What can I say. I'm a grown woman living in London but I'm obsessed with a teenage wizard and his friends. Am I mad? Probably Do I care? Hell no!
EDIT: Grown? Um, probably not
For my first foray into the realms of fanfiction I've chosen to write about the Marauders. I'll always stick fairly closely to canon as I think JK knows best. Although I've enjoyed reading about other ships I, personally, don't think I could write with conviction about Ginny/Crabbe or Hermione/Mclaggan relationships.
EDIT: ha ha ha ha ha - How I have changed! I'm now firmly in the rare-pair, SSP, and things that aren't quite conventional camp, although I still loves me some James/Lily.
My second chaptered fic (Apparently Asleep) has started a love affair with Tonks/Remus and confirmed my obsession for all things Sirius. *sigh*
I am indebted to Terri (mudbloodproud) for being a great beta and all round amazing person. If it hadn't been for her encouragement I would have thrown in the towel many months ago.
EDIT: I have made a lot of wonderful friends during my past three years on MNFF, including (in no particular order) Natalie, Kara, Hannah/Bob, Jess, Gina, Lea, Lori, Julia, Minna, Emmahhhh, and the fantabulous BB.
I hope Mugglenet and you enjoy reading my words as much as I've enjoyed writing them. Huge thank-you to my niece, Amanda, for being one of the first to catch the Harry Potter bug and nagging me into reading them.
I’ve written a variety of stories, so here is them arranged in categories. Some are cross- referenced. So a James/Lily may appear in Marauder or Canon Romance
A Second Chance
First Date Disaster
Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand
It Takes a Wolf to Prank a Dog
Learning to Fly
O.W.L.s, Quidditch and the Added Distraction of Sirius Black
Peace in Heaven
Ribbons, not Strings
Sixth Time's the Charm
Thank you for your time, Professor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Lions of Gryffindor
The Sum of the Whole
Who's That Girl?
Wormtail on the Hogwarts Express
'i'before 'e' (Percy/Audrey)
A Prize Above Rubies (Isla Black/Bob Hitchens)
Apparently Asleep (Remus/Tonks)
Birthday Girl (George/Angelina)
Bound in the Beating of Each Other’s Hearts (Narcissa/Lucius)
Coup de Foudre (Bill/Fleur)
Dancing Queen (James/Lily)
First Date Disaster (James/Lily)
Five weeks (Remus/Tonks)
Forces of Nature (Ron/Hermione)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
In The Stars (Draco/Astoria)
Key of the Door (Ron/Hermione)
Kissing the Joy as it Flies (Seamus/Lavender)
March Madness (James/Lily)
Not Quite Perfect (Bill/Fleur)
Sixth Time’s the Charm (James/Lily)
Snowball Fights (Teddy/Victoire)
Until Death (Eaters) Do Us Part (Draco/Astoria)
You Dance Divinely (George/Angelina)
Non (or rather tweaked) Canon (apart from one story, these don’t break any canon.)
Better than Chocolate (Charlie/Tonks)
Heat of Life (Harry/Katie)
Her Tomorrows (Harry/Parvati)
Lavender, blue- A Gryffindor True (Lavender/Blaise)
Love At First Strike (Angelina/Terry)
Orphans of the Storm (Seamus/Parvati/Dean)
Passion Among the Primroses (Arthur/Mafalda)
Predictions of Love (Gilderoy/Sybil)
Ribbons, not Strings (Remus/Rosmerta)
Stars or Carousels (James/Dominique)
Summer’s Heat (Sirius/OC)
Teenage Witch (Charity/Myron Wagtail )
The Happy Couple (Harry/Ginny, Blaise/Lavender)
The Only One (Lavender/Blaise Teddy/Victoire)
The Untrodden Path (Draco/Hannah)
Where We Started From (Dean/Ginny)
Same sex Pairings
Apple-bobbing ( Lisa/Susan)
Close Your Eyes (Hermione/Lavender)
Drowning, not Waving (Oliver/Cedric)
Eyes That Know Me (Scorpius/Hugo)
Forbidden Colours (Tracey/Demelza)
The Dance We Do (Bellatrix/Amelia)
The Hat that Thinks it’s a Chair (Justin/Theo)
Truth Or Dare (Cormac/Zacharias)
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
Lockhart, Sprout and Two Smoking Goblets
Passion Among the Primroses
Predictions of Love
The Bacchus Book
Vampire - Ghost Child!
