I'm more of a reader than a writer. I struggle to produce my own stories, but haven't actually finished any. I have some promising ideas and plots, but until now I could not really produce anything I would dare to post xD
Thus if the day comes, I will most definitely post it here first! :D
Until then I will gladly read as many fics by other authors as possible! ;)
And finally: I loooove the Harry Potter series!!!! (As you all do I'm guessing^^)
...i absolutely love this story! i like your writing style and i also like that i don´t know what´ll happen in the next moment, because some stories are so predictable. and this is definitely NOT one of them. you have so much talent that i´m really envious! you have to write more! just love it!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, that\'s so good to hear! I\'m so glad you like that the story is so unpredictable! That makes me so happy! Thanks for the review! Yours truly, Amelia Bedelia
please, please, please update....ok?...i´m dying here rite now!..this is a fantastic story!...so have mercy with ur desperate reader and fan!...
Author's Response: I\'m so sorry I didn\'t update soon enough! But I\'ll be able to finish the story VERY soon because summer starts in four days!\r\n\r\nThanks for the review!\r\n\r\nYours truly,\r\nAmelia Bedelia
I was pleasantly surprised when I read your one-shot about Tonks/Remus. It really was very different from the fics I read about them before. What really drew me in at first was of course the title ;D. I love The Fray!! xD Especially this song!
I also really love your explanation for her looks and behaviour (and of course her name xD). Describing how she struggles with the fact that he is a werewolf and how he wins her interest by just looking at her is really well done!
One thing though, I thought did not really fit with his character was that he kissed her in the drawing room. I don't really think that Remus would do that, because he really thinks that he is too old and to dangerous for her. And I don't believe that he would've let his guard slip this way. Especially after Sirius told him to stay away. I'm not sure he would've risked his friendship with Sirius. But then again Harry did risk his friendship with Ron for Ginny, though the dynamic of his friendship with Ron is different then Sirius' and Remus'. But that's just my opinion ;). Maybe he risks it, because Tonks is something special? But how does he know that at that time?(Him being a more practical and responsible person).
I really like how you describe both POVs, because it gives you a good insight into their thinking and explains why they behave this way or that.(especially why Remus has trouble saying "no" xD) Also how you connect certain elements. For example Remus' love for adventure. The connection between Tonks, adventure and love was really well done. Furthermore the part were he doesn't see himself as a hero (of the adventure), but Tonks then calls him:"Remus, my hero!”, was very clever. xD Thus in the end Remus is Tonks' hero regarding love ("the biggest adventure yet").
I enjoyed how you suddenly changed to present tense in the end. It is like Remus comes back from his thoughts about the past and it ends the story in some kind of a conclusion (kind of like: this is how their relationship is today). Perhaps, you should write some kind of connecting sentence or sth, because I was kinda taken aback that the tense changed so suddenly and I had to go back and read that passage again.
Anyways I definitely really enjoyed your story! Well done! I'm going to read more of your fiction from now on. xD I hope my review is of some help to you.
Author's Response: In regards to Remus kissing Tonks, I wanted to give him a more assertive character... Where he had gone through life not being allowed to do so many things, and suddenly, he had the chance to grab what he wanted, and so he did. In my head, at least, Remus only starts avoiding Tonks after Sirius' death... They seem pretty close, and Tonks seems pretty happy in OotP, whereas she's more depressed in HBP - I think after Sirius died, Remus realised how dangerous the war really was, and how people really were going to get hurt. I'm glad you liked the characterisation rtegarding the umbrella-scene, it's my favourite part xD Anyways, thankyou for you super-review, it was awesome! It's really helpful to get feedback like this, and I'm glad you'll be reading some of my fics in the future ^.^
I absolutely loved your one-shot! It was really well written and so touching!
The description in the beginning is wonderful. it sets the mood so well that i really felt like it is a hot summer day :D
I especially liked the part when he describes his love to Lily and when he finally sees her coming.
Even if Lily appears only at the end and doesn't say much you can feel her presence throughout the whole story through James' feelings. I can really see her with his eyes it's amazing!
I really enjoyed your story, keep up the good work!!! :D
Author's Response: Thank you SO much!!!!!!:D
Follow their lives, their laughs, their loves.EXCERPT
It’s been a month, and the wound is still raw and fresh as ever in my mind. It hurts to know that what we had once is now gone. All because of one word, one choice.
I know that Dumbledore always says that it’s the choices we make that set us apart. But I hate the fact that we are forced to make a choice and take a side. If only he hadn’t been in Slytherin, if only he hadn’t been into the Dark Arts, if only he wasn’t taking that side, if only he didn’t call me that word.
I must say I really really like this. No kidding. It is very insightful on Lily's feelings after she broke off the friendship with one of her best friends. And yes, of course it is that hurtful and it effects her in a major way. Up until now I haven't read anything like this. I guess most James/Lily shipd concentrate solely on them, but I do think that her relationship with Snape is of utter importance and it effected her deeply which the books do not really show. Thus I really like your view on things! The fact that you don't disregard that there might be other things going on in Lily Evans life except the annoying James Potter gives the story more depth.
Keep going! I'm looking forward to the next chapters! I am very excited what sort of changes Lily is going to go through!