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haha! I LOVED Harry's conversation with Ron. My fav part was when he beat Ron to a pulp for breaking up with Hermione. Isn't Harry great? Hope Ron gets his act together before Chris proposes or something crazy like that...BRAVO! Keep writing and I'll keep reading!
This is SO going into my fav fics box! BRAVO! I started this story with little hope for a 10/10 because I almost NVR give them. Congrats 4 being the 1st person this year to get a 10 from me! I LOVE the way you're making this romance work and (lol) can't WAIT to see Ron/Harry's reaction @ the Wedding! Update SOON plz!
I can't believe I'm reviewing this story but after I saw your responses to RhinoDome, I knew I should probably say something. I'm a writer as well and you HAVE to be able to take criticism! How are you going to get better if ppl just say whether or not they liked it? EVERYTHING can ALWAYS be made better, edit EDIT EDIT! It takes me forever before I'm totally confident with a story. I didn't totally love these chapters and I'll explain why b/c it will help with future stories and your entire writing style. *ahem* I thought the whole Voldemort sequence was random as her rape w/ Malfoy. Both seemed rushed and didn't really take the story anywhere. They killed Voldemort that easily?! And her mother's disappearance/murder was confusing. The fairy idea was interesting but Lily seemed a little TOO perfect. The character bugged me because she was a prettier Hermione but we all love Hermione because she ISN'T perfect. Your dialogue is good though, just work on holes in the plot. Overall, you do have promise and I look forward to future stories from you. Just, try not to be so arrogant. :)
hahaha...interesting story! I am a big h/r shipper but loved both of their reactions. I guess b/c of the category they'll have to fall in love but i wish in Chapter 15 or so they would be able to break the contract b/c of true love or something and h/r would ride off into the sunset with d/p complaining behind them. hehehe, oh well. Still a good start! I loved how the prologue was all serious and then Ron's complaining in the 1st chapter started! BRAVO
O.M.G. Why doesn't this story have more reviews? Probably because there are only 10 stories in this category...that must be the reason because it's an absolutely fantastic story! This is going in my favorites box and I'm recommending it to ppl. AMAZING! P.S. Harry, Hermione, Pansy, Draco and Ron were perfectly portrayed in their letters. 10/10
Once again...v. good! I agree that things are happening quickly but i understood the letter part very well. Keep writing and I'll keep reading!
VERY well written and impressive! I'llbe keeping an eye on this story. Be proud of yourself!
hehehe, wonderful story! You really capture each character and i luv Alex's and Sirius's relationship. Hmmm...a date 4 Lily, and James has to come! lol, PLZ update soon! P.S. I don't really understand everything yet. i submitted a story (i think) 2 days ago and i haven't gotten reject/acception yet. Is this normal? Did i do it wrong by typing the first chapter and clicking "Add Story?" Sry to b such a bother. You r a gr8 writer!
UPDATE! plz! my dad just passed away and i've been on more and more often 2 try and 4get about it...b/c lily's parents often die @ least it makes me feel like i'm not alone. gr8 story but i can't WAIT 4 Lily 2 fall FINALLY 4 James! Corny romantic fluff plz!
a cliffhanger?! NOOOoooo...fabulous chapter though. i thought this was going 2 b a funny little chappie where james was (lol) sulking as he was forced to follow lily and amos around on their date. U proved me wrong! 10/10 and keep going! P.S. I cn't WAIT 4 sum romance btw the future potters. So, bravo!
hehehe...i luv this story and i can't wait for Lily to finally kiss James back! My name is Alex too and i luv FINALLY seeing another female Alex. I'm a blonde on the brink of a brunette and also a perfectionist. Would love to become an actress or writer someday. fav quote from this chapter? : "Lily didn’t hate you anymore!” “She didn’t?” The thought finally struck James, and he let out a loud whoop. “She didn’t!” His face fell. “Well, she does now.” Clueless James! lol and plz UPDATE!
wohoohoo! aw, ickle ronnikens is jealous! lol, i love fred and george and this fanfic had me laughing at their antics. eh, a smidge of the fic i disliked but i can't quite put a finger on why. Maybe it's Hermione..,or Ron...or the chess pieces. lol, i dunno but good job anyway. Keep writing!
yeah BIG understatement there! lol, but I wish Ron would just grab her when she's yelling @ him and kiss her...aw shucks! MEN~ I dunno why Harry's so mad...maybe he's just frustrated with both of them? UPDATE SOON and*snaps* 4 u!
I agreed with most of your story and your reviews...but i thought the 3rd movie was still better than the 1st 2. Harry is growing up as are his friends and all characters who undergo such turmoil (oh yeah and puberty-lol). I think it's interesting to compare the 3 director's styles. It's like watching 3 different ppl's designs for HP. I'm mostly writing to disagree with limey. Alfonso Cuaren DID change the plot of "A Little Princess." I've read the book and seen the movie MULTIPLE times and STILL cry every time I watch her being reunited with her father. I say BRAVO! Cuaren for 2 successes! P.S. Limey: If you have a problem with Cuaren changing the Little Princess than I'm surprised you're not yelling at all of the HP staff who digested and destroyed the books in cutting out huge chuncks. ANYWAY, i thought the storywas kinda strange but still laughed. You obviously put effort into it and therefore deserve to be congratulated.
Author's Response: Well, yeah. Truely I think the movie's pretty good and all, but I lurve to poke fun and find loopholes in it. And I really do wish Alfonso had paid a bit more attention to things that would or wouldn't happen (ex: the beginning scene) and hadn't like totally changed the landscape. >:( Thanks for the critical feedback.
I'd continue with your story the way it is, w/o alternate reality. UPDATE soon plz! This is the 1st Ron/Hermione fic I've read so consider yourself special! lol and BRAVO! I luv romantic humor fics
Author's Response: No, no, no . . . the story MUST have the alternate/parallel universe/reality . . . It's imperative to the plot, but thanks all the same for your input . . . Thanks for letting my Hr/R be your first - I hope it'll turn out to be worth your while. I want to recommend 'Tangled' by Bella Mia for your second R/Hr fic - it's darned good, if I say so myself.
awwwwwwwwwwwwww the ending was perfect! You have a unique twist on such the Lily/James category that I have not seen before. Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more! One comment? The L/J interactions are spot-on, but the Sirius/James relationship seems to be a little corny? maybe it's just me....Sirius seems to be a clown as opposed to a player.
Author's Response: Ok, thanks. I'll work on that...