I really liked this chapter! :)
I'm not much for looking for what could be improved in other people's writing... But any who, I thought that your word choice was wonderful and I liked how you have developed new traits for some of our favorite Harry Potter characters.
But one thing I didn't like was some of your sentence structure. It just didn't sound right to me in some places.
That's it! Well, I hope you update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the informative review! Yeah, I\'ve been told that I can have rather unique sentence structure, haha. Anyway, I\'m thrilled you liked the chapter and I hope you enjoy the next one as well =)
Please update as soon as you can!!!
Author's Response: I'm working on it I promise!