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My Troubled Tyrant by Belledeg

Rated: Professors • Past Featured Story
Summary: Keedie Dante has experienced many amazing things during her time at Hogwarts, including the hushed up drama that was the Chamber of Secrets. However, with two overachieving friends and a headmaster who does not even know she exists, Keedie feels that perhaps her seventh year will not be too spectacular. However, Dumbeldore sees her potential as a writer and enrols her in a simple writing course. Here, she meets the mysterious and terrifying Tom Riddle and they instantly get under one another's skin. She is drawn to his dark determination towards some unknown goal and he is fascinated by her, in every way. However, Tom's friends do not approve of Keedie and her unconventional ways and Keedie has many people trying to keep her away from the dark young man as well. Something inside tells Keedie that she can make him better, but even he assures her that this is an impossible task. But she's not one to give up easily...

"He is a dark one, Keedie. Try not to let him consume you entirely."

This story has the characters Albus Dumbledore, Armando Dippet, Moaning Myrtle, Rubeus Hagrid, Aaron Dante, Harry Potter, Ebony Abbott, Minerva McGonagall, Melena Creevey, Ollivander, Gregor Holmwood, Horace Slughorn and, of course, Tom Riddle and Keedie Dante...enjoy!

Winner of "Best Romance Between Other Characters" and nominated for "Best Female OC" in the 2009 Quicksilver Quill Awards
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/24/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You

Oh, so the Lestrange from your story is Rodulphus's dad?
As for the Lestranges, I always felt their's was a marriage of convenience, not of love, maybe to produce more Death-Eaters!
I would love to see a Bella-Keedie showdown!

Author's Response: So would I! We'll have to see if my ending permits it...

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/27/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You

I'm imagining all sorts of things, it's driving me crazy! So Keedie just stands there while Riddle is wreaking havoc everywhere or does she just show up in the nick of time and tell him to show remorse? Then when he's killed, does she grieve or does she die too and maybe they live happily ever after at the King's Cross limbo area...I'm all over the place, sorry!

Author's Response: *laughs* You're as bad as Lovemagic! I can't say without giving something huge away. Sorry! :(

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/07/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely

Ha, I love the way Riddle uses her own words from the beginning of the year to retort.
It's so true though, there can't be any such thing as make-believe in a world where magic is performed! Sometimes makes me jealous, I just broke something I had and was wishing I could do 'reparo' to fix it, but alas, I am but a filthy muggle :(
Then again, we all (including JKR) are!

Author's Response: I went back and read the chapter where they meet and it just made me chuckle. So glad you're back! :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/25/09 Title: Chapter 25: Just Like You

Oh I get it. Something like 'you've only mentioned it briefly, expand on that will you?'
I thought it was a typing error. Sorry.
Did I mention you were one of the best writers on this site? (probably a hundred times by now!)
And I want you to know that I really appreciate it that you take the time to read all our crazy reviews and then reply to them. Lots of authors don't respond to reviews which sometimes doesn't leave a very good impression.
Back to the story, I'm glad the baby is still there. Hey! I just remembered the dream with the little girl. Is she about to say Daddy? So maybe Slytherin's new heir will be a girl. If she's born, that is.
I could see the following happen:
Tom leaves for his 'experiments' with dark magic, the child is born, Keedie never tells the child about its father and vice versa, she tells Tom about the baby during the battle and that's when he stars freaking out! (But I don't think that's going to happen, is it?)

Author's Response: A very good prediction. Yes, she is about say Daddy. She has Tom's curly black hair and Keedie's eyes. Aw. And you know I love reviews. The crazier the better. Speaking of which, four more until 300! ;-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/29/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely

Hayden's right about how Belledeg has a mountain of ridiculous reviews to answer; that's just the price she has to pay for such an awesome fic!
Back to the story, I just wondered if you had a Keedie-Hagrid scene in the epilogue, she was such a good friend of his and if she saw what Volders was putting him through (lifting the 'lifeless' body of Harry, etc), it might upset her a little bit.
Just realized how stupid that sounded!
Sounds like she doesn't care about the other evil things Riddle's done! But I guess that's the price She has to pay to be with Riddle, right?

