I'm a busy but proud mama of three wonderful children who love HP and wife to a non-HP fan. Have to work on him this year. Call it Goal '08.
Goal update: Hubby has now read all the books and watched the movies with me. We're thinking of re-reading #6 before the movie comes out! He's not die-hard yet, but he'll get there, I'm sure of it!
My elder daughter (needsomefelixfelicis) also frequents this site, and is my biggest fan, so you may come across her cryptic reviews for my stories.
Summary: Every morning Ron arrives at the shop and wakes up George with a cup of tea. One morning, however, George doesn't wake up.
This started as a 500 word drabble for my DADA class and turned into a 2000 word one-shot instead, before becoming two chapters. The prompt for my drabble was to use an overdose so be warned that this fic is not a happy one. It is actually I lot darker than I really imagine the Weasley family being after the war, but this is what came out when I started writing and I think it is possible.
please note that the warning is for attempted suicide only
An epilogue has arrived and I promise that I have now finished, though I have found this interesting to write so I may carry on with this version of the Weasley family at some point
I didn't think I'd enjoy this, but found myself, about three-quarters of the way through each chapter getting into the emotions. Two nit-picks: in the first chapter the emergency portkey glows red, in the second, it is the usual blue colour. Also, near the end of chapter two, Fred says, "Our family need you." If I remember my grammar correctly, family is a collective, singular noun and the word should therefore be needS with the 's'. Anyway, well done. Good fic. Didn't mind the angst and self-injury from George. Most people find it difficult to accept him feeling that way as it is such a departure from his usual self. However, I believe Fred's death would hit him very hard, and although he would recover with time, he would be in a dark place at first. Keep writing. cj
Author's Response: thanks so much for the review and I\'m glad you enjoyed it even though you thought you wouldn\'t. Thanks for pointing out those things - I had changed the portkey colour on one file but obviously it wasn\'t the one I uploaded - I\'ll go fix that as well as the needs thing.\r\nI thought this probably wouldn\'t get a great reaction because it portrays the twins\' serious side and is quite intense but I couldn\'t stop the plot bunnies and I knew that the twins must have a serious side especially after everything that happened. \r\nanyway, thanks again for taking the time to review - it\'s very much appreciated.\r\n-Hannah
Summary: Hermione looks back and reflects on what could have been. A poem based on the scene in the GoF movie right after the second task.
That's well done, especially for a first attempt at poetry. I've never mastered that medium myself, so have always admired those who are able to express their thoughts and ideas in that way. Although I don't happen to sail on the same ship you do, I feel you've made the emotions rather believable. Keep writing! cj
Author's Response: Thank you!
Summary: "October 31, 1981. The day Lily and James died. The day my world crumbled down around me."
Told from the perspective of Sirius Black. Reviews would be greatly appreciated, and I will respond to every one!
Great first fic! I was a bit confused at first about Sirius saying he *would* be in hiding (I mean, how would he know?) but that made sense at the end, of course, cuz his imprisonment had already happened. Like another reviewer, I was not clear that he had visited Peter's house first, but as soon as he travelled to Godric's Hollow, I figured it out. I'm not sure if there is a way to clear that up ... I love the bit about Hagrid and Harry. Nice touch that. Well done! cj
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm sorry about the confusion. It made sense to me, but that's probably only because I wrote it and thus knew what was going to happen. :p But I'm glad you liked it!
Summary: Hermione is having a tough time coping with the after shock of the war, so she turns to Ron for closure.
Sweet. I like the kiss. I disagree with some of the comments of "Azhure" below. I personally feel that the use of 'gladness' works much better with 'numbness' and 'disbelief' than the wordier version suggested. Also, at the end of the suggestions by that reviewer, he/she has put a sentence that makes no sense whatsoever: "I didn't have enough strength to of think one". I think what was meant was "I didn't have enough strength to think of one", but the original was just fine. I'd leave it be. Keep writing! cj
Summary: You may love many people, but do they love you?
I am Indigoenigma of Hufflepuff and this is my entry for the I Challenge Thee Challenge. I have Jenna's prompt.
