I'm a college freshman in from New England who aspires to be an author. I'd love to write something timeless, but waste altogether too much time dabbling in fleeting things. But I prefer to dream big and come up short, instead of giving up lofty aspirations and playing in the mud. =)
I have jealously guarded Remus Lupin since fifth grade and turn to fanfiction to soothe the aching wounds inflicted by the last four books. It's what happens when authors and their readers have conflicting opinions.
This is my standing thank-you to whoever voted for "Violin Teacher", and to Mind_Over_Matter, invisiblenudnik, and Werewolf_sympathiser who nominated me! Just in case they ever happen to see. =)
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AU. Without Harry, Ron, and Hogwarts , who will change Hermione's perspective on mankind and the music of life? Professor Lupin is a Muggle, too, and both play violin. Perhaps this teacher and student pair can influence each other in another world, far from the magic countryside of Scotland. - Complete!
Seren, this is a fantastic vignette! Together, Luna and Hermione are always fun. The plot and message were both nice, and I liked the bits of humor, as well (Luna dancing in acid green toe socks, lol). You have real talent!
It's really wonderful. I love the way you tied all the quotes in with the character sketches, and the sketches themselves have a really unique insight to them. I've never seen Mundungus written from that perspective, and part with Harry and Ron is wonderful. You write beautifully.
Amarisa-- thank you for writing this story. ^^;
I'm reviewing now because I didn't last time, and I can't read a fic twice and love it this much without dropping a note to thank the author. I first read your story back when there were only one or two chapters, and I forgot to come back and check for updates, but tonight I stumbled upon it a second time, and, well, I read all six chapters straight through-- it's just that good! I love your portrayal of Remus, and the descriptive style is very powerful: it made me tear up more than once, and I read most of it with my heart in my throat. Keep up the good work and please update soon! I can't wait to see what happens next. ^^;
Author's Response: You read it twice??? ...wow.... Ok then. Thank you!! ^-^ I am trying desperately to think of a way to write chapter 7 and have it be up to par with the other chapters. With the way things are going, it'll be the last chapter and that means that everything has to end with a bang. Either that or leave the reader feeling satisfied, but I'm sure all of you already knew that. I have but one request: to all of you who read it, would you please put in the good word for me on the forums? If you don't know where it is, look around a bit on this site and you'll find the link for it. Please? Other people said how not enough people read it, and I think that'll help. Anyway, thank you so much for all your kind words. They really help out when I'm in a bind. You all are so sweet.
"Lose it and you lose everything. Keep it and the world is yours." Wow, that's so beautiful! This is a wonderful final chapter, instead of just ending it really brings the story to a close. Many tearful bravos from me, and I'll be putting in a good word for this story whenever I can. ^^;
I love it! I especially like the way you ended it, it's very sweet and so well done. Keep up the good work!!
Erm... wow. This is honestly one of the best Lupin fics that I've had the fortune to stumble upon. You really managed to capture the character and stay consistent from start to finish. It's believable that this is what Lupin might have felt and done when he was coming to terms with *it*. I'm amazed that this is your first HP fic, I think you did a beautiful job and hope to read more from you in the future!
This is so beautiful... it really touches you to the heart. Bravo.
Zetera, this is one of my favorite pieces ever! The verse is just beautiful; all the more to be admired because it's rarely done so well. I love the line, "Upon a back broken thrice before,"-- is he talking about the deaths of his friends there? As to my guess... well, the words wield powerful meanings but they're hard to describe on the flipside. Beautifully done. :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much, that is a wonderful review! His friends are behind that line, as he lost each of them, and he breaks himself during the full moon now that they aren't there to control him... it's all mixed up in there but I'm glad you get the idea! Thank you so much again, I love detailed reviews like yours.
This has been sitting on my favorites list for months, and I owe it to you to drop you a line. =)
I'm not a fan of Remus and Tonks together, and I'm only saying that because this fic makes me forget that. You write with so much heart and it's just a beautifully sweet story. Tonks and Remus are in character and the choice of words and your sense of timing are just brilliant! It made my stubborn little heart swell for a ship I'm not even sailing! I hope I don't offend you because I feel you've done an amazing job on this story!
I'm reading this in a very disjointed manner, as I tend to read books-- here I've started in the middle and I don't know everything that's going on, but I'm loving it regardless! :) I love your writing style and the way you portray James. James can seem such a contradiction at times and a lot of authors seem to have difficulty reconciling his bright ideals and his mischievous instincts. Your James has a very definite sense of self and he comes across as a complete and very human character-- and so does your Sirius, for that matter. I'm going to start at the beginning now and read this through. Very, very, very well done!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I agree, sometimes James' character can be confusing - even in the canon it's confusing! But I think here, readers understand what goes on in his head because a lot of the story is told from his point of view - and we all know that a person can appear very different to others, compared to their thoughts that show what they really are like on the inside. Glad you like Sirius too! I sincerely hope you like the rest of the fic - tell me your thoughts!
