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I'm a student of political science and a fan of anime, Star Wars, and Harry Potter.

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Date: 05/16/05 Title: None

Poor Regulus...update soon, I hate to see him like that!

Author's Response: I've submitted, let's just hope and see.


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Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 05/03/05 Title: None

I've been a fan of this story for a while now and I really like it. It's very original and well-written. I especially like your attention to detail and your description of the characters' feelings; I could totally feel Harry's fear and desperation. Please update soon, Snape can't be dead!

A Grandmother's Tale by Magical Maeve

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 40 Reviews Past Featured Story
Summary: A little character exploration. How did Neville's Gran take the news of her son's torture and what does she really think of her grandson?
Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 05/06/05 Title: Chapter 1: A Grandmother's Tale

Yes it's very sad, but very well-written. I never found Neville's granny to be a particularly appealing character but you make me really feel for her. Good job.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Hesperia! I also found her to be a very unappealing character in the story and I thought there was more to her than just a haughty old lady.


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Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 05/12/05 Title: None

Interesting start. I like the account of Remus's werewolf bite; I wonder to what extent that guilt is going to affect Kat throughout her life. You should probably mention somewhere in your summary that this is AU, since JKR herself has said that Remus doesn't have a twin (that was a rumor she quashed). It would also be nice to know approximately when Kat is writing this--is she just out of Hogwarts, or an old woman reflecting on her life? The other thing that came to mind while reading the first part is that you might want to give some explanation as to why Kat and Remus's father fell for a Muggle woman rather than a witch. If he's a pureblood and a prominent member of the ministry, it would seem to me that he might be a bit conscious of his reputation, given common prejudices. Sorry this was so long, good job and keep writing!


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Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 05/12/05 Title: None

I like it, but you make poor lil Tommy seem so evil! Was he really born evil, or was it the fact that his father abandoned him? Or maybe you're saying it was both?

Author's Response: I wasn't trying to make him seem evil. I was trying to show how like when babies are born they make gurgling noises and since he can speak to snakes he makes hissing noises when he is a baby.

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 05/14/05 Title: None

Me again...Yeah I thought that might be what you meant, and it makes sense. I guess he still came across as being a bit evil though, maybe because of the title. I don't know, maybe you could do something to make the baby seem more innocent...though at the moment I'm not sure what. It's still good, I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Whenever the next chapter does get accepted, I am trying to show how poor Tom was abused at the orphange which began his hate for muggles. But yeah I am trying to make him seem like he could've been a great good wizard if only he was accepted as a child.

Bellatrix by Kestrel

Rated:23 Reviews
Summary: Bellatrix Black is at this moment pressing a cold, sharp knife against her wrist. Will someone come and change her mind? One-Shot.
Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 05/16/05 Title: Chapter 1: Angsty One-Shot

I like it! The part with her and McGonagall is really touching and the last line especially is really good. I think Bella's an interesting character; I wrote a fic about her too. The one thing this leaves me wondering of course is what WERE her problems? Also, given the content you probably want to raise the rating a little and include a SI warning.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I really think Bellatrix is interesting as a character; I hope J.K. adds a bit of background information. As for her problems, I think I might write a few more one-shots to give an idea. The content rating was PG-13 but somehow that got changed. Argh! I'll change it now. Thanks fore reviewing.

The Seventh Horcrux by Melindaleo

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 1198 Reviews
Summary: The hunt for the Horcruxes begins. Harry has to decide who to trust as he moves closer to fulfilling his destiny. Will he be able to find and destroy all the Horcruxes? And at what price? Will he be able to find the strength within himself – the Power the Dark Lord Knows Not – in order to succeed in vanquishing Voldemort? And…can he do it and still get the girl? Join Harry and his faithful friends on their quest to finally defeat a Dark Lord.
Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 10/12/06 Title: Chapter 33: The Locked Room

Aw, that made me tear up...especially that part at the end where he hugs Dumbledore...so sweet. Great chapter. I'm glad Harry lived (I never really thought you'd have him die) and I look forward to the rest of the story.

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 10/05/06 Title: Chapter 32: Voices Beyond the Veil

Wow, excellent battle! Having Harry create a horcrux himself in order to get the piece of soul out was a great idea. I guess in a way, I don't like the thought of Harry using that curse...since it seems so inherently hateful...but you did a good job of showing that he did it out of love for his friends, so I think it works well. Is Draco still alive? I hope so--although from the description of his insides coming out I got the strong sense that he had died. I liked how you showed him and Draco kind of reconciling at the last moment. Anyway, great chapter.

Author's Response: Draco would have died if it weren\'t for Hermione\'s quick thinking, but more on that later. I think the Killing Curse is crucial in creating a Horcrux, so I had to have Harry go that way since I needed him to make a Horcrux.

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 09/18/06 Title: Chapter 29: Lifeline

I don't know how you update so fast but I love it! I'm so glad Ginny's all right. I really like your portrayal of her and Harry's relationship and what she means to him.