Author's Response: Your bloody right I have a lot of reviews to answer to! She does care about what Tom does, but she hopes he will do less of them iif she´s around.

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/14/09 Title: Chapter 20: If I Can't Love Her

we're getting closer and closer to the end, can't wait!

Author's Response: Mmmm but a lot shall happen in the next seven chapters. Stay tuned :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/14/09 Title: Chapter 23: Thanks For the Memories

What did they take from him?!!! Keedie?!!! But she's supposed to be there...but you also said Hayden was close to the mark with her Resurrection Stone theory...what's going to happen?!
So is this excerpt in those few seconds before he dies? Oh, obviously it is, stupid question!
Anyways, do I suspect a time-turner making an appearance sometime in the course of this fic?
He must have indeed been tired; after all those years, after all that effort with the horcruxes and after all that searching: Harry Potter is master of the Elder Wand
Oh yeah, we might find out sometime soon who that voice is...what if....
I just noticed something, Belledeg is an anagram for Bleed Leg! So maybe somebody gets a bloody leg in the next few chapters...coughGregcough
Unless you have him 'Crucioed' and 'Avada Kedavrad'

Author's Response: Yeah, this is just before he dies. No time turner though, sorry! And, sadly, I'm not the voice. But just for you, I'll try and find a spot in the story for a bloody leg. Next chapter soon. :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/01/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life

So that's how they have their conversation and Dumbledore makes his promise. Did he come to visit Keedie's grave?

Author's Response: He seeks Tom out, but not at the grave. :)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/18/09 Title: Chapter 23: Thanks For the Memories

So that's where the miscarriage comes from...I presume. As you said, time will tell.
I wonder what Keedie does in those 13 years since Voldy's been defeated...and what her reaction is when she hears of his rebirth. I somehow can't picture her being with and loving the Voldemort portrayed in the movies!

Author's Response: I bet if I checked the reviews on other stories, none of them would be as packed with conspiracy theories as this one!! :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/21/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You

you're right, he's not the type to let anyone win; the way you built your version of Riddle makes it easier to understand why he felt so humiliated being defeated by a one-year old.

Author's Response: *snorts* Poor guy. History only remembers the winners... :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/05/09 Title: Chapter 27: Goodbye My Lover

No more previews :(
Kidding, you can't really give any more, we know 3/4 of the epilogue by now!

You know, I'm really going to enjoy my reread.

Even with the HP books, even if you know who dies and all, it's still enjoyable reading it all over again and pretending you don't know. And of course, the subtle hints are easier to pick once you know the ending.

I'm still going to review on every chapter I reread if I spot another of your sneaky hints! And of course, the review counts on the Harper Riley and Ted/'Dromeda fics are going to dramatically increase soon!

Author's Response: Thank God, they need more reviews. I'm glad someone will be looking for the sneaky hints. Happy reading :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/22/09 Title: Chapter 24: Defying Gravity

Is this excerpt from the new chapter you squeezed in?
So there's Ebony, finally!
What's she doing inviting Riddle inside?! I guess I'll just have to wait and find out.

Author's Response: The chapter I wrote recently is the one in the queue right now. The excerpt is from the second last chapter, the one before the epilogue. ;-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 06/17/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue--Big Bright Beautiful World

Hey, judging from your response to the other reviewers, at least Keedie's still alive till the Battle of Hogwarts at least! Oh, I just got an idea! Will she be there when Tom/Voldy has his 3 on 1 with Slughorn, McGonagall and Kingsley? Considering she knew Slughorn and Minerva?
The wait is KILLING me!

