Penname: Equinox Chick [Contact]
Real name: Carole
Member Since: 05/10/08
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What can I say. I'm a grown woman living in London but I'm obsessed with a teenage wizard and his friends. Am I mad? Probably Do I care? Hell no!
EDIT: Grown? Um, probably not

For my first foray into the realms of fanfiction I've chosen to write about the Marauders. I'll always stick fairly closely to canon as I think JK knows best. Although I've enjoyed reading about other ships I, personally, don't think I could write with conviction about Ginny/Crabbe or Hermione/Mclaggan relationships.

EDIT: ha ha ha ha ha - How I have changed! I'm now firmly in the rare-pair, SSP, and things that aren't quite conventional camp, although I still loves me some James/Lily.

My second chaptered fic (Apparently Asleep) has started a love affair with Tonks/Remus and confirmed my obsession for all things Sirius. *sigh*

I am indebted to Terri (mudbloodproud) for being a great beta and all round amazing person. If it hadn't been for her encouragement I would have thrown in the towel many months ago.

EDIT: I have made a lot of wonderful friends during my past three years on MNFF, including (in no particular order) Natalie, Kara, Hannah/Bob, Jess, Gina, Lea, Lori, Julia, Minna, Emmahhhh, and the fantabulous BB.

I hope Mugglenet and you enjoy reading my words as much as I've enjoyed writing them. Huge thank-you to my niece, Amanda, for being one of the first to catch the Harry Potter bug and nagging me into reading them.


I’ve written a variety of stories, so here is them arranged in categories. Some are cross- referenced. So a James/Lily may appear in Marauder or Canon Romance

Marauder
A Second Chance
Contemplating Lilies
Dancing Queen
First Date Disaster
Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand
It Takes a Wolf to Prank a Dog
Juggling
Learning to Fly
March Madness
O.W.L.s, Quidditch and the Added Distraction of Sirius Black
Peace in Heaven
Ribbons, not Strings
Sixth Time's the Charm
Thank you for your time, Professor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Sum of the Whole
Veils
Who's That Girl?
Wormtail on the Hogwarts Express



Canon Romance
'i'before 'e' (Percy/Audrey)
A Prize Above Rubies (Isla Black/Bob Hitchens)
Acorns (Bill/Fleur)
Apparently Asleep (Remus/Tonks)
Birthday Girl (George/Angelina)
Bound in the Beating of Each Other’s Hearts (Narcissa/Lucius)
Coup de Foudre (Bill/Fleur)
Dancing Queen (James/Lily)
First Date Disaster (James/Lily)
Five weeks (Remus/Tonks)
Forces of Nature (Ron/Hermione)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
In The Stars (Draco/Astoria)
Key of the Door (Ron/Hermione)
Kissing the Joy as it Flies (Seamus/Lavender)
March Madness (James/Lily)
Not Quite Perfect (Bill/Fleur)
Reconnaissance (Remus/Tonks)
Sixth Time’s the Charm (James/Lily)
Snowball Fights (Teddy/Victoire)
Until Death (Eaters) Do Us Part (Draco/Astoria)
Veils (James/Lily)
You Dance Divinely (George/Angelina)



Non (or rather tweaked) Canon (apart from one story, these don’t break any canon.)

Better than Chocolate (Charlie/Tonks)
Heat of Life (Harry/Katie)
Her Tomorrows (Harry/Parvati)
High (Scorpius/Lily)
Lavender, blue- A Gryffindor True (Lavender/Blaise)
Love At First Strike (Angelina/Terry)
Mirrors (Charlie/Penelope)
Misperception (Oliver/Cedric/Daphne)
Orphans of the Storm (Seamus/Parvati/Dean)
Passion Among the Primroses (Arthur/Mafalda)
Predictions of Love (Gilderoy/Sybil)
Ribbons, not Strings (Remus/Rosmerta)
Shrouds (Hermione/Draco)
Snapdragons (Charlie/OC)
Stars or Carousels (James/Dominique)
Summer’s Heat (Sirius/OC)
Swans (Mollyjnr/OC)
Teenage Witch (Charity/Myron Wagtail )
The Happy Couple (Harry/Ginny, Blaise/Lavender)
The Only One (Lavender/Blaise Teddy/Victoire)
The Untrodden Path (Draco/Hannah)
Where We Started From (Dean/Ginny)



Same sex Pairings
Apple-bobbing ( Lisa/Susan)
Close Your Eyes (Hermione/Lavender)
Drowning, not Waving (Oliver/Cedric)
Eyes That Know Me (Scorpius/Hugo)
Forbidden Colours (Tracey/Demelza)
Fracture (Theo/Justin)
Monochrome (Sirius/Remus)
The Dance We Do (Bellatrix/Amelia)
The Hat that Thinks it’s a Chair (Justin/Theo)
Truth Or Dare (Cormac/Zacharias)



Humour
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
Lockhart, Sprout and Two Smoking Goblets
Passion Among the Primroses
Predictions of Love
The Bacchus Book
Vampire - Ghost Child!