Interesting use of second person, always the toughest to pull off. I haven't read many Dumbledore fics, but enjoyed this one. Well done - I think you've captured his thoughts well. cj
Author's Response: Why, thank you very much for your review.
Summary: Those we love and leave behind always have a way of finding us, though not always in the way we expect.
Missing moment in DH right before the Silver Doe arrives.
Interesting idea for a missing scene.
I disagree with another reviewer that Harry probably wouldn't have felt as he did running after the Doe if he'd had this dream. Ms Rowling doesn't actually mention much about his feelings as he runs after it, so I believe this could have easily happened in between putting all his sweaters on, and chasing the Doe.
Summary: I always felt there was a chapter missing from Deathly Hallows between the final chapter and the Epilogue. I needed a chance to wind down from all of the action, mourn the dead, and tie up some loose ends before being thrown 19 years into the future. This is my version of that missing chapter. Hope you enjoy it!
I, too, felt that DH was unfinished going into the epilogue. I love your take on it, and I enjoyed your inclusion of Mrs. Weasley finding out about the young couples, the turning down of the biographer, and Fawkes.
Harry`s radio tale at the end was a good idea - nice closure.
I just realized that I have read and reviewed this before. Huh. Short memory! Anyway, I still enjoy it!
Author's Response: Hi, CJ--it's been awhile! I was also delighted to get an email yesterday announcing your next chapter. I can't wait to grab a hot chocolate tonight and curl up to read it. What a treat! Thanks for continuing your great series and for getting in touch again.
I've just re-read this story and am glad I did. I'd forgotten so much. I still enjoy it, Becky. Any plans on writing more stories in future? cj
Author's Response: Boy, I sure would love to. Especially after reading your most recent chapter and getting back into that world after a long break now. I just need the motivation for a particular storyline. The first one was so inspired by my desperate need for closure on the last book that it almost came easily. But I haven't felt inspired by any particular thing off-canon, and I feel like continuing with the story I started might lead to too much piggy-backing off ideas that have already been used now. I might just have to be content with your continuing saga :). Although the Twilight series has helped fill the void nicely as well...
I enjoyed this. I wasn't sure I would as my long chaptered fic and a one-shot begin with the same premise, and we all want to believe our stuff is the best, right? Anyway, as I say, I enjoyed it. I thought Harry's statement on one last Potterwatch was a great touch - wish I'd thought of it! cj
Author's Response: Love your comments--thanks so much for sharing them. Now that I've written mine, I'm so anxious to see what others have written about the same time period immediately after the Battle. I'll definitely check yours out.
Summary: Harry considers what meaning Halloween holds for him.
Interesting premise and great resolution to have Neville offer some suggestions on dealing with the pain and grief. Well done. cj
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your comments. I really liked the idea of Neville being the one to talk to Harry because that was a moment I felt should've been in the books.
It’s Halloween, and love is in the air! Or in the closet, to be precise.
Neville and Susan have been together for thirteen wonderful months, and it’s time for Neville to propose. However, romance has never been Neville's strong point. What will he come up with?
Cute idea. I enjoyed this much more than another 'Rarepair' story I read the other day. If I might say, though, after Susan arrives home some more careful editing could be done. Some examples: you have Susan throwing "his" arms around Neville and she felt "delight and what he had done" (instead of "at what he had done"). Later, Neville's mind was whirling "with the thought of what HER was going to do", Susan letting go of his hands "making Neville's hands feeling empty and cold", and further down, someone, (can't remember who) thinks, "get one a hold of one'. But enough nitpicking, I liked the part with the proposal in the skeleton. Nice touch. cj
Author's Response: I've been wondering what people would say about the skeleton proposal. I'm glad you liked it. And thank you for the nitpicks as well. I'll read everything over more carefully next time. Thanks again. :)
Summary: On the strangest night of Severus' life, it is all he can do to keep from falling apart.
Intriguing. I have been fascinated with Snape since his apparent murder of Dumbledore on the 'Lightning Struck' Tower. Thank you for an enjoyable peek into his world on the night Lily died.
My favourite line is the second last one: "...scalding his face which would have fit into a frown so nicely, but instead turned upwards at all the edges."