Author's Response: *laughs* Everyone is getting WAY ahead of themselves!! We've got the rest of the school year, plus after school to get through. It's funny you should mention that three on one match, because I did put that in! Whether Keedie gets involved in it, I shall not say. Next chapter soon, I swear!

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/03/09 Title: Chapter 18: Same Mistake

loved this chapter, loved the flashback at the end, loved the mother-daughter exchange, can't wait for more

Author's Response: Thank you! There will be loads more flashbacks, so stay tuned.

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/30/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely

hey, we're all thinking the kid is a boy (because of the Louie excerpt), what if it's a girl?!
Or, what if Keedie has a miscarriage, can't really see how you'd fit in a Voldy child with the HP series.
I'm so glad Greg's going down, can't stand the loser, I recently encountered a real-life version myself, left a bad taste in my mouth! 'Scourgify'

Author's Response: A very interesting comment. We all know how clumsy Keeds is...

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 06/21/09 Title: Chapter 16: All the Things She Said

@ Lovemagic

I'm a guy! I can't help it if I get so excited and worked up over anything Potter related!

@ Belledeg

Just read the preview from the epilogue, looks amazing! I'm really sorry about all the guessing and theorizing, I can't help it, this is one awesome fic!

Author's Response: Please don't apologise, I love that everyone cares! So glad you like the story, next chapter up soon I hope!

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/02/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life

It's ending :(
It's 2007 all over again :(
But I guess I have the Harper Riley and Ted&Andromeda fics to look forward to.

Author's Response: That's the spirit! Especially as there's a scene in the Ted/Andromeda one, where Andromeda walks in on a meeting between Bella and a certain someone...bringing her Hogwarts chum Adrian Holmwood with her.... ;-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/08/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely

So she doesn't die? Interesting.
The best of us could be lured over to the dark side. What if she ends up making a Horcrux?! But that wouldn't go with how you portrayed her in the epilogue excerpts. By the way, when's chapter 23?!!! We need more material to review!!

Author's Response: Next chapter will hopefully be soon. Good news! I've written an extra chapter to go between the original chapter twenty four and twenty five. ;-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 06/13/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue--Big Bright Beautiful World

I just started reading this and I'm looking forward to a summer with a further 25 intriguing chapters!

Author's Response: So am I :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/30/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life

Oh...My...God. You are evil!
That is the worst possible cliffhanger! (Except for the fact that Keedie is in the epilogue, so maybe not that bad, eh?)

You continue to amaze me! What an awesome chapter.

First of all, Bring Me To Life is one of my favourite songs and the lyrics fit so perfectly with My Troubled Tyrant!

Okay, what else? I loved how Tom tricked her into agreeing to marry him at 20 with that being his age, not hers!
'Mouth-rape' was pretty funny as well.

The story Keedie's writing is alot like My Troubled Tyrant, isn't it? Maybe she'll publish it after the Battle of Hogwarts (if she survives) under the penname Belledeg.

I liked the scene in Keedie's house with Riddle transfixed by her pictures. And the orphanage part was chilling as well. The Andrew Parker part sounded alot like Chapter 1 of SS/PS!

I'm glad Melena finally came to her senses though it's more to do with her liking Greg than for Keedie, I suppose.
Greg is just the same old idiot, isn't he?

It feels odd commenting on this chapter because I've already commented on all the excerpts you put up from it! Though at least I know the context of all those dialogues now.

But how could you leave us with such a horrible cliffhanger??? Does Tom know any healing spells? The tramp is obviously going to die after being mercilessly crucioed (and deservedly so). Keedie might be taken to St Mungo's. OMG, just realized, she has the baby in there...but you said the baby is born so no worries there, huh?

Anyways, can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Why would Tom know Healing spells? He's immortal...he has no need for such common things. Did I say that the baby would get born? JK said that Tom turned the locket into a Hocrux after killing a Muggle tramp, so I thought, "I could use that". All I will say about the last two chapters is that they are gonna be pretty dark. Clues towards Keedie's fate have been dropped since the beginning...... :(