the coding issue you had.

"I think it's well worth asking," Remus said. "But what if he's mad at me? What if he doesn't like me anymore, like you told Julie?" You haven't separated where Lily starts speaking again so it sounds as if Remus is saying James doesn't like him any more (which is a whole different kettle of Plimpies!)

Sorry, not an indepth review, but I love it! ~Carole~

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for reading the next chapter! I have to admit, this Remus was sort of born out of the Remus drabble I wrote for the TTB monthly. I find him a bit sexy, too, I like him almost as much as James! I figured since Remus ends up teaching DADA he had to be decent at it in school, and I liked the idea of him helping Lily and then Harry. I hope Lily didn't seem too OOC, I wanted to explore the possibilities of a character who was less-than-perfect. Thanks for pointing out the spacing - yes, that's totally a coding issue. Like I said, even though it's right in my Word document, it didn't paste right and I had to double space it all by hand in that teeny tiny box. >.< I'll nip in and fix it this afternoon - thanks!! ~Gina :)

 

Summary:

Lily Evans had a lot of thinking to do, and what better time to do it than the crack of dawn on a Saturday? Not a person in sight...usually. That was, however, until she happened upon a certain group of boys, but without their normal mischief.

Follow Lily as she investigates this awkward run-in with James Potter and his friends.



Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 3007 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/12/10 Updated: 07/15/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 07/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Helloo... Dun Dun Du-u-u-un! Yes, I'm here to R&R. Right let's kick off.

Your characterisation is great. Even though it's mainly a Lily Remus interaction, you've managed to convey a lot about others in this short story - Snape, Sirius, Dumbledore, Pomfrey and even Peter (she didn't spot him before but he's still in the room - I liked that, it shows his relative insignificance which is important because looking back no one gave Peter much relevance. Lily's ponderings about James are lovely, and I like the fact that she walks by the lake to clear her head. Their conversation at the end was spot on - HA, I enjoyed her teasing of him and him being totally befuddled by her presence. Lily reaching out to Remus and assuring him she'd be there for him was gorgeous and made me go 'ahhh' (in my head, you understand, otherwise my kids think I've gone nutty)

Okay, I do have a nit pick ... query, call it what you will. I don't understand why Remus is in such a bad state. In POA, he tells Harry that before the other three became Animagi, he would bite tear and claw at himself because he was shut away, but after they became Animagi, he didn't suffer nearly as much. Because he was with them, he kept his mind and thus was out and about - not confined. I believe he'd still be in some pain from the initial transformation, but not to the point of collapse. I'm assuming from your story, and the fact that he wasn't back at the Shrieking Shack, that something must have gone wrong in their nightly jaunt, but it wasn't explained. This bugs me a bit ... your punishment is to write what happened and why he's in such a wretched way.

The only place he could get away from it was the park nearby where Tuney and me played every day. Grammatically speaking it should be 'Tuney and I', but as it's speech I'll forgive Lily her error *snarky*. Yeah, that's just me, I'm afraid and years of my parents shouting at me for saying me instead of I.

I did enjoy the story, Jess, and it sets up the possibility of a friendship with James and the other Marauders perfectly. Hope you write more. ~Carole~

Author's Response:

Ah, the Marauder Queen has descended. Hopefully, you left the Daleks at home. :D

This started out as a drabble for the monthly, but I realised after I started writing it that it was far to complex and had far too many facets to leave at 800 words or less. I really wanted there to be some kind of relationship between Remus and Lily, and I really wanted to keep away from that staid, old 'Lily is a shrieking shrew and James is a git' thing. Sure, James, from what little we saw of his school self, was a git, but that wasn't the sum of him. Remus would know James's better qualities, and as a good friend, he would be willing to go to bat for his mate.

And as for Remus being in a bad state, I theorise that it took years for the Marauders to master their Animagus skills. This is early in sixth year, so, in my mind, it's still early in the other boys' involvement in Remus's transformation. It would take time for these new animals to build trust with a rampaging werewolf, and that's why they're so knackered in the first place. Remus just wore them the hell out. That's all, really. I probably could and should have explained that in the first place, and I just might do that anyway. 