Historical
A Prize Above Rubies
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
An Outstretched Hand
Shadows Deep

Others (General, D/A, Post Hogwarts, Next Gen)
A Tangled Web (D/A)
All in the Genes (NG)
Chasing the Scoop! (Post Hogwarts)
Christmas on the Outside (General/Trio era)
Dean Thomas and the Reiver Curse (Post Hogwarts)
Diavol (Remus Trio Era)
Every Breath You Take (Post Hogwarts/Next Gen)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
Friends in Unlikely Places (Post Hog. Hermione)
Growing Old Disgracefully (Post Hog)
High (NG)
Lavender, blue (Trio Era)
Mere Wisps of Light (Post Hog. Draco fic)
Muggles, Magic and Misconceptions (Next Gen)
My Funny Valentine (Post Hogwarts)
Staring into the Fire (Trio Era)
The Waiting Game (D/A)
Whispers from the Past (Next Gen)



Mysteries
The Foolhardy Boys and Parvati, too
Who’s that Girl?
Xanthe Interrupted
Zeitgeist



Poetry
Askew
As They Watch
Beyond Beseeching
Celestina's Songbook: Christmas Edition, Volume 1
Cold Dreams
Draco's Journey
Enslaved
Fairytale of Hogwarts
Flying High
Forever France
Frozen Silence
Hexed!
Hey, brother
I Believed in Lily Evans
Master Barty Regrets
Phoenix Flames
Queen of My Heart
Sirius, Baby
The Daydream Pedlar's Song
The Four
The Labyrinth Mind
Unreconciled

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Summary:

What could possibly be a higher form of madness than falling in love with someone who does not share your feelings? Well, for starters, if that person happens to be your best friend, then that certainly qualifies.

Albus Potter has fallen prey to this quandary, and through a self-exploratory journey, he learns much about what it’s like to love and what it’s like to lose himself.

This placed second in the February Great Hall Month of Love Challenge - First Love.

This fic was nominated for a 2010 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Same-Sex Pairing.



Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 7814 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/23/10 Updated: 02/23/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 05/10/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Right, let me kick off this review by being honest with you. When I first read this fic, whilst I enjoyed it, I did find the first person POV rather ponderous and introspective(We,, derr, Carole, First person is introspective). I'm not a huge fan of first person and that counted against this fic for me. I did recognise that it was well-written and also very touching. Now then, I've re-read it because I felt a bit guilty about not reviewing and .... I don't find it at all ponderous now. I really like the style of the piece and the way we see Scorpius through Albus' eyes is great. The detail about the way he eats, his clothes, his hair is wonderful and he comes over as a proper character rather than a name.

I do have a bit of an issue with Albus being a Slytherin. It's your story and your portrayal so obviously you can do what you want, but you didn't convince me in this fic why he should have been put there. I don't think it would have been enough that he wanted to be a Slytherin, I do think he'd have had to show some Slyth qualities (cunning, ambition, ebilness *snort*) - he didn't seem to have that. He did actually seem far more Puff than anything else as he wasn't brave, or wildly intellectual either. That's minor, btw, but I just wanted to share it with you.

Albus' growing feelings towards Scorpius are very well drawn and I am VERY pleased that you ended it with being unrequited. To me this made it more real (and also heartbreaking) . Scorpius' reaction was astoundingly good. He didn't reject him out of hand because he owed Albus so much. I thought that was wonderful (I'm starting to think that Scorpius should be a Puff as well!).

Something I would have liked to see was a scene with James because he seemed to have sussed that Albus was gay, yet as they were in diff houses I'm not sure they'd spend that much time together. See - I wanted you to write more - ha ha.

Jess, I'm impressed with your first slash fic - which is actually much less about slash and sex than real feelings and unrequited love. Well Done. ~Carole~

Author's Response:

Well hello there!

I get what you mean about first person. It is not my favourite POV, either. But, after starting this fic in third person and getting about one quarter the way through it, I knew that it was all wrong and that it had to be in first person. I wanted it to feel like Albus, not someone talking about him. Had I known that there was going to be a character clinic thing when I wrote this, I would've saved it for that. 

I also get the on the fence-ishness about being a Slytherin, but to be honest, when I was writing this, I was more worried about it being too long and not fitting into a one-shot, so I never went back to add details after I knew that I had the word count to allow it. I also didn't want it to be rambly, which can happen in intense internal dialogue.

I knew how I wanted to end this story before I put one word into it. I knew that it wasn't going to be a happy ending, but I also knew that Scorpius really was his friend through and through. It's hard to fall in love with someone who doesn't possess qualities that make them, well...loveable, lol. I thought that the kiss would probably be the best way to go, because I didn't want Albus to have any 'what if's.

Truthfully, I never thought of putting a scene in with James. Now that you mention it, it makes more sense than him having a chat with Harry. However, being a daddy's girl myself, I talk about everything with my dad. I didn't see any reason why Albus couldn't trust his dad with that sort of secret (well, at least he thought that it was one).