A Prize Above Rubies
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name
An Outstretched Hand
Others (General, D/A, Post Hogwarts, Next Gen)
A Tangled Web (D/A)
All in the Genes (NG)
Chasing the Scoop! (Post Hogwarts)
Christmas on the Outside (General/Trio era)
Dean Thomas and the Reiver Curse (Post Hogwarts)
Diavol (Remus Trio Era)
Every Breath You Take (Post Hogwarts/Next Gen)
Forever Dancing (Alice/Frank)
Friends in Unlikely Places (Post Hog. Hermione)
Growing Old Disgracefully (Post Hog)
Lavender, blue (Trio Era)
Mere Wisps of Light (Post Hog. Draco fic)
Muggles, Magic and Misconceptions (Next Gen)
My Funny Valentine (Post Hogwarts)
Staring into the Fire (Trio Era)
The Waiting Game (D/A)
Whispers from the Past (Next Gen)
The Foolhardy Boys and Parvati, too
Who’s that Girl?
As They Watch
Celestina's Songbook: Christmas Edition, Volume 1
Fairytale of Hogwarts
I Believed in Lily Evans
Master Barty Regrets
Queen of My Heart
The Daydream Pedlar's Song
The Labyrinth Mind
Summary: Severus casts his Patronus and remembers the one woman he ever loved...
This is a lovely poem, Natalie. The sense of loss from Snape is heartfelt, but it ends on a note of hope because the love he felt for Lily (and still feels) is what warms him and sets him apart from the other DE's.
Critiquing the poem as a piece is always harder, I think, than critiquing prose because the style is that much more individual. However, here goes... I enjoyed the start of the poem, yet wasn't quite sure of the flow. The second line seems a bit too syllable heavy, but I guess on re-reading that's fixed by me stressing 'am' rather than always. *forgive this stream of consciousness review* I love the second verse especially the 'old like ages' line. It really evokes the lonliness of the man. The third verse is a bit discordant, to be honest. It seems to overstate exactly what happened between them. I'm not totally sure how I'd have written it, and actually it matters very little because the fourth verse is just wonderful. 'niche in my mind' 'void in my heart' I get the very real sense that Snape tries not to dwell daily on Lily but it must have been very hard for him not to - especially when Harry was at Hogwarts. Finally in that last verse, you've left another slightly discordant note - but this one I really like. With the addition of the question mark after 'always' - you seem to be suggesting that he does occasionally doubt his love for Lily. This is quite brilliant, because there must have been times when his feelings receeded - otherwise he would never have been able to conduct a normal life. However, as soon as he needs to cast a Patronus, Lily is there before him.
Brilliant! You should write more poetry, Natalie, and get yourself a thread in Poetry anyone. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Aaack! I am replying after months, but I decided to do it now. :D
To tell you the not-so-pretty truth, I suck at poetry. :( And that must be why the third verse was discordant. hee hee. I mean, I have no sense of rhyme or metric or all those things, and I don't even read out my poems aloud. So...that was it. The rare moments when I do write poems, I do them in free verse.
But thanks for the lovely review and the encouragements. :D
Summary: Rita Skeeter is an infamous journalist whose "savage quill has punctured many inflated reputations." But was she always like the annoying pest who Harry knows? What about her story? How did she become the Rita Skeeter we all love to hate?
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff House writing for the Untold Story Challenge. It won the challenge, and has been nominated recently for a QSQ in Best General category. :D
Thanks to Fresca (Colores) for betaing! You really helped me give the story a coherent whole. And to Carole (Equinox Chick) too, for the “revenge against the ex” tip. :D
DISCLAIMER: All characters and premises belong to J.K.Rowling. However, the Corner brothers, Simon Rosier and the Thorntons are mine. ;)
OH! OH! OH! Natalie, this is quite brilliant. I love the background to Rita (Ritalina). The way you've written this, it all makes sense. From her childhood as a poor girl obsessed with beetles, to that eleven year old stuck on the carriage door (I wanted to hex those girls so badly) and her metamorphosis as the hard-nosed unscrupulous journalist. I've picked one line (amongst many) that really stood out for me Her own metamorphosis into a woman she donned rather than was? Brilliant.
