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The Traveler's Secret by eternalangel
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 51]

Summary: It’s 1940 and Paris has just fallen to the Nazi Regime. The Muggle world is in turmoil, but little do the Muggles know that the Wizarding world is also at war. A weary traveler comes to England carrying a secret that will change both worlds for better or worse . He comes seeking protection and help from the adept Albus Dumbledore, a Professor at the famous Hogwarts school of Witchcraft and Wizardry. But there is more danger about than even Albus has anticipated. Can Dumbledore protect the traveler and his secret?

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 82554 Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/09/08 Updated: 12/17/09


Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 07/09/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Dark Times

Your story is engaging and the dailogs captivating. Great job!

Author's Response: I appreciate the review. I hope you continue to read on!

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 08/19/09 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 What Riddle Saw

That was an unexpected twist. Does Jean stand a chance? Will he teach Frederick that a muggle can stand his man, too?

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 08/03/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Dark Times

This is getting scarier and scarier. Are we now going to learn how out of the leaky bucket became a whole, but still leaky, cauldron?

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 11/20/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Dark Times

The que has opened up a while ago already, but we are still waiting for your next update... snif snif.

Gripping story, please update!

Author's Response: I am pulling up the next chapter now. I lost the entire story when my computer crashed and it has been a little difficult. I'm so sorry for the long wait and will try to get the next chapter in the queue no later than tomorrow!

 

Summary: Past Featured Story

Seventh grader Alexandra Quick returns to Charmbridge Academy. This year she faces bullies from another wizarding school, a secret Dark Arts club, and the machinations of her father, but her greatest trial yet awaits her in the dangerous Lands Below.

This is the second book in the Alexandra Quick series.



Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 235074 Chapters: 37 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/26/08 Updated: 06/03/09


Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 05/22/09 Title: Chapter 34: Beneath Charmbridge

“Just how clueless were you, really, about what the Generous Ones wanted, about what you'd have to trade?” she demanded.

Her father rose to his feet, and his expression became a scowl. “Generous ones? I don't understand you.”

“Maybe you knew that someone had to die to get what you wanted,” she went on. “You're the one who knows so much about how terrible the Confederation is and how it makes deals –”

“Alexandra, you're making no sense!” he snapped.


So Abraham Thorn was clueless about the Lands Below?

Anyway, barely two chapters after AT started becoming more likeable, when we discovered he had pushed for the Elf Protection Act, he is becoming less likeable once again.

Is Max really gone? Poor Alexandra. Is there no way to still rescue him?

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 05/16/09 Title: Chapter 33: The Most Terrible Gift

This is dark, dark, dark. Is Maximilian really gone? Or is this ALexandra's nightmare?

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 06/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Mall

Your books are masterpieces. I already posted one review where I pointed out how you expand magical theory, providing answers to some of the things J.K Rowlings left open.

Example:
* how do spells formulas work? While we still don't know why, we have seen how spells don't need to be in Latin, and that spontaneous spells also work (dogerell verse. Both points from book I)
* How did house elf enslavement happen
* why do children travel to Hogwarts with a train. Portkeys may be tricky to create, and are regulated, as we see in the beginning of HP GoF (the ministry prepared them) and at the end of OOtP (Fudge is furious when DD makes a portkey for Harry) When you say they are expensive, you tie in to that and answer the Hogwarts Express question for those who missed the above two HP references. But boy, does the Confederation clamp down on portkeys; sounds like "1984."

The last scene, with Quimle, is masterful. Now Alexandra is going to wonder whether by coming along she prevented her brother from escaping the Generous Ones. May be Quimle is in cahoots with Abraham Thorn? Then again, he didn't seem to know what the Generous Ones were.

Will we get to glimpse into the Lands Beyond (without anyone dying) by book 7? Before that?

Thank you for these marvelous books. And by the way, you should consult with a copyright lawyer; your stories seem original enough that they might be publishes without infringing on JKR's copyright. But, IANAL.

