Welcome to my author’s page!
My name is Alyssa, and as you can tell, I love Harry Potter and anything to do with it.
Currently I have a bunch of things that I am working on. Only some of them are up, and some of them are on their way. Not much longer till they will show up on my author’s page.
Currently, there are quite a few fics I have updates too that just haven't been updated yet. I promise, I'm working on getting them up here. I just have to get them betaed and ready for the queue. Then, as soon as they are, I shall submit them for your enjoyment. Hopefully you will be seeing something from me soon!
Okay, this story has me intrigued, mainly because I had never heard of something like this. So, kudos for an idea I havenâ€™t read before!
I think you have a good story going here. All of your characters are believable. And I actually started laughing in the beginning at the suggestion that they start a band. Even though it was in the summary, and I knew to expect it, it was just so out there and random but also believable. I didnâ€™t think that it would actually turn out to be a workable band, but was pleasantly surprised when it did in the story. I donâ€™t think they could ever not really work an idea out. They are the Marauders, after all.
I do wonder what on earth Lily was thinking when she joined the band. Did she do it to spit James? Did she do it because she might just like him? Or did she just do it because she felt bad that they didnâ€™t have a really good singer? I mean, she usually goes out of her way to ignore him, so why on earth would she then join the band that heâ€™s in. Iâ€™m interested to see if you answer this question at all in the upcoming chapters.
One thing I did notice is that you use a lot of dialogue, and not a lot of description of any sort. For some reason it worked in this story I believe. I havenâ€™t read many stories where I donâ€™t think that there really needs to be more description. Your dialogue says it all, and even though it might not be written out what theyâ€™re doing, itâ€™s still implied and can be imagined at the very least.
Good job and I shall continue to read this when I see more chapters up.
Just, wow. One shots are usually harder for me to get into, because thereâ€™s only so many words that the author put everything in. But, just, wow. I must say, didnâ€™t expect it to be Cormac at the end of the story, but I like it.
First off, love that you kept us in suspense about who you were talking about. I didnâ€™t really know what time period it was in, so I didnâ€™t know who it might have been that she was considering, but I did figure that it was Ron who was with another. Now that I see Cormacâ€™s name though I feel like I should have figured it out, but I didnâ€™t.
The emotions in this story are also amazing. I can imagine all the stuff that Hermione would have gone through whenever Ron was being his usual self, and to see them voiced out in a story in such a spectacular way is very nice. Hermione can sometimes be a hard character to write, but you did it very well. Same with Cormac. We donâ€™t know a lot about him, but from what was giving to us in the books, I think that you have him completely spot on. He seems like a pushy guy who would have initiated it.
Also, the progression of the story really flows very well. I can see Hermioneâ€™s disgust because of who sheâ€™s with. And the more she thinks about itâ€¦well, why not? Cormac is probably the one person who can irritate Ron the most, so he really is the logical choice of who to make Ron jealous with. I wouldnâ€™t say that heâ€™s better then Ron, just that Ron canâ€™t stand him due to his liking Hermione, and being better at Quidditch then him and all of that. Cormac was definitely the right choice in her mind, which is quite justified.
Great uses of imagery! I can picture this whole scene in my mind, step by step, and itâ€™s very vivid and complete, which is an amazing thing for an author to accomplish.
I really canâ€™t see anything to nitpick so I will just once more say that this one shot was absolutely amazing and I will definitely be checking to see if you have anything else I can read now.
Marauders must be my overall favorite genre. Anything concerning them at all I love to read. So reading this has been a pleasure.
I think that you have the characters spot on in their early years. Honestly theyâ€™re like I pictured them. I see why Moony might be hesitant to show the shrieking shack to his friends, since he knows that he has destroyed it somewhat. After all, heâ€™s the reason that everyone thinks itâ€™s haunted now, so Iâ€™d hope he realizes that he tends to destroy things every month.