The one thing I would have liked to see is her becoming an Animagus - I'm guessing that you'd written that and had to cut it. You know something, I didn't notice that this was a long story because it flowed so well and was really well plotted.
Great job! ~Carole~
Author's Response: Wow, Carole! That's exactly the kind of energetic review which leaves me glowing. : D
As for the Animagus episode, sadly, it never even made it to the original draft. I thought about adding it, but it didnlt have much to contribute to the storyline I had in mind, so I left it out. But THANKS for the lovely review. I;m glad you liked it.
Summary: A Halloween prank turns against James and Sirius - not once, but twice.
Ahh, that was fun. You certainly have a talent for pranks, Gina. I remember your April Fool's Challenge entry.
I did like your characterisation of Sirius and James. Both convinced they were hilarious, but Sirius being big enough to accept the joke was glorious. The best, I think, was Snape because you resisted the urge to make him 'snivel' at them. He got revenge in a wonderful way and proved he was better at magic than them.
I liked Lily's appearance and her unique carving on James' bum. It was great to see her as a real person and not a humourless bat in a rage at James all the time. After all, James wouldn't have fancied siomeone with no sense of humour. I think I was smiling throughout the story. Lots of fun ... ~Carole~
Author's Response: A talent for pranks? Well, maybe for writing them since I can't say I pulled very many myself, lol. Thanks, though! And thank you for reading this, I'm glad it made you smile. And I really appreciate your positive comments because I know you are a Marauder fan. Thanks again! ~Gina :)
You are a hero of the War. You fought at the Battle of Hogwarts alongside Harry Potter and Hermione Granger and Ron Weasley, but here, tucked away in a corner of India, you are the same as the next person.
What exactly happened?
[one-shot, featuring Parvati Patil and OC's]
This was originally written for the Life Begins at Forty challenge, but didn't fit all the requirements, so it's being posted as a one-shot now.
Ahh, BB, good story. I have to confess I saw the second person and mny heart dropped a bit, because I'm not keen on it for oneshots. And initially I was struggling to overcome my prejudice because it did start to feel a bit preachy as in you're telling me what I should be thinking ... that said, once I got onto the main part of the story, I was really interested and I forgot it was second person. (Sorry, I'm being fussy today). The interraction between the conductor, Kamatchi and Parvati was wonderful. They were both warm-hearted and I think she needed a bit of companionship.
I think what I would have liked at the beginning, is a bit more story. So some scenes why she left everyone behind, and there was no mention of Padma - would she have forgotten her twin so quickly ... or Lavender, her best friend?
I did like the story, and would love to read some more in a similar vein, because it is such a different world from the Potterverse (and UK). Write More - NOW!
Summary: After a request from Albus Dumbledore, Remus Lupin faces his past and the long buried memories of his friend, Sirius Black.
Will these memories bring comfort or pain? Can he find the truth in a pile of old photographs or just find more questions?
I do not own anything you recognise in this story. It all belongs to J.K. Rowling. I am just thankful to be able to play in her world, for a little while.
This story is set the end of August, 1994 when Albus Dumbledore asks Remus to teach at Hogwarts. As I was writing this, I had another lightbulb moment surrounding the picture of the original Order of the Phoenix. Remus just has the wrong person as the guilty party.
Ahh, very convincing story, Terri. Poor Remus with his box of memories (and even the box was given to him by Lily). He gets scant comfort from them ... but at least it's some comfort. I loved the Sirius/Lily picture. It was actually so obvious that it was just a natureal moment between the pair of them ... but Remus is clutching at any reason.
I loved the way you inter-wove Dumbledore's request into Remus remembering all the good and bad times. Dumbledore certainly knew his man, and knew how to persuade (or manouvre) him into accepting the post.
Lovely story - Remus was perfect. ~Carole~
Summary: Summary: Friends or family? One brother chooses the first, the other the second – and their choices tore them apart. Yet Regulus never hated Sirius.
This songfic was written for MWPP Week Two Assignment on Timeline Errors. The song is Wish You Were Here by Pink Floyd.
DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling. Although everything you can recognize belongs to her.
Okay, not sure why I never read this before because it has Sirius in it and it's by you. I think I'm just dreadfully slow on the uptake.
I like this. I like the simple reflective tone of the piece and how the song connects Regulus to Sirius and their terrible history. I wish they'd been reconciled because they were far more similar than they realised.