And, just a quick jab at 'Tuney and me' versus 'Tuney and I': I is only used if the phrase is at the beginning of a sentence, according to the crazy bitch I had for an English teacher in year 8. The rules may be different in UK vs. US English, but I really don't know. If all else fails...BLAME THE BETA!!! lol Now, I really want to know. 

This little jaunt into the Marauder's world was quite fun. When one isn't mired in the muck of James/Lily and not engrossed in the idea that each of these characters are what someone else made them to be, not who I want to shape them to be, it's quite enlightening. I see a lot of how I see Harry in my portrayal of Lily. As we know, Harry hated Malfoy intensely. However, when all was said and done, the Malfoys (well, Narcissa and Draco, at any rate) were shown to be merely pawns in the Dark Lord's game, and Harry didn't let them pay for that in the end. He went to bat for them. Inversely, Lily initially thought that James was only considerate of his own agenda, but when she saw what he was willing to do to help a friend, she saw that he was much more than that. She believed in his ability to be a stand-up human being. That's what I wanted for this story more than anything.

Thank you for reading. I know it had its rough patches, but all in all, it was what I wanted it to be, and that was a gateway. I probably will add more to the events in this story, or maybe even more to this story itself, but there is just so much to be told about these characters and how they came to be who we know.

Cheers!

~Overlord

P.S. - No animagus orgies here!

 

I Am Shame by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: The war is over and people are rebuilding their life, happy and sad and grateful. But what about Draco?



Written for the End of an Era Challenge at PA (WON FIRST PLACE! YIPPIE!), and nominated for a QSQ for Best Poetry. :D Thanks!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 184 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/25/10 Updated: 07/30/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: I Am Shame

Um ... I thought I'd reviewed this. Seriously, I thought this was something I'd reviewed automatically. Obviously not (unless I did it in PA). Surprised because this is Draco, and as you know I'm on a Malfoy kick, especially when it comes to poetry and Draco's redemption.

Where shall I start? This kicks ass. Wow, that's literary of me - LOL.

Basically this is an amazing poem. Draco is such a complex character, because he's so horribly whiny and yet we see very clearly the beginnings of his redemption. Fie on those writers who only keep him a petulant ferret. He is more than that.

Wonderful. ~Carole~ (7, I think)

Author's Response: You kick ass. This review kicks ass. Literary is overrated, etc. This poem was the one which convinced me I could write poems. I love getting reviews for it! So, thank youuuuu, my fairy godmother. <33 We can continue our love/hate relationship with the ferret together.

 

Waking by the opaleye
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: Past Featured Story

He cannot bring himself to think the name. There is a glimpse of red. A laugh. A fumbled apology. A friendship.

How a death may change a life or two.

Winner of Best Non-Canon Romance in the Quick Silver Quill Awards 2010



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Epilogue? What Epilogue?, Sexual Situations

Word count: 2380 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/27/10 Updated: 07/28/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 07/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Waking.

Hello - die hard canonista here, ha ha.

This is very well written,. Julia. You really do have a wondrous talent for evocative and atmospheric scenes. The depth between this pairing is quite beautiful. I'm not a Harmony fan, I think you know that, but I could see this as viable in an AU world, with Ron dead and all that. Mind you, I get the impression that they're helping each other to heal, and it's still a great friendship bond that they have ... but possibly not love? Okay, that's my canon gut kicking in. Personally, I don't see a spark in the books, but then there's no spark anywhere between Lavender and Blaise so who am I to talk? - LOL.

