Hey everyone, I'm Rose. I love vampires, the Black family, and the Malfoys, and am usually found hanging out in the Romance section. I love to knit, cook, and listen to music. I really love random PMs, so message me!
I have a slight obsession with Jasper Hale.
Anyways, I'm soon to have a story up. Yay! Don't forget to always review after you read a story.
Oh man. I was quite literally crying in the middle of this story. Excellent work!
I thought the story was very believable. The Lily/James/Sirius love triangle was great but sad, seeing as Sirius's love was pretty unrequited. Sirius's guilt was very likely as well, and his death was almost poetic in a way.
I would suggest not using such technical phrases like 'resulting in trouble breathing' and such. It takes away from the flow and poetry of the whole story.
Very well written, and kudos for the tricky pairing.
Author's Response: Thanks for your lovely review! I'm glad you found it believable - I worked hard on keeping it as in character as possible, considering the situation. And I'll make sure to avoid using phrases like that in future stories. Thanks again! :)
Agh, a cliffhanger! I have a love-hate relationship with them; even though it's painful not to know what happens, they really make me think, you know?
Anyways, this is a great story. I love Ginny/Draco, and found this little wonder while browsing. I'm so glad I chose this one. This story is not only suspenseful and dramatic, but has some great romance. You made Ginny and Draco's relationship very believeable. However, I felt the way they came together was a bit cliche. Something about it felt as though you were just trying to make a hurried explanation.
It was interesting how you chose Luna to be the lover. I liked how you made it slightly less conventional that way. However, I don't believe she would be so resigned to such a fate. After all, she's Luna. She was such a huge part in the resistance against Voldemort. I don't believe you gave enough reasons for her to do this to Draco. She'd rather die than relinquish to Voldemort's will. Why would she be a part in this plan?
I must say, your plot is so wonderfully fleshed out. I followed it easilly the whle way through, which was fabulous.
Great fic, and thanks for writing something so great!
Author's Response: Lol, thanks for the long review. And thanks also for the criticism--really! Too few reviews give helpful criticism. :D To be honest: yes, I was trying to make a hurried explanation for D/G getting together. I was also sorta being a bit sardonic as I told it, because I normally don\'t like D/G romances--I made an exception to write this story, because I just couldn\'t picture any other romance in its place. Next time, I\'ll think of a more creative explanation when I need a quick one. ;) As for Luna submitting to Voldy\'s will... I don\'t suppose she did; she might indeed rather die. But she was captured instead, and hidden behind one of those doors. It wasn\'t really her choice. Maybe she would kill herself the first chance she got. But then again, maybe she wouldn\'t; Luna is a very level-headed individual, and something as drastic as suicide seems a bit extreme for her. She seemed to adjust quickly to the fact that her mom was dead, and she counted her blessings by reminding herself that she still had her dad. Perhaps she may have done the same in this case, had Draco chosen her--she may have accepted the blows life dealt her and moved on, knowing that she couldn\'t change what Voldemort had caused. But however she\'s involved, she definitely didn\'t want to be involved in the first place. Cliffhangers... Stockton\'s \"The Lady, or the Tiger?\" bugged the heck out of me the first time I read it, but now I love it ever so very much. Which is exactly why I did this homage fic in the first place. Lol, I do hope I explained myself properly. Thank you again for you kind and useful review!
For Rose Weasley, her impressions of her own “love” were shattered when she found out something she shouldn't have, something that made her wish for revenge ... something that made her unable to take it.
I whimpered at the end of this story, no joke. I just want to hug Rose right now.
I must admit, I was very worried when I saw this pairing. But you really managed to pull it off. Using Rose's point of view (albeit in second person) took away any mushiness that might have resulted and gave this story a sharp edge. The characterization of Rose was well made and extremely believable. I liked her reasoning behind loving Albus, since she can't choose who she loved. Too cute!
This was just all in all a well-written story. I was blown away at how powerful it was, considering the plot. Bravo!
Rose (not Weasley!)
This was adorable! The plot was fluffy and cute without drowning me in romance. I loved your characterization of the two; I've read so many stories where they seem like totally different people from the Malfoys we know and love (or love to hate *winks*). I sincerely believed that Narcissa would actually want to decorate the house without magic.
Now for a bit of nitpickiness. I felt Narcissa didn't really trick him into helping her. She didn't really use any of her Slytheirn cunning to make him want to help.
Great story, and good luck for the challenge!
Author's Response: The Malfoys might have been in Voldemort\'s inner circle, but after what happened in DH, it\'s pretty obvious they\'re not totally bad. But Lucius still has to keep his sarcasm in any story! Narcissa didn\'t trick him into helping her, but she definitely tried. But—you\'re right—maybe I should change my summary, In fact, I think I will! Thanks for the great review!
Wolfstar! I love it!
Your style is unbelievably addicting. I couldn't stop reading once I started, and I slowly felt myself getting pulled into the story. Your characterization of Remus seemed a bit exaggerated, but he did sort of fall into a black hole with Sirius in jail, so it seems quite realistic.
The older man scene was an interesting way to show Remus's 'insanity', though effective. I was a little skeptical, but you pulled it off quite well.
I was so relieved when Snape pushed off Remus. I really thought you were going to have a Remus/Snape scene! I enjoyed this ending much better, though, and seemed like a very Snape-ish thing to do, especially with thoughts of Lily in his mind.
Bravo! I loved the darkness and
Author's Response: Hm... I suspect there's somthing missing at the end there? No matter. Thank you for such a wonderful review! Almost makes me want to start writing fanfiction again... :P And I'm glad you enjoyed it even though there were bits you initially wasn't too fond of. So thank you! :)