[Peter Pettigrew, Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder, and the logic of fives. Dark, some disturbing imagery. One shot.]
This is seriously, honestly, and unbelievably disturbing.
But in a wonderful, beautiful, horrifying, and twisted way.
It's creepy and dark but sad and makes you think of a character that's supposed to be a rat as something more something that only really ever needed help and that makes him feel more human and vulnerable and just plain pitiable. Something it's hard to see him as in other lights. Your Peter is, in his own skewed way, a sort of hero that just didn't get it. Or something. Yeah.
I'm rambling and I know I don't make sense but that's ok because all I really have to say is that I love this. Really, truly love it.
So THANKS 8DDD
I absolutely love your writing style. Symbolism is a powerful, powerful thing, and you use it wonderfully :)
Case in point:
He runs away, glancing over his shoulder, pockets full of his diamonds, mind full of fantastic daydreams.
Love that sentence. Its short, not-quite-sweet, and full of meaning.
Also, I loved how you described Severus as the boy with the cryptic eyes. That just sounded gorgeous.
All in all, I adored it. Severus/Lily pieces have such potential for fanfiction. Glad you took advantage of that :)
Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for reading and reviewing my story. Of course, I don\'t think it\'s as good as yours, but I\'m sort of proud of this one. :)
I totally love this because it shows just how strong Neville really is, all while keeping him in character. Not enough fics manage to do that.
The writing was beautiful and the message poignant. Seriously I adored it. Redemption (that's how I see this, in a way) is such a great theme.
All in all, great job!