I was orphaned at a young age. I was taken in by people that didn't want me. And I was raised alongside a child that was very much wanted. DO I LOVE HARRY POTTER? Anyone? Anyone? Just one fan enjoying the chance to share the Potterverse with others!
Summary: So many children had passed through her class in the small Primary School of Little Whinging, and Miss. Morrison liked to think she remembered them all. The shy ones, who hid behind their mothers legs or curled up in their fathers protective arms; the boisterous ones, who ran in small, never ending circles with boundless energy. The smart ones and the ones who struggled, sometimes bravely and sometimes with tears and tantrums. The short ones and the tall ones, the sweet and the mischievous; they were all special to her, in their own way, and they all earned themselves a special place in her memories. All of them, that is, except for one.
you have a very soft touch with dialogue and detail I enjoy your work thanks.
Summary: Over the course of her seventh year, Lily finds out several unexpected things about James- and then forgets them all when one event leaves her confused about everything she ever knew.
Written by hermione210 of Gryffindor for Professor Kate's First Year Potions class.
the story was a little confusing at first but that last line was a real punch to the gut!!! Great example of foreshadowing! Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks!
the story was a little confusing at first but that last line was a real punch to the gut!!! Great example of foreshadowing! Good job!
Author's Response: :)
Summary: When Ted Lupin is named Hogwarts Champion for the newly reinstated Triwizard Tournament he will have to use all his wits to face an angry chimera, cheating, backstabbing, ex-Quidditch stars, intrigues, waltzing, illegal magic, and fierce competition from his arch-nemesis, the lovely Victoire.
But there’s more. Something truly dreadful lurks under the cover of fame and eternal glory. A mystery Ted, his famous godfather Harry Potter, and (of course) Victoire will have to solve. Because if they don’t, this tournament will surpass even its predecessors and become the bloodiest competition Hogwarts has ever seen.
Great so far...It hast he JK magic. However not to be nit picky, but did Old Hagrid apparate to Romania after he showed the first years across the lake? From the tense used in the explanation of his whereabouts one is led to believe he is already there. That was the only problem I Could see I am still favoriting this story.
Author's Response: You are absolutely right, Hagrid is long gone. I was editing for passive tense and forgot I\'d left it that way on purpose! Thanks so much, I\'ve fixed it.
Summary: The war may be over, but the true fight is just beginning. Two hearts, still searching for the truth, are brought together by the most unexpected person. And in the end, destiny overtakes them. From the imaginations of Miss Radcliffe and SiriusBlack1113 comes a story of love, passion, heartbreak, and healing.
Heartwrenchingly awkward, and scarily good! Please don't fumble for all our sakes!
Summary: Seventeen-year-old Rose Weasley has always liked romance of the fairytale variety. She thinks she’s found her Prince Charming in Daniel Corner, the handsome Ravenclaw Seeker. But into her life enters Scorpius Malfoy, and it’s unclear whether he’ll be leaving it anytime soon. Suddenly it’s as if Rose is trapped in one of those devastatingly romantic soap operas her mother keeps telling her about… only that she’s not sure if it will have a happy ending… if she will have a happy ending.
Good so far...who am I to critici ze? Glad someone writing good stuff is getting published LOL!
Keep it up!
As a Chaser for the Harpies, Angelina Johnson is used to chasing goals, but when the team is sold and Blaise Zabini takes over management, she feels more like a Quaffle...and one that might not mind being handled.
Great story. But shouldn't it be labeled as Alternative Universe, since according to JK and every other source, that George Weasley married Angelina? Just curious.
It's not AU according to literary canon. I started writing For Bitter or for Worse, the George/Alicia story that inspired this one, well before Jo came out with her "Family Tree." If I'd had Fred live, that would be AU. This one, I might ask Mods to consider adding a new warning for:
Post Epilogue Revelations Disregarded
Summary: A weekend trip to the mysterious Rose Cottage leads to Ginny's second pregnancy and Hermione's first. The Potters and Weasleys take on “The Next Great Adventure” as they anticipate the births of Albus Potter and Rose Weasley.