The reason I wrote this one the way that I did is because I wanted to break the mould on what bothered me about most slash/SSP stories. Instead of it being about 'hawt sex', it's about love and hurt and rejection. That is what love is about most of the time anyway. That's what the title means, by the way; his secret is that he loves his best friend, his hell is that Scorpius doesn't love him back, and his burden in dealing with that rejection. I'm sure that not a few people thought that one of his issues was being gay, but I don't see it that way. I even tried to make sure that the reader knew that he didn't have a problem with being gay once he figured it out.

For my SPEW 007, I'm actually embarking on a journey with Albus. I'm going to make that story about him, but he's going to be a Gryffindor (though after bickering with the Hat). I'm keeping some of the aspects of this story, such as Albus crushing on Scorpius, but Harry's not going to know about it. I have future ebil plans for that, as this story is going to be VoJP compliant. It'll end up being a million pages long, but I want to do it right. This story was almost like a preview/snapshot of it.

Thanks for reviewing, and thanks for getting this far in my rambly responses, as I am wont to do. I'm glad that you changed your mind about the POV, because after trial and error, I'm sure that this was the only way that if could have been done. 

Take care and happy writing!

Jess

 

Eternal Flight by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Black daughters are born and raised to marry wealthy pureblood wizards, but Andromeda broke all the rules. This is the story of why, how and when she fell in love with the man she defied traditions for.



This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the February Challenge - Forbidden Love. And AHEM! It won the fisrt place. ;)



Many thanks to Apurva (DracoGurlFurever) for her quick and excellent work, and also to Bine luinrina for her patience. Plus, I am not J.K.Rowling. *sigh*

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 8870 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/24/10 Updated: 02/27/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: When I was a child, I was not allowed to dream.

I know you're not happy with this, but I want to tell you that it's wonderful. This slots so perfectly into Five Christmases, and reinforces my image of Meda and Tonks. He, I have to say, is just lovely. So patient and loving. I get a great impression of a boy and then man who is bluff and hearty but so very caring. I love Andromeda too - she still has that Black arrogance (she wouldn't be a total sweetie would she?) but it's tempered with a conscience.
I think my favourite part of this fic is the relationship between Meda and Cissy. The fact that she'll miss her the most (as well as that cheeky cousin) shows what she's giving up and she doesn't leave without thinking carefully. In the end she had to leave ... and Ted's worth it.

I loved this; it's so very touching.~Carole~

Author's Response: Ahhh...this fic taught me a good lesson: never hasten to fit all your plot bunnies into challenge entries. I've been mulling over Andromeda's account of the story for a long time, and I still feel that if I hadn't chosen to write it in a hurry for the challenge, I could have done differently. But I am glad that you liked it. Your review assures me that at least, I managed to get my message across. Ted - well, he may not be the sexiest guy around, but he;s someone any girl would be happy with. As for Andromeda, I really tried to show the Slytherin and Black arrogance in her.



I do have an idea of how Meda and Cissy got together, but alas, I still need to finish my chaptered fic for that. *sigh* So much to write.



Thanks for the review, Carole! And thanks for your never-wavering support.



Love,

Natalie.

 

So Young by Hokey
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Oliver Wood never thought a girl could snatch his interest away from Quidditch. But that was before he saw her.
OW/GW Romance

by Hokey of Slytherin
for the Great Hall February Month of Love Challenge, prompt Forbidden Love


Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2910 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
02/26/10 Updated: 04/27/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: So Young

Hello. I like Oliver fics - partly because I've written one and so I'm intrigued at fresh takes on his character. He's so obsessed with Quidditch that there has to be something more to him - LOL. Anyway, I like your interpretation of him. He's still as focused but that's not all there is to him and you can see that it troubles him slightly that he's drifting away from his friends.

I have some issues with the timeline in your fic. They're about to play Hufflepuff, which in POA, was the first match of the season (they switched barely two days before from playing Slytherin) yet Oliver talks of them having a rough season. They had had a rough season, but he was content with the team this year and trusted them to do their best. In fact their season before wasn't rough because Quidditch matches were cancelled when the Chamber was opened. That's a minor thing though.

I do like the revulsion he feels at realising Ginny is only twelve - poor Oliver! But I don't understand why he doesn't immedietly know who she is. He knows Fred and George very well, after all, and I'm sure Ginny would have been introduced at some point especially as she's a second year. Mind you boys are bad at social niceties so perhaps it didn't occur to the twins to do that.

To wrap this up, I enjoyed reading about the lovely Oliver and thought your characterisation of him was really good. Good luck in the competition ~Carole~

Author's Response: Hi Carole! Urgh, I'm awful at fitting my stories with timelines. I tried digging some for this story, but I try not to let canon control the outcome completely, because which team they played when is after all not the point in my story. I'm glad you pointed that out, though, as it's something I need to work on. Overall, I think you'll just have to have a bit of imagination when reading ;) It's hard fitting stories into the canon timeline and get it 100 percent right and still have an interesting, original story. Anyway - I'm glad you liked my Oliver, he really is an interesting character to write! Thank you for reading :)

 

Summary:

During the trip to Godric's Hollow, Hermione, through the course of events, comes to realize that her friendship with Harry had become so much more to her - but not to him. This pain, this disconcerting feeling, however, had nothing to do with Horcruxes.