For all of you who wanted an update, I have a proposition. You may or may not like it, but it's all I can offer.
Check review challenge for the last chapter. details there!
James and Lily Potter were possibly the most famous parents in wizarding history. We know alot about their adult life, but what do we really know about their childhood? Even Harry never knew about the Drama, jealousy, danger, friendships, happiness, sadness, resentment,confusion and love that his parents went through as children. Here, their lives, from when the two of them were eleven to when they were brutally murdered at only 21, is recorded. Lily and James Potter were unsung heros. This is their story.
Hi again Sophie! Just read your fic and am loving it. L/J is probably my favorite canon ship in the whole series, so it's always great to find a good fic about it. Your characters seem to have a really good sense of self, which is totally refreshing, and the story moves along without ever dragging. :) As for favorite scenes... well, I loved the snowing-indoors prank. Think it's just genius and very Marauderish. And I like this last scene involving Remus-- I'm on the edge of my seat, to be honest! It's too mysterious and my beloved Remus is in danger! ;) Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: hi stardust!! Thanks for reading my fic, what a great way o thank me for reviewing your excellent story lol I love Lily and James, as you ptobably already know from my review! It's fantastic to know you liked it!! Um, if sense of self means that I put a little bit of me into the characters..great! I want them to seem at least slightly realistic!! Ohh, It's good you think that scene sounds like something the maraudes would do, because Jk didnt give us many examples of that, so I decided to be creative!! that night I was feeling very creative actually, because I decided that I might as well do many other pranks while i was at it, and I ended up thinking up at least ten, which will be scattered throughout the chapters!! lol I'm glad ya liked the earthquake thing as well, becuase I was wondering whether people would think it was weird, because umber one, its such a non-magical thing to have happen, and number two, because its the first time ive read anything like this on this site lol but i did my research and not only is it possible for there to be earthquakes where hogwarts is, its likely. Thanks again for the review!!
Whew, Remus is SAFE! What a relief!
I thought this was a fantastic chapter, jumping from pair to pair and mingling humor with the important task at hand. Especially liked James and Jada, and was glad that they were the ones who got to find Remus first. ;)
Oh, and by the way, last time when I said they had a great sense of self, I just meant that they all seem to have real personalities because you seem to really know who your characters are as individuals. :)
Author's Response: hey, thanks for the review!! yes, Remus is safe, just a little shaken.
It's great to know that you liked the chapter! It makes things much funner to write if I can add a little humour, even if im not good at it lol Thanks for clearing that up, coz i asked two people what it meant and they both had different answers lol thanks that's def a compliment! :D cya lata!
I *love* it. This story gave me shivers because it's just the right thing in many different ways. I didn't expect to find it so, either, which makes it extra-special to me.
I love the imagery at the beginning, it's very evocative of the rough Scottish highlands, and I love how you take a step back and get into the mind of a Muggle instead of a wizard. The little hinting touches made me smile - the Marauder juants and the Hogwarts Express - but it was very clever storytelling that Daniel never caught on. The part with Harry is my favorite, and made me go all teary. You can just sense his weariness and fear for the unexplained crisis. I got very attached to Daniel even though this is such a short story, so kudos to you for excellent character development. Thank you for writing this story!
Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review!! When I got the prompt for this story, I could only really see it being told form a muggle point-of-view. It reminded me of the common complant found throughout the books about how Muggles will go to any lengths to not see magic. Thats what I was trying to portray, so I\'m glad you think I did such a good job!! I\'m rather attatched to Daniel, he\'s a sweet little character. I don\'t have any plans for him at the moment, but he might find his way into another story, so keep your eyes open!!
I agree about that line. I love this story! It's so dramatic but has me laughing, too. Like in the beginning where Lily thinks aloud to Sirius! LOL!
I also loved your characterization of Andromeda Black, even though she only had a small part she really came alive and you could see how she'd eventually have a daughter like Tonks.
My favorite part, I must say, was in the Gryffindor Boys' dorm, where you see James and Remus, one speaking "gentle and low" and the other proud and triumphant. Great, great contrast there. Also between Sirius and James-- you did a great job drawing out the differences that ultimately won Lily for James.
