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To my dearest readers,

As you can see, I have deleted all but one of my stories (and the reason Before Her Eyes remains is because I am not the sole author). After much thought, I have decided to leave MNFF. I have not been around for the last six months and it doesn't seem that I'm going to magically get any more free time for quite a while. This makes me rather sad, but it is definitely time for me to move on.



If you wish to contact me for any reason, please message me on the Beta Forums. I'm not active on there, but I will get an email alert if I receive a message, and I will get back to you as soon as I can.



Thank you all for you support over the past few years; I will certainly miss you.



Good luck with the future and never stop reading or writing.



-Azhure





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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 09/03/07 Title: None

This fic is really, really good! I'm adding you ad this fic to my favourites!!! I can't wait for the next chapter!!!!

 

A Few Moments Granted by cor_leonis
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 72]

Summary: Before Voldemort ripped them apart and banished their friendship to be something merely relived through pensieve, Sirius and James had shared a special bond. And sometimes, that sort of bond runs deeper than it seems. SB/JP slash

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Slash, Substance Abuse

Word count: 4855 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/14/06 Updated: 05/19/06


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 01/08/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Aww, poor Sirius. Great story, really emotional. Aww.

 

Ocean Soul by AstroFire
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 27]

Summary: They say no one is born being evil. Is Tom Riddle an exception? A one-shot about the night a boy lost his innocence; the night everything changed for everyone. A story about how a boy turned into man... HBP spoilers. Please review. I'm very, very sorry for the weird problem with the format. It is now fixed, but I'm sorry if you had to read it without any spaces D:

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1940 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/17/06 Updated: 05/29/06


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 04/17/09 Title: Chapter 1: Ocean Soul

Hey Astro!

It’s Azhure from the forums – I said I would review a story for you in the review fest thread, and here I am. 

Firstly, wow. This is such a powerful story. I absolutely love how at the beginning Tom is so innocent, just craving for a love that we will never have. You depicted a side of him that I don’t think anyone has really thought of before, which is amazing. And then the way that once he is submerged in the water, something clicks in his mind that makes him truly aware that he will never have the love that he craves, and then he learns to hate because of that. Just simply amazing work – honestly, I love this story.

Your imagery is also really good, and I like how you tied the imagery into Tom’s emotions – making it darker towards the end. This was very effective and powerful. I particularly love this line:

He had tried with all his heart to ignite the light inside him, but the entire world had its claws turned against him.

Both of these clauses juxtapose each other, yet they fit together perfectly. I know I’m probably rambling, but I honestly really love this story. By the way, just a piece of critique: you used ‘him’ to end each clause; maybe try to rephrase this sentence slightly so you’re not repeating words? A similar thing happened here:

He took a step closer to the edge, bending slightly over to see down the edge.

You said ‘edge’ twice. Try to maybe use a synonym or something to vary the word choice. 

I also like this part:

As he beheld the ocean in front of him, he desired to be the wind that swung just above the surface of the waters; the foam that crowned the waves like a glittering jewel under the shinning moon, coming and going, so free and careless.

You used simple words, yet put together they were just so powerful, especially ‘glittering jewel under the shining moon’ (by the way, ‘shining’ is spelt with one ‘n’, not two).

Another thing I like about this story is how you reference back to the orphanage and the boys. I’m not sure when you wrote this story (before HBP or after), but I thought it was great to see a different perspective on all the seemingly intentional things Tom did to the others. There is one thing that didn’t really make sense to me, though:

Not one of the boys who he’d done anything had ever bothered him again.

This sentence doesn’t really make sense. Did you mean to add a ‘to’ after ‘anything’?

And I just have a few more critiques (I couldn’t resist, sorry – my internal beta is very stubborn):

It would be so easy; he only had to give one more step forward and then close his eyes as his body would brake the harmony of the air to meet its destiny where the waves crashed.

In this case, ‘brake’ should be spelled as ‘break’.

As his tears, for what he was about to do, ran down his face, he gathered all his strength to invoke his internal power, awakened by emotion; love, hate. His power coursed through all his body, surrounding him with an invisible cloak of energy.

Here you don’t need the first comma.

Okay, that’s enough critique.

Truly, I love this story, and I can’t believe I hadn’t read it until now – I’ve read a couple other of yours, though, and they’re all great. You’re a really talented author, Astro!

~~Azhure~~

 

Summary: "Too much love will kill you, just as sure as none at all."


Harry has spent eight months with the memory of one fateful night, not knowing whether his lover is dead or alive. When he learns that his lover has returned and is being tried by the Wizengamot, Harry wants to do everything in his power to save them, but does this lover still want him, or did it not matter to them at all? And how will Harry explain to his friends that he loves Draco Malfoy?



Alternate sequel to Bohemian Rhapsody.