I did feel that Regulus' thoughts in places were rather formal, but then again, he is reflecting solemnly and has been indoctrinated by the Blacks and the DE's so I think he would have that type of tone. (Ignore me, I'm just pretending I should be in SPEW)
Very well thought out story, Natalie. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Croll!
Summary: No one needed to die to go to heaven. It was a truth, and Merope Gaunt knew it.
THANKS to the amazing AMANDA (ahattab33) for beta-ing this. You were scintillating. ;)
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for Watching the Mirror final one-shot. This story has just been nominated for QSQs in Best Dark/Angsty and Best History. :D
DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling.
So lets' see, I nominated this for 2 QSQ's last year, and yet didn;t leave a review. I have to be the dumbest dumb dumbo in the world. This will be barely coherent (it's been a long afternoon), but I do think this was an incredibly well written story. Merope is such a tragic character. Badly treated by everyone, and yet she wants so much to be loved for who she is. *sob*. Her prayer at the end is just really sad and horribly prophetic, but not in the way she wanted. *sigh* ~Carole~ (14)
Author's Response: It's been a long afternoon? Really? Really? Hehehe. This is one of my favourite stories written by me, if I may say so lol. I didn't think I'd finish it off in time but I did (although I'm still a bit annoyed we never got our finals points <.<) Merope's story is so sad, though. :'( Thanks for the reviewwwww! And the noms, as well. <333
Summary: Just a meeting. Just a meeting at midnight, on the Astronomy Tower, where no-one else can see. Where no-one else will be. That's all it is. Just a meeting. Hermione/...?
This is an interesting story providing an insight into Hermione that we really don't see in the books (but do seem to see in fanfiction - and the films)The writing is very sensual and the imagery is startling, but I can't help feeling that Hermione is OOC. I can imagine her wanting to come up to the Astronomy tower and be alone, perhaps indulge in a dance and fantasise, but knowing that Draco AND Harry are watching her doesn't really work - unless (and forgive me, 'cause I could well be wrong) she's imagining the whole thing and it's part of some deeper fantasy of hers. I think I would have enjoyed the story more if that had been the case, or it had been about another girl (Lavender or Hannah, perhaps)
The other thing that always strikes me about stories set in the Astronomy Tower is that it's the last place anyone would want to go for a moonlight dance/assignation. At night, Professor Sinistra holds all her classes - you can't study Astronomy during the day. In truth, Hermione, Draco and Harry would have bumped into groups of first years being herded up to their lessons.
Draco/Hermione is a powerful fanfiction subject and I think you tackled the very 'verboten' ness of it well. And, as I said, the writing and imagery were beautiful. ~Carole~
Author's Response: It's absolutely the case that Hermione is imagining the whole thing - none of the story is 'real' except the last three lines. Is Hermione out of character, from what we know about her? Perhaps, but maybe we're all a little out of character in our fantasies. That's what a fantasy is, after all - where you imagine you're something you aren't. So for Hermione, to imagine herself desired by two(!) boys and to be brave enough to reveal a deeply sexual side of herself to them... she'd never actually do that in a million years, but she might be able to imagine doing so.
I set this story in the Astronomy Tower for exactly that reason - it's a fanfiction trope for couples to sneak up there to have their trysts, but nothing of the sort is ever mentioned in the books (students are more likely to duck into an unused classroom), and as you say, there's lots of traffic up there because of the Astronomy classes. However, if there was maybe a part of you that wanted to get caught...
Draco/Hermione is one of the pairings I have a very hard time wrapping my head around, so I guess that's one of the reasons I kind of made fun of it with this story, given that Draco's just a prop (Harry too, for that matter) - Hermione's not even really thinking about Draco himself, per se, but rather the effect she's having on him in her fantasy. I've skimmed over more than enough stories where Hermione becomes captivated with the fanon leather-pants version of Draco (often despite how much she hates him) before descending into lurid purple prose - I just wanted to put the shoe on the other foot for a little while.
Ahhh! well that makes more sense. In that case, I applaud you. I don't think it OOC that Hermione would fantasise, however I would have thought she'd be more likely to fantasise about Ron or Lockhart (which is icky, but is possible)
Mind you, now you've explained that you were taking the mick out of the poor Tom Felton in leather trousers fans out there, and the Harmony lovers - then I get it. (I was wondering why you'd written Dramione - very OOC for you)
Fantasies about getting caught are common, I guess, but getting caught on the off chance by one professor (or Filch) is one thing - getting discovered by a group of snot-nosed first years is too hideous to contemplate.
