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My Troubled Tyrant by Belledeg
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 517]

Summary: Past Featured StoryKeedie Dante has experienced many amazing things during her time at Hogwarts, including the hushed up drama that was the Chamber of Secrets. However, with two overachieving friends and a headmaster who does not even know she exists, Keedie feels that perhaps her seventh year will not be too spectacular. However, Dumbeldore sees her potential as a writer and enrols her in a simple writing course. Here, she meets the mysterious and terrifying Tom Riddle and they instantly get under one another's skin. She is drawn to his dark determination towards some unknown goal and he is fascinated by her, in every way. However, Tom's friends do not approve of Keedie and her unconventional ways and Keedie has many people trying to keep her away from the dark young man as well. Something inside tells Keedie that she can make him better, but even he assures her that this is an impossible task. But she's not one to give up easily...

"He is a dark one, Keedie. Try not to let him consume you entirely."

This story has the characters Albus Dumbledore, Armando Dippet, Moaning Myrtle, Rubeus Hagrid, Aaron Dante, Harry Potter, Ebony Abbott, Minerva McGonagall, Melena Creevey, Ollivander, Gregor Holmwood, Horace Slughorn and, of course, Tom Riddle and Keedie Dante...enjoy!

Winner of "Best Romance Between Other Characters" and nominated for "Best Female OC" in the 2009 Quicksilver Quill Awards

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Violence

Word count: 152689 Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/08/09 Updated: 09/06/09


Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/06/09 Title: Chapter 28: The Epilogue--My Immortal

Hey, I should be first!!! Just kidding!!!

WHAT A STORY!!! If the rating was on a scale of 1-5 stars, I'd give this 10!

LOVED EVERYTHING IN THE EPILOGUE, LOVED THE LOVE LETTER IN THE END!!!

I'm so sad it's ended :(
But what a ride!

I just wish the epilogue was longer. I realize now how it could fit into the amount of words it has. I always thought those excerpts you put up were part of longer scenes but it was like a series of flashes. But I was okay with that.

I really liked Harry and Keedie's conversation with him not realizing who she was. But there were lots of things I wanted which didn't happen like Harry finding out about her but that wouldn't fit in with canon so that's okay!

And it's not goodbye. I'm going to do my reread and leave more reviews. My aim is to get this fic over 500 reviews and we all need to try and tell as many people we can about it. You really deserve to win the awards.

And of course, now it's time for the other fics.

Thank You For The Memor---I mean Pleasure. (remembered the title of one of the chapters, lol.)

Saif

P.S. I have not once insulted any of my fellow reviewers. I have not uttered any words to offend anyone. I may be a 'small' person and I may be 'annoying' and I may not leave 'real' reviews but at least I haven't started a war of words with anyone and I'm glad about that.

Author's Response: I'd love to get to 500 but I doubt it'll happen. 400, surely. Hopefully all the lyrics and quotes at the beginning of the chapters will make sense now you know the ending :D

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 06/13/09 Title: Chapter 16: All the Things She Said

Oh dear, indeed! By the way, I just read this in one reading, can't wait for the 17th!

Author's Response: It's all written and ready to go :)

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/19/09 Title: Chapter 24: Defying Gravity

Wow!
The parallels from Peter Pan were amazing! Especially when Hook couldn't defeat Peter despite him being a boy, Voldemort probably remembered that when he was in that vapour form after being beaten by Harry! And she tells him Peter flies without a broom! And how he stays young forever and doesn't die!
Though he did make a horcux (or more) before that. Does Keedie realize what she's doing???
So that's why Melena was acting that way. Though I can't see what she sees in Greg.
The memories were awesome as usual. They once again showed how similar their childhoods were.
Can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: I think Greg was a nice guy before Tom moved in. Next chapter going up soon, I hope! :-)

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/30/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life

Seriously??? :( :( :(
Unless you're tricking us again, Keedie did talk to Harry in the epilogue.
I just realized! I never before considered the possibility that Keedie could be a ghost! She did have unfinished business!