I wasn't going to review but I have to say ditto on the frustration. I have two stories burning up my brain and I can't get either one up! I have a great banner, three beta's, three chapters exstensively reviewed and debugged, and they erased one of them with no word the other day for some vague rule violation or some such!!! I covet the HP universe but when I see them post lesser works while I can't even get one posted, and then I have to re-post one chapter three or four times...it gets so frustrating. I am seriously afraid of losing my story while I languish in queu hell! That being said, you have a very JKesque touch with characters and everything is so In character I really am having a blast reading. You and I have come to some of the same conclusions about the next generation, and its like seeing my own thoughts fleshed out. I never considered Harry and Ginny having a roue about Albus Severus, but seriously, how could they not? Yipes. Thanks for your writing, and thanks for making me feel better about my own misgivings!
Keep it going!
Summary: The battle is fought, the war is won--but no victory ever comes cheap. Join Alice, Andromeda, Ginny, Narcissa, Luna, Molly, and Hermione as they discover the cost of war.
EDIT: I'm back! And I am SO SORRY I was gone so long. There is absolutely no excuse for making you wait almost three years for an update. *hides from angry reviewers* The next chapter is in the queue!
Love the story. I have to say that Neville's situation always saddens me even more than Harry's. I re-read that chapter In Order of the Phoenix where Neville tells them how proud he is of his parents when they don't even know him, and how he keeps the gum wrapper in defiance of his Grandmother. I think its JK at her most human...this is a nice epilogue. thanks
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I agree with you that this is some of Jo\'s best writing. I love the Harry Potter books because they are so real, even while they are clearly fantasy. In a real war the winner never gets away cleanly; there are always some things that no amount of peace will fix. The situation with Neville\'s parents demonstrates this exceptionally well. Thanks again for reviewing; it made my day!
Oh man, Oh man, OH man! Artistry on display in here! Thats all I can say. I've been through the aftermath of death and I can verify that mix of guilt, pain, elation and confusion is perfectly described. Considering the last chapter you wrote, I have to say you've got something here! Please keep it going for all our sakes.
Author's Response: This is one of the best reviews I\'ve received; thank you so much! I had a hard time putting those indescribable feelings onto paper; I\'m glad to know I succeeded. Thanks again!
Summary: Nominated for the 2008 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Post-Hogwarts Story
When Albus, Rose, and Scorpius are put on the train to their first year at Hogwarts, their parents have simple hopes for them. Namely to have the normal, boring school years they never got to experience themselves. But sometimes, we ask too much of our children.
When the school becomes plagued by invasions of wild beasts, three different students from three different houses follow in the footsteps of the generation before them, but strive to achive the one thing none of their predesesors ever could: DON'T GET CAUGHT!
Love, love, LOVE the new chapter! Update soon, as it appears that this and Fresh Start might be my only first year Albus/Rose/Scorpius fix cause I cant get mine out of the queue LOL! Loved the awkward apologee! Oh and pureblood, the other white meat? I laughed my caucasian butt off! Keep it coming!
Summary: Harry Potter!
When we hear that name we think of The Boy Who Lived, The Chosen One, but what was Harry like before he ever step foot in the wizarding world. What was our future hero like when he was mocked and scolded by his own family? How did he deal with? Would he ever know what happened to the parents that haunted his dreams......
You desperately need to put the parent's dialogs in italics, or have some other way to differentiate it from what is going on in little Harry's head.
I had to read that one line twice to really catch the gist of it. Just a better separation between the two point of views would push this over the top into being one of my favorites!
So please consider that edit, I know it will help you sell the story to the reader just that one little bit more clearly.
Summary: A special moment between two friends at Christmas time.
Genius wrinkle to the whole Snape/Lilly mythos. It also explains some of the root of the Potter/Snape fued. I'm wondering because I never see any information on Potter's parents...was this idle speculation or did it have basis in fact?
Author's Response: You know, I beleive I read about James\'s parents on Jo\'s official site. I could be wrong through...
Summary: Albus Dumbledore really did see socks when he looked into the Mirror of Erised. And this is the reason why.
Brilliant story. I have a mentally handicapped sister and she gives incredible presents like those....a needle point sample that she had worked on for six patient months everyday was a recent example. How can you put a price on that? So thanks for writing this.
Summary: Fifteen year old Emma Lovett hates Regulus Black. He's an arrogant jerk with an ego the size of Asia. Or at least, he was. When Emma starts her fifth year at Hogwarts, Regulus' behavior seems to have changed a bit. She begins to think that Regulus might not be so bad. Of course, no one but her diary ever needs to know what she thinks.
