I don't know exactly what to say about myself. Let's see... I am a grandmother of 8, 5 girls and 3 boys. I am in my 40's and obsessed with Harry Potter. I get very upset when someone says the books are just for kids. I live in the USA, but I would love to live in Harry's world.
I constantly have plot bunnies or stories running through my mind. I often find myself at work wishing for paper and a pen to jot down things I think of for my WIPs or for new stories.
I have several WIPs and lots of plot bunnies to work on, so keep checking for new stories from me.
I am a moderater of the Marauder Era category. I am also an admin on this site and the forums. I manage several of the sections on the Beta Forums and I am the Hufflepuff Head of House. I am also a Professor on the Beta Boards.
I am known in the Hufflepuff house and around the board as the Canon Queen. I am quick to find canon errors in stories, so if you are submitting especially to Marauder Era, make sure of your canon facts.
My first thought upon reading this story was, [I]'No. he was thinking of the night Ariana was killed.'[/I]. If I had read this before reading DH, then that would not have been in my mind. So, I reread it, and thought of the possibility he wasn't thinking of that night.
I will admit to having an issue at first with the characterization of Dumbledore as helpless and not fighting back. Then I read between the lines and realised, this was Dumbledore's worst fear coming to light. His worst fear of not being able to save the ones he loves. It is also a portrayal of his guilt. He feels incredibly guilty at not being able to protect those he loves. Of not being able to prevent the deaths that to this point had already happened and knowing he would soon be dead himself, not being there to prevent the deaths he knew were sure to come.
He also feels the guilt of knowing in the end, Harry must die to save the Wizarding world from Voldemort.
I believe this story conveyed Dumbledore's fears and guilt very convincingly. It showed exactly what the potion he was drinking was doing to him. By including the exact lines from HBP, the reader was able to be in both stories at the same time. It was done effortlessly, or so it seemed. The combining of both stories, made this one seem more real.
The writing was incredible in that it drew you in right from the start. The description was subtle enough that you didn't feel overwhelmed by it, but strong enough that you felt every emotion the characters were feeling.
The shorter paragraphs kept the story moving at a very quick pace. Which in this story is the rate you want the story to read. You need to read this story at a fast pace to get the full effect of it happening as quickly as the scene in the book was done.
Overall, this story makes you wonder just what Dumbledore experienced in those moments. Could my perception and Harry's that he experienced the night of Ariana's death be faulty?
I just finished your story. First off, I have to say while I am thrilled with the happy ending, I didn't want the story to end. I have enjoyed reading each and every chapter. You are a wonderful writer. I was very glad to see you stick to canon, as I am very strict on canon issues myself.
I will check out the other version of the fic. I just wanted you to know how much I have enjoyed reading your story. I waited impatiently for each update. As soon as I got the email of the update, I would stop whatever I was doing to read it. I am sad that there won't be anymore updates to this fic to look forward to. Perhaps, you could write a sequel with both Professor Lupin's teaching at the same time? I know it's probably not what you are planning to write next, but maybe a plot bunny will form and I will get another fix of this wonderful story. LOL
Thanks for the great read and a satisfying change to the deaths in DH.
I can't wait to read more. Both chapters are very well written. Though I will admit to having to look up the word, hectically. I can't wait to see where this is going. I also can't wait to see why she has the hostility against Harry. After all, he was close to Remus, so couldn't he be looked on as an ally?
As I said, great piece. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: I promise next chapter you will know where this is going.(: And she wasn\'t hostile towards Harry; she was hostile to the newspaper, and how they talked about Harry\'s problems rather than hers. Thank you! I\'m glad to hear they were well written. -big smile-
I am at a loss as to what to say. The way you perfectly proceeded each character with the perfect wording. I hope that makes sense, I know what I mean in my head.
It was a wonderful story. Great writing. Just the right pull on the heartstrings.
Author's Response: Thanks Terri! I\'d like to think it was good.
I happened to stumble across a post you made and was intrigued by the banner in your signature for this story.
I am so glad I clicked on it. This story was wonderfully written. It shows James as more than a Marauder, it shows him as a father. I submitted a one-shot yesterday that deals with Harry's first birthday. I enjoyed reading your take on James as a father and his reaction to being in hiding.
I noticed only one thing. Healer should be capitalized in the paragraph about Lily feeling more comfortable at the hospital. Other than that, I didn't notice anything.
Thank you for an enjoyable read.
