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My Troubled Tyrant by Belledeg

Rated: Professors • Past Featured Story
Summary: Keedie Dante has experienced many amazing things during her time at Hogwarts, including the hushed up drama that was the Chamber of Secrets. However, with two overachieving friends and a headmaster who does not even know she exists, Keedie feels that perhaps her seventh year will not be too spectacular. However, Dumbeldore sees her potential as a writer and enrols her in a simple writing course. Here, she meets the mysterious and terrifying Tom Riddle and they instantly get under one another's skin. She is drawn to his dark determination towards some unknown goal and he is fascinated by her, in every way. However, Tom's friends do not approve of Keedie and her unconventional ways and Keedie has many people trying to keep her away from the dark young man as well. Something inside tells Keedie that she can make him better, but even he assures her that this is an impossible task. But she's not one to give up easily...

"He is a dark one, Keedie. Try not to let him consume you entirely."

This story has the characters Albus Dumbledore, Armando Dippet, Moaning Myrtle, Rubeus Hagrid, Aaron Dante, Harry Potter, Ebony Abbott, Minerva McGonagall, Melena Creevey, Ollivander, Gregor Holmwood, Horace Slughorn and, of course, Tom Riddle and Keedie Dante...enjoy!

Winner of "Best Romance Between Other Characters" and nominated for "Best Female OC" in the 2009 Quicksilver Quill Awards
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/04/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life

And Bella didn't listen to him as she never expected Avada Kedavra from Molly.
And I just noticed that i got the 350th review, finally! (Oops, 'spam')

Author's Response: LOL! I'm so glad we've broken another barrier. Yep...Bella is mighty silly. :)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/16/09 Title: Chapter 20: If I Can't Love Her

Louie??? Didn't Riddle hate common names?!!

Author's Response: Louie's not theirs. He belongs to someone else. ;-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/26/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You

our friend Felix?

Author's Response: Nope! Just two kids in love ;-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/28/09 Title: Chapter 25: Just Like You

Is their conversation set during HBP? Maybe Keedie comes to Hogwarts to meet Dumbledore? But then Snape would probably know about it.

Author's Response: It does happen in HBP. Harry's a bit distracted with Draco Malfoy and Ginny to really focus on Keeds. And she's not staying long in Hogwarts. ;-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 06/23/09 Title: Chapter 17: Song to Say Goodbye

I loved Umbridge getting a beating! She was so in character, that's exactly how a fifth-year-prefect Umbridge would be like!
As for the breakup, I guess it had to happen sooner than ever!
Just a thought (I know you're probably getting tired of them now!), if Bellatrix found out about Keedie (since her future husband is in Riddle's year), she would be pretty furious, wouldn't she?!

Author's Response: What an inspired thought. One I am certainly considering. Though I think with a bit of practice, Keedie could take her. I'm glad that no-one is feeling sorry for Dolores.

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/17/09 Title: Chapter 20: If I Can't Love Her

haha, Riddle thinks Harry knows about Keedie!
As for Louie (was it Louis?) not being theirs, another interesting twist!

Author's Response: Yeah, he's just a little minro character to look out for. And I always thought Voldemort was worried about something in that duel in DH. Stay tuned ;-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/21/09 Title: Chapter 24: Defying Gravity

So the epilogue is called 'My Immortal'?
I can't wait to read this part of the conversation between them! I wonder what Keedie says to him to make him this angry! Unless he just realizes she's been his weekness all along.

Author's Response: Yep, the lyrics make sense. He's all Voldemort in the epilogue, but it sould be good. :)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/17/09 Title: Chapter 20: If I Can't Love Her

"Surely, Dumbledore had kept his word on that matter."
(Sorry for yet another review...I'm obsessed with MTT)
So Dumbledore actually promised Riddle he wouldn't tell anyone about Keedie?

Author's Response: He will promise in chapter twenty-six. I always felt that there was an awkward secret between them. I'm bending the canon rules as far as they'll go. :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/07/09 Title: Chapter 19: You Belong to Me

What a cliffhanger! Another awesome chapter, that's all I can say!

Author's Response: Thanks! The cliffhanger is homage to the scene in OOTP when Harry doesn't know Voldemort's behind him. Please keep R&R ing :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/17/09 Title: Chapter 23: Thanks For the Memories

Woah! A proposal? So soon?!!!
Anyways, we can't wait for the next chapter! (And no, I'm not scizhophrenic, I'm speaking on everyone
s behalf!)

Author's Response: Let's not get carried away, it may not be a proposal. He could be trying to convince her to try Horcruxes. Anyhoo, next chapter should be up pretty darn soon. ;)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/24/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You

I'm feeling like I felt when Book 7 was coming out; excited about the next few chapters but sad that an amazing journey is coming to an end.
And I spent the last 5 minutes counting the reviews, still 2 behind lovemagic :(

Author's Response: Better even out those numbers then. There'll be a little preview of the Lestranges in the epilogue soon. You can comment on that ;-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/20/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You

oh, is ch 24 gonna have lyrics from Evanescence's Bring Me to Life?!
And i can totally imagine Tom (not Voldemort though, can you imagine him teaching anything except how to cause destruction?!!) teaching Keedie the fundamentals of Chess!