I LIKE! More syllables to follow as the story progresses... Wouldn't want to gush.
Keep it going.
Author's Response: Thank you!\r\n\r\n~Bella
Summary: Harry was pretty sure it had been an unfortunate trick of the light, and therefore dismissed it as stress combined with an unhealthy lack of sleep finally taking their toll on his sanity. The start of the new school year was, undoubtedly, a wonderful thing. Getting his three children onto the train with the bare minimum of fuss, outrage and actual bodily harm was quite another.
You have such a touch for the interpersonal mechanics! I love all your post-hogwarts, and your pre-hogwarts! I write almost exclusively post-H so I study that world, you definately gave me room for thought in this story!
Thanks and PLEASE keep writing!
Summary: ‘We think He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named may have murdered her in person, because she was a very gifted witch and—and all the evidence was that she put up a real fight.’
Amelia Bones expected to be targeted at some point, and she was ready to defend herself (or run, depending on the odds)...but being trapped in her own apartment by the Dark Lord was not in her plans. (Madam Bones was an interesting character who didn't get much book-time, but she deserved a proper death scene--this is my attempt to give it to her.)
Great writing you are one of my favorite authors. But I do have to point out, Madam Bones was alive and made an appearance in the beginning of the Order of the Phoenix when she was at Harry Potters trial, and thwarted the ministers efforts to railroad the young wizard. JK doesn't notify us of her death until the summary to the Prime Minister of England in the first chapter of Half Blood Prince the events you are discussing with Fudge happened in the Goblet of Fire. Plus, being real nitpicky here, she was killed in a locked room under mysterious circumstances, a blasted apart house would have been of note. With a short rewrite you can fix both of those problems.
I just think you are a brilliant author and I dont want this brilliant piece of writing saddled with AU when its not meant to be AU.
I would go back and mention in the conversation with Fudge events that happened in Order and have him be defensive about that. Because he would have justified his efforts after Goblet he wasn't repentant until after Order. You might even mention his impending resignation or her even suggesting it. As for the locked room, write a short paragraph about how while she was paralized he put everything back in order in her home, including a locked door to her study, then before he apparated he killed her. Obviously to add to the terror and the confusion of her death. She might even make a rueful comment about his cleaning skills in her head like "For a Dark Lord, he is tidy fellow, you've got to give him that!" Those changes will make this cannon, and elevate this story to JK status! It is so nearly there already!
Other than those things, this is brilliantly imagined and written. Please consider those changes, this story is worth it!
Summary: Oft-ridiculed Neville Longbottom jumps at a chance to fit in with his fellow Gryffindors, a chance that requires a dangerous trek through Hogwarts in the buff. WINNER OF THE 2009 QUICKSILVER QUILL AWARD FOR BEST HUMOR STORY.
WOW!!! I is very hard to keep up that level of action and sustain that much effort for that long! And Dumbledore's reaction was so in character!!! I mean the man never got ruffled LOL! I can see Neville falling for the gag, I can see Neville being the victim of such a gag. All very in character! And his reaction was so perfect to the confident, true Gryffindor Neville we know he became! So bravo writing a coming of age story so comically! You got some skills, gonna check out your other stories!
Narcissa Malfoy was innocently singing her young son to sleep when an unexpected guest knocks upon Malfoy Manor door. A traumatizing event lead by this intruder will lead her to question her present and future alliances and discover what’s more important to her, her life—or her son’s? Based on a character study drabble I wrote.
Brilliant! I specialize in fics that directly reflect JK's work from a different perspective and you have done a BANG up job imagining the interior Malfoy family infrastructure!
Author's Response: oooo thanks! :)
Summary: A scarlet stain, a maroon jumper, a bloody nose, a blush.
A laugh, an embrace, a punch in the face, a kiss.
Scorpius doesn't know when he started trying to live vicariously through her, but he is certain of one thing: there is no shade of red quite like Rose Weasley. Second place in the Colour of Love Challenge.
Wow....how wonderfully excruciating! Unrequited love, a bully longing to be better, imagery and depth, even a back story?
Yikes are you good!
Author's Response: That\'s really flattering--I was a little nervous about overkill! :)