I love the description at the beginning of the story. I always think that it can be really important to the overall story. So, the one thing I will say in critique is I think that towards the end could have done with some more of it. I mean, the beginning is basically pure description of the house and how people in the town feel about it, and then once weâ€™re with the Marauders in the house, itâ€™s basically just dialogue. Dialogue is good, but description really would have made the inside of the house come to life for me.
Good job overall!
The Battle of Hogwarts changed the lives of many.
For Katie Bell, nothing mattered anymore, least of all her Quidditch career.
For Draco Malfoy, it meant he had to face that surviving comes at a price.
They each had their own demons to face alone. But for each other, they were a form of release.
Winner of the 2012 QSQ - Best Dark/Angsty Story
Many, many thanks to my beta Sarah/TheCursedQuill, whose speedy beta-ing and wonderful comments helped transform this into a two-shot.
**Originally written for Jess/ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor for the SPEW Summer Swap under the title 'Release'.
I think it should be a crime that this story doesnâ€™t have more reviews. Someone recommended I read this, and I am so glad I did. I donâ€™t usually read anything with Draco, because of how heâ€™s portrayed in the book, but I find myself actually sympathizing for him. And I definitely donâ€™t read this ship usually, which Iâ€™m starting to change my mind about.
I love that you took two people who really shouldnâ€™t work, and put them together in such a way that itâ€™s believable and I find myself wondering if this really happened. I never gave much thought to what might have happened to Draco after all was said and done, except for that snippet we saw of him in the epilogue. I never really thought that he might be regretting what he had done, and wishing things were different. After all, the stories just kind of made Draco seem like a real tool and I never liked him since he was always so mean to my favorite characters. But, you opened my eyes and showed me that he really is a character who has emotions and feelings and that maybe he really didnâ€™t want to do things that Voldemort forced him to do.
I was also warned that this was a bit of a dark story. I can definitely see where that came from with all of the thoughts of the war and such, but I think that the darkness really gave a helping hand to making this story even more amazing. Iâ€™ve always associated Draco with darkness, though not Katie really. The final battle I do associate with some darkness though, so I guess that would make me think differently with Katie. I donâ€™t know if that makes any sense at all there. I guess Iâ€™m just trying to say that the darkness really makes this believable. I donâ€™t know if I would have ever in a million years believed that the two of them would get together if the story was a light and happy one. I mean, I donâ€™t see what she could possibly see in him. But the dark tone in this story really makes the couple seem believable to me. I mean, anything can happen when youâ€™re mourning something that happened, and youâ€™re just trying to feel something, anything, to escape the pain.
The emotion just bleeds into this story though. Itâ€™s so spot on and accurate and I can feel what theyâ€™re both feeling. I can feel the loss of Fred for Katie, and I can feel the guilt that Draco has been carrying around with him since his sixth year. Reading the story itâ€™s almost like I was drowning in pain and guilt also. You really brought that emotion to life which as a reader I absolutely adore.
I wonder how this story might have panned out if it was longer. I donâ€™t know if the two of them would ever stand the test of time, but I find myself hoping that they would. They complement each other perfectly, and they are what each other needs, especially at the present moment, which leads me to believe that maybe they wouldnâ€™t have stood the test of time. I mean, in the story theyâ€™re both in pain and both have things that they want to forget. Being together makes the pain fade for a while, and clears their mind enough to get through the day. But what happens when they arenâ€™t in pain anymore? Will they stay together? Or was it only something that they both needed to heal? I find myself asking all of these questions and more as your story came to an end.
A fantastic story. I think you might have changed my mind about this ship, and I might just go and see if there are anymore that I want to read.
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so, so much for this beautiful, thorough review! I didn't think this story would be getting many more (if any) reviews, so it was a lovely surprise to see you left one. I am so glad this story changed your mind about Draco - in the books, I can't stand how he acts, but I feel like there is an opening for redemption in fan fiction because it's difficult to believe a person can be *all* bad. I agree that it is definitely a dark story, but I am happy to hear that it didn't mar the pairing for you. I might write more Draco/Katie in the (much later) future; it was definitely an interesting pairing to think about. Thank you again for leaving this incredibly well-written review, it's made my day :). xx Ariana
To Harry Potter, his life's destiny was to save the world, become an Auror, and be with Ginny Weasley forever. He did all right on the first. The second wasn't turning out to be all he thought it would, and the third... well, that's a story for a different day.Â
Where does that leave the Chosen One so soon after his twenty-fourth birthday? And will a past acquaintance show him what or even who he wanted for his future?
