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I like all the conversation scenes as they're getting to know each other.
Author's Response: they were fun to write! thank you :D
I'm anxious to see how Hermione's potion will work. But at least Severus knows what his feelings are now.
Author's Response: yay for feelings. new chapter on the way :D
Hermione's anger is very well described. And Snape had better just watch out!
Author's Response: haha thanks!
Very clever! I enjoyed this very much, and your take on what would have happened if Neville was "the Chosen One" closely matches the characterizations that JKR used. Thanks for a great story!
Author's Response: Thank you, I\'m glad you enjoyed it. Keep reading into Book 2!
Another good chapter. I can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response: Thank you, it\'s on its way!
Another excellent chapter. I wondered how you would get him into the hospital to see the first human victim--and with Dobby explaining himself too! Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks! I wanted Neville to be injured doing something Neville-like, as Harry had been injured playing Quidditch, plus it gave him a chance to do something helpful.
It's interesting to see Neville and Harry having adventures together. Where is Ron? I wonder if he has the diary in this alternate universe...
Author's Response: The identity of the diary holder can be deduced from the next chapter, so you\'ll soon see if your guess is a good one...
You have such a great handle on Neville's character, and I like how you're bringing in the whole idea of the Muggleborn/Pureblood issue and Neville's developing attitude in that regard. With his antipathy to a pro-Pureblood attitude growing, I can certainly see where he might get the additional motivation needed to eventually face Voldemort.
Author's Response: I think the fact that Neville is a pureblood is a key difference in the way his attitude plays out in this story, compared to the way it did for Harry. While, as you\'ll see, he never contemplates actually being the Heir (remember the Sorting Hat never tried to put him in Slytherin) he feels responsible in a way for what is being done in the name of a group to which he himself belongs. More in the next chapter when (in the Polyjuice incident) he talks to Draco.
Another excellent chapter. I really appreciate the character development you put into it.
Author's Response: Thanks. Neville has a lot to learn in this book, and this is just the beginning.
All I kept thinking as I read this chapter was: Will Colin be the next victim? Another good chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks! The next attack will be in chapter 11, we have a certain diary to introduce before that!
It's fun to see more of Professor Burbage. Glad to see that there will be at least one other class that Neville enjoys this year. So is Sirius's worst fear Harry's death or James's death? I guess time will tell.
Author's Response: I intend to put in as much Muggle Studies as I can, allowing for the plot, over this and the next two stories. I haven\'t decided whether Neville will take it for NEWTs or not yet. Burbage will appear elsewhere as well (watch out for the next chapter).
Oh, I guess from a previous review, one of my questions has been answered. :-)
Author's Response: Yes, Sirius\' worst fear is Harry\'s death. My view of \'worst fear\' is something that could yet happen in the future. Sirius would certainly see James in the Mirror of Erised, for instance.
I really enjoyed all the background information in this chapter, especially important to see how this world has developed differently from JKR's. The picture of Mrs. Longbottom hitting Sirius with her handbag at Frank and Alice's funeral is very funny. Makes me think about the Neville boggart scene and wondering how you will be writing that eventually. Keep up the good work. I am enjoying this story as much as the first two.
Author's Response: Yes, I thought it was about time that I gave in and provided some background information at last! The image of Gran hitting Sirius I have to say just popped into my head as I was writing, it was entirely unplanned. I didn\'t even imagine Sirius was at the Longbottom\'s funeral before that! Now I imagine the entire Order was there, along with members of the Auror department. Here\'s a teaser for the next chapter, the Neville boggart scene is very different...
Neville's reaction to learning of his parent's death is a lot like Harry's in the first book. And Neville's feelings of loneliness remind me of Harry's after he discovers the Mirror of Erised. I guess that's because this is the first time he's really had to face the truth of his parents' deaths like Harry had to in PS. I loved how this chapter was written. It's layered together so well.
Author's Response: Thanks for your comments, it\'s definitely what I was going for. To begin with, because by and large he had a better upbringing and understands the wizarding world better, Neville isn\'t as affected by the loss of his parents as Harry. He doesn\'t think about them or miss them so much. It also fits in better with his more bottled-up personality. This however is the first time he\'s confronted with the idea that his parents should have survived, that their death wasn\'t inevitable but due to one man\'s betrayal. It hits him quite hard over the next two or three chapters, until the climax. This is definitely one of my favourite chapters to date, as it has so much going on (the Marauders, Scabbers, Lupin, Frank and Alice, even Scrimgeour makes a cameo appearance). I\'ve been building up to this one for a long time, almost since the beginning of the series.
I really like this chapter. I enjoyed the hint of a deeper side to Sirius. I'm also looking forward to seeing Neville attempt a patronus. I'll be anticipating the next chapter!
Author's Response: Neville\'s Patronus lessons are the subject of chapter 8, \'A Happy Memory\'. There\'s some big revelations to cover first.
So...Lupin is the prisoner, and Gran is scared. Does that mean that Lupin was supposed to be secret-keeper for the Longbottoms? Hmmm...we knew in Book 2 that Sirius was free and helping Harry buy school supplies. Can't wait for Chapter 2 and see what information that brings. Great start!
Author's Response: It feels to me like I spent much of the first two fics leaving a trail of breadcrumbs leading up to this point (including Sirius, Scabbers and one or two less obvious ones) and now I\'m released to reveal everything! The Three Broomsticks-type chapter which will reveal Lupin\'s back story, at least from the wizarding world\'s point of view, will be chapter 7, which I haven\'t written yet (although I know what\'s going to happen). I\'m mid-way through chapter 6 at the moment.
"Greasy hair," Ron squeaked, then shrank back into the common room sofa when Hermione's glare was turned on him. For a seventeen year old girl, Hermione can glare like a champion. She'll make a great mother someday, let me tell you that.
Thank you so much for all the great reviews guys!
I enjoyed this. I thought Harry's POV was well written. I liked the little touches of humor as well.