Excellent twists and turns.
One nitpick: England is 5 hours ahead of New York. I really doubt that you pictured the Potters and Weaslies going shopping on a Saturday morning at 5am, so the kids couldn't have left on Friday and met the aurors on Saturday at any normal hour, unless they had been wandering aimlessly for several hours. Just make sure you address that point in the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm glad you like the chapter. But remember, they went to the Ministry first, and probably did wander around there aimlessly for a few hours, and I imagine they did take a fair amount of time on the International Floo Network. Then they wandered around Diagon Alley looking for a candy store, so I imagine it was about ten o'clock when Rae finally met up with Harry and Ginny.
It's been a while since you updated. I note that originally, this was nominated for a Quicksilver Award 2009. You have a great premise. Why not pick it up and develop it? Go, OliveOilMed, Go!
Author's Response: I do promise I'm working on it!
Update, please, we want Luna, we want Luna!
LOL every time another chapter comes out. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Sorry I've been away so long. I took a break for a few months due to personal crises, but I haven't stopped working on my stories. Keep your eyes peeled for another chapter soon!
Luna's latest dare is: I dare my creator (eh, well, the one who has resurrected me for this story) to publish the next chapter.
Any chance of an update? Please don't drop this story!
What a great premise. Now that your second chapter is up, I am starting to recognize some of the lines you are drawing up. Seeing that they speak Yiddish, they are probably of Eastern European origin (German Jekkes wouldn't speak anything but German). The rabbi wearing a tallit on Friday night might also confirm that: chassidic rabbis do that, others not. Would you picture their family coming from the Eastern part of the by then defunct Austro-Hungarian empire, probably fleeing antisemitism and poverty, only to rediscover it the Nazi prewar Austria? How sad!
You do make Eliezer come thrice daily for services, which would make him quite Orthodox, but yet she goes to get the mail across the street *after* services. They seem somewhat inconsistent in their observance, though Vienese Orthodox (like other Jewish contemporaries of theirs) might easily allow themselves to ask such a thing of a child not yet bat mitzva.
I absolutely love your little details, such as the Kishefmakher Academy! That sounds like Jewish wizards had to set up their own school, perhaps because Nazi wizards booted them out of the regular local school?
I wonder, does their rabbi know that she is a makhsheife? Will you try to address the religious debate about witchcraft?
Can't wait for the next installment.
Author's Response: I\'m glad you like my story, but I\'m afraid everyone\'s expecting more of me than I can really offer. I\'m a reform Jew myself, so please be patient with my mistakes - I\'m doing some research to try and keep the story consistent with orthodox Judaism. But there will be times I slip up, so I\'m sorry in advance for that. As for the Yiddish words and \"little details\", they\'re my favorite things to add, and its nice to know other people appreciate them. I hope you keep reading!
Has the Traveller gone vacationing? Please update you excellent story.
Author's Response: So sorry. I will try to get it updated in the next couple days. It has been an extremely busy week for me.
Gripping, with a cliffhanger to boot. Will they mistakenly leave Fulver a few moments alone, exposing him to murder at the hand of Frederick?
Jean was preternaturally silent, moving like a ghost. He used the natural sounds and lighting of his surroundings to mask his presence. He breathed when the wind blew and blended into the shadows thrown off the wall.
While Jean has no magic, he surely would do well in concealment nonetheless.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. And as for the comment, yes, he most certainly would do well with concealment. People will get to see more of Jean's abilities in the sequel to this story, On the Road to Nurmengard, that is in the works.
Can we lobby for an update soon, please?
Author's Response: I'm so sorry for the wait. I thought I had updated the next chapter, but I was wrong. Thank you for reminding me. The next chapter is in the queue right now!
Gripping new story ark extension. I see you will keep us on the edge of our seats for quite some more chapters! Thanks! I greatly look forward to the next update.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. This was actually the last chapter of the story, but there is a sequel in the works called On the Road to Nurmengard. I am working on the first chapter right now, so keep a lookout for it!
So Vicuous is fishy. Hmmm. When is his next appearance?
Author's Response: Vikious comes in again in chapter 24, which is coming very soon. I'm sorry for the delay and thank you for the review. I really appreciate it!
Your story is engaging and the dailogs captivating. Great job!
Author's Response: I appreciate the review. I hope you continue to read on!
That was an unexpected twist. Does Jean stand a chance? Will he teach Frederick that a muggle can stand his man, too?
This is getting scarier and scarier. Are we now going to learn how out of the leaky bucket became a whole, but still leaky, cauldron?
The que has opened up a while ago already, but we are still waiting for your next update... snif snif.
Gripping story, please update!
Author's Response: I am pulling up the next chapter now. I lost the entire story when my computer crashed and it has been a little difficult. I'm so sorry for the long wait and will try to get the next chapter in the queue no later than tomorrow!
Seventh grader Alexandra Quick returns to Charmbridge Academy. This year she faces bullies from another wizarding school, a secret Dark Arts club, and the machinations of her father, but her greatest trial yet awaits her in the dangerous Lands Below.
This is the second book in the Alexandra Quick series.
“Just how clueless were you, really, about what the Generous Ones wanted, about what you'd have to trade?” she demanded.
Her father rose to his feet, and his expression became a scowl. “Generous ones? I don't understand you.”
“Maybe you knew that someone had to die to get what you wanted,” she went on. “You're the one who knows so much about how terrible the Confederation is and how it makes deals –”
“Alexandra, you're making no sense!” he snapped.
So Abraham Thorn was clueless about the Lands Below?
Anyway, barely two chapters after AT started becoming more likeable, when we discovered he had pushed for the Elf Protection Act, he is becoming less likeable once again.
Is Max really gone? Poor Alexandra. Is there no way to still rescue him?
This is dark, dark, dark. Is Maximilian really gone? Or is this ALexandra's nightmare?
Your books are masterpieces. I already posted one review where I pointed out how you expand magical theory, providing answers to some of the things J.K Rowlings left open.
* how do spells formulas work? While we still don't know why, we have seen how spells don't need to be in Latin, and that spontaneous spells also work (dogerell verse. Both points from book I)
* How did house elf enslavement happen
* why do children travel to Hogwarts with a train. Portkeys may be tricky to create, and are regulated, as we see in the beginning of HP GoF (the ministry prepared them) and at the end of OOtP (Fudge is furious when DD makes a portkey for Harry) When you say they are expensive, you tie in to that and answer the Hogwarts Express question for those who missed the above two HP references. But boy, does the Confederation clamp down on portkeys; sounds like "1984."
The last scene, with Quimle, is masterful. Now Alexandra is going to wonder whether by coming along she prevented her brother from escaping the Generous Ones. May be Quimle is in cahoots with Abraham Thorn? Then again, he didn't seem to know what the Generous Ones were.
Will we get to glimpse into the Lands Beyond (without anyone dying) by book 7? Before that?
Thank you for these marvelous books. And by the way, you should consult with a copyright lawyer; your stories seem original enough that they might be publishes without infringing on JKR's copyright. But, IANAL.