Youâ€™re right, they are a strange pairing. But you totally make them work in this story. Iâ€™ve honestly been meaning to read this since I was told about it, but only have gotten a chance to now, and I must say that I love it. You have always had a certain knack with stories. At least in my opinion.
I love your description and your dialogue. I felt bad for Harry in the beginning, being all alone and having a boring life. Plus his wand breaking again, that would have been a bad thing for any day. At first I wondered if Harry really would be one to get drunk like that and the more I thought about it the more I thought that he probably would. Itâ€™s not like heâ€™s getting drunk constantly, it was just one occurrence, and for a darn good reason too in my opinion.
Great imagery. I really felt like I was in the story itself seeing it all happen as sort of a bystander. You put me into the story with all of the vivid imagery, which I love. I canâ€™t really name specifics of what I love most about this story, because it just all came together in such a way that I canâ€™t pick one aspect that sticks out the most.
You really did a good job pulling me into this story. I had the whole thing to read at once (thank god) so I never had to go through that cliffhanger. I know that if I hadnâ€™t had it all to read though, Iâ€™d be pretty desperate for more about now. So kudos for that!
I think I have to go read more of your stories now. You are a fabulous author!
I'm glad you enjoyed this, especially as a H/G shipper. One of the cool things about Harry is that the way his character is, his life could go several different ways and still do so plausibly. He could live the dream and marry his Hogwarts sweetheart. He could fall into a rut and grow dissatisfied with the mundaneness of everyday life. He could also fall into himself and need someone to pull him back out. With a little bit of jiggery-pokery, any of these could happen.
You've given an interesting description of my description, I must say. I'm glad, of course, that it works that way, because I'm one of the type of people who hate reading things that bludgeon me over the head with description and metaphor. Hence why my own work tends to stray toward the simple-yet-concise. Whether I get there or not is an entirely different matter, but there you go.
No, there never would've been a wait on this story. I wrote it for a SPEW swap when one of the members flaked out on her story. I wrote this in two days and didn't even stop to edit. It's since then been poked into submission, though. I'm glad my flurried effort works, though. Those tend to be my best stories, the ones that just *happen*.
Thanks for stopping in, and squishes!
This is kind of a review for all of the chapters so far, because I just couldnâ€™t stop reading once I started long enough to give a good review.
I must admit, the first thing that drew me into this story is the fact that itâ€™s what might have happened if Voldemort never existed. I always wondered what might have happened, but I donâ€™t think I have really ever stumbled upon a story that really takes that idea and explores it. I must say though, you did fantastic with this story.
I love that you donâ€™t have Lily and Potter together in the beginning of the story, and that he isnâ€™t the Head Boy. While we know he was indeed it in the Potterverse, itâ€™s good to see a story where he isnâ€™t all that he thinks he is. Donâ€™t get me wrong, I adore the couple and think theyâ€™re wonderful together, but it is nice to read a new and refreshing point of view on something that happened.
I must also say that you really captivated me in this story. From the moment I started reading it, I couldnâ€™t stop. I had to know what was coming next in the chapters. The story just sucked me in and didnâ€™t let me go until I had no more chapters to read. You must write more soon, so I can keep reading the story.
You did a very good job with your oc Vanessa in this story. At first I had my doubts about her. I mean, pretty, charming, able to get Potterâ€™s attention? I had to admit I was a bit worried. But those traits that you originally show us just worked into an overall bigger picture where those things arenâ€™t really faulted against her in my opinion. She is a sound OC in my opinion, which I must just say great job on. She is one of the reasons I enjoy this story so much.
