Identical twin. Single mother of 2 (ages 8&7). High School Biology teacher, but presently unemployed so I've had more time to write lately. Lifelong fan of sci fi and fantasy. Published poet. I've read many fan fictions but relatively new to writing them myself.
I really liked this. It was very vivid and very funny and reminded me very much of the song from the Hobbit about the Dwarves breaking all the china. So carefully, carefully, with the plates. :)
Special thanks to my awesome beta, SometimeSelkie.
Very good story. You're very skilled at setting scens. I'd like to read the unedited version if you can send it to me.
I cannot say enough how much I LOVE this poem. The style appeals to me, as it is similar to my usual, and of course the subject is, as I'm sure many would agree, the underlying theme behind all the HP books.
Just a comment. The name Severus, like most of those in HP, has latin roots and translates, according to latin dictionaries to "stern" or "severe". JK has also confirmed this to be the root, and other online sources also say it has connotations of severity and strictness. I just wanted to point it out to you. However, none of that makes your poem any less awesome. You portray perfectly the self reflection and guilt that make the character so wonderfully lovable.
And I had issues with the length restrictions too, so I feel ya there. A "finished" poem cannot be forced to be longer. I hope they fix that.
Very cute story
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I had fun writing it. ~Carole~
Nominated for a 2010 QSQ Award!
Very nice scene setting. Two great lines worth mentioning: She held his hand and she held his heart, very poignant and visual imagery. Another fave is the entire two stanzas that paint the picture of the Dark Mark being vanished but how it little mattered with Dumbledore's corpse laying before them. Very disturbing and vivid image. Wonderful job with this peice.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review :) I'm glad you thought the imagery was well done.
Holy Movie Canon, Batman! This fic won the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Chaptered Humor Story. Thanks so, so much!
LOL wonderful way to vent frustration at moron director Yates. I heartily apporve.
Author's Response: Hehe. Sometimes I do feel guilty, as I like Yates on some levels. But not on the levels that inpired the scenes I've written from the films. So there. ;) Thanks for reading and taking the time to review.
Wonderful story. Perfect portrayal of both Remus and Tonks. There aren't enough of these out there, so great job.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's so nice to get another review for this story!! I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was the first time I'd written Remus and Tonks. I think seeing them in the last movie will be very sad! I was just looking through some other stories I've read and found a story called Promises by Nitwit Blubber Oddment Tweak x that I also really enjoyed. Happy reading and thanks for the review! ~Gina :)
Tied in first place for the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award in Best Poetry.
Wow, this is the sort of thing you have to read slowly and carefully to take it all in. Some lines seem simple but read again have much deeper connotations. This must have been an interesting challenge as I see the same line endings in each verse. Very interesting how you did that yet the story within the poem still progressed, and I could clearly see every scene you painted. I am very impressed with this. Very nice ending, I can just visualize the fade out.
Author's Response: Thank you :) Yes, the sestina is a rigid form of poetry and takes quite a bit of planning. Nevertheless, it was very satisfying to write. It's good to know that you thought the narrative progressed well within the strict rules of the sestina. Again, thanks for the review.
Interesting start, looking forward to seeing where you go with this. Did Snape choose the path of ghost then?
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad that you like it. I hope that it makes sense. Everything should be a bit clearer by the third chapter. As for the ghost part, yes and no. Just wait for chapter three. It'll be up soon. I have chapter two in queue right now. Thank you for reviewing! MJ
What was in the vault numbered seven hundred and thirteen (it's not spotted earmuffs, for sure)? Who took it? What do Knumples and Flimmers have to do with all of this? Did Lord Voldemort die because of trying to breed Heliopaths with giants?
Xenophilius Lovegood believes that sleuthing is just like reporting-- only with fewer exclamation marks. He intends to find out the answers to all these questions, communicating with a mysterious student from Hogwarts. Will he uncover truths that should be hidden? Will he solve the case? Will the Quibbler break the news? Read all about it in What's in the Third Floor Corridor!?--
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This is Sainy Swiftfoot of Hufflepuff writing for the 2011 Mysterious May Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt 1.
LOL Very silly in all the right ways. Loved it.
LOL especially about your chapter end notes.
Author's Response: hahaha thankyou! :)
I don't like most slash, but this was very cute and somehow still not anti-canon. Nice work :)
Author's Response: Thank you. Sirius/Remus aren't my OTP, by any means, but I liked the challenge and it seemed to work. ~Carole~
Good job with this. You seem to have a good understanding of George's situation and feelings. I like the end where he talks to his reflection. I'm an identical twin myself, and I once mistook my own reflection for my sister and had a short conversation. She never lets me forget it lol. I also like how you portray Ginny's spunk.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Haha, that's brilliant! I suppose it is an easy mistake to make though. Yeah, Ginny's spunk was really missing in the films and it was one of my favourite things about her so I try and add as much as possible.
Very nice story. You've got all the characters right and given each due attention. Good job again.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
Excellent scene. I agree with the other reviewers you've really captured the flavor of both characters perfectly. I love how you allude to Dumbledore's ability to know things he shouldn't. Snape is such a complex character with his conceited air and self loathing at the same time. I like how Dumbledore plays and tests him like he's still a little boy. It's such a fine balance Dumbledore uses to keep Snape exactly where he needs him to be, for Dumbledore's own ends. I think the most interesting aspect of this story is seeing Dumbledore from Snape's perspective and seeing the intimidating aspect of Dumbledore's humor, like there is danger hiding just under the surface. Very intriguing, you did a wonderful job with this.
Author's Response: Thank you! Dumbledore probably had more spies than Voldemort and what he didn't know he could guess. And we saw with his conversation with Tom Riddle that he still sees his old old pupils as school children even when they have grow up so I suppose he could have used that influence over Snape as well. I think Snape was quite a mistrusting person, especially at this point, so I did try and show that he didn't fully trust Dumbledore until later (because he definitely trusted him completely in the end). Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed this! It's a bit different from what I usually write so it's great to hear that people liked it :)