Hey, I'm Julie, or Jule if you prefer. There isn't much to say except I'm a pretty friendly person. You should get to know me :3
I think that you should balance the amount of focus on the characters more. You write about one particular character so much and make him/her involved in the most situations. Plus the attention he/she gets isn't fair to the rest of the characters. Although your pacing is good, focusing only on one character and trying to make them the most likeable makes them seem terribly concieted.
Author's Response: Hi, yes I do realise that Kirsty steals the main focus within my story, but I really wanted to establish her as a character as this is esentially her story, hence the title. But I do understand where you are coming from and the other characters get their limelights as the story progresses. They, too, have their personal life experiences told and become an integral part of the story. Thank you for your constructive ctriticism, I really have taken it on board, and thanks for reviewing!
This is getting to be really cute. Although I can pretty much guess the ending, I can't wait until the next chapter is up :3