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 06/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Mall

I also notice that you have this streak about house elves not carrying more than one person while Apparating. As I pointed out in a review to HHD, Dobby Apparates with a bunch of people from Malfoy Manor, and comes back to get the Trio, in DH.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments and observations. You were right in the case of HHD, but the situation here was slightly different -- Quimley explained that he was unable to Apparate with both Alexandra and Maximilian because the Generous Ones had Alexandra (and then Maximilian) in their power. Their magic was too powerful for Quimley to overcome, so it wasn't just a case of Quimley only being able to carry one person at a time.

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 05/10/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Mall

I have been reading your writing since Hogwarts Houses Divided. You are one of the best writers on this site. After you finished HHD, I was hesitant to read AQATTC, as I was really looking for HP canon compatible fanfics, however, I fell in love with the series (I do hope you write more sequels, until we find out what Abe Thorn is really finally up to, in her senior year, I guess?).

I am absolutely impressed how you have taken the HP world beyond JKR, while being true to her. To a certain extent, you have invented the magical theory that explains standardized spells, by claiming that doggerell verse would also work, but not repeatedly. You also massively developed an American, and even more, an American Indian magical universe, again, taking JKR's world beyond one's wildest expectations. I am speechless.

Recently, I pasted the entire HHD into a word processor, made a pdf and had it printed with lulu.com, and then gave it to my spouse, who is reading, eh, devouring it all at once. Once AQATLB is completed, I will do the same for both AQ books.

I do hope you also publish some of your writing in print; it is a pity to keep it a secret of HP fanfics fans only.

 

Hermione by OliveOil_Med
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 51]

Summary: Hermione Wilkins is an explorer with an over-active imagination. So when a woman show up on her doorstep claiming she is Hermione too, no one believes her. In fact, she is punished! Of course, the fact that she was climbing on the roof at the time might have had something to do with it...

But when Hermione Weasley appears once again, she shares a secret with Hermione Wilkins; mostly because she needs her help if she is ever going to achieve what she came to Australia for in the first place.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 62094 Chapters: 10 Completed: No
Published:
08/24/09 Updated: 09/23/10


Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 03/01/10 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6 The Last First Day of School

Oh great, Hermione and Hermione are back!

BTW, the following sentence shows awkward signs of rewriting, you will want to fix it:
But instead of starting at the very beginning of the book, as Hermione usually went about reading, but instead found herself running her thumb across the pages, moving them like a flipbook, looking for something to catch her eye.

Instead of "but instead found herself" you probably wanted to say "she found herself ... instead"

Author's Response: Thank you! I will change it right away.

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 04/19/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Expecting…

You haven't updated in a little while. Can we expect a new chapter soon? We want to hear from Hermione & Hermione! (also, can you please continue your SHAM story?)

Author's Response: Believe me when I say I have been working very diligently on chapter seven, but it has been a very stubborn one. I have even started writing the next chapters in the story while I wait. But I'm in the last 1000-word leg, and I hope it will be done soon.

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 12/02/09 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5 An Infinite Ability to Ask Questions

I just discovered this story, and while others have written about Hermoine lifting her memory charm, yours is the best story with that premise so far. And two Hermoines ROTFL!

Keep it up (and don't abandon the Skat Hatokha story of yours, either)

Author's Response: Don't worry. The one thing you gotta love about the winter holidays is that you have endless time to write (even if it is on a napkin while you boss isn't looking.

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 07/12/10 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8 Uncle Marty

Uncle Marty?!Wickedly creative. But, this very much looks like a non canonical twist. After all, the Ministry constantly sent Obliviators around, and it was never that grave to slip up and reveal something, as long as the Ministry cold mop up. That is what Arthur Weasly did much of the time, at least after his promotion.

Or is there something more sinister behind Uncle Marty?

Please don't let us wait that long until the next update!

Author's Response: Well, Uncle Marty has a very unique job because this is a very unique situation. His job is to keep constant tabs on Minnie's family, to make sure the charm isn't wearing off so they don't remember parts of the wizarding world before they remember not to go around telling everyone. I don't imagine something like all this happens very often, so there isn't a set procedure.

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 07/04/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Expecting…

Hi,

Any news here? Minnie is soon going to school, but she didn't finish shopping yet, so what's up next? Please, update.