I thought the end lines were after she'd returned to bed for the night and was sighing because her overlooked dance was over.
Tell me, did it alter your perception of Draco as a possible love object (not just for Hermione) or are you of the opinion that he won't love anyone but will make a safe marriage for dynastic purposes? (Not sure what you vp is on Draco in general - just that you dislike the Draco is 'hawt' line that runs free in fanfiction. ~Carole~
Author's Response: I'm not a big fan of the pairing labels people use all the time - Dramione, H/Hr, those ones - because I find it narrows the kind of stories you can tell. If, for example, you write something that puts Hermione and Draco together in any context, you're automatically in favour of them being together, even if the story you've written is being critical of the pairing. The fandom - most fandoms, really - is so focused on pairing characters up... I was more trying to say that's the silly part, rather than pick on one specific pairing (although Draco/Hermione is the low-hanging fruit, if I wanted to). Like... in the end, Hermione isn't paired with anyone. What she's imagining is inconsequential. When she's done, she just turns over and goes to sleep. Tha's kind of how I feel about character pairings in general - fun to play with, but nothing to lose sleep over.
About Draco... I think his attractiveness and his aristocracy both are played up too often. I think he's a very pitiable character - there's a person buried deep inside the baggage from his father, it's just that we (via Harry's perspective) rarely get to see any of it. I'm quite interested with the relationship he has with Pansy, especially with the extra-canon knowledge that she's not the woman in the epilogue. I'm not adverse to Draco finding love - I just think it's better if he's a human with vulnerabilities, rather than a perfect love god straight from the pages of a cheap romance paperback.
Summary: The whoosh of a speeding Bludger was followed by the scream of a female voice.
Slytherin Chaser Armis Berkley was knocked off her broom, and she fell through the air.
James Potter, Gryffindor Chaser, gripped his broom and sped towards the falling body, even though he knew he’d never reach her in time.
Severus Snape blanched. Berkley always pestered him in the common room, asking him to help her with Charms homework.
Sirius Orion Black jumped up from his seat as the rest of the spectators did. A single obscene curse escaped his lips.
Peter Pettigrew prayed. Dear God, please don’t…no…no…
Lily Evans gasped as an odd monotonous sound rang in her ears.
Remus John Lupin shuddered involuntarily. DUMBLEDORE!
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the final in the MWPP class on the Beta Boards. This story has just been nominated for a QSQ in the Best Marauder Era category. :D Thanks!
DISCLAIMER: So not J.K.Rowling.
I promised you a review once class was over and I never delivered. I am a bad person. So, I’m here now. This story was superb, Natalie. I loved how you tied it all to each person. Six perspectives ... and all so very different. Wonderful!
James His perspective – the guilt that he couldn’t catch her but also the fear that it could have been him coupled with the realisation that life isn’t forever.
Snape They had been convening for the past one year, gathering information and sharing them, and yet they hadn’t got any closer. Not sure you mean ‘them’ here. Perhaps sharing thoughts or ideas. I do love the way this is set out. James’ reaction juxtaposed with Snape’s reaction. But it’s other bits in this particular passage that stand out. The young wannabe DE’s who can’t get to see Voldemort – I laughed at that – and Snape knowing that Voldey wouldn’t be bothered about them ... not yet. When he starts to analyse her near-death and use it for his own ends – well *shudder*
Sirius I expect him to be the most selfish and the least affected – unsure why - and this sort of follows that pattern. Except Sirius isn’t selfish, he’s just more concerned about James and Peter and where they are. I found it very interesting that he doesn’t like the change that’s happening. He is the one most fearful of their group fragmenting. Brilliantly done.
Peter Peter Marauder stories are usually heavily ironic. This isn’t. This is a simple portrayal, yet rather telling. Peter’s afraid of death. The others are afraid of dying – in their own way – but he is simply afraid of death and of not being around anymore.
Lily This I think was just amazing. Lily’s reaction and her memory of that first fall from the swing. The magic breaking through. OOOOH! Superb writing. (I really am running out of adjectives to use for this fic.) I may just have to randomly squeeee for ....