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you "got" the story--I was worried no one would, and would just be totally lost and wondering "why is this even here?". Haha, that's one of my favourite lines too! XD Thanks again!
Summary: A profound moment between Severus Snape and a victim of the Dark Lord. This was my first posting to fan sites about four months ago - and those who may have read it before may find it just a wee bit expanded upon. Reviews are ALWAYS most welcome.
Well done! I enjoyed reading this fitting tribute to the merciful Severus of whom we got but a glimpse in DH. And I agree with your comment in your end notes: she afforded him a measure of mercy as well. Thank you. cj
Author's Response: It's really all about perspective isn't it? Courage, honor, mercy... the deepest aspects of all these traits are not grandiose and loud, but usually profoundly quiet Thank you for reviewing - I VERYmuch look forward to reviews and appreciate the feedback of my readers. .
Summary: After being tortured into insanity, Alice and Frank Longbottom live in a closed ward for permanent spell damage at Saint Mungo’s. The Healers say they cannot recognize their family members. The Healers call them insane. Alice Longbottom drifts through time, experiencing small blips of sanity when her son, Neville, comes to visit. This is her story.
Beautifully-done. I, too, enjoyed the ending. I also appreciated the part where Mrs. Longbottom says she is insane and she is sane. I think that is rather profound. Deceptively so. cj
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked reading Drifting, and I'm especially glad you appreciated the insane but sane line, as I feel it really summed up the story, in a sad sort of way. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Sunshine spilled down onto the small grassy spot through a window in the tall trees. She stood a couple of yards back, staring at eleven letters cut into rock. It was beautiful, and yet, to Hermione’s eyes, nowhere near a worthy enough tribute for a life so full of rambunctious joy.
Wow. Hermione was not the only one with tears pricking at the back of her eyes! I enjoyed that; I was very moved by your narrative. Only one small thing detracted from it at all, and that was George saying, "You're welcome." Brits do not usually use that phrase (unless they're like my aunt who spends enough time with my children and me to start using it now!), and might just nod, say 'no worries', or 'don't mention it'. Well done, though, despite that Americanism. cj
Author's Response: Ooh... one of my favorite kinds of crit: helping me deal with my glaring Americanisms. I'm getting better in general, but they still show up here and there. I've changed it now--thanks! And thanks for the review. I'm attached to this story, and sometimes feel sad it doesn't get as many reads. Glad you liked it!
I, too, am surprised it doesn`t get more reads. It`s so touching. And you`re welcome about the `Americanism`. I`m fortunate that I was born in England and still have many relatives there. I have come to know what they would say, and what they wouldn`t. cj
Author's Response: Thanks again!
Summary: In the many interviews since the fall of Riddle, Harry has been asked one question more than any other. This time, his answer is a little...different.
Good fic! I knew he would say red, but never thought of the Quidditch robes, the colours of Gryffindor, or the Hogwarts Express. I only thought of Ginny's hair! A great short story on an interesting theme.
One reviewer had commented on Harry's mentioning Ginny's hair twice. Perhaps it would work if the three hair memories are placed in chronological order? First the way her "hair seemed to catch fire in the sunset...", then "and the way it blazed against her white dress..." before mentioning the baby's hair. That way it flows and doesn't seem disjointed. Just a thought though, it works how it is.
Author's Response: It's taken me half a year to get to it, but I took your suggestion and updated the story. I think it flows better now, and I have you to thank (which I did in the end notes). Thanks for reading!
Aww shucks. Thanks for the shout-out in the author's note. You're very welcome. That paragraph flows well! cj
Author's Response: Thank YOU for the suggestion!
Summary: Harry is about to leave the Burrow for the final time when his six doppelgangers give him something to think about. Set during book seven and based on the chapter of the same name, but having little to do with it, really.
Winner, Quicksilver Quill award for Best Humour story.
I thoroughly enjoyed this! What a marvelous tongue-firmly-in-cheek look at facets of Harry's personality that get exaggerated in some fics. Bravo! cj
And I forgot to add - the "stay in canon" bit was probably the best part. Reminded me of the wonderful humour/parody fic called "Taking Direction". cj