Author's Response: Very true. He doesn't seem the sort to let her win though. :)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/17/09 Title: Chapter 23: Thanks For the Memories

First of all, I really hope MTT and Keedie win! They deserve to!
Back to business.
What would age have to do with making horcruxes? Unless...you're right, it is looking more and more like he's trying to get her on Horcruxes (it sounds like a drug when put that way!). Well, I'll keep an open mind!

Author's Response: Haha! Yeah, they are a bit like drugs seeing as they get you all paranoid and ill. I'll dig around and find another preview to put up, seeing as chapter twenty four's still waiting to be moderated. :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/10/09 Title: Chapter 23: Thanks For the Memories

Creepy excerpt!
If this is the epilogue, is this scene set during when Snape is still Headmaster and Harry & the gang haven't arrived yet to destroy the diadem?
And also, by destroy, I think Slughorn means she went over to the dark side or something! Or that her conscience disappeared and she doesn't mind his evil acts in the name of, ironically, love.

Author's Response: Yeah, Snape is headmaster at this stage and the trio are looking for Hocruxes. :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/17/09 Title: Chapter 23: Thanks For the Memories

Woah! He is D-E-A-D! He shoved Keedie in front of Tom?! Is he really THAT stupid??? And why would Keedie need to protect Tom???

Author's Response: Greg doesn't care about Keedie anymore, he just loathes Tom. And yes, this excerpt is what provokes the Tom/Gregor fight. :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/05/09 Title: Chapter 27: Goodbye My Lover

I don't know what to say so I'll just let the other reviewers say it for me.

NO, WAIT! I have to comment! I have to say many things!

FINALLY, we know who the voice is! What a clever idea, having the gemstone connect them!

The death scene was heartbreaking for Tom, but since I already knew, it didn't really hurt much. I'm just wondering about the smell of vanilla and honey.

The unknown Abbott! I remember this from DH when Harry and Hermione are at the graveyard!

How sad that everyone's memories were modified. At least Dumbledore still knows about Keedie.

And that line, the twist, how you made Dumbledore be the one to introduce that concept! Brilliant!

One thing. WHY ON EARTH DIDN'T GREG DIE????!!! Unless you didn't want him to be reunited with Keedie in death?

And she's a painting! I always felt ghosts and painting were good substitutes to the actual person. I was really disappointed when Sirius hadn't come back. I'm glad people will still be able to talk to her. Where is she, by the way? Near Gryffindor Tower? Does Voldemort talk to her when he comes back to 'ask' for the teaching job?

Can't wait for the epilogue. It feels a lot like when HP was ending, except this time, right when it ends, I have two other Belledeg fics waiting for me!

Author's Response: I love the twisted line. It gives chapter twenty of HBP a whole knew feeling for me. Epilogue soon!

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/05/09 Title: Chapter 27: Goodbye My Lover

'He was still ridiculously handsome, but he looked almost…

I love how you sneak these little things in there!

As for the green eyes at the end, yep, you're right, we, your dear readers, know perfectly well what affect they had!

Author's Response: Hehehe. I can't believe we're at the end!!!! I actually feel sad! :(

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/05/09 Title: Chapter 27: Goodbye My Lover

PROLOGUE-Big Bright Beautiful World

'Besides, it was her last year and he wanted it to go smoothly.'

Did that sentence have a double meaning?!

Oh, and the fact that I brought it up means that I'm rereading the fic, so that should be something to be happy about! Don't worry, I'm not going to leave reviews on every chapter again...or will I?

Author's Response: This story's layered, so once you know the outcome, little things in the beginning will make sense. Do re-read, I'd love it! That sentence did have a double meaning :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/25/09 Title: Chapter 25: Just Like You

Ha! I was right! It was a proposal!
Another bloody brilliant chapter! It's becoming harder and harder for me to review now becuase there are so many things I want to write about.
Like the voice. I'm still completely in the dark! Is it Voldemort? He's the only one I could think who embodies these emotions... Is it even male? It could be Iris...
By the way, when they're walking back from the Leaky Cauldron, the text says "Expand, please". Did you mean "Explain, please"?
So Keedie gives him the idea of the Dark Lord! She's caused more harm than she realizes.
They finally find out it was them in all those memories!
I hope the push from Greg didn't cause the miscarriage. (If there is one)
That voice...it just keeps getting to me...who would be upset that she's carrying Riddle's offspring? Voldemort? Dumbledore? Harry? I'm all over the place!
I'm glad he didn't kill Greg, let Melena have some happiness, poor thing!
Ha! You portrayed Cornelius to perfection! Which again reminds me of the voice...'one day you shall', has to be Voldemort...Urgh, the voice is driving me insane!!!
By the way, I hope this wasn't one of the cliffhangers you were refering too because it isn't that bad! What would be really bad is if someone was struck by Aveda Kedavra and you didn't tell us who or something like that.

Author's Response: So many questions....yeah, it would be pretty scary if someone died at the end of a chapter. It's meant to be "expand". The voice is male and there is still a baby. :-)

Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/27/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You

Does this part happen after Voldemort 'kills' Harry?

Author's Response: Yeah, it does, but that's all I'm revealing. :D