Remus So ... why has she left him to last, I thought. He’s bottling things up. He’s going to break. No one can be that controlled. Now, Remus’ analytical reaction shocked me a bit, but it was perfectly IC. He’s thinking of others, but he was also the only one who had the instinct to look to Dumbledore – the man that made his life bearable by giving him a chance at normality. And Remus at the end, smiling because, after all, he knows the girl is all right and he knows his friends will be too ... well, Natalie, my dear. THAT. BLEW. ME. AWAY.
I must stop fangirling. It’s getting embarrassing.
Author's Response: EGAD!
I thought I had responded to this. o.O
Well, thank you so much for your kind words, Professor. :) I am particularly glad you liked Remus' part as he gave me so much trouble, he did. And the others as well.
Summary: It took four Christmases for Andromeda Black and Ted Tonks to get together.
Thanks to my wonderful beta, Sarah (Sapphire at Dawn) for her wonderful edits and for catching all the Americanism, and to Greenius (greennotebook) for her help. This one-shot is dedicated to Amanda (ahattab33), who taught me that romance is pretty much an essential part of one’s life, and of one’s writing. This is my Christmas gift for you, twin.
DISCLAIMER: Definitely not J.K.Rowling.
I swear I did actually review this, but obviously not. Ah well, I have the recording somewhere, that must be why I got confused.
Lovely story. I would say that Ted/Andromeda are your strong point, but you write everything else so well, that I don't think that would be fair. However your Ted and Andromeda are fresh and original, and there's a distinct lack of angst which I love about them. As Tonks was such a chirpy creature, I imagine her with fun parents. Great job. ~Carole~ (13 ... possibly)
Author's Response: Hahaha! Yess. Oh I have that somewhere, too. Thanks for that, and this review! I enjoy writing these two so much. And yes, Tonks's mischievousness has to come from somewhere.
"So many people say that they were pushed off that cliff; that they fell, or never saw it coming. I've been sitting here my entire life, taking pictures of the rocks I could hit on the way down. I suppose it's always been a choice and I've just been teetering here, waiting to decide. Turn around or jump?"
[dark one shot feat. Draco Malfoy]
Oh My Word. BB, this story gets better every time I read it. I love the beginning lines about the rain etching the tattoo, and the way you weave this image throughout the story and Draco's state of mind is just brilliant. Honestly, you are such a good writer of imagery - scarily good.
Ughh! I was going to write a joke review from the POV of Voldypants or something - but I can't because this is too dark and too good for that.
It's Christmas time in magic land! A look at the Christmas celebrated in two very different households.
[poem. two very different homes]
Awww, this is lovely and fills me with my own festive cheer (although that might also be down to the presents I received LOL). Seriously, though, this is a wonderful poem that highlights very nicely whay we love the Weasleys so much and why the Malfoys are so lacking despite their wealth.
This poem flows very well and the rhymes aren't at all forced, so well done for that. My only quibble is with this line:
A rather very happy family.
It reads a bit awkwardly and I think you should take out either 'rather' or 'very'.
That's the only nit pick I have. Great job, BB. ~Carole ~
Thank you! It really does show we hate those loathsome Malfoys, and like the Weasleys doesn't it? I'm glad you noticed that =D
And I see what you mean about that line, I shall change it. Thanks for the review, Carole!
Summary: One shot featuring James Potter, star Chaser of Gryffindor Quidditch Team, in action.
Submitted for James Week in MWPP Class at the Boards.
DISCLAIMER: Not J.K.Rowling
Yay! jamessssssss. This is fun and you encapsualted James so brilliantly, both before and during the match. I love his determination to carry on regardless, and not even the Bludger can stop him.
JAMES POTTER BELONGS TO NATALIE
will that do? ~Carole~ (12)
Author's Response: Yes, that will do just fine, Croll. Hehehehe. Unless Gina sees it and chases us. eep! I don't know why I don't write more James. :( Thanks thanks thanks!!
Summary: Bill Weasley was the coolest, the most accomplished, and in many ways, the wisest among the Weasley siblings. But he also got something which no other Weasley did – a cursed letter sent by a mysterious pen-pal that made his ears shrivel up. This is the story behind that unfortunate incident.
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the final task of the Winter Character Exploration Class over at the beta-boards.
Thanks to two BRILLIANT GIRLS who made this one-shot possible – Jess (ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor), who took care of all the technical errors and saved me from besmirching the Portuguese language, and Carole (Equinox Chick) who rescued me with her feedback on the writing and also with Briticisms.
