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A Different Sort of Peace by Vindictus Viridian

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: At some point there had to have been a choice.

The logical place to begin a story is at the point of the first decision. But what if there were no decisions? What if, at every point, there was only one possible act? What if the story simply cannot be told?

Completed (though not posted) entirely pre-DH.
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 01/19/08 Title: Chapter 27: Epilogue

Thanks so much for writing these-- your writing is wonderful, and the convincing way you write the growing relationship between these two while keeping them in character is beautiful. I hope you keep writing your alternate world of what happens to SS despite JKR's different take in The Deathly Hallows-- personally, I'm glad I read your version later, because I would prefer to think that this is how it really went. Plus, it leaves things open for more stories-- like the one about Lillian-- as opposed to the finality of what happened in DH. I don't see Harry as quite this unredeemable in his hatred for Severus, though, any more than the other way around-- maybe the two might reach some sort of grudging tolerance because of Arthur being in Gryffindor? Arthur seems like the type to bring that about, cluelessly or otherwise. An idea anyway. I like the interesting plot twist of having Harry, as head of house, responsible for a child who will always remind him of the man who was his enemy and who wound up with the girl he loved-- just like Severus had to watch over Harry all those years before. Very clever! Thank you again.

Weasley & Weasley (Deceased) by LuckyRatTail

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •

MAJOR SPOILERS A post-DH Fred and George fic.

It's been one year since the war ended and Weasleys' Wizard Wheezes is still going strong. That is, until Angelina shows up with news that her new boss is being blackmailed. Next thing, a mysterious package arrives on the doorstep, there's a spate of inexplicable burglaries in Diagon Alley, and an old friend appears to have come back from the dead…

Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 05/08/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

It is a rare and enjoyable thing to read an actual mystery on MNFF, and this one is really well-done. Your Fred and George interactions are also really believable, as is your writing of George in the first post-Fred year of his life, which really takes some imagination after seeing him as happy-go-lucky and constantly paired with his twin for so long. Great story.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! Thank you to all of you who've reviewed and I haven't responded yet, actually. Sorry I've been so slow updating, I hope you're all still enjoying it ;o)

Neville Longbottom and the Prisoner of Azkaban by Sonorus

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Dangerous werewolf Remus Lupin has escaped from Azkaban prison...

In the third instalment of the Neville Longbottom saga, the Boy-Who-Lived must face his greatest fears and come face to face with his own past and the past of those around him.

With a mysterious escaped criminal, a surprising Defence Against the Dark Arts professor and intrigue at every turn, many revelations are made and secrets revealed. How will Neville react to the changes to his world and the discoveries he makes? This is Year Three...
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 04/13/08 Title: Chapter 9: Trials and Troubles

I'm really enjoying reading this from Neville's point of view, and I like how you're actually keeping him Neville. He's very much in character. Also, turning the familiar plot-line into a slightly different one with similar episodes makes it enjoyable to read-- I want to keep reading to see what happens next to the story I already know. :)

Author's Response: Thanks! The whole story is really about placing Neville into the familiar situations and seeing how he reacts in a Neville-like way. Great that you\'re enjoying that. We\'re gearing up for the climax now - the next chapter is called \'Under the Willow\', with a slight surprise at the end.

An Issue Of Trust by Sirenny

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: It is said that to be forewarned is to be forearmed. But sometimes, even with the knowledge of what is to come, the destination will always be the same - no matter the difference in the path travelled. Waking up one morning Harry finds his familiar surroundings eerily altered. Sent to a dark future shaped under the rule of Voldemort, in which all knowledge of his existence has been forgotten, Harry is forced to rely on one of the few people who remembers his name: Severus Snape. 6th Year AU. Nominated for best Dark/Angst story in the 2008 QSQ.
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 05/15/08 Title: Chapter 6: Only Three

He's at HOGWARTS? Definite cliff-hanger. :) I love the mystery you have going in this story, by the way-- lots of twists and turns, and a really evocative description of the future under Voldemort.

Author's Response: Hehe, yes, he is at Hogwarts. You will get to see a bit more of him later too =) I am thrilled you are enjoying this, and like all the plot twists...there are a few more of those to come.

Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 12/03/08 Title: Chapter 10: I Want To Go Home

I'm so glad you've updated this-- it's such a great story. I can't tell at all where it's going, and it has me on the edge of my seat. And the characterization is spot-on-- you really capture Harry at that stage of development, and Snape-- and it's interesting to think of Tonks in a more significant role than we ever saw in the original books. This chapter really earned the "dark/ angsty" designation, by the way.

Author's Response: I do try to update this as often as I can. The first 20-odd chapters are written, but in need of some serious polishing in places, which is harder to do than I first thought it would be. Tonks was never meant to have such a large role, but she kind of grew into it, and now I rather enjoy writing her. Hehe, and this isn't the darkest of chapters by far. Thank you again for taking the time to review - I do love to read your comments.

Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 04/16/08 Title: Chapter 5: An Explanation

OK, what DON'T I like about this? :) The plot is intricate and a real page-turner, so to speak, and you have the characters of Harry and Professor Snape down perfectly rather than turning them into stereotypes or something melodramatic. You have me on the edge of my seat about what's going to happen to Harry next and what changes he's going to see in this version of the future-- and who he's going to meet. Definitely looking forward to the next installation. :)

Author's Response: Wow, this is such a lovely review! I am so flattered you like this so much. I am especially happy to hear your comments on Snape and Harry. I really hope you continue to enjoy, reading your reviews makes my day ^^

Out of the Darkness by Tim the Enchanter

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: The war against Voldemort is not going well. The Ministry of Magic has fallen and the Order of the Phoenix is scattered. Harry Potter and his friends are ruthlessly hunted by Voldemort and his Death Eaters. There is no end in sight for our heroes…



Nominated for QSQ 2008 Best Humour Story!
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 02/18/08 Title: Chapter 1: Out of the Darkness...

Just read your second chapter-- it's very funny, but even after reading the first one for the second time, I'm in tears laughing at it. :) I love how you really build up the mood, with terrific language and imagery, and just as the reader is prepared for some more angst and drama, the great Voldemort gets run over by a cement mixer. I think the part at which I totally lost it was when Ben steps out of the vehicle, throws down the company hat (nice touch) and says something completely mundane. :)

Author's Response: I’d write a very long author’s response for this review, but frankly, you’ve already said what needs to be said. At any rate, I’m happy that you enjoyed this rather mad but eloquent (?) story of mine, and even happier that you took the time out of your busy day to leave a review. Thank you.

You’ve probably noticed that I had a lot of fun writing this story…

By the way, I considered making Ben’s “completely mundane” exclamation the 1st chapter’s title, but that wasn’t possible for obvious reasons!

Tim the Enchanter

Luna's Truth or Dare by Hutchinson

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: What happens when Luna challenges her friends to a game of Truth or Dare?
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 02/18/08 Title: Chapter 2: Boxers and Beans

In addition to the fact that this is laugh-out-loud hilarious, I love how you really have the characters down. The things they say and their reactions and their behaviors are exactly like what they would do in the books-- I can totally picture this happening. :) Thanks for a very fun read-- I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Keeping the characters true is the hardest part, and I appreciate the feedback. I hope to have the next chapter in the queue as soon as the mods reopen it! Thank you again for taking time to review. As you can see, I respond to everyone! <3

Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 02/20/08 Title: Chapter 2: Boxers and Beans

I already reviewed this (and I love it-- so funny) but something just occurred to me-- the lovely Ron & Lavender duo occurs in 6th year. Professor Snape teaches Defense Against the Dark Arts that year (finally) rather than Potions. Just a thought.

Author's Response: In this story, Ron and Lav are no longer an item... and I thought it was much more hilarious to write it soon after they\'d split. You\'ve got a good eye!


Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 04/11/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

What a great idea for a story! :) I never quite buy the ones where Hermione is a student and he's a teacher, but making them peers is a very interesting twist. Looking forward to reading more of it.