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 3769 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/27/10 Updated: 02/27/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OH, this is fabulous, Jess. The main problem I have with Harmony, Dramione, Drinny (or is it Ginco?) is that the couples involved usually become wildly OOC in order for the pair to get together ... but you've kept both participants very IC. Hermione is wonderful. I loved the fact that she did mess up, and was hesitant. She's not brilliant at thinking on her feet, needing to rely on books to get her through, and you've showed this very well in this story.

Secret for you - I have about 500 words of a fic called 'In Perkins Tent' which I wrote a few months ago and meant to finish ... I'm not going to bother now because your version is so much better.

His breath softly tickled her ear, causing another wave of euphoria to sweep her away from the calm waters of sanity, but the tide turned into something ugly, something painful as she drowned in two syllables. “Ginny,” Harry whispered into her ear, still arduous, still impassioned, still in delusion.

That's heartbreaking. I do like the way you've interspersed the actual events with Hermion's POV. Well done.

Minor weeny nit pick - Was Harry capable of getting them both out of Bathilda's? I thought Hermione did it because he would have been too weak. I guess he could do it subconsciously *ponders*.

Anyway that was a miserly nitpick so I shall finsh by saying that I enjoyed it very much. ~Carole~

Author's Response:

Yay, it's your turn to lurk/stalk MY author page, lol

I knew that I wanted to write this for ages, but this contest gave me the perfect means to do so. The line 'You've been shouting and moaning and...things' really set the wheels in my head turning when I read DH for the second time, and I have just recently discovered where those spinning wheels would lead me.

I wanted so badly to make this a two-sided affair, but I knew that for it to fit into canon the way I wanted it to, it would have to be either a hot!sweaty delusion of Harry's or a gross misinterpretation of Hermione. I've never really written Hermione before, so I went with that.

As for Harry dragging Hermione out the window, it was like that in the book, or I would have made it different. In the book, Harry dragged both of them out the 'smashed window and into nothingness,' which I interpreted as him losing consciousness. As he had no wand, Hermione Apparated them. This is how it was in the book. Admittedly, this particular scene was badly written (I think Jo really just wanted a snake to pop out of someone's face), I stuck to it and tried to make as much sense of it as I could.

Thanks for dropping by...always a pleasure to have a guest for lunch. :)

Jess

 

Masque by Gmariam
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: The Masque was her chance to get over a broken relationship and move on, her appearance magically charmed for a night of escapist pleasure. She had no expectations, least of all that she might fall for a fellow masked player. And yet she did, their identities a secret as their relationship blossomed. When they take off the masks and reveal their true selves, can they move beyond their past and try to build something for the future?

This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the February Month of Love Challenge: Surprise Love.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 5096 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/28/10 Updated: 02/28/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 02/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Masked/Unmasked

OOOH! Gina, this is brilliant. I was on tenterhooks all the way through. First of all I thought it was Oliver (no idea why) then Harry ... but Draco - WOW! Okay at that point I was thinking 'Oh no another Drinny (or is it Ginco?) but you gave them a reason to like each other.So many authors ignore the fact that they never seemed remotely interested in each other but just get together because they think it's 'cute'. You, however, have made Draco a different person (not totally different).He admits Azkaban has changed him and yet he still carries a certain amount of arrogance. DAMN! You may just have converted me to Ginco - although perhaps I can subvert it into Scorpius/Lily *breathes deeply* yes, that's what my canon bound soul will do.

Finally, I must add how great your scene setting and description are, I really felt that I was there at the Masque (DAMN, I wanted to be) - an extremely good take on Muggle swinging parties and the fact that wizards/witches can get away with this. Wonderful fic. Sorry, I should stop fangirling now because I'm becoming embarrassing. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole! You have no idea how thrilled I am with this first review! Thank you!! I'm not sure I've ever written a non-canon pairing like this before, so it's quite a stretch for me. Plus like you said - it's hard to throw together non-canon pairs and keep them in character and give them a real reason for being together. I figure this story is either a hit or miss - the reader will either believe it or they won't, love it or hate it, nothing in between. I'm bracing myself for more of the latter, so to get such a positive first review is just amazing!! Thank you so much for the boost of confidence. And thank you for reading this. Now that I'm done I've just started catching up on some of the other entries that have gone up over the weekend and look forward to reading your latest! Thanks again! ~Gina :)

 

The Necklace by eternalangel
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Theodore Nott is not your typical boy. It’s hard to be typical when you are the son of a Death Eater and everyone hates you for it. For Theodore, love is hard to come by, but that was before he met her.