DISCLAIMER So not J.K.Rowling.
Ha ha ha ha - Dumbledore chose him because of his hair. Oh yes, I'd forgotten that line. Really quite giggly at that point when reading, but then got straight back to the fic.
I love Bill in this. I love the way he is as a boy and how we see his progression to manhood. It's a good contrast to Ron who really seems bitter about the lack of money. Bill is upset, but shoulders it anyway because he knows his parents are doing their best.
Charlie is love, too. Ahhh, my Charlie ... what would I do without you.
Beatriz is a well developed OC - and evil, sending the poor boy that hat (giggle).
This was fun but also sweet. Yay to Bill. ~Carole~ (who thinks this is 11)
Author's Response: Heehee! I had so much fun writing this. Aww Bill! Must get back to Trooming. It's great that you mentioned the contrast between the two brothers, but I also think that's why Bill is so understanding towards Ron, you know. Ron isn't like the twins who can make themselves happy, or Percy who's so obsessed with books. I love Beatriz. Thanks for the reviewwww! <333
Summary: Hermione finds herself alone in the corridor after the Final Battle, trapped by two men who want very different things from her. How will she react to their demands?
Oh, my. I really like this story. I honestly don't read a lot of D/A - it just ain't my cup of tea, but this caught my eye.
I've not heard the term - wand rape - before (I must be very naive) but the full horror of what was happening - and what could have happened - was brilliantly written. As someone who's written Crabbe as thoroughly evil, I can relate to Goyle being of the same mould.
I so agree with the Malfoys not just being handed a pardon. Okay, they didn't fight at the battle (although they probably did in the early parts, just not when they were screeching for Draco) but they were still culpable of murder, torture and endless suffering. I'm annoyed that JK said Harry spoke up for them, and feel they probably bribed their way out. /rant.
Anyway, my favourite part of the fic is Hermione Obliviating Draco's memory. He's so dumb, and she is far, far too smart for him.
UGHH! I have to add a nit pick (well a Britpick) Jackass is a bit American, but I actually didn't notice from the first read through, it was only when I re-read that it struck me. She's probably say 'Prat' or something. (I am a horrible brit-picker)
Ending on a positive note, the final scene when she sobs at the black lake, made tears well in my eyes (honestly). I loved it. She's been so strong and finally, in solitude, she collapses.
Author's Response: Ack! I can't believe I didn't respond to this last month! I think it was one of those things were I thought it all in my head but apparently never typed it. Sorry! My belated thanks for the lovely review. I appreciate the support. :D And I really appreciate the positive comments, it reaffirms my confidence in the piece. As for the term wand-rape, I hadn't heard it either, it just popped out of Goyle's filthy mouth. It's not literal, but magical. Equally terrifying, as far as I'm concerned. And I'm glad you agree about the Malfoys. I think JKR has said they got off, but at this point in the timeline, Draco should definitely be worried, stupid git. Oh, and thanks for the Brit-pick. 'Prat' just didn't seem strong enough, is there a stronger word I can use in the future? Thanks again for reading this story! ~Gina :)
Summary: : Remembering the forgotten ice-cream man of Diagon Alley.
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the Stirring prompt of the Winter Snows Challenge at the beta boards
Thanks to Elene (CoolCatElly) for beta-ing this. And Jess (ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor) and Carole(Equinox Chick), where would I be without your help?
Disclaimer: This is not J.K.Rowling. However, this is someone who wishes she was J.K.Rowling.
This is a gorgeous story, Natalie. You've taken a much underused character and given him a back story, plus you've created a fully-fleshed OC in the shape of Andrew Carlton.
But my definition and exemplification were wrong; these are fluid traits, and Houses cannot claim them for their own.
You never fail to have a line that makes me gasp and wish I'd written it. Pure brilliance, and so true. ~Carole~
Author's Response: I've decided to become Champion of Micro-Characters. lol! And I rather like Andrew Carlton as a character. In fact, I think he might just beat Dean to becoming Daphne's boyfriend.
That line was my favourite in the entire one-shot. :D Thank you so much for the review.
Summary: A young man remembers both his father and the lessons learned from a mysterious apothecary in Hogsmeade.