Author's Response: Oh, yay! Banner advertisement does work. :) I\'m so glad you clicked on it, too and that you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for taking the time to let me know and for that capitalization error notice. I\'ll fix that right away. Your one shot sounds like something I need to put on my to read list. :) There just don\'t seem to be that many stories focusing on that part of James\' life. *makes note* Thank you again, Terri.
Charity Burbage never considered herself a strong or brave person. That is until she met Jack. Jack gave her fire and soul. He encouraged her to stand up for what she believed in. But when a tragedy strikes, Charity’s world is turned upside down. Should she take the easy way out or continue to fight for what’s right?
I am MerryD, proud Hufflepuff.
Mere, I have only one thing I can say, Wow. The emotions you captured were so real. And, I am speaking from personal experience. I have gone through this myself, and that is just what it was like. I completely understood the physical pain of the cut on her finger being the something that was real and made her feel alive.
Okay, just one thing that confused me. The letter from Professor Dumbledore said one month, but you say in the next part it had been one year since he died. If after a year she is this emotional still, how did she work before that? If she didn't then I think that needs to be explained a bit better.
I also thought the letter from Professor Dumbledore is a bit too short.
Overall, it is a very wonderful and emotional pace even if it did bring back a ton of memories for me.
Author's Response: Terri! -huggles- Oh, I feel bad that it brought back memories. -big hugs- I\'m sorry that you\'ve gone through something like that in RL. -hits head on desk- You know, I didn\'t even notice the month/year thing. -goes to fix that- I guess I just thought of Dumbledore\'s letter as a reminder... plus, I didn\'t know what else he would say... And he has written shorter letters before. Thanks so much for reviewing! -hugs- xo -Mere
Five hundred twenty-five thousand six hundred minutes
Every student plans on making their final year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry the most memorable one ever. Eight in particular want to make those minutes really count. Except, they each have a different idea of how to go about doing it.
James Potter would like to waltz into Lily Evans’s life and throw it completely off course. Julie McGuire didn’t exactly plan on rescuing Remus Lupin, but now that she has, why not just go with it? Marlene McKinnon should have know what she got herself into when she kissed Sirius Black the first time, but that boy has a way of knocking her senseless. Emmeline Vance had planned to just sit back and watch it all happen, until Roxanna Louchester, her ex-friend, barged in and turned everything upside down.
Suddenly they’ve gone from only wanting the most memorable year, to achieving it. It’s a year of love and lust. It’s a year of tears and fights. It’s a year of finding yourself. It’s a year of learning to lose. It’s a year that none of them are likely to forget.
When I saw your post in the Bar that this had been validated, I had to read it. I like the little changes you made from when I read it before. The pace and flow are just perfect. The story is going to be a good one. Poor Remus. Everyone is asking where Sirius is, so I won't ask, but where is Peter? And just where did James rush off to? I know, I know, wait and see.
I think you are a very talented writer and I am so happy for you that this is now validated and here for everyone to read. I can't wait to read more, *clicks favorite button*.
Author's Response: -huggles- Thanks so much for reviewing! I\'m glad you like it. :D Sirius, Peter, and James will all be there later. I promise. lol. It\'s funny, no one really cares about James or Peter. Everyone just asks about Sirius. haha. Aww, thank you so much. I\'m happy this is validated now too. :D Thanks for the favorite. -squishes- xo Mere
Wonderful story. I like the way you handled the rift between Remus and Sirius. Makes me wonder if this was the start of the mistrust between them.
Your writing takes the reader right into the scene. You have a way with describing things so that I could actually see them in my head.
I only found a few typos.
Finally, the door came in sight, and sop did Snape, who was cautiously pulling it open.
I think it should read, and so did Snape
Glancing hastily at Sirius, and seeing that he looked just as worried, Remushe reluctantly picked up his books and cauldron and moved into the vacant seat.
I believe it should read Remus reluctantly...
Today, class, we will be learning how to brew the Draught of the Living Dead,’
I believe the canon name is Draught of Living Death.
Great story as I said, I really enjoyed this little snippet into the Marauders.
Author's Response: *headdesk* Hehe, I do have excuses though! I had it as the Draught of Living Death but betas make mistakes sometimes. Though I still love them. *squishes El and Nikki* Remushe? XD I forgot to edit out the \'he.\' Ah, wow. I really appreciate the time you took with this review. It was so thoughtful and nice of you to point out my mistakes. =D Thanks, dear.
Will Remus accept the offer to teach at Hogwarts? And if yes, how is he going to prepare himself?