I am eternalangel of Ravenclaw and this is my entry for the Great Hall February Month of Love challenge, the Forbidden Love prompt.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 9335 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/28/10 Updated: 03/06/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/06/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Aww, I'm glad he got his date. Sheena, this is a fantastic story. I loved the idea behind it, and Nott was incredibly well drawn. I liked the interplay between the Slytherins even though you've 'outed' my favourite Slytherin (who is currently with Lavender in my fic) and you've 'eviled' Daphne who's one of the good Slyths in the same fic - ha ha. Despite our disagreements on those two, I thought the characteristics you built around them were superb. Your description was flawless - especially this line

. Susan’s eyes widened in shock as she looked from the necklace to his face and he saw a bloom of red slowly spread across her pale, soft cheeks like the fall of the light of a sunset on a white rose. Just beautiful!

There were one or two places where I thought the language of Nott and also Ernie was a touch antiquated, (when he's having the first argument with Daphne and then Ernie calling him a filthy scoundrel) but to be honest, I only noticed because my beta (Emma) jumps on me for the same reason so it flashes up at me occasionally.

I was debating reading the story because of the word count (and I should be getting on with things) but it honestly didn't feel overlong as I was totally enthralled by the story. Good luck in the competition. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you very much Carole for this in depth review. I really appreciate it, especially coming from such a prolific author such as yourself. I'm glad the story didn't feel long since I was worried about how long it actually was. Good luck in the competition as well and thanks again!

 

Letters of a Love Past by Karaley Dargen
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Even as a grown woman, Parvati Patil still has a small box that holds her memories. A fraction of the countless letters she received from her best friend (and copies of the letters she sent her) and notes passed between them at school are in there too - and even a page of the diary she hardly ever used.

One part of those old letters are the only reminder of Parvati's first love; a love never openly admitted to, and a love never requited.

This is Karaley Dargen of Gryffindor writing for the Great Hall February Month of Love Challenge, First Love Prompt

Categories: Harry/Other Character Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1715 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/28/10 Updated: 03/08/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/09/10 Title: Chapter 1: Letters of a Love Past

OOOH, Kara - this is so good. It's cute, funny and had me grinning all the way through. I think you've captured two teenage girls perfectly from Lavender's line about wanting the robes to 'fit' properly, and Parvati's angst about Harry. Oh, but poor Dean ... who does he go with. (Actually he goes with Mandy Brocklehurst in my story ...) Thank you for making Lavender happy with Seamus and also not the manipulative mush-head she's so often portrayed as.

Adorable fic . ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank youuu so muuuch Carole! I'm always very excited about your reviews :D I'm glad you thought I did well with the teenage-part; you know I was anxious to get them right. Also, I'm proud that you liked Lavender, heehee as your own interpretation of her is so great. Brainfuzzyness is keeping me from writing a proper response here.. But I loved our review, thank you very much for it! Love Kara

 

Summary: She is everything that I am not.

What happens when you are the one left out?

The one not good enough?

The one that doesn’t compare?


What if you are me?

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1626 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/04/10 Updated: 03/12/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 04/04/11 Title: Chapter 1: Leaves Are the Song of Change

I am struggling to understand why this fic has so few reviews because it really is wonderful. Your use of language here is masterly. You write very poetically, Selina, and I read this almost holding my breath. I didn think at first that this was about Snape, but quickly realised this was Peter. You've captured him just as he was turning, when his feelings of inadequacy were starting to surface and you've caught that brilliantly.

As someone who has always thought that Lily was the one that changed the dynamic of the Marauders, I am really interested on your take. That Peter was in love with her (and a bit jealous) isn't often seen in fanfiction, but you've turned it into a very plausible explanation for his later betrayal.

I loved the end where he almost became the tree - the autumn leaf, brittle and weak. You really have written a wonderful character study of Peter here.

Well done ~Carole~

PS - Happy Birthday and you should write more - seriously.

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Carole! I believe I'd started the fic looking for a different angle on Peter. Quite honestly, I don't usually care for him much. The idea of him being in love with Lily made him more relatable and understandable to me. I thought it worked well as a lense to magnify all the inadequacy that you mentioned. I was hoping for a unique spin on Peter that isn't seen too often. Thank you so much for reviewing, really. Though as usual I'm a bit late to respond . . . >.> ~Selina

 

Eia Hunt by TrippleZeroItalics
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Eia Hunt is just a Muggle with no business in the Wizarding World. Or so she thought. On one unforgettable night she finds herself facing a werewolf, and ends up an outcast of both worlds with no place to go. So she asks a favour of her creator, a sixteen year old boy named Remus Lupin, who willingly agrees. AU.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 689 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
03/04/10 Updated: 03/04/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/05/10 Title: Chapter 1: An Odd Place To Heal (Prologue)

I like the premis of this story; it sounds very interesting and I'll certainly be checking back for updates. You've certainly left a lot of unanswered questions that are intriguing (why is she running away? What are her parents bigotted about? Who found her?) and I can't wait for Remus to turn up. Your writing is descriptive too, but not over-wordy, so it flows well. This prologue is a bit short for my taste - but then it's a prologue so that doesn't matter and it serves its purpose very well. Interesting idea (but you could be right about the title - although he name Eia is interesting too.) ~Carole~

 

Slytherin's Weasley by Tariel
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Dominique Weasley is sorted into Slytherin, breaking the longest lasting Weasley tradition in living memory: not being sorted into Slytherin. Dominique is sly and street-wise with a healthy thirst for knowledge. Her first year at Hogwarts is destined for adventure: Dominique may be a Slytherin, but she is also a Weasley, with the inherited knack for breaking rules, usually without getting caught.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 5372 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
03/08/10 Updated: 12/20/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/14/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I find this rather intriguing and certainlky different from the usual Next Gen fics which tend to centre on either Teddy/Victoire or Albus-Rose-Scorpius as the new Trio ... so thank you for that.