Sorry, this is a barely coherent or literary review, but I do love reading your stories because of your writing and characterisation. Great job - as always. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Hey, Carole! Thanks for the lovely review. I actually agree with you about Harry and Hermione helping each other to heal rather than starting a viable relationship in this fic. It's not really a romance at all and that's why I put it in Dark/Angsty. They just sort of fall together as a result of what has happened. Ron has died and they have gone from three to two so this fic is more about two people trying to heal. Thank you for your lovely compliments. It really does mean a lot to me :)

 

Summary:

James was living the dream. He was the star player on England's 2030 Quidditch World Cup team, and he was showing the world how it was done. That was, of course, until foul play sent his world asunder.

Albus saw his brother's livelihood snatched away in the blink of an eye, but more than that, James was...different. He was cold, angry, and callous - a far cry from the man he was before. Harsh words and even harsher attitudes put them at each other's throats.

 



Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 3881 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/31/10 Updated: 08/06/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/09/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hello, interesting as always, Jess, and you have a good insight into the minds of that pair. Your James is a jock through and through, Al much more bookish, but they're both alike in their belief that only they are right (I blame that on their father - ha ha).

Okay, I'm going to give you sone crit instead of just gushing as I usually do.

Albus grabbed onto his father’s arm, watching in horror as his brother, who he cared for deeply, no matter what he said, I didn't really like the phrase here about 'cared for him deeply'. It struck me as ... old fashioned, I guess, and as if it belonged in a Historical novelette (Georgina cared deeply for Mr Pennyfeather. Alas the rogue did not return her feelings) I don't think you needed the line because it's obvious from his next actions that he cares very much for his brother.

The other crit I have is that the initial argument, Albus' reaction and James' temper seem disproportionate. I think it's obvious that James would be struggling with being assisted by his girlfriend and his brother, and I found it almost unreasonable for Albus to chastise him over it. I know he was rude to Augusta (who I LOVED by the way), but considering everything, I thought Albus overreacted. What I would have liked, I guess, is some more build up, so Al had seen James react angrily before. Hope that makes sense.Also, I giggled a bit at Al calling James a 'son of a bittch,' because he's basically insulting his own mother. I wish James had called him on that. - LOL

Final notpick is a britpick. Please please please change pants to trousers at the end. I read pants as 'underpants' and I'm wondering why James has got lucky so quickly ... ha ha ... I wouldn't say no though.

And on with the review. I loved the scene with Scorpius. You can see why they have a good friendship, and Scorpius is very likeable. He seems to be the only person who can get through to Albus who is just ridiculously stubborn. And I hate cigars too - yeuch!.

Augusta was lovely. I did wonder if she were a Longbottom because of her name, so I was pleased when she was. It gives a nice symmetry to them and I'm imagining some gorgeous little Hannahesque type children now with pigtails who panic in exams.

In conclusion, this was a good story and I much enjoyed reading your view of the Next Gen Potters. ~Carole~

Author's Response:

Hmm, both you and Gina have fiven me something to think about. I did just take four drabbles and stick them together and call it a story. The only part that I actually wrote without word count in mind was the third one, where they end up fighting.

The one part of the story that I do defend a bit is when Albus calls out James. They are brothers, and Albus knows right away what James is doing. Instead of focussing on recovery, he's focussing on being a patient from hell, not to mention being an ungrateful wretch to his girlfriend, who rightfully should have dumped his arse a long time ago. I suppose that's part of the prior relationship between James and Albus that as of yet exists only in my head manifesting itself. That sort of think is hard to set up when it already exists in my mind. I think you get what I mean. 

Will definitely fix the Britpick. Generally, in UK English mode, I don't even have to think about things like this, as they typically come out correctly, but I was more in 'crank out drabbles' mode. I think that this, among other thing, will require some revisiting on my part.

Lovely review, and, as always, thank you for stopping by. :D

~Jess

 

Before I Forget by hestiajones
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Sometimes, the visions are mere flickers “ hazy and muddled. Sometimes, their clarity shakes me out of the limbo. But I’m always sure it is him I see.

I’d have loved to tell you the whole story, but you see, I cannot remember much of it.



