Thanks so much for writing these-- your writing is wonderful, and the convincing way you write the growing relationship between these two while keeping them in character is beautiful. I hope you keep writing your alternate world of what happens to SS despite JKR's different take in The Deathly Hallows-- personally, I'm glad I read your version later, because I would prefer to think that this is how it really went. Plus, it leaves things open for more stories-- like the one about Lillian-- as opposed to the finality of what happened in DH. I don't see Harry as quite this unredeemable in his hatred for Severus, though, any more than the other way around-- maybe the two might reach some sort of grudging tolerance because of Arthur being in Gryffindor? Arthur seems like the type to bring that about, cluelessly or otherwise. An idea anyway. I like the interesting plot twist of having Harry, as head of house, responsible for a child who will always remind him of the man who was his enemy and who wound up with the girl he loved-- just like Severus had to watch over Harry all those years before. Very clever! Thank you again.
MAJOR SPOILERS A post-DH Fred and George fic.
It's been one year since the war ended and Weasleys' Wizard Wheezes is still going strong. That is, until Angelina shows up with news that her new boss is being blackmailed. Next thing, a mysterious package arrives on the doorstep, there's a spate of inexplicable burglaries in Diagon Alley, and an old friend appears to have come back from the dead…
It is a rare and enjoyable thing to read an actual mystery on MNFF, and this one is really well-done. Your Fred and George interactions are also really believable, as is your writing of George in the first post-Fred year of his life, which really takes some imagination after seeing him as happy-go-lucky and constantly paired with his twin for so long. Great story.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Thank you to all of you who've reviewed and I haven't responded yet, actually. Sorry I've been so slow updating, I hope you're all still enjoying it ;o)
I'm really enjoying reading this from Neville's point of view, and I like how you're actually keeping him Neville. He's very much in character. Also, turning the familiar plot-line into a slightly different one with similar episodes makes it enjoyable to read-- I want to keep reading to see what happens next to the story I already know. :)
Author's Response: Thanks! The whole story is really about placing Neville into the familiar situations and seeing how he reacts in a Neville-like way. Great that you\'re enjoying that. We\'re gearing up for the climax now - the next chapter is called \'Under the Willow\', with a slight surprise at the end.
He's at HOGWARTS? Definite cliff-hanger. :) I love the mystery you have going in this story, by the way-- lots of twists and turns, and a really evocative description of the future under Voldemort.
Author's Response: Hehe, yes, he is at Hogwarts. You will get to see a bit more of him later too =) I am thrilled you are enjoying this, and like all the plot twists...there are a few more of those to come.
I'm so glad you've updated this-- it's such a great story. I can't tell at all where it's going, and it has me on the edge of my seat. And the characterization is spot-on-- you really capture Harry at that stage of development, and Snape-- and it's interesting to think of Tonks in a more significant role than we ever saw in the original books. This chapter really earned the "dark/ angsty" designation, by the way.
Author's Response: I do try to update this as often as I can. The first 20-odd chapters are written, but in need of some serious polishing in places, which is harder to do than I first thought it would be. Tonks was never meant to have such a large role, but she kind of grew into it, and now I rather enjoy writing her. Hehe, and this isn't the darkest of chapters by far. Thank you again for taking the time to review - I do love to read your comments.
OK, what DON'T I like about this? :) The plot is intricate and a real page-turner, so to speak, and you have the characters of Harry and Professor Snape down perfectly rather than turning them into stereotypes or something melodramatic. You have me on the edge of my seat about what's going to happen to Harry next and what changes he's going to see in this version of the future-- and who he's going to meet. Definitely looking forward to the next installation. :)
Author's Response: Wow, this is such a lovely review! I am so flattered you like this so much. I am especially happy to hear your comments on Snape and Harry. I really hope you continue to enjoy, reading your reviews makes my day ^^
Just read your second chapter-- it's very funny, but even after reading the first one for the second time, I'm in tears laughing at it. :) I love how you really build up the mood, with terrific language and imagery, and just as the reader is prepared for some more angst and drama, the great Voldemort gets run over by a cement mixer. I think the part at which I totally lost it was when Ben steps out of the vehicle, throws down the company hat (nice touch) and says something completely mundane. :)
Author's Response: I’d write a very long author’s response for this review, but frankly, you’ve already said what needs to be said. At any rate, I’m happy that you enjoyed this rather mad but eloquent (?) story of mine, and even happier that you took the time out of your busy day to leave a review. Thank you.
You’ve probably noticed that I had a lot of fun writing this story…
By the way, I considered making Ben’s “completely mundane” exclamation the 1st chapter’s title, but that wasn’t possible for obvious reasons!
Tim the Enchanter
In addition to the fact that this is laugh-out-loud hilarious, I love how you really have the characters down. The things they say and their reactions and their behaviors are exactly like what they would do in the books-- I can totally picture this happening. :) Thanks for a very fun read-- I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Keeping the characters true is the hardest part, and I appreciate the feedback. I hope to have the next chapter in the queue as soon as the mods reopen it! Thank you again for taking time to review. As you can see, I respond to everyone! <3
I already reviewed this (and I love it-- so funny) but something just occurred to me-- the lovely Ron & Lavender duo occurs in 6th year. Professor Snape teaches Defense Against the Dark Arts that year (finally) rather than Potions. Just a thought.