Categories: Harry/Draco Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 14402 Chapters: 9 Completed: No
Published:
11/10/06 Updated: 01/23/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 01/24/08 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8

Ahh, this was a very emotional chapter, I loved it. Poor Harry! I wonder where Harry will go... to Draco perhaps? ;) Hopefully, at least Hermione will support Harry, he needs his best friends...

Update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you like! I do plan on having Hermione stand by Harry, if that\'s not too much of a spoiler. He IS her best friend, and she does care for him, and is a far more tolerant person than Ron is. Besides, she does have a knack for speaking for the author, right? ;) Thank you for your review!

 

Some Kind of Miracle by annie
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 299]

Summary: Draco is determined to live the last nine months of his life with no regrets. But when a series of unfortunate events exposes a list of his innermost wishes, ambitions, and desires to Harry Potter’s eyes, he might find that facing his imminent death is not so easy after all. H/D, post-war, rated for later chapters.

Join my Yahoo! group to receive updates and announcements about this fic :) Link: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/anniesfanfiction/

08/23/08: Chapter 22 up.

Categories: Harry/Draco Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Sexual Situations, Slash, Violence

Word count: 131833 Chapters: 23 Completed: No
Published:
01/07/07 Updated: 08/23/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 01/03/08 Title: Chapter 19: A New Year

Poor Draco, I hope they finally come to their senses and get together!

 

To Achieve Perfection by emmaholloway
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 122]

Summary: All her life Ginny has tried to live up to the expectations set by those around her, and more importantly herself. When Harry breaks up with her Ginny thinks she realises what she must do to acheive this perfection but this soon turns into an obsession she can't escape.



Warning: The main focus of this Story is on the effects of an eating disorder, if you get easily upset by such issues I suggest you dont read.



Disclaimer: All characters and plots ect recognised as belonging to JK Rowling do belong to her and I give her full credit.
*Chapters 1 and 2 have been edited*

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Self Injury, Substance Abuse

Word count: 18278 Chapters: 9 Completed: No
Published:
06/02/07 Updated: 04/21/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 12/20/07 Title: Chapter 7: Silly Girls

Wow, this is a really good story.

I am ashamed to admit it but I can relate to some of this. I was in a bad patch a few years back...

Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. And it is definately nothing to be ashamed of, I think it is an amazing thing that you had the courage and strenth to break free of it as so many don\'t.
thanks again. emma x xx

 

Fragile by annie
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 22]

Summary: Above all else, the form love takes depends on the circumstances. Albus/Scorpius, implied Harry/Draco, DH epilogue compliant. This is a follow-up to "After the Epilogue".

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Slash

Word count: 5955 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/02/08 Updated: 01/02/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 01/03/08 Title: Chapter 1: Fragile

Wow, this was a really nice story. Are you going to make another one that continues on with the Albus/Scorpius relationship. (Maybe even them finding out about the Harry/Draco relationship.)

I love Harry/Draco!!!!!!!!

 
Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 01/03/08 Title: Chapter 1: Fragile

Wow, this was a really nice story. Are you going to make another one that continues on with the Albus/Scorpius relationship. (Maybe even them finding out about the Harry/Draco relationship.)

I love Harry/Draco!!!!!!!!

 

Someday I'll Know by HogwartsGirly124
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Harry Potter!

When we hear that name we think of The Boy Who Lived, The Chosen One, but what was Harry like before he ever step foot in the wizarding world. What was our future hero like when he was mocked and scolded by his own family? How did he deal with? Would he ever know what happened to the parents that haunted his dreams......



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1021 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/02/08 Updated: 04/18/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 04/19/08 Title: Chapter 1: Someday......

A very touching story.

I love the way that Lily and James are constantly watching over Harry and even in the toughest times they know it will get better.

Beautiful story.

 

The Boy in Row Three by ink_daughter
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 18]

Summary: A child in Harry's class at primary school ponders why he seems so withdrawn.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 176 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/03/08 Updated: 06/09/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 06/10/08 Title: Chapter 1: Click Here

Good. Hehe, I'll say more than that! It was beautiful. The flow of perfect and it made me feel sad for Harry all over again... Well done.

~~Ginny_Alamalexia~~



Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it.

 

Summary: He thinks he's supposed to feel guilty, but he doesn't. A continuation of A Cold Heaven.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Slash

Word count: 21129 Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/29/08 Updated: 01/18/09


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 08/19/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I just wanted to drop in and say that I absolutely loved A Cold Heaven and what you have so far of this story. I am a huge fan of Dark/Angst and my favourite pairing is James/Sirius, so this is the perfect story!

I also love your style of writing. It flows so well and the reader is really drawn into the story. Your characterisation is also very well done. In slash stories I am constantly seeing out of character characters, but