I look forward to reading the rest. ~Carole~

 

Summary: Severus waits alone in a park to make the ultimate choice - Voldemort or Love? But, of course, Severus can decide only when he gets there first.



I thank my LJ pals for their love, support and sense of humour.



DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling; she would be mortified if she read this.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 1284 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/08/10 Updated: 03/17/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: Always...

What do you mean, you don't support the ship Stop scuppering it. This is the only ship that makes sense! Jape or Snames or whatever you want to call it. Now then ... where is The Tell-tale Hart ... I had a banner somewhere.

Natalie, it seems you'll get more reviews for this than anything else - ha ha - I know it was a joke, but you shouldn't write so damn well that you make it plausible.

I will forgive you ... but I doubt Prongs will.

~Carole~

Author's Response: I love both Snames and Jape! :D And I really think you should do the smutty version. ;) You're right, Prongs would detest it. So would Severus. EEP! I dunno who I am more scared of. :(



~Natalie.

 

Waiting by the opaleye
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 24]

Summary: Hermione waits behind a window. She is waiting for the world to come alive again.

Nominated in the 2010 Quicksilver Quill Awards for Best Canon Romance.



Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1628 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/11/10 Updated: 03/15/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: Can you hold me in your arms tonight?

OH!

Julia, quite breathtakingly beautiful. Lovely written fic from Hermione's perspective with some truly melting lines.

Yes. There. More. Wait.

That line is wonderful. So much said with so much understatement. Had me reading with my mouth open.

I think what I liked the best were the things you didn't say (no silken strands for instance *snigger*). No waves crashing, or wild beatings of the heart ... just need and the odd bit of lust.

I really should review something other than the sex, shouldn't I? LOL. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Ah, Carole. Thanks so much! I love writing from Hermione's perspective but this was the first time in a truly canon situation so it was quite a change. I'm glad you enjoyed the minimalist approach. A lot of people seem to find it annoying but I think it's nice leaving something up to the imagination. (You know, I forgot to mention the silver orbs of light surrounding their entwined bodies. Darn. I may have to edit that in... hehe. OH and the golden stars that burst forth from their hearts at the moment of... ) But thanks for the read and review!!! I always love getting reviews from you. Julia XD

 

Summary: Past Featured Story"Pettigrew... that fat little boy who was always tagging around after them at Hogwarts?"*

Did Peter Pettigrew constantly tag after his superior friends? Or was he in fact equal to the reckless, confident Sirius Black? Perhaps they were more alike than anyone could have guessed...

* indicates line taken from Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 4380 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/12/10 Updated: 03/24/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/24/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ah ha - *rolls up sleeves* I've been waiting for this ...

Okay, despite the fact that I'm not keen on second person, and I REFUSE to believe that Sirius!SexGod is gay (because he's my man), I thought this was excellent. Honestly, you really pulled this off. The second person worked incredibly well and helped show the characterisation of Peter and also Sirius.

I adored the beginning - the way Peter wanted Sirius to fall off the chair because he so wanted Sirius to look a prat. Brilliant characterisation there. You got totally to the heart of Peter - in my opinion.

On the whole, I think you made a very plausible case for the both of them being gay (DAMN YOU! Sirius is NOT Gay) - especially with it being Sirius' way of NOT rebelling is to date as many girls as possible. - ha ha.

I did, I have to admit, have a minor 'hmm' at him telling Remus so quickly that he'd tried to kiss Sirius, but Remus' reaction was so natural (and wise) that it didn't feel wrong at all. Remus was the one, I feel, that they turned to with problems. Remus' reaction - that he thought Sirius would be more interested in James was absolutely priceless, and I could see this developing furthur *pretty please*. Unrequited passion for James would be so so so so so so intriguing ... heh heh heh.

Minor nitpick *can't believe I'm saying this to my wonderful beta*

cracking his skill Should that be skull?

Finishing up ... Well done ... and well worth jumping on that slash wagon ... in fact ... Drive the wagon, Emma, my love.

~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole,
Thank you thank you thank you :)
Second person - I'm so happy that it worked, because I was completely against having it in 3rd person, and iffy with it being written in 1st. It didn't help that I saw a thread on the boards where everyone was saying "I hate 2nd person!" So that's great it worked out :)
Peter telling Remus - Don't worry, I know where you're coming from there completely. I was a bit hesitant at first too, and then I realised that the thing Peter wanted most at that time was comfort, reassurance, even a 'Snap out of it!' He needed an 'outsider' to give him some advice. *cue Remus the wise* ;)
Typo-Thing - Oooer, I shall go correct that there, haha. Cheers (:
Overall - Thank you so much for the absolutely lovely review! I'm glad you liked it :D

 

Ain't Love the Sweetest Thing by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: He had been meandering though the distance for ages, unsure of what she would say in the final moment.



