never mind the manoeuvres just go straight at 'em
I could not tread these perilous paths in safety, if I did not keep a saving sense of humor.
A Marauder quiz! Huzzah!
wow! that was morbid, but i cant say i didnt feel the same way when i...heard the news about sirius. a very interesting way of writing it. bravo!
wow...judging by my name you can see i'm a phantom phan(atic). love your taste in things ;) but...where's harry potter (and the gang?). its ok tho, i know you'll "bring it around town"....(spongebob...yes, im 17 and still watch it ;) ) ill be watching this fic.
Author's Response: Hi! I'm really glad you like it! Your one of the few. Now i'm working on two stories! Harry Potter And The Fall Of Hogwarts and The Phantom Of The Opera: The Shadow Returns. I have submited the second chapter but if its not up here yet why not visit www.freewebs.com/thephantomreturns to read it now!
Author's Response: I NOW HAVE A NEW WEBSITE WITH A HARRY POTTER STORY ON IT JUST FOR ALL OF YOU WHO WERE UPSET ABOUT THIS STORY. GO TO www.freewebs.com/readthem
wow! i really like the idea of having an obscure character come to life! i mean, all we ever hear about is harry, ron and hermione, blah blah blah....(and occasionally some marauders....and no im NOT plugging my story!!) but now we get a chance to see how the trio is viewed by other classes and houses. this is a really good idea and i cant wait for more! suggestion: perhaps you may want to space it between dialogue, just so it's easier to read and distinguish who's talking. i think its a great idea and a great way to kick off a good story! keep it up!
Author's Response: Aw, you're making me blush!!! ::blushes:: See?
whoa...AD...animal death?! AHH!!! AHH!!! AHH!!!...sorry, im a bit of a nut job when it comes to animals...dont make it too sad :(
Author's Response: No worries, Lavender just has more pet issues.
AHHH REMUS!!!!!!!!!!!!! Sirius wanted to review but he's too busy crying his bloody eyes out! this is so tragic!! WAHHH!!!! :( poor ickle remmy is so organized and cute!! awwww poor remus :( good story! VERY descriptive.
AHAHAHAHAHAHHAAA!!! OH I SO CAUGHT THAT! this is funny. very odd. very random. but very funny. so like dumbledore to take karate lessons...and for those of you who didnt know hogwarts had a vending machine, COME ON!!! the marauders petitioned for it to be installed YEARS ago!! oh, and i really liked how you said JK wasnt writing more so they couldnt move forward a year or backward or whatever. it was funny!
Author's Response: I was hoping someone would get the Tarhkcol Yoredlig thing. Oooh and you know how the sacred vending machine was created. A smart person we have here.
Author's Response: I just realised there was a spelling mistake in it. Should be Trahkcol
wow! seeing lily drunk is definitely something that takes getting used to. im very anxious to see what had happened to all of them. obviously something sirius has done has pissed them all off, and im really anvious to see what. my suggestions: i think a bit more descriptive paragraphs would be helpful. you know, just to help the story flow better. i really like how james said "auror training's a bitch" that's so like him! this chapter is such a whirl of action that i dont know how it all goes together until i read a slightly calmer one (not that it was bad, just that i cant really decided until ive read more) keep it up, and im really excited to see what happens next.
Author's Response: lol thanx so much for ur review! I'm a good writer, but I def struggle w/ fiction but I'm really working on it! My next chapter I think is really good I just have to find the time to read over it and submit it. Thanx for your comments...I'll def try to make everything flow more easily together!!
whoa! that is different than how i envisioned remus's first day and all, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. i kinda liked how he and lily hit it off fairly well, tho im glad you put in the normal hesitation, when remus was kinda like "what the bloody hell?!" with lily at the beginning, then he really warmed up to her. i like that youre delving into their relationship. james had me laughing out loud. that was perfect. so hilarious! what an arrogant little berk he is. lol! the one part i wasnt so sure about was sirius's introduction. it seemed a bit rushed for me, and also how he was hanging around with lestrange and all them. i mean, i sppose i could see him doing that the first day but it was such a drastic change, like there was no discussion between sirius and james or remus. it just happened. i mean, i sppose thats just a matter of opinion, again, coz it works if you want to sure arrogant james and arrogant sirius hitting it off coz they're both funny and arrogant. just my little thing. my suggestions: again, needs more descriptives. just so everything doesnt happen as abruptly and its connected better. all in all, great potential, and get 3 up coz i want to read what's going on with the gang!
Author's Response: Oh ya I made James and Sirius just happen cuz they're all supposed to be friends 1st before Peter comes, but I def like ur way of making Serius realize it's better to be kind, I kinda wanted to show that Serius didn't really have to change cuz he truely has a kind nature, he just has to make a concious decision to hang out w/ people who share his "good heart, trouble loving, darring" personality. What better way to break the ice then the three of them just laughing over something totally ridiculous.. You're right though, I could've added more. Thanxxx!!!
ive always wandered what the whole fudge/sirius conversation was at that time. well written. fudge was a bit blunt with his sentences, but then he is a bludnering idiot anyway, so i can see him just bursting out randomly that sirius should be mad.
a rather brilliant idea! im excited to read more (and im hoping perhaps to see some marauder action somewhere along the line ;) ) nah, i dont really care. it really is a good idea, and is very well written! good job!
Author's Response: Thanks! There won't be any 'marauder action' in this story, though. They don't fit into the plot at all. I've had to choose my HP cameo stars very carefully, you see...
Hey! I'm a real sucker for this generation, and I'm an even bigger sucker for the Black family. I enjoyed this immensely. A great look inside a great villain (and let's face it, Bella is a great villain.) I'm definitely adding this one to my favorites list. As a sucker for the Black family however, forgive one bit of criticism (it's not a crack on your writing at all). Narcissa was actually the youngest Black sister, Andromeda being the middle. But I didn't mean that as a rap on your story! I honestly did enjoy it. I'm excited to see the rest of them! -Erik
I don't usually go into slash, elphin (okay, admittedly, I do venture over now and again to see what's up) and this one just caught my eye. First off, there's just something about that darn Greyback that makes me hate him and yet want to read more. Second, I love Remus. Third, I love Sirius. This story, therefore, worked very well for me :).
No honestly. It was extremely well written. Your use of symbolism with the fire and the blood - the whole Greyback room scene was great (not morbidly so, descriptive-wise..) VERY clever. very good. And the Sirius/Remus part. Again, I don't go into it much but you really got them even beyond "friends with benefits" or anything else. I mean, in that short scene, you knew exactly what their relationship was. It was perfect. They were lovers so far that they were beyond best friends. I don't know. I can't describe it. It was really really good. And the inclusion of the last character was a good move. I was thinking "oh I wonder if you-know-who'll come in. Probably not. Too bad." And then voila! I'm glad I ventured into this realm on this night (at 12:52 am...) and found this. Definite favorite list. Thank you for writing.
Author's Response: Wow...your review left me speechless, I\'m so flattered. I\'m sooooo glad you enjoyed it and it\'s really cool to get a review from somebody who doesn\'t normally read slash and still enjoys the pairing. Thank you so much! ^.^