My name is Chris.
I'm a vegetarian, environmentalist, and novelist.
Sadie Murray is being slowly completed.
Excuse life for debunking my haste.
That's hilarious! In my story, I had made the uniforms navy blue too. Maybe it's an American thing? And I almost called the government The Republic too. Word for word.
But I digress; this is quite good. I'm enjoying the progression. I'll be sure to read more soon!
I really enjoy this. I like how well you captured the Order; that is exactly how I pictured their meetings.
For the record, in the 5th paragraph,you left she out of the first sentence. [b]When had seen him fall slowly through...[b]
And this is just something curious I thought of, but might the scourgify spell not make the noodles disappear because of Gamp's Laws? Just food for thought (pun unintended but accepted.).
Author's Response: I\'m glad you think I captured the meeting well; it was something I really tried hard for. As for the little nit-pick, I\'ll go fix it right away. And Gamp\'s Law is what exactly? *goes to look it up* Heh, nice pun. Thanks for the review!
Yet again, very good. How you worked in the arrival of Dumbledore and Harry was seamless. I also like how you kept the awkward bumblingness of Tonks throughout all the chapters, along with her brashness. The only thing I would like to see in this chapter is for more conversation between Tonks and Molly.
Regardless, I really enjoyed this. If you are going to continue this, that would be glorious; I'd love seeing it progress further.
Author's Response: Thank you :] It\'s been quite abandoned, I must admit. But it will be continued. I don\'t intend to finish it so suddenly at all.
This poem is all kinds of the following:
This was really one of the best poems/Christmas stories I've heard. It faltered a bit on some of the first lines, but only a few times, and you kept it moving. Such a good job!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I\'m so glad someone is reading this a year later!! ~Gina :)
This was nice! I always like stories that portray the canon incidents at a different angle. And Merlyn personality fits nicely. It's also refreshing to hear from the Hufflepuffs; they never get enough credit. I just wish it was a tad longer! I really enjoyed it - you did quite a good job.
Thanks! I would have liked to make it a bit longer, but it was a school assignment (as in, for my RL school) and there was a cap on our word counts. Yesh, I liked experimenting with a Puff, too! :D
Thanks for the review!
~This is LucillaJoanna of Hufflepuff sipping cocoa and waxing poetic By the Fireside for The Winter Tales Challenges
First, the silly little typo. When Percy hugs his dad, you went into the bit about how he was jumping over the stream. Well, somehow Percy seems to have skinned his knee IN the rock. "...when he had skinned his leg in a rock in the pond."
Dang typos! It's so small, I'm shocked I noticed.
That being said, this is a wonderful story. It's really great to see this side of Percy. He was always so huffy, and it's nice to see him let that go for once. You capture the mood superbly, and I love the way you put forth imagery. It's very strong. "The granite crumbled into sand. Love was like that." Mmm! Tasty! Great job.
Author's Response: Oh dang prepositions, too. Thanks, Chris! ^_^
This was a very good read! Remus comes out in Teddy with the way he talks. They both seem really thought out whenever they're speaking. The flashback worked perfectly too. And the composition and description is amazing; very eloquent.
This goes without mentioning the fact that Teddy and Victoire are totally cute together (if you abbreviate both of their names, you can call them TV! How cool!) You also get several cool points for squeezing "lackadaisical" in there.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I was also worried that Teddy would be a bit too angsty and not enough like Remus, but I\'m really glad that you think otherwise! -Kat