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I love your portrayal of Remus, it's dead on. The only thing that worries me is the fact that Charlotte knows he's a werewolf now, won't she tell. Ah well, seeing as it's only a one shot there's not much to worry about that happening. Altogether, I really liked your fic. Well done!
What a wonderful on-shot! You have a very good eye for detail and imagery, as is evident with this submission.
I believe the timeline you have set for this is just after her first year, which is a very intersting time in Ginny's life. She is full of resentment for what she's done and partially who she became because of it. You've shown her feelings on the matter just perfectly with such lines as
Tom couldn’t touch her here, couldn’t reach out and play with her mind, couldn’t grow more solid and real as the strength was slowly sapped from her bones, from her heart.
Dumbledore himself had said that far greater wizards had been duped by Tom, and so nobody brought upon her the pain she knew she so rightly deserved.
The way you show her inner turmoil with wanting the respect of a woman but still wanting to be able to have parts of her childhood is so reminiscent of how I felt at twelve-years-old (how I'm sure most of us felt), that it is heartwarming. You've touched that subject very well.
And then there was her father. She was Daddy’s Little Girl, used to the good-night kisses and bear hugs and hair ruffling. Hogwarts took that away from her. She would creep into bed when darkness fell, whispering good-night to him from a far away place, knowing that he would never hear it, and yet hoping, hoping with the kind of hope that only blesses children, that he heard in his heart.
Being a daddy's girl myself, this is my favorite paragraph of the entire fic and it is very well written!
You've also done a superb job at showing her feelings towards Ron. I love that she feels betrayed by him for having friends, which is how I would have imagined it as well. On a side note, I really liked how you mentioned her having Ron and Harry as her imaginary friends after her seeing them off during that first year without Ron. (I hope that sounded alright, I wasn't sure how to word it.)
I only found one thing to nitpick about and I may be totally wrong, grammar wise, but I feel that in this sentence:
Neither Mum nor Dad nor Fred and George would reach her.
you should have a comma after Mum and another after Dad.
Again, excellent fic! I can't wait to read more!
Much love and admiration,
WOW!! So, umm... is it possible to be a fangirl of a fanfic?? Just wondering, because I *SQUEE* everytime I see you've updated this story! *cough* Ahem. *Awkward Pause* Yeah. Anyways, on with the review.
I love your characterization. You are very spot on with your characters and give each of them the attention they deserve. I especially love Frank in this interlude. He feels somewhat haunted at first to me and by the end, when he sees Hogwarts and thinks of Alice, you can see a glimmer of longing in him.
You have a very unique writing style, one that I'm very enamoured with I might add. The suspense and action that you have put into this is amazing! Not many authors can pull this off in such a way and you have done it superbly!
The fact that you split your chapters up is absolutly genius! Always leaves us wanting more! The interludes, at least for me, are just a sampling of what's yet to come and I'm so hungry for it I can't hardly bear to wait!
Absolutely no nitpicks with this story at all! Even if there were I think I'm to in awe to point them out!
I love this story! You are very eloquent in your choice of words and phrasing as well as the plot. I hope you update very soon, as I can't wait to read more. I feel like I'm waiting on DH all over again!
I absolutely love the way you write! I can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response: thank you hermybabay82! next chapter will be posted as soon as i have fixed it up just a tad...keep checking for an update!
You are an absolutely gifted writer! I love all your fanfic! If that imagination of yours ever comes up with a book of its own please let me know-- I would buy it in a second!!!!!!!
Life is so fickle.Full of bends and surprises. Just when you think everything is settled and quiet, something arises, something that makes you feel what you never dreamed you would feel, and face what you don’t even realize you need to face.
And just as unexpectedly, these bends arch to a happy ending...if we tweak them.Sequel to ‘To Love Life Again’. Let me take you back to Ireland with Andrei and Hermione, but will they stay? Something, somebody, is calling them to England.
Andrei becomes Draco Malfoy again. Sparks and verbal sparring fly again. All because of one little girl called Lucie.Hermione Granger never does anything halfway. And Draco is a Slytherin in touch with his instinct of using all his options for his ends.
They understand each other. And with this kind of understanding, comes some confusions and delusions. But just when you seem so certain, then somebody bends...
I would have to say that normally I don't like Dramione fics, however this one and the prequel to it are absolutely fabulous! I love Draco's resentment toward his old life and how he has gradually fallen for Hermione, and she for him. I have spotted a few missed used words here and there, only minor ones like 'his' where 'hers' should be(something to that effect), but they are so few and far between that I can hardly point them out now. Altogether I say a very well written and thought out story! Brava!
Author's Response: Hi Stacy, thank you so much for reading. And I hope you continue to give Dramione the time of day. Some of them are real good! ^_^ About the misused words, do tell when you spot them again, okay? Good luck with your own James/Lily fic.
I absolutely loved the entire storie! I think J.K. herself would be proud of you!
Author's Response: Awww...I hope she\'d be proud of this :) Thanks so much for your review!