Overall, I just wanted to applaud you on the plot. It can be hard to write something that is from the AU world, and itâ€™s most definitely hard to write something this good in that difficult setting. Also for keeping the characters in line! We donâ€™t know a whole lot about this era, but I think you did a great job portraying the characters how they should be.
Now that I got all of that out of the wayâ€¦.write more soon! Please! I need to know what happens as this plot just continues to thicken. You have me hooked into this story, and I really need to know what happens next. I hope you update soon!
I hope to see more of this wonderful story, and I will definitely continue to read this until the end.
Author's Response: Thanks for the long review! I am glad that you like the story so far. I spent a lot of time thinking about what would have happened in a world without Voldemort, and so am glad to hear that it seems realistic enough. I was worried that some of the choices I made (particularly pertaining to my characterization of James and Lily) would put off readers. And I am really happy that you like Vanessa. She is my favorite person to write in this story. She ended up sticking around for a bit longer than I had originally planned because I liked her so much.
I must say, I love James/Lily pairing, so I had to read the prologue. You have a good start here, and it makes me curious as to what your plot line is. Iâ€™ve never personally read a story like this, so maybe thatâ€™s part of the appeal.
There isnâ€™t much to say, because itâ€™s just a prologue and itâ€™s so short, but it does start to make the reader wonder, and it leaves it with a cliffhanger. I mean, what book could possibly make this happen? What would possess her to leave Hogwarts and her friends behind? Especially if she seems to be friends with the Marauders.
This prologue raises so many questions. I donâ€™t know if youâ€™ll ever finish this story, but if you do, I will try to keep an eye out for it to read it. Good job on the prologue!
Wow. A lot of emotion packed into a few words. I think you hit how people were feeling spot on in this story. After all, we basically did see at least that Remus and Sirius were both convinced the other leaked the information. It is only logical that all of them were thinking that the other betrayed the trust and are the reason theyâ€™re dead. Well, not Remus because he had no clue any of this was going on, and he most certainly wasnâ€™t one of the people who the blame could have been shined on.
Itâ€™s interesting to see so many snippets in time, and I think that really helps to make the one shot really good. And the repetition of â€śI killed themâ€ť really strikes the message home that all of them in their own way contributed to their death. Yes, Peter might be the one who officially did it, because heâ€™s the one who gave up a secret that he should have guarded with his life. But all of them were responsible and played a role in the deaths of Lily and James. Itâ€™s also interesting to see into Peterâ€™s mind a bit, and to see how he felt like he had no choice. We all know that he shouldnâ€™t have done it, but still, itâ€™s interesting to see the mind of one who thought that he had absolutely no option. All he was trying to do was not get killed himself, but he did go too far with it, which you show when you said that he gave the Dark Lord the information of where they are and â€śI killed themâ€ť.
Bravo at really making me think about how theyâ€™re all somewhat responsible. I always just pointed the blame at Wormtail, because he is such an easy person to blame. But the one shot really shows us we canâ€™t just do that. I really like that this one shot made me actually think about that. Thank you for that.
Great job, and I will look for more stories from you in the future.
Author's Response: Thank you very much.
So I must say that Harry/Ginny is my OTP, which is why I decided to read this one shot. It was interesting to see something from Ginnyâ€™s POV. I find her to be a difficult character to write most days, especially in first person. I just canâ€™t seem to get into her head long enough to write a believable story with her in it. Hence it takes me forever to write usually. But, you did a good job with it. I like the emotions in the story and what youâ€™re trying to portray overall. Yes, it might be a bit cheesy, but overall I think that the story has some good qualities. Good job keeping it in first person too. I tend to avoid writing it because I always mess up with my tenses, but I didnâ€™t really see any errors, so good job with that. Overall, that was a good story and a good read.
I must say. I don't tend to read a lot of historical stories, but this one intrigued me, and I honestly liked it a lot. I see someone else pointed out the few errors I also found, so I won't repeat them. Great job though! :D I'll have to look and see if you have anything else I can read now.