Author's Response: You will see very soon, as soon as I hear back from my beta.

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 01/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Expecting…

Pleas, pleaseplease, update this and SKAToM.

Author's Response: Let me assure you, I am working my way through the chapters as best I can.

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 10/10/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Expecting…

This last chapter added an interesting twist, an intermezzo of sorts, to the story. But pray, tell, is she finally going to more forward on restoring her parents memories?That surely will allow for many humorous moments, too. And Minnie soon has to decide where to go to school to. Please don't let us wait too long to find out.

Author's Response: All shall be revealed in due time...*mysterious fade off*

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 05/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Expecting…

What a great chapter. The detailed portrayal of the wizarding market is great, and we are as clueless as they were without a compass, as to what is happening next with Minnie. Aussie or British school? When will their parents finally get their memory back? And how will they return without being seen by the parents? Aparition outside the home?

Keep the updates up!

Author's Response: Well, the only way to come up with the answers is to read the rest of the story!

 

Scenes from Shell Cottage by WeasleyMom
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 128]

Summary: This fic is a series of missing moments from the time H/R&H were at Shell Cottage, beginning immediately after they Disapparated from Malfoy Manor. JKR shows us what was going on with Harry, but this is my version of what could have happened with Ron and Hermione after one of the most emotional/disturbing events in the entire series.

UPDATED June 2010 When I first wrote this fic, I didn't know what a beta reader was, and frankly, it showed. Thanks so much to Natalie for helping me polish this up and make it more readable. Thanks also to both Julia and Carole, whose helpful comments in the review section allowed me to make some much-needed corrections during the rewrite. I would love to know what you think ~ reviews are very much appreciated!

This was nominated in the 2010 Quicksilver Quill Awards for Best Canon Romance.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 17189 Chapters: 7 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/03/09 Updated: 11/23/09


Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 11/29/09 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

This story was sweet and indeed fills an interesting window in canon. There is another fanfic you should read, which addresses some of the same themes, the next evening- It is called Hermione's Horcrux, and no, I did not write it.

I find your insertion of 15 min before they leave for Diagon Alley imminently reasonable, not too high a price to pay, though your story stands just as well without that talk between them. After all, all Ron has to report is that he finally had the nerve to speak openly to Hermione, since Harry already knows that they both are in love with each other.

Congrats on your first fanfic!

Author's Response: I actually have already read Hermione's Horcrux and I really enjoyed it. I love missing moments, especially between Ron and Hermione, and heaven knows JKR has given us TONS of empty places to fill in that regard. Someone should keep track of all the times in the series that R&H are left on their own while Harry is off doing whatever. It's a goldmine! :) I'm so glad you liked the story... thanks for taking the time to tell me so. I appreciate it!

 

Summary: Past Featured Story

Alexandra Quick returns to Charmbridge Academy for eighth grade, angry and in denial. Unwilling to accept the events of the previous year, she is determined to fix what went wrong, no matter what the cost. When her obsession leads her to a fateful choice, it is not only her own life that hangs in the balance, for she will uncover the secret of the Deathly Regiment!

 This is the third book in the Alexandra Quick series.



Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 204741 Chapters: 31 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/28/10 Updated: 06/14/10


Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 05/21/10 Title: Chapter 24: The Lands Beyond

OK, so we know that Alexandra will probably fail and get caught and get endless detention once again. But what will happen between now and then, and considering the title, how will she get to communicate with her deceased brother? Will anyone talk more sense into her before Saturday night? (Funny that that chapter will indeed appear on the 'net right after Saturday night, on Sunday ;-))

 
Reviewer: potterchassid Signed
Date: 03/19/10 Title: Chapter 6: Finding Trouble

What a gripping chapter. Innocence is shaping up as quite an unozarky, superentertaining character, and C & F started showing some backbone, too. I just hope Innocence is not just a prop, but becomes really part of teh story.

By the way, a seven-sided shape is a heptagon, not a septagon. Unlike most spells, this comes from Greek, not Latin.

Author's Response:

Septagon is the more common term, but heptagon is also used.

Innocence does have a role to play in the story. Thanks for the review!

 
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