It's been over a year since I last updated this. Scary, huh?
Well, first off, my birthday has come and gone, and I'm no longer seventeen. Huzzah for finally being legal!
Right Under His Nose has completely transformed (right under my very own nose-- hah! pun very much intended) from a fluffy little plot bunny that took my mind off school to a fully-fledged story. I've got it all planned out, don't worry. I know that I take forever to update, and I'm sorry. It's just that I want to get this right. This story is like my child... I won't submit a chapter unless I think it's perfect.
The fact that I'm in eight classes, five APs, and currently filling out nine college applications and about forty scholarship forms also kind of infringes on my time a bit. But hey... once the apps are sent and my senioritis kicks in, I might actually have the time I need to sit down and do some serious writing. :)
Let me hear from you about what you like and, more importantly, what you didn't like. My mission in life right now is to become a better writer-- I'm going to prove it to my AP BritLit teacher, and I can prove it to you, too. Keep the reviews coming!
My main focus at the moment will be Right Under His Nose. I have a lot of ideas circling in my head, however, as to what I want to do when I (finally) finish that. Guess I'll just have to wait til the plot bunny strikes.
this is a great story... please update soon!
Beautiful and very believable. Nicely done.
Hey, Narwen! I told you I would review. I really like your story so far. But... a little constructive criticism. Work on your descriptions, and try to make your chapters a little longer (shoot for 1,000 or 1,200 words). I've noticed that your sentence structures have gotten better as the story progresses, but still be careful not to fall into the "Subject, verb, object. Subject, verb, object." trap. Keep varying them, it sounds better and keeps your readers interested.
All that said, I love your story! I love all H/G fics and I'm really frustrated at Harry right now. Perhaps he gets a clue in the chapters I haven't read yet? :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate the criticism. It helps to get positive feedback on what I should fix.
Scratch that being frustrated with Harry part... *blushes*... different story... *blushes again, more furiously*...
Author's Response: haha, lol. That's okay, I get confused with all the stories that I read.
Lily Evans and James Potter share absolutely nothing in common, not even their feelings for each other. Lily, perceived as a ‘model student,’ detests the handsome, popular, Quidditch star James, who she thinks to be something of a git. James, on the contrary, has been infatuated with Lily for years, and has let her and the whole school know it.
As time progresses into Voldemort’s ‘reign of terror,’ the two have to learn to trust, tolerate, and love each other.
Please note, this story is incomplete, and will likely remain so for a long time. I apologize!
This story is wonderful. I love that it's not the average love/hate story. The letter in the first chapter was an original twist. You've got me very intrigued as to what happens next... both with Lily and James and also with this "wizard's debt" thing. :) Great job!
This is a wonderfully written story. I *loved* the first chapter. . . it was heart wrenching. Now, concerning the second chapter-- also very well written, but I'm not sure if Harry would explode with all those words of hatred. He doesn't seem like the person who would tell Ginny she didn't mean anything to him. But your story is still fantastic, I can't believe you don't have more reviews!
Author's Response: Thanks for constructive criticism and glad you liked the way its written.
Nice job, artlover! Very well written. :)
Author's Response: Thank you so very much!!!