Author's Response: Yep. Or she could be a painting. There are hundreds of them. ;-)

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 06/13/09 Title: Chapter 16: All the Things She Said

one more thing, I thought the 'Tom, Dick or Harry' part was pretty funny, I never really though of that! J.K.R should have had a Richard somewhere in the books!

Author's Response: I'm glad that you noticed!

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/06/09 Title: Chapter 28: The Epilogue--My Immortal

If Riddle wiped away Gregor's memories of Keedie, how did Adrian know about her? And also, is Adrian Melena'a son too?

By the way, sorry we all accused you of lying and covering up and trying to trick us! You were right when you said 'by that time, Voldy's mind will be open to hallucinations, etc'.

Author's Response: Gregor's memory wipe will be explained in MFF. Glad you noticed though.... ;-)

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/19/09 Title: Chapter 24: Defying Gravity

I like the Nagini-Voldy conversation! I've always felt Nagini was a very interesting character and that we should have seen more of her in the books. I imagined her as Voldemort's confidante, someone who he could tell anything to. And of course she was a Horcrux.
Remember how she was in Bathilda's body in DH?
By the way, how long is the epilogue? 30,000 words?!!

Author's Response: 4000 words, actually. :)

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/06/09 Title: Chapter 28: The Epilogue--My Immortal

By the way, I didn't really understand the Keedie phenomenon. Was she a ghost or was she like the imprints in GoF during Priori Incantatem? Could you please explain that?

Time for a one-shot showing their happy reunion, huh?!

Author's Response: Bearing in mind that death is being played with quite a bit, she is an imprint returing to brace Tom for death. In my mind, the bridge between the dead and the living is kind of open what with all the out of body experiences people have been having. One shot would be nice. We'll have to see.

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/19/09 Title: Chapter 24: Defying Gravity

One more thing, I think it's spelt Parseltongue with an S.

Author's Response: It's not on spell checker, strangely enough

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/02/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life

Vanilla and Honey?! Could it be?! That's Keeds' smells isn't it?!

Love it! Greg's descendant, Melena's descendant and Ebony's descendant!

So this is the Adrian who's in the Ted/Andromeda fic? I don't get one thing.

You say Bella was meeting someone who is Adrian Holmwood's friend. But from the excerpt, it sounds like Adrian still studies at Hogwarts. So is this like Adrian Jr and maybe Bellatrix met Adrian Sr? (Not that it really matters, lol)

Author's Response: Adrian is grown up in the time of the battle. He went to school with Andromeda and Bellatrix. He became and Auror. He only has a tiny part in the epilogue. :-)

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/28/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely

If it's nagging you want, it's nagging you'll get! How about a revew every half-hour begging you to update?! (But even I am not crazy enough to do that!)
Anyways, back to the story; loved EVERYTHING in this chapter!
My thoughts at different points while reading this:
'so that's where Louie came from...'
'how annoying can Melena get, reminds me of Dobby in CoS'
'how does she write this well???'
An E in Charms? She certainly charmed Riddle well enough to get an O!
At this point, PS/SS never happened for me, Tom never killed Harry's parents, didn't make any horcruxes, didn't do any more evil things, how could he?!
Loved the flashback as usual, it's interesting how they came into contact all those times, when they were kids out in the street, in 3rd year, etc, and still don't seem to know each other at all at the start of this story.

Author's Response: Aw, thank you. I'm glad this chapter got up before I left. Mel will be redeemed, but Greg's going down. Your charms comment is genius! As for Tom...well, he's just misunderstood. Did you see he finally managed to say, "I love you!" :)

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/31/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely

By the way, this is the first fic on this site I'm considering rereading once its finished, it's that good!
And we're all missing your lightning fast responses to our reviews Belledeg! Update! Update! Update!

Author's Response: IŽll do my best with my limited time. =D

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/30/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life

Okay. I've come to terms with it. And I guess that's where Riddle and Dumbledore's conversation stems from where he asks him not to tell anyone about Keedie.
And the voice with all that concern! It's Voldemort, has to be!
You know what? Lots of MNFF authors were upset about major characters being killed off in DH and so wrote fics where, through some loophole or another, their favourite character became alive again. Could you please do such a one-shot after this fic?