Great story! I enjoyed it emmensely! I loved the prophecy that you put in, great wording. The only discrepency I had with the story was the fact that Sirius apparated and also transformed into Padfoot without his wand. I was under the impression that a wand was necessary in such situations, however I could be wrong! Again, it was a very well written and thought out story! Much kuddos to you!
Author's Response: Well, thank you very much, hermybaby82. I\'m glad you enjoyed the story - and mentioned the prophecy!
As for the Apparating/transforming, I\'m not sure about Apparition, but in terms of Sirius transforming into Padfoot - He did it in Azkaban, and there was definitely NO way he had a wand in that prison! So, you may have a point on the Apparition, but as for Animagi, Sirius, at least, didn\'t need a wand.
Thanks again for the review!
I can't wait to read more! Well written.
Absolutely lovely! I love how you have portrayed Victoire and Teddy here. The fact that you show both their faults and their strenghts! Great Job!
Author's Response: Thanks for dropping by the review page. It\'s always nice to hear feedback. I\'m glad that I did get across their faults and strengths and that it could, hopefully, feel real.
“It’s our rule not to dredge up past things, remember?”This rule is about to be broken.
~Inspired by a worldwide beloved film.
It's official! You are brilliant! I loved this one just as much as your other Dramione fics! I can't wait to read updates on this and Then Somebody Bends!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you, Stacy! It will be tough switching back and forth from these two, I\'ll need support from lovely readers like you! *hugs*
I think you have done a great job with this one-shot. Little Albus seems like a great character that author's are able to build on and you've done excellent here.
At the beginning it almost feels like he is a little resentful that people look at him as being like his father, an image he feels he can't live up to. He struggles with it so eloquently in this fic, kind of an inner battle.
When Lily enters, she seems kind of like the voice of reason for Albus, giving him examples of just how much he truly is like his father. With that realization, he recognizes that it wasn't only Harry that was a hero during the war, but everyone who stood up for someone they loved.
Personally, I feel you have written a rather thought provoking piece here. Just to prove that, here is a little insight on it.
Though she isn't mentioned here, this fic makes me think of Narcissa, and how she didn't let Voldy know Harry was alive, even though it was in turn for information on Draco's well-being. So in turn, Narcissa, herself, is somewhat of a hero. Had she not made that silent deal with Harry, though for slightly selfish reasons, I don't think he would have made it out of the forest alive. In my eyes, this gives her a little piece of redemption - though not quite the hero role as with Harry and his generation.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you. You really understood what I was trying to do with this story. I love your tie to Narcissa. I hadn\'t thought about her at all in relation to this story, but it really is something to think about. Love in the books had, obviously, always been the major theme, but it\'s only now that I\'m realizing how completely it drove every single character. It\'s amazing, really.
**SQUEE** Oh my goodness! I cannot wait for your next chappie! I have so many questions that need to be answered that I'm about to burst! Anyways, on to the review!
You have done an excellent job with characterizing our two young subjects and their respective fathers.
Rose seems like a very inquisitive, strong minded youth, but is written very well and in context of what an eleven-year-old should be. With your first paragraph you can tell how anxious she is to start Hogwart's and be free of her dad's tight grasp.
I can just picture Ron being a doting father, but can still see him being extra stern with his only girl! Remember how he was with Ginny? I think you have showed that well here.
As for little Scorpius, he is just written so innocent here. I love the way he reacts to his mother's socializing, I can just picture him rolling his eyes!
What little we read of Draco, though we don't know it's him at the time, seems spot on as well. I love his line of dialogue that you have, it reminds me so much of his father!
Great job, Manu! I'll be impatiently waiting for your next update!
Author's Response: I am glad you liked the charecterisation, Stacy! And it also feels nice to know you liked it, though it was very short. I Promise that the next chapter is goig to be loooong XD *squishes*
First of all let me say, "OMG, that was absolutely breathtaking!" Now on with, what I hope to be, a proper review...
Lot's of lovely phrasing, I must say you have an impeccable way with words. Everything was very eloquently and seamlessly put together.
The way you have displayed Lily's emotions is brilliant. The piece as a whole is very profound. Lovely style and technique. 'A+'
The only nitpick I found, which is very small and insubstantial, is you forgot the word 'to' in the following excerpt, it's marked in bold.
I love that he loves me enough to make pleasant conversation with my sister when she won’t even talk to me, a testament to his gift as a conversationalist.
That's it! All in all, a very wonderfully written and well thought piece! Can't wait to read your next fic!
Author's Response: Ironically, it makes me sigh with happiness that the story was breathtaking :) And thank you for the phrasing comment. It was really important to describing the moment that the writing seem like one (i.e., not choppy, because that would describe many moments. And no one\'s train of thought is totally random). Thanks for pointing out the error; I\'ve fixed it now. I\'m so glad you liked this fic; it was relaxing to write because it\'s quietly happy. Thank you for your wonderful review!