Author's Response: Snarkyroxy\'s Before the Dawn (which can be found on Ashwinder and Owl) and Dyce\'s Accountable (which can be found on fanfiction.net) are two incredible student/teacher fics that deal very believably with the issues and are marvelous stories in their own right. But while I\'ve found a couple of good fics that take HG/SS from that angle, it\'s not one that has hooked my muse. It certainly is fraught with hurdles for an author to overcome - but then, timetravel\'s no better! *g*

The Magnificent Malfoy by Fantasium

Rated: Professors •
Some said he had been a Death Eater, others that he had fought bravely for the Ministry during the war. Nearly everyone took advantage of his fabulous hospitality. And fabulous it was; in his superb Wiltshire home he gave the most amazing parties, and not the least remarkable thing about them was that few people could recognise their host. He seemed to be a man without a background, without history, whose eyes were always searching the glittering crowds for something… or someone?

Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 05/02/08 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue - Liam

Where to start-- interesting OC with a great history, and I love the parallels and the divergences from _The Great Gatsby._ I'm glad it's not just a one-shot. :)

Author's Response: Thanks for your review and kind words! The first proper chapter is up now, in case you might be interested. ;)

With a Little Help from my Friends by coppercurls

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: I don’t really know how to start this. I certainly never anticipated all the events and troubles that would come from me being in the wrong place at the wrong time (or maybe it was the right place at the right time?) Those events just seemed to keep galloping down so fast that there was never any time to pause, never any time to breathe.

I suppose since you've heard the news, you think you know what happened, that I turned out just like my no-good-Death-Eater-Dad, which shows that you really don't know the true story at all. So I'll tell you what really happened when Draco Malfoy's son went to Hogwarts and accidentally broke just about every rule in the book, and one or two they never thought necessary to write down.
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 05/12/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: What would you do if I sang out of tune

Emrys is such a great OC and drawn in such detail, and this really alters my perception of how Draco would wind up. I love all the literary references-- and how appropriate that a medievalist would marry a wizard. Great read. :)

Author's Response: Thank you. I\'ve always thought that Draco deserved a little better than he got, and he did seem to grow up nicely. And as for Elaine, she\'s been bouncing around my head for a while now as a wicked little thought saying \"what if?\"

The Start of an Era by Orchideous

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Stella Prewett has been waiting to attend Hogwarts for as long as she can remember. Her first year surpasses her expectations by far; in addition to dull lessons and tangled castle corridors, there are ill-behaved cousins, Qudditch tryouts, and, of course, the lovable James Potter and his mischievous friends.

Meanwhile, Lord Voldemort's threat to the peaceful Wizarding world has increased. Stella, as a member of a prominent pureblood family, must choose her loyalties with care.
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 05/15/08 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

There are so many James & Lily stories out there, but I don't think I've seen one yet from one of Lily's friends as a middle-aged mom-- it's always either from Lily or from the boys from that year (Remus, Sirius, Severus), at least two of whom could really be argued to have never moved on much past the era of the First War because, perhaps, they lost so much. Someone who lived a regular life (not in Azkaban or waiting at Hogwarts for revenge and atonement) and who has raised at least one child of her own for nearly two decades should have a different perspective. This should be very interesting! :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review! I agree- characters like Sirius and Severus have not moved past old rivalries and conflicts, and they\'re likely to have a biased, somewhat one-sided view on the matters. Though, the story itself aren\'t going to be only what Stella\'s telling him in her words as an adult, but all of her experiences from that time period, though she\'ll probably only directly tell Harry the things that pertain to his parents. Wow, that was a terrible sentence >.>Hopefully, the story will live up to your expectations!

The Traveler's Secret by eternalangel

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: It’s 1940 and Paris has just fallen to the Nazi Regime. The Muggle world is in turmoil, but little do the Muggles know that the Wizarding world is also at war. A weary traveler comes to England carrying a secret that will change both worlds for better or worse . He comes seeking protection and help from the adept Albus Dumbledore, a Professor at the famous Hogwarts school of Witchcraft and Wizardry. But there is more danger about than even Albus has anticipated. Can Dumbledore protect the traveler and his secret?
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 08/04/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Dark Times

As before, this is very interesting, and I love the historical twists to it. This seems to be a time in the Wizarding past that doesn't get much attention in fan-fiction (in my limited experience thereof), and you do a great job creating the scenes and fleshing out the characters.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I appreciate it.

Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 05/12/08 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 The Leaky Bucket

Very interesting to see an intersection between the Wizarding world and the Muggle world during WWII, rather than just parallels. And your writing is highly evocative and calls up the scene so well. Great OC's, also.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. There will be more OC\'s in the story. Let me know what you think of them.

Left Me As You Came by Jess

Rated: Professors •
Summary: Lily must make a life and death decision after her affair.
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 05/18/08 Title: Chapter 1: Left Me As You Came

This is really well-written, but it just seems extremely out-of-character for Lily in every respect. Your writing is great, but I just don't believe the underlying premise at all-- Lily comes off in the books as someone with a great deal of character and backbone, and sneaking around having a tempestuous affair and then having an abortion to cover it seem utterly OOC.

Good Night, Princess by MissyQuill

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Night time has once again taken its toll on a child who needs to hear a story before bed.

“I don’t want any of those books, Daddy. I want a real story. Please.”

“All right, what real story would you like?"

“I dunno, something with a prince and a princess in it.”

“Would a Half-Blood Prince suffice?”

I am MissyQuill of Gryffindor enterring the May One Shot Challange .
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 05/28/08 Title: Chapter 1: The Prince's Heart

I loved the fairy-tale quality of it, which fits with the degree of the canon Severus's devotion to Lily. I'm writing a longish chaptered AU fic which ends in these two winding up together-- and the lengthy process it takes to get there-- and it's fun to read something at the other end of the tunnel.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I\'m glad you liked it. This is a sort of at the end of the tunnel for my friend El\'s WIP too.=Sammy

Tendrils of Mist by MissyQuill, Elmindreda

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: "Just as well you never expected life to be fair, or you would have been in for one heck of a disappointment."

What good can possibly come out of meetings that could not be reasonably expected, guests that are less than welcome, and coincidences that are considerably less likely than a rational mind could estimate?.. Severus will have to find an answer to this question - and many more.

A Gauntlet entry written by MissyQuill and Elmindreda of Gryffindor. Awarded third place!

With lots of gratitude to Hannah, our wonderful guide! (On whose nerves we have been collectively getting throughout the whole duration of the Gauntlet...)
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 07/09/08 Title: Chapter 4: Epilogue - Unbroken Promises

That is beautiful and, quite honestly, probably much more in keeping with their respective characters than what happened in DH. Brilliant references to other parts of "The Prince's Tale." I'm trying to rewrite the ending of this argument the long way, but I love the quick save on his part here. And thank you.

Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 07/06/08 Title: Chapter 2: Unwelcome Guests

This is beautifully written and philosophical about the meaning of time travel and the nature of self, which gives it an interesting spin. The meeting of the two at different ages is an almost chilling thought when you consider what the younger doesn't know and what the elder has to go through, and I like how you keep dropping hints about the mysterious sender of Kreacher.

Seven Thousand Sunsets by FullofLife

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: When a fatal disease spreads like wildfire around the Wizarding World, it is up to Rose Weasley to find a cure - with the help of no other than Severus Snape. But working with a man she's fallen in love with is much harder than it sounds.

First Place in the Gauntlet's Sixth Run!
Reviewer: SeverusSempra Signed
Date: 07/08/08 Title: Chapter 1: Beginnings

Quick question-- is she planning on making an antidote to Nagini's poison to save Snape? Because I was fairly sure that he dies from loss of blood. I think Nagini bites him in the neck for a reason-- based on DH, it sounds like he's bleeding out from the carotid arteries, which would not only be massive blood loss, but also would cut off the blood supply to the brain. Not to mention that someone that smart and good at potions would probably have had the good sense to keep an antidote around. Sorry to be so Muggle and pedestrian about it, but I think he needs a blood replenishment potion or something of that ilk. Other than that... Viva Snape, and this should be interesting. :)

Author's Response: :) She does give him a Blood Replenishing Potion. However, if you remember, Nagini\'s bite (and essentially her venom) stopped Mr. Weasley\'s wounds from closing up, so before any Blood Replenishing Potion could be administered, Rose would have to have an antidote for the poison. Next chapter explains it all, and it is already in the queue.