Song lyrics taken from U2’s The Sweetest Thing. And I am not J.K.Rowling.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2532 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/13/10 Updated: 03/13/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/13/10 Title: Chapter 1: And she said Yes.

And she came to him.

And that is the line that floored me. Superb!

This won't be an indepth review, suffice to say, I loved this story. Remus was a star and James was exactly right. A bit of a prat, but he adored his Lily, and got the girl in the end. *sigh* I love a bit of fluff, especially if it has a bit of substance. ~Carole~

Author's Response: I am seriously glad you thought Remus was fine. I really had trouble writing him. And yes, a bit of fluff is nice once in a while. Thanks for the review, Carole. I really appreciate it.



~Natalie.

 

Starting Over by mudbloodproud
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: They say when one door closes, another opens. Sirius Black hopes the saying is true because this time, he just will not give in to his mother’s demands.

This is mudbloodproud of Hufflepuff writing for the I Challenge Thee challenge for February in the Fiction Junction on the Beta Forums.

I do not own anything you recognize in this story. It belongs to J.K. Rowling.



Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 1333 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
03/14/10 Updated: 03/14/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Leaving Home

“I locked the door for a reason,” he said as he slipped his wand into his back pocket. Handy, but out of sight, he thought.

Hmm, Mad-Eye wouldn't approve. Terri, great snapshot moment and original in that you didn't have one huge argument, and Walburga was actually crying over her shiftless son. The moments with Regulus were well played. You sort of hope he'll escape with Sirius, but it was not to be.

~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole, No, Mad-Eye would never approve. I wanted something different, a reason he left that was far from the huge blowout you mostly see. I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for your review. Terri

 

Irredeemable by psijupiter
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Past Featured Storyredemption: n. 1. The act of redeeming or the condition of having been redeemed.

The story of Snape's life.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 233 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/16/10 Updated: 03/25/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 06/06/10 Title: Chapter 1: Irredeemable

Oh my word! This is an amazing poem, and I'm extremely pleased that I picked up the recommendation from Liandrin to review. What you have managed to convey in so few words is the sad life of Severus Snape. Sad, because at the end he still doesn't realise how worthy he is. Albus does, and their sharing of Lemon drops on the bench gets this point over so brilliantly, but Severus still does not see his own worth. You get the feeling that if he had his time again, he would still choose to be a Slytherin, but maybe not one who cleaved so strongly to the Death Eater cause.

I like the ambiguity of the green eyes flashing from the window - is it Harry on his way to death, or is it Lily waiting for him? I rather suspect the latter, although I doubt she's waiting alone ... and she'll soon need to be away to help her son. Sorry, that was my rambling speculation, but see how you've made me think.

You've captured Snape and Dumbledore so perfectly in this story. Their very essence ripples through these lines in a wonderful way, from Snape's curt words to Dumbledore's twinkling eyes and scoffing of sweets (LOL)

I want to point out how well the rhythm in these verses works. The train slowing, stopping, then pulling out again. The pause as neither man speaks - all flow beautifully.

Incredibly good poem. ~Carole~

 

Dancing Petals by Sapphire at Dawn
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: It's Dudley Dursley's fifth birthday party, and Aunt Marge has just whacked Harry around the shins for doing too well at musical statues. Sad and lonely, Harry takes comfort in the small daisies that are littered at his feet. However, for one adult watching, the child's actions cause less than comforting memories to resurface.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1210 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/17/10 Updated: 03/21/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OOOh, that so sad and sweet. I really felt for both Harry and Petunia there - which shows your skill as I usually loathe Petunia.I did like how you took a canon moment - a brief snapshot - and fleshed it out to a full picture. Great story, Sarah. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you Carole :)

 

Dumbledore's Farewell by the opaleye
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary:

Then he gazed down at the wise old face and tried to absorb the enormous and incomprehensible truth: that never again would Dumbledore speak to him, never again could he help...

A poem.

Nominated for a 2010 QSQ Award!



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 175 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/18/10 Updated: 03/25/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: His eyes burned with tears as behind him Fang began to howl.

OOOOH, I'm all trembly now. Julia that's absolutely beautiful. I love the flow of the poem and the same last line for every verse really adds to the essence of Dumbledore. I feel we're celebrating his life as well as commiserating with Harry over such huge a loss.

