I've said it before and I'll say it again, I HATE PETTIGREW!!!!!!!!! That last paragraph with the three Potters standing together watching the sky was so bitter sweet, and they only have thirty days left together. I hope they're happy ones.
I feel that James was perhaps a little reckless for insisting Sirius to be secret keeper and their readily agre4eing to a switch for Pettigrew was unwise as they had no proof of who the spy was. I guess you can tell i don't trust people. Also, I feel so sorry for Remus here, Sirius only devised the dupe because he thought Remus was the spy, couldn't he have gotten a secret keeper too? And Sirius is going to feel wretched when he finds out about Pettigrew, it's all so tragic. Brilliantly written.
If only Remus or Dumbledore or anyone had gone to see Sirius in Azkaban, even just to see him where they thought he belonged, they could have learned the truth and Sirius could've been freed. I know, I always want everyone to be happy, except the bad guys of course. Anyway, this was an excellent fic and there were quite a few original ideas that fit in so well with JKR's books. I particularly liked Sirius pretending to be a Vampire, very amusing he was. Keep writing.
Oh no! You've left me hanging! I'm glad Jillian is free, for now at least. I know Peter can't be who they think he is because of that family history book, but I do think he's a good guy. Killicus sounds nutters! Oh, and I really loved that line about how she missed everyone, even Snape, oh how low can ones spirits sink? Anyway, thanks for the fic and can't wait for the ending.
What an excellent story, and it could have been put into the HP POA book because it happened after everything else. From now on I can pretend it was part of the book. Wouldn't it have been funny if Ron had remembered Myrtle being his mother? It'd probably give him nightmares, or maybe he'd feel more sorry for her. I love time travel stories, thanks. Keep Writing.
I can't believe it, I'm sitting here beaming like an idiot, this was brilliant and I love it. The whole thing flowed really well, and i could actually see it all happening in my head from the wonderful descriptions. Ginny winning the chess game was hilarious and I even enjoyed the argument with Dean and Ron and Harry's discussion.
I love that chocolate mountain painting with the secret hidey hole and it's great that James and Lily finally admit their feelings, but how on earth are they going to escape Professor McGonagall's wrath? And when they find out Lily was given recklessness potion, it'll all go wrong anyway because she'll think James was ion on it. Oh what a fix. So I'm begging you to please update again soon, despite how much I'd like James and Lily to be hidden away together for a while longer.
Author's Response: yes, the chocolate was a last minute throw-in that i luvvv!!! a bit of foreshadowing of what will happen behind it!! i love the place where they have their first kiss...it\'s so simple, yet beautiful, light, and dark looking
Wow, this is the first chapter and already I've laughed until I ache! I loved every word, and Lily's duality was hilarious, getting annoyed at James, getting embarrassed when he talks to her parents then sticking up for him with Petunia. Can't wait to read on. You have a great talent for capturing a reader and not just by humour, the very beginning was chilling, then the interaction between James and Lily Potter was touching. Well done and thanks, I needed to laugh today.
Author's Response: I am very glad that I have been of service to you. I was very excited about this chapter; it was my first fanfic EVER! I\'m glad my fic has been interesting right off the bat!
I haven't a clue whats going to happen, other than James and Lily dancing around one another until they finally get together, but I can't wait to find out. My favourite bit of this chapter is Madam Pomphrey chasing them from the hospital wing with fly swatters. Oh what a visual!
Author's Response: Yay! a person who liked the swatter. I personally thought the image was hilarious and was a bit disappointed when nobody mentioned it in the reviews, but I\'ve gotten my wish at last!
I loved the bit with Fawkes, and the broken goblet portrait. And I feel so sorry for James, I think I know why he pulled back, he's frightened of being hurt because if things happened so quickly Lily would put it down to gratitude or something equally as daft and nothing else would ever happen and he'd be crushed. Sorry, went off a bit there. Anyway, great chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you! once again, you noticed a detail i personally love. i really liked writing about the goblet!
Aw that was a terrible thing to do! Now Lily will see the boy at the hufflepuff table in the great hall or something and think James set it up! Anne really should have been a Slytherin, she's so sneaky! I'm not saying I didn't like the chapter though, it was excellent! I'm just terrified what will happen now.
Author's Response: oh trust me, she\'ll have other things on her mind and won\'t be paying attention to the hufflepuff table a few chapters from now lol. But something ( I won\'t say what) in your review carries HEAVY significance!! and I\'m very glad you picked up on it!
Remus is so funny isn't he? I mean in a quiet controlled sort of way. Makes you wish as if you were there, all the fun and secrets, I know bad stuff happens too, but they all seem to get through it together.
Author's Response: yes - teamwork! That\'s what Anne would say...although she insists on leading the teamwork lol. I imagine moony as a much happier person before he graduated hogwarts...hence his humor (:
I don't know where Sirius got the name for the S M S O B, but it would be irritating if I were Anne, as it is, I find it highly amusing how it annoys her. And that broom ride sounds wonderful, I wish I were Lily, maybe her life ends tragically, but she had fun and love along the way, not many experience that. The sliding down from the top to the bottom of the stairs trick has always frightened me, but I don't t6hink I'd mind if i had a James to catch me.