I am luinrina of Hufflepuff, and this is my submission to the Educational Decree prompt of the Summer Challenge.
I had to leave a review for you even though I have read this already. I think it is a wonderful story and shows Remus' anxiety about going back to Hogwarts very well. You are a talented writer and it has been a pleasure to beta this for you.
I did notice a couple things that I can't believe I missed.
Would Dumbledore accept his refusal? he wondered. Probably not. So he better got prepared when he still had the time to do so.
when should be while
Remus grinned at Dumbledore’s persistence – he knew that the older man would never give up –, so he went to retrieve the message.
there is a wayward comma after the dash. It shouldn't be there.
Once again, wonderful story.
Author's Response: Hiya, Terri! Thanks for reviewing also you already knew this story. And it was a pleasure working with you. Thanks for complimenting my writing. And the mistakes... hehe, it can happen. It\'s just tiny things that went missing in the amount that was corrected. So in my opinion nothing to worry about. You\'re still an awesome beta. Thanks! *hands out Butterbeer*
Congrats on getting this validated. I am so happy for you. This is a wonderful story, with a nice insight as to Molly and Arthur's emotions after Fred died. It is beautifully written. It was a pleasure to beta this for you.
Author's Response: Terri!!! Oh thank you for the wonderful review! I'm so glad that you like it! And thank you, once again, for beta'ing this for me. =) Thanks for the review! ~MJ
I can't wait to read what happens when Draco tries his hand at the map.
I liked hearing Lily's voice, (It was Lily, right?).
One little thing I noticed was the way you phrased some of the written words, there should have been quote marks. Wormtail and Lily at the end. The others were phrased in such a way as not to need them. But, that is just my opinion.
Great story, I really enjoyed reading it. Going to click on favorites in case I miss the bar announcement when the next chapter is up.
Author's Response: Terri! Well, you'll find out as soon as the second chapter is accepted! Yep, you're right, it was Lily- look out for more Dun-Bar's appearances in future chapters! Yeah, you're right about the quotation marks, I'll change that immediately. Thanks for the review! ~BB
I know I have read this chapter being your beta, but I had to read it up. I still hate the cliff. LOL You captured my attention the first time I read this. You showed enough to make me want more.
Two little things, both formatting stuff. The letter. I think it would be better if you took it out of the center and italicized it. Also, about half way through, there is a really long paragraph that would probably be an easier read if it were split into two.
One more thing, I love the way you captured George at the end. Great job.
I don't normally read poetry, but when I saw the name of our lovely HoH, I couldn't resist. What can I say? Though it was short, right from the beginning you invoked the feelings of despair and heartbreak. I could feel my heart breaking for the unknown person watching her or his love walk out the door. Great job, hon. I enjoyed reading this. Terri
What can I say? Wonderful. Just wonderful. You managed to incorporate the prompts in so seamlessly, I can't even pick them out. And best of all, you kept completely to canon. Well done!
She and Remus had been so intent on remembering their Sirius that they’d forgotten about Sirius-the-Godfather.
This is where the tears first started.
That chair was for Sirius.
And this is where they started falling.
I love the Twins. You did a great job capturing their manner of speaking and joking.
I did not expect Snape to make an appearance. I wasn't expecting him to be at the Shrieking Shack with her. You made it work perfectly. I love the little nudge to Apparently Asleep I am glad to know I am not the only one who puts little bits of other stories into a new one.
Once again, well done. Even though I was not your beta for this, I am still proud of the work you did and the way it turned out. Great job.
Author's Response: Awwwww, thanks Terri.
Glad (but also sorry) I made you cry. I cried a bit too especially when they were at the Order meeting together. *sob*. Snape came along for the ride because I needed a foil for Remus' concern when she was last injured. Then, when the black feathered quill appeared I was wondering who would use one. Who else but Severus Snape?
Great job on this. It is strange to read something of yours that I didn't beta. LOL
“Ta for the rose.” You know I love to hear the word Ta. Brings back so many memories of my grandparents.
I have only one tiniest of issues; Andromeda believing in Sirius' guilt. I always had the impression they were very close and she would have believed in him. Nothing in canon to back my theory up, so it is fine.
I was wondering though, how many of the prompts are in this chapter? You worked them in seamlessly.
Again, great work. I can't wait for the rest of this story.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Terri and glad you're enjoying it. I used three prompts in this chapter *hastily counts* - yes three. Regarding Andromeda, my feeling is that she wanted to protect her daughter and knew enough of the Black family legacy to think Sirius could be guilty. Hence the line "I know what the Black family are capable of." Also no one, not even Dumbledore or Remus, believed he was innocent.