Author's Response: Hahaha! I'd really love to....I'll think about it. Hopefully, the last two chapters will keep people entertained. Our heroine's still holding on by a thread. I'm just scared about how Hayden'll take it. ;)

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 11/01/09 Title: Chapter 28: The Epilogue--My Immortal

CONGRATULATIONS!!! Though, quite frankly, I'm not surprised in the slightest. How could such a fantastic story not win!!!
Let's hope FHV and MFF have as much success!!!

Author's Response: Aw, thanks. I'm pretty chuffed; it means this story'll get a nice banner!! But hey, you liked it before it was famous! :D

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/30/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life

Well, I guess you'll know in a few minutes, she's reading it right now.

Anyways, I read the lyrics of Goodbye My Lover. How incredibly sad! You're right, it does fit in really well with MTT. It leaves a sad and hollow feeling inside :(

I'm going to be as depressed as I was when Sirius, Dumbledore, Lupin, Tonks and Fred died :(

(Of course, I really should wait till the next chapter. You're a master of trickery!)

Author's Response: Sorry! No more tricks. Keedie's escaped death too many times. I'll put a preview up, now that the twist is kinda out there.

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 09/28/09 Title: Chapter 28: The Epilogue--My Immortal

Well, if Hayden's paying a visit, why shouldn't I? Haha, actually, this link is one of my favorites on my laptop so whenever I'm online, I make sure I come here to see any new reviews!

As for the epilogue, remember, you have just over a month (31st Oct).

Tick Tock Tick Tom.

Just keeding, it's your fic, take your time, I'm just providing added incentive!

And I'm sure you noticed the 'not-so-subtle' mentions of T&K.

Author's Response: lol! Second epilogue is close to completion and might even be up before Halloween. Stay tuned :D

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/15/09 Title: Chapter 23: Thanks For the Memories

'And perhaps it would be merciful for me to kill you'
AWESOME! (Now you've turned us all into sadistic monsters who want Tom to kill!)
Anyways, I hope Keedie comes to his defense and maybe Greg goes away forever or something. She's probably the only one who could prevent him from killing anybody.
And what did he do to Melena?

Author's Response: I'm not a violent person myself, but Gregor's converting me. Nothing major happened to Melena, but all will be revealed. :-)

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/09/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely

That's great news!
I wish you could do an AU sequel where you change the ending of this one Maybe make Voldemort defeat Harry or better yet, make Harry evil and Riddle good and he and Keedie have to figure out how to stop Lord Potterhead from destroying the world. (wishful thinking)

Author's Response: *laughs* Like an alternative ending. Could do...it would make me feel better!

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 07/28/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely

What a creepy excerpt!
As for Tom 'going' bad, he already killed Myrtle, his father and grandparents till this point, I think that's 'bad' enough!

Author's Response: Do you mean the exceprt in the summary? I think it's a shame.... LOL, he is a bit off the rails at this point. Glad someone's paying attention. :D New preveiw tonight!

 
Reviewer: Saif Signed
Date: 08/23/09 Title: Chapter 24: Defying Gravity

Haha! She noticed he had no nose!
So I'm guessing they didn't exactly keep in touch after he started experimenting with darker magic.
I agree with Hayden, it seems like a very possible way for her to die without making it Voldemort who kills her (I mean, how could he?!)
The Flaw in the Plan, huh? I'm just off to read it. Though from what I remember, it starts after Harry comes out from the pensieve and ends with Avada Kedavra, right? So Keedie is probably with Voldemort in The Forbidden Forest. Does she stand and watch Voldemort strike Harry? And she's probably concerned when he faints as well.
Hey, I just realized! It probably looks quite weird to the Death Eaters seeing this woman come out of nowhere and start chatting with the Dark Lord! Though I do remember an excerpt of a conversation between Bellatrix and Rodolphus!
By the way, he's Voldemort again now! No more Riddle. The excerpts from the epilogue and from chapter 27 have done that!

Author's Response: LOL. Yeah, the flaw in the plan is a big help...of course, there is still a massive twist to all this which i can't reveal. Next chapter soon ;-)

 
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