You're a great writer, you really have a gift for making emotions jump right off the "page"! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Aww, that is one of the nicest reviews I have ever recieved. Thank you so much, Stardust! I've never thought of myself as funny, so for you to say the line is both dramatic and humorous is really flattering. Andromeda is getting a bigger part in the last chapter, I sort of held her back because 1. I felt if she and Alice were in it would be too intruding on Lily and 2. A ton of reviewers said that Andromeda was much older and that it was so unlikely that they stopped reading. I put that about gentle and low? That part was definitely my favorite to right- I adore Remus, so I think that must have something to do with it- and I think I had the most flow there! Thank you so much! If you are intersted in how I portray Andromeda, I advise you read my other fic "How Did it Happen?". Sorry for advertising, but that is more emotional. Thanks for the comment on my writing! I want to be an author when I grow up and writing fanfic is good practice for the emotions! I am so flattered that you left such a nice review! Thank you!
Author's Response: Just to respond to the response on the review I left on your story, the name Lilypudding comes from my dog, who I named after Lily. Her real name is Lily, but we call her Lilypudding, hence the name Lilypudding!
What a nice story. :) I agree with the person below me that it's nice to see a fic where Lily's relenting a bit towards James in 6th year. I thought their interaction was very sweet in this. You've got a touch for subtle comedy, too! :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review.=) I really wanted to show them both starting to get along in sixth year because I think their relationship was formed over time, and not just in one year. It's nice to know everyone saw what I was going for. Thanks again! ~ Katherine
Just got a chance to finish this one, and I love it! Definitely getting better as it goes along. Your OCs are very well realized; Caitlyn's already becoming a great character and you haven't even written much about her yet. I also like the interaction between Remus and Marie... he being the quiet observer and all. Good work. :)
Author's Response: Thanks I did get more into the swing of things as I carried on lol Hope you enjoy the rest of the fic though I doubt I can measure up to your writing :)
Another great chapter. :) I loved the scene in class where James and Sirius are indignant on Remus's behalf. I thought it was a great touch.
"The young masters would like..." That really cracked me up! Seems so like James!
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks :D I'm really glad you liked it, hoping to submit the next chapter soon :)
Returning the favor. :) You're off to a really good start. I can't wait to see what comes next... just wanted to say for now that I love how you described the Potters. I love those kinds of details that bring a person's background to life. :)
Author's Response: Wow thanks, I didn't think I was too good describing things, I tend to just go off into mindless drivel lol Glad you liked it :)
I think you did a beautiful job on this, Maeve! I'm no student of free verse, or even poetry for that matter, but I have an ear for rythym and the way you structured your prose is just delightful. ^^;
I love the opening and third verses especially, they convey a very weighty emotion and sum up that kind of internal strife very nicely. I noticed especially the way you use the words "and" and "but" at the beginning of certain verses to present and then revoke; they just have a lovely effect!
"But what if someone else held the key
To his solidly frozen locks of life"
Just gorgeous! Your OTP seems like it'd certainly sail with a character like that! Rarely do you get OCs who seem to have such a tangible presence as yours!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Stardust! The OC, Maeve, has been around for some time now and occasionally I get the urge to wax lyrical about her and Severus. Poetry is not my forte, so I'm very pleased you enjoyed it.
Came to read your other fic... you've outdone yourself! I thought this was brilliant.
"I would give our dolls a past, present and future... I was the silent and quiet writer." That gave me goosebumps, really! You really understand your character and can convey those emotions so well! The letter has a great flow to it, and it builds as it goes along until you come to the question behind it all at the very end. It's easy to get in to and feel for.
Anyway, great job once again! Keep up the good work! You have such promise as an authoress. Oh, in response to the other review, it never occurred to me to take issue with Andromeda's age in "Perfect?"; I've always thought of her as a bit older, and I saw you changed her age in this, but it didn't seem out of place in the other one... far stranger things have flown in fanfiction! :D
BTW, that is such an adorable name for your dog!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, Stardust! I don't know what to say- I am so flattered. Its funny how I wrote this fic- I wrote it in two or three settings, I think, and always when I was really emotional or mad. It was rejected SO many times, but to get this reviw is worth it. I like you enjoy the writing part- I never thought of that part as exceptionally good. I like seeing which parts stand out. I really like doing letter fics... The age thing, believe me, is a real problem. I've gotten reviews for "Perfect" saying literally "why is andromeda there... she doesn't belong" Originally, Andromeda was the same age as Lily, like in "Perfect?" but the mod rejected it saying the times were off. I personally liked it better that way, it had a lot of more emotion. Thanks for saying it flowed, I had to chop a whole section about Lily out and I felt it didn't flow exactly after that. Thanks so much for the review!