Author's Response: yes, i wish all of this were real, and i guess i live a bit vicariously through many of my chapter! lol. S As for dear Siri...he just randomly got it. I was showering (shampooing my hair actually), when Sirius jumped into my head, started leaping around shouting smsob...and I actually started laughing aloud at him...yes...I am a bit insane...lol
Hmm, those voices, possibley Lucius Malfoy visiting Narcissa? If it were Bellatrix they'd know her voice surely? Oh I don't know, but definitely slytherins. This is scarey, I'm glad Remus has extra sensitive hearing thats all i can say. Maybe Lily doubts James' sincerety because he's a prankster, I think I'd be more doubting of someone cool and serious, they'd be more likely to see you as a possession or something. Anyway, next chapter calls.
Author's Response: he he he...a slytherin eh? well, read on and see!! ( :
That was so frightening! Poor James, couldn't Lily transfigure a branch into a stretcher or something? And how did James get Gryffindore's sword? And I have absolutely no idea who the white cloaks indicate, am i being dense?
Author's Response: no, you\'re not dense lol!!! Lily didn\'t want to move James because she fears what moving him will do...she\'s just very afraid right now...she doesn\'t know where to go or what to do. As for the sword....well...it\'ll all come clear in due time...( :
OOO!!!! I hate Bellatrix! In the books I find Snape a character whom I love to hate, but Bellatrix is something else! And Peter, well, in JK's books I detest him, but after reading many fics where everyone laughs at his expense I occasionally feel sorry for him. I've always been unpopular and on the edge of things, so sometimes I can empathise, but I hope I qwouldn't ever do what he did. Oh, and just one thing about the dance competition, why would Lily want a broom if she's awful at flying? Perhaps we'll find out later she had an accident or something, after fifth year and that made her lose her confidence on a broom? Sorry, just thought that might sort things out. I love how James ran straight off to the square when Lily was mentioned. And Sirius is like a big kid isn't he? Shame we never saw much of that in the books, but i guess Azkaban might do that. And Snape being reluctant to join Voldemort says alot, strengthens my beliefs about him no end, I always thought he was out for himself, independant, willing to sit with both Dumbledore and Voldemort so long as it benefited him. I'm thinking he's truly Slytherin, half blood or no.
Author's Response: i love this chapter because of severus, especially. I wrote this prior to reading hbp, so the line where he says he\'s not a coward really shocked me when i read it in Joe\'s actual writing! Anyways... all the characters, though Joe\'s, have parts of me in them. Lily, like me, is a sucker for free things, although her reasons are different from mine. Anyways...i\'m sure you would never do such a thing like wormtail as you sound like a lovely person!
This chapter was completely mental! We don't really see much of the forest in the books, you know there's stuff lurking, but not what. Endless possibilities as to what could happen in there. Those Alice and Sirius duplicates remind me of inferi, I know they aren't, but ew! And what's with the chaining tree and what's happened to Remus? Guess i'll find out soon, you don't half know how to get people on the edge of their seats! I haven't much else to say, no criticisms, just worries about how they'll get away.
Author's Response: yes- i like to explore in places the book doesn\'t tough on ( much easier to get chapters like that validated by those picky mods, not to mention i like originality!) The chaining tree was inspired by dali\'s works, and it is my tribute to him!
I think Sirius description of events was fine, what else was he meant to say? It was hardly the time for a blow by blow account, That'll probably happen later when he's relaying the story to the Marauder's fan club. I'm worried for Remus right now, and Anne, Bellatrix is insane, you could tell that from the way she talked about herself in third person on the train. Is she an animagus?
Author's Response: no, no. I\'ll just be out with it and tell you that she is not an animagus. that would be WAY too predictable, and it\'s quite frankly not my style to make a plot like that! all of you would be sorely disappointed and stone me to death if something like that solved this entire mess!! but excellent try!!
I knew it was Firenze when his blue eye's were mentioned, odd that. All the beautiful description in this chapter was captivating. And do you mean to tell me that after all that, it was a dream? Somehow, i doubt it. Can't wait for the next chapter, if it wasn't a dream, how will they all get back into school without being caught? This history between Anne and Bellatrix is interesting, there must be more to it as well, and why can't Anne spill Bellatrix's secrets, is it to save Remus being discovered a werewolf or did they do some sort of unbreakable vow?
Author's Response: all i have to say is that your eye for detail is quite amazing...i can\'t say more because i don\'t want to spoil anything, but...well...you point out many significant things!
There you are, someone does take notice of Peter, I guess if he explained to James and Sirius how he feels they'd stop teasing him. They just don't seem the type to think they're causing hurt, I don't suppose it's intentional. Wow, what will Lily do? Maybe she could pretend Prongs is her Patronus and he could gallop past Prof McGonagall and round the corner then James could come back and say he'd been looking for Lily as they were meant to be on duty. Lame I know, but it might work.
Author's Response: Well, all i can say is that minerva is a sharp one! it won\'t be easy to trick her...( ;