Author's Response: In this story, Ron and Lav are no longer an item... and I thought it was much more hilarious to write it soon after they\'d split. You\'ve got a good eye!
What a great idea for a story! :) I never quite buy the ones where Hermione is a student and he's a teacher, but making them peers is a very interesting twist. Looking forward to reading more of it.
Author's Response: Snarkyroxy\'s Before the Dawn (which can be found on Ashwinder and Owl) and Dyce\'s Accountable (which can be found on fanfiction.net) are two incredible student/teacher fics that deal very believably with the issues and are marvelous stories in their own right. But while I\'ve found a couple of good fics that take HG/SS from that angle, it\'s not one that has hooked my muse. It certainly is fraught with hurdles for an author to overcome - but then, timetravel\'s no better! *g*
Where to start-- interesting OC with a great history, and I love the parallels and the divergences from _The Great Gatsby._ I'm glad it's not just a one-shot. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for your review and kind words! The first proper chapter is up now, in case you might be interested. ;)
Emrys is such a great OC and drawn in such detail, and this really alters my perception of how Draco would wind up. I love all the literary references-- and how appropriate that a medievalist would marry a wizard. Great read. :)
Author's Response: Thank you. I\'ve always thought that Draco deserved a little better than he got, and he did seem to grow up nicely. And as for Elaine, she\'s been bouncing around my head for a while now as a wicked little thought saying \"what if?\"
There are so many James & Lily stories out there, but I don't think I've seen one yet from one of Lily's friends as a middle-aged mom-- it's always either from Lily or from the boys from that year (Remus, Sirius, Severus), at least two of whom could really be argued to have never moved on much past the era of the First War because, perhaps, they lost so much. Someone who lived a regular life (not in Azkaban or waiting at Hogwarts for revenge and atonement) and who has raised at least one child of her own for nearly two decades should have a different perspective. This should be very interesting! :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review! I agree- characters like Sirius and Severus have not moved past old rivalries and conflicts, and they\'re likely to have a biased, somewhat one-sided view on the matters. Though, the story itself aren\'t going to be only what Stella\'s telling him in her words as an adult, but all of her experiences from that time period, though she\'ll probably only directly tell Harry the things that pertain to his parents. Wow, that was a terrible sentence >.>Hopefully, the story will live up to your expectations!
As before, this is very interesting, and I love the historical twists to it. This seems to be a time in the Wizarding past that doesn't get much attention in fan-fiction (in my limited experience thereof), and you do a great job creating the scenes and fleshing out the characters.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I appreciate it.
Very interesting to see an intersection between the Wizarding world and the Muggle world during WWII, rather than just parallels. And your writing is highly evocative and calls up the scene so well. Great OC's, also.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. There will be more OC\'s in the story. Let me know what you think of them.
This is really well-written, but it just seems extremely out-of-character for Lily in every respect. Your writing is great, but I just don't believe the underlying premise at all-- Lily comes off in the books as someone with a great deal of character and backbone, and sneaking around having a tempestuous affair and then having an abortion to cover it seem utterly OOC.
I loved the fairy-tale quality of it, which fits with the degree of the canon Severus's devotion to Lily. I'm writing a longish chaptered AU fic which ends in these two winding up together-- and the lengthy process it takes to get there-- and it's fun to read something at the other end of the tunnel.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I\'m glad you liked it. This is a sort of at the end of the tunnel for my friend El\'s WIP too.=Sammy
That is beautiful and, quite honestly, probably much more in keeping with their respective characters than what happened in DH. Brilliant references to other parts of "The Prince's Tale." I'm trying to rewrite the ending of this argument the long way, but I love the quick save on his part here. And thank you.
This is beautifully written and philosophical about the meaning of time travel and the nature of self, which gives it an interesting spin. The meeting of the two at different ages is an almost chilling thought when you consider what the younger doesn't know and what the elder has to go through, and I like how you keep dropping hints about the mysterious sender of Kreacher.
Quick question-- is she planning on making an antidote to Nagini's poison to save Snape? Because I was fairly sure that he dies from loss of blood. I think Nagini bites him in the neck for a reason-- based on DH, it sounds like he's bleeding out from the carotid arteries, which would not only be massive blood loss, but also would cut off the blood supply to the brain. Not to mention that someone that smart and good at potions would probably have had the good sense to keep an antidote around. Sorry to be so Muggle and pedestrian about it, but I think he needs a blood replenishment potion or something of that ilk. Other than that... Viva Snape, and this should be interesting. :)
Author's Response: :) She does give him a Blood Replenishing Potion. However, if you remember, Nagini\'s bite (and essentially her venom) stopped Mr. Weasley\'s wounds from closing up, so before any Blood Replenishing Potion could be administered, Rose would have to have an antidote for the poison. Next chapter explains it all, and it is already in the queue.