Thanks to Kara (Karaley Dargen) for her wonderful beta-ness. :) And Carole (Equinox Chick) for 'Warwick'. ;)

DISCLAIMER: Everyone/everything you recognise immediately belongs to J.K.Rowling. However, the first names of the Death Eaters (except the main characters) aren't canon. The pairing, of course, is mine.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 6754 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
08/05/10 Updated: 04/27/11


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Love

UGHHH! MNFF botched my review and cur me off. Take two

I drove into that kiss a year’s worth of longing and ache. I took that kiss as payment for every second of anxiety and frustration he had caused me. But my own exacting hunger soon gave way to tenderness. I thought of his laughter, the way he cocked his head when confronted by something incomprehensible, the way he looked with his hair falling about his face, his rare smiles…and I knew…I knew I was neck deep in love with no way out. ... and that is why I love your writing, Natalie. The phrasing is sublime.

This story is great. Rabastan is such an unused character so you have free rein with him, yet you've made him recognisably your own and so very Slytherin. Regulus, too, is good. I think too many people try to write him as a hero from the start, but he must have been drawn to the Dark side from the start because he would never have joined the DE's. You show him as quite a ruthless character willing to use Rabastan's feelings for him to get what he wanted. Did he feel the same way? I don't think so. He seemed to be using Rabastan to get what he wanted. Brilliantly Slytherin.

Umm, nit pickiness knock if off, I think you mean 'it'. Oh and *cough locker room cough*

But that was all. This is such a good story, Natalie. (thank you, Emma, for getting her out of her block!) ~Carole~

Author's Response: GASP! The locker room! I need to change it before Neil sees it. LOL!



I am having such fun writing Rabastan. Don't much like the guy, but he's vastly entertaining in a morbid sort of way.



I agree that Regulus was interested in Voldemort's regime in the start. I've been rereading DH, and I am pretty sure he was fascinated by the Death Eaters. I don't know if he was evil - I don't think he was. However, I'm fairly sure that while he had the same cruelty which Sirius possessed, he was more cunning and subtle. I tried to show those traits in the way he uses Rabastan.



As for his relationship with Rabastan,you're correct. He does not feel the same way, though he is fond of him in a detached sort of way. And...I can't say more now. EEP!



I'll go and edit those things. Thank you for such a lovely review, Carole!



~Natalie.

 

Promises by Nitwit Blubber Oddment Tweak x
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: Past Featured StoryPromises.

In the Battle of Hogwarts, Tonks has nothing left but promises to keep.

I'll be back. I promise.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 2431 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/07/10 Updated: 08/08/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 08/09/10 Title: Chapter 1: Promises

Aww, Emma, that's very very sad. You've killed my OTP again *sob sob*. Very well-written. You seem to have got a handle on Tonks as she's torn between love for her husband and love for Teddy. I think there's a third thing that would pull at her, which is that she's an Auror and thus she has the dubious honour of being bound to fight. Does that make sense? I would have liked to have seen that explored a bit more, although you did touch on it briefly when she wanted to go instead of Remus. Brilliant moment there by the way. Oh, and their kiss. Quite perfect.Understated yet so very deep and true.

You hoped with all your might that your child would not be punished for his parents' foolish mistake. I was a bit confused with this bit. Were you saying that teddy's conception was a mistake (quite likely) or that Remus' parents made a foolish mistake that led him to becoming a werewolf. I'm presuming it's the former which makes sense, but just wondered if I'd made an error.

The end was gut-wrenching. Neither could keep their promises, poor Teddy indeed.

~Carole~

Author's Response: Caroleeeee. Thank you so much for leaving such a fab review - all of your lovely comments are greatly appreciated :)

I do see what you mean about Tonks' duty as an Auror, and you're right, it's something that I should have more than likely touched on a bit more, but she seemed to utterly preoccupied during that scene in the books that I didn't feel as if it was high on her list of priorities, if you get me.

Oh, and for your question. Yes, I did mean that Teddy's conception was a mistake - not in the usual way that people take it, but in the risks associated with Remus' lycanthropy, and whether or not that would be passed down to Teddy. Glad to clear that up for you :)

--Emma

 
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