As far as my previous comment, I just meant that you had mentioned that they had been searching Hogwarts for a while, e.g. the common rooms, etc. It just seemed to me that Harry might have thought to look in the Room of Requirement earlier. But then again, I didn't think of it...I guess hindsight is 20/20. Good luck with your move and I look forward to the next chapter. ^_^

Author's Response: Thanks, yes, hindsight is 20/20 - and the RoR is on the 7th floor. If they started on the bottom and worked up...

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 11/04/06 Title: Chapter 36: The Power He Knows Not

This was definitely one of the best fanfics I have ever read. If the real book 7 turns out anything like this it'll be wonderful! Thank you for writing such an engaging story.

Author's Response: Oh, thanks much! I\'m glad you enjoyed it. I\'m eager to see if I called anything or not in the real book 7.

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 08/25/06 Title: Chapter 25: Treaty

I've been following this story for a while now and somehow never got around to actually reviewing--sorry about that. I just want to say that it's really excellent; the story is very well-written and imaginative, and I also appreciate the frequent updates (and the fact that the chapters are nice and long). I feel sad for Remus and Tonks, but at least Umbridge finally got what was coming to her. ^_^ And yes I got the ESB references (my all-time favorite movie). Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Oh, thanks! I appreciate your taking the time to review and letting me know what you think. I\'m glad you\'re enjoying it.

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 09/14/06 Title: Chapter 28: Scars

Wow, thanks for the quick update! I really enjoyed this chapter; you're so creative with the horcruxes. I knew it was the tiara (well, you gave us a huge hint in a previous chapter), but I had completely forgotten about the tiara in the Room of Requirement. That was a cool connection. The one question I have is why didn't Harry think to check for the horcrux in that room before? He knew there was a ton of old junk in it. Maybe it just slipped his mind? Anyway, great chapter, I'm looking forward to the next.

Author's Response: You just said yourself you had completely forgotten about the tiara in the Room of Requirement - so did Harry until all the pieces fit together. He didn\'t even realize the Horcrux was hitten at Hogwarts until they saw Goyle. It could have been anywhere, right?

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 09/29/06 Title: Chapter 31: Mortal Peril

This was an excellent chapter. I can't wait for the next one--you're great at creating suspense. The idea of Harry being locked away in that crate is just creepy...what an awful fate. Reminds me of Han getting frozen in carbonite and hung up on the wall in Jabba's palace. Poor Harry! Please update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, the buried alive idea certainly creeps me out, and I think it does a lot of people.

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 09/02/06 Title: Chapter 26: Haven't I Been Here Before?

Another great chapter. I'm so happy every time this story is updated! ^_^ I've been eager for them to resume the Horcrux hunt so I can't wait to see what Dumbledore's portrait has to say and if they find anything at the Riddle House. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks! The action - and the talk with DD\'s portrait happen in the next chapter.

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 09/10/06 Title: Chapter 27: Echoes in Time

Wow, what a cliffhanger. I can't wait to see what happens. I really liked the conversation they had with Dumbledore; I'm glad he is aware of things and able to help them. My ONLY complaint (and it's not even a complaint) is that I'm staunchly of the opinion that Snape is good. ^_^

Author's Response: That\'s okay - I tend to think canon will make him do something for the good side, anyway, but I can\'t resist my fondness of having him really bad. I love the idea of Harry being right and DD being wrong in the end.

A Sleepwalk to Remember by Lady Knightly

Rated: 6th-7th Years • 943 Reviews
Summary: For once in her life, Hermione is faced with a problem she does not know how to solve...
Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 07/28/07 Title: A Sleepwalk to Remember

I'm loving this story. Snape is perfectly in character...I thought Hermione's boldness here bordered a LITTLE on the OOC, to be perfectly honest, but it didn't bother me. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you! And I know, I was a little worried about FORWARD!Hermione, but i was kind of getting tired of writing weak/accepting/subservient!Hermione. Glad you thought it was okay though! Thanks for reading!!

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 01/02/08 Title: A Sleepwalk to Remember

Have I reviewed before? I can't remember, but I feel the need to say that I've been following this story a long time and I love it. It's so engaging! I'm not normally a Hermione/Snape shipper but you render it actually plausible, and you make me really want them to be together. I have a feeling that Snape's close connection to Hermione might enable him to somehow save her from death...I hope that's not just wishful thinking. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: thank you so much! i\'m so happy to hear that i was able to add a bit of plausibility to the relationship :D :D :D thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 10/13/07 Title: A Sleepwalk to Remember

I love this story! I hope you update soon. I also suspect the owl...something suspicious about those eyes.

Author's Response: i will try to update as soon as i can :D thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Hesperia Signed
Date: 08/18/07 Title: A Sleepwalk to Remember

My only criticism of the dialogue-only approach is that it can get a little hard to tell the two speakers apart. I would prefer, I think, either shorter passages of dialogue, or dialogue interspersed with "he said/she said." I love this story though. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: i was mildly concerned about that, but i did my best to make sure by at least the third or fourth line to drop pretty big hints about who was talking. sorry if it was confusing--sometimes my mind just does what it does xD xD thanks for reading!