You're an amazing poet and this is a wonderful poem. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Ah, Carole. Thanks so much! I really wanted it to have a bittersweet feel like the music it was inspired by. We ARE celebrating this great wizard but we are also feeling Harry's pain. I'm glad that came through :)

 

A Much-Needed Rest by Belle Vie
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: This chapter takes up where Chapter 36 in the Deathly Hollows left off, in the hours immediately after Voldemort's defeat. Harry, Ron, and Hermione try to take in all that has happened to them over the last few months, and try to resolve who they were when they first came to Hogwarts with who they've become after their long ordeal.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2547 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
03/26/10 Updated: 03/27/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/27/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hi there, This is a good idea for a fic, and you've portrayed all the characters accurately. I do think Snape deserved more recognition. Although - in canon - Snape's portrait has not appeared when the Trio visit the Headmaster's Office, this is plausible. My own feeling is that it may have been better to set this story a little bit later - perhaps in a day or so, simply because the Trio are remarkably eloquent and we know how tired Harry was. Also, I'm not sure Snape would have been awake quite so soon as Dumbledore certainly snoozed for a while after he'd died. That's just my opinion though, and I can see why you've set it straight after the Battle.

One nit pick. In your summary, you refer to this as being set after Deathly Hollows - it's Hallows.

Good moment in time, though. ~Carole~

 

Shoulda, Coulda, Woulda by miss ginny1
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: We all know the real of what happened to our poor friend Harry Potter- The evil Lord Voldemort killed his young parents and forced him to spend several miserable years with his Muggle family, the Dursleys. But what if Lord Voldemort had never exsisted? What if Lily and James hadn't perished, but lived to see their only son grow up to be the man he is today? Whould Harry still be friends with Ron and Hermione? Whould Draco Malfoy still be an annoying Slytherin git?... Don't answer that. This, my friends, is the story of what should have, could have, and would have happened to the messy-haired hero we've all come to love- Harry Potter.
R&R,, please!

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1077 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
03/26/10 Updated: 03/28/10


Reviewer: Equinox Chick Signed
Date: 03/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Year One

This is an interesting idea, seeing the sort of boy that Harry would have been had he had too loving parents bringing him up. I've always thought he'd be rather spoiled - as James was, plus Sirius would have been a very doting (but reckless) godfather.

There are one or two errors - namely 'Com'on - should be C'mon and Alright - technically- should be All right but they're easily correctible. Also in the letter at the end, you've typed 'Out' instead of 'Our'.

I'm not totally convinced by the characterisation of Lily. She was so excited to be going to Hogwarts herself, that I can't see her moping over Harry going. She'll miss him - obviously - but I don't think she'd let it show. She'd be happy for him above everything. (By the way, Lils in UK slang refers to a certain part of a females anatomy and Lily might just whack James for calling her that :-)

Another minor thing which you can probably explain ... why is Harry's owl called Orion - after Sirius' dad, perhaps? Are the Blacks a nicer family than in the books? Without Voldemort, did Sirius fall out with them? Just interested.

Sirius' daughters name ... um, slight mouthful - is there a reason it's so long. A lot of wizards/witches have unusual but short names (Sirius Orion Black, or Harry James Potter) - so I'm guessing her parents must have a very good reason for lumbering her with a name that long.

Your dialogue between Sirius and James is good. I like the sparring between them and nice to see that both of them are as 'wicked' as ever.

~Carole~

Author's Response: Ok, give me a minute to think this one through.......... I guess I'll go one paragraph at a time. First of all, I grew up in a southern family, and I know that seems irrevalent to the situation, but it is. That is just how I was taught to spell those words and obviously it's not that big of a deal if the story was approved.Well, the 'Out, Our'; thing is kinda excluded from this. That was a typing error I made when I first wrote the story. As for the Lily thing, well, I don't really think I wanted to know that, but thank you... I think. I suppose it will be useful in the future. I started writing this story out of boredom, and I wasn't really thinking about those microscopic details like that. Also, at this point, Lily's comes across as depressed because one, it's alternate universe, and two, Harry's her only son, so she's more than worried about him. I see another one of your nit picks is the name of Harry's owl. You see, that was a bit of a dilemma for me because as much as I wanted to call it Hedwig, I had to remember James and Lily were with Harry the day he got his owl, not Hagrid, so Harry probably hadn't read the book he got his owl's original name from. As for Sirius' family, well, they're still Pureblood crazy, and them and Sirius did have a falling out, only much later in his life. As I said before, I started this story out of boredom, so I was really thinking about the minor details. I've always had a minor interest in Astronomy, and I guess I was thinking of Orion's belt, so I guess that's where I got the name. And finally, Miss Black's name. This is actually a rather intersting story. I thought it added a nice little twist to the story, and I liked the idea so much, I decided to turn it into a dramatic spin-off. Her original name was actually Sapphire Christina Black, but the longer name added to the drama theme and and you'll find out where she gets all those names after Shoulda, Coulda, Woulda is finished and I submit Sapphire's. And I call it Sapphire's story because she a rather dramatic person herself, and she likes to have an unusual name like that instead of Cassidy, which was her late mother's name. Thanks for the comment on James and Sirius. I absolutley love those guys, especially Sirius, so it's a lot of fun being able to write about them. Thanks for taking so much time to comment and help me out. I really appreciate it and I'll be sure to remember all of it as I continue with the story. :-) ~Emily~ a.k.a, miss ginny1

 
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