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Winter Snows prompt, Stirring
Gina, I don't know why you said it might not meet the requirements of the prompt - I think that story is just about darn perfect. Incredibly touching from the first sentence (mind you I'm a sucker for anything about Remus and Tonks). The story is beautiful and original. I love the friendship between him and Snape (I take it that is Snape). I do have a really, really miserly quibble which is that the apothacary's eyes are dark green and Snape's eyes are coal black, so at first I thought this was an illegitamate son of Snape and Lily (LOL). Then I wondered if the snake bite had changed his eye colour. However that was, as I said, really miserly.
I enjoyed this story very much. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Hey! I think we were reading each other's stories at the same time, lol!! As for the prompt . . . well, it's supposed to be canon, isn't it? Therefore, I plead silence on answering the Snape question, since technically he is dead. But if he were alive, it certainly seems possible he would have scars on his throat and run an apothecary, wouldn't it? And I think if he wanted to be left alone he'd probably change his appearance a bit, otherwise everyone would recognize him. Green eyes in honor of the woman he once loved would be nice . . . but all theorhetical, of course. Since it's really just some former Death Eater would went to school with Lupin, worked with him, and turned on Voldemort. LOLOL. Anyway! Thanks for reading this! I really appreciate the review. I'm glad you liked it, it was almost easy to write because it was just one of those stories that appeared full-written and I really just had to transcribe it, you know? And it was a neat prompt. Thanks again and good luck! ~Gina :)
Summary: A snippet taken from a Sunday Prophet of December 2000.
The aftermath of the Battle marked some of the darkest hours for Charlie Weasley and his family. But just when he can't possibly think of how to find happiness again, a chance encounter might light the way.
This is Karaley Dargen from Gryffindor, writing for the Winter Snows ’09 prompt Stirring.
From the prompt: “Stirring (a column with a self-stirring cauldron as an icon) is the Sunday edition’s main feature. In it, readers can contribute their own inspiring anecdotes.”
Thank you, Emma (Amortentia x), for betaing this story for me :)
Also, I'm not JKR. GASP!
OOOH! Damn, I need to rewrite my Aberforth to something much, much better now. I LOVE this story. There's so few Charlie-centric fics out there, and this is very touching.
OOOH, a little hint for me about my lovely Oliver too ... what are you tryingto tell me?
You know one of the things I like about this is that the friendship between them is so natural, and the way they met again after all the years isn't at all forced. You've portrayed Oliver as a much lighter personality than usual and that's also a delight (Personally I think his heart was broken after ... well you know .. so he deserves some fun).
And now I have to get on with my Oliver sequel. Tarnation, Kara, I feel guilty now!
Author's Response: Oooh thank you, Carole! I've been looking forward to your review, lol :D Ah, but then there are even less Aberforth-centric fics out there from what I've seen, and yours was heart-breaking (though I should leave that for another review)! I'm glad you liked Oliver here. I see him as much less grim in his adult life; now that Quidditch IS his life, he's much more relaxed about everything else. Also, yes, he does deserve some fun, and a happy long term relationship, doesn't he ;) YES! Write a sequel! :D Again, thank you very much. I hope I can put up the next chapter soon... Kara
Summary: Ted and Andromeda have just eloped. So, they dance.
A songfic featuring Hey, Soul Sister by Train. Written for SBBC December Activity, using Kat's (Mistletoe) prompt.
This prompt came second in the challenge. :D And I am not J.K.Rowling --->DISCLAIMER.
You should write more Ted and Andromeda because you write them so well. I hadn;t read this before although I have heard a lot about it. I think I was put off because I didn't know the song that well, but having listened to Darren Kriss - ha ha - I can relate to it now.
Small nit-pick I asked. I accepted. I ran away. I didn;t quite get this. I was thinking it should be 'I asked. She accepted ... because I was assuming the asking was a marriage proposal. If that's not the case then I'm not totally sure what Ted was asking or accepting. (although I'm possibly being very very thick and it's to do with the dance.) You need to put me out of my misery, here.
,br> Lovely oneshot. I love his POV. ~Carole~
Author's Response: You have read this. You voted for it in the first HP Couples Remix activity heeheehee. (Yes, I remember all this >.>) About that crit, I think I meant that he asked for her hand, accepted their fate and ran away. Kind of very vague, though. I mean, now that I look at it this way, it does sound a tad confusing. <.< Thanks for pointing it out, I shall look into this. And thanks for the review as wellllll! <33