Wow, is about all I can say. Wait, let me brush the tears away so I can type. Wonderful job. You had me crying and laughing. The memory was so touching. I could see Sirius scooping up a little three year old and swinging her around.
Okay a couple tiny nitpicks. Couldn't turn the beta off even through my tears.
In your summary for this chapter, you wrote eveing instead of evening. You missed the n.
You forgot the e on Hogsmeade.
I also think instead of private tuition, it should be private tutoring.
“Pear drops,” she said to the stone gargoyle that let her pass.
This is worded awkwardly. Perhaps, she said to the stone gargoyle so it would let her pass.
Needn’t call me ‘sir’ anymore, should be You needn't call me sir
Other than those few things, it was perfect. You are really doing well with Tonks and her character.
Author's Response: Wotcher Terri,
Okay I agree with all your nit-picks except the tutoring one. Tuition's more British (heh heh.) I'm glad you're enjoying it. It's odd submitting something that you haven't read before. Thank-you for reviewing.
I'm not quite sure what to say about this. I think if I were the one who was singing it....
Great work, honey, truly enjoyable. And the images it invokes... LOL
Author's Response: But it's me singing it, Terri...frequently!
I know I told you what I thought of this when I beta'd it, but I just couldn't resist telling you again how much I do love this story.
I did notice a couple things. First, “Diffindio!”he said There should be a space after the quotation mark. Second, why I shouldn’t shop you now?” This may be one of those pesky British phrases, but should it be shop or shoot? Shoot makes more sense to me. I can't believe I didn't question it when I beta'd this. LOL
And finally, I would like to tell you my favourite line of this chapter, “Merlin,” he muttered to himself. “They never used to threaten me with guns. I must have lost my touch.” I can see my one true love actually thinking this. It is so Sirius.
Great work as always.
Author's Response: Ah, thanks Terri. No, I meant'shop'. It means to turn someone in, um 'rat' on someone, I guess in your USA slang. I'm glad you liked that line, I had fun writing it.
I shall fix that line as soon as poss.
I do like when I don't beta a story for you and read it for the first time in the archives. Okay, well, in one way I like it because I can leave a review for you. I don't like not knowing what you have written before they are in the archives.
First, nicknames... The timeline of this story, the things Harry brought up would have thrown both of them right back into being Marauders. I am sure when Harry let loose on them, both of them felt like they were 'naughty' teenagers again. Remus embarrassed because he didn't stop James and Sirius, Sirius embarrassed because his godson saw something that put him in a bad light. Then both of them embarrassed for James who couldn't defend himself.
Harry bringing this to light gave them a chance to talk about some things both of them probably did their best to forget about. Who doesn’t have one or two things they did when they are younger that they now regret, and embarrassed by? Talking about these things is not something someone does easily and Harry in a way forced them to talk about it.
This talking naturally lead to talk about Peter. Their use of nicknames seemed natural to me. They were reliving a time when they were happy and carefree and their nicknames are a natural part of that.
Now, I do have one major problem with this story... I want more. I think this conversation would have gotten much more interesting now that Tonks was brought into it. I can just hear Sirius telling Remus he was an idiot and fighting for him to give Tonks a chance. So, please, I am officially begging for more.
Great work on this story. You carried off the restriction of dialogue only very well. I could see Sirius trying to storm out just from Remus’ words.
Author's Response: Thank you Terri, I really appreciate your review for this story- especially as your prompt made me write it in the first place (all those months ago). I'm glad you understood why they'd start talking about the past having just been visited by a boy who looks so much like their still very much missed friend. Yes, about time they talked about that incident, I think it's been kept locked away for far too long. Thanks again. ~Carole~
Okay, let us see, what can I say about my favourite Marauder entertaining thoughts of his best-friend's girl?
Great work. This story is beautifully written and quite entertaining. It is also, quite plausible that Sirius would hold a special place in his heart for Lily.
I think, though, you need to write a sequel and have Rosemerta get her "hooks" into Sirius for a bit. That would be interesting. Perhaps some Firewhisky charmed with a potion to loosen up Sirius' resolve? Hmmm, could be interesting. hehehehe
Author's Response: I don't think Sirius would need much potion to loosen his resolve - ha ha. Oh, and now you and Thea are turning this weeny little cute bunny into something monstrous - heh heh - I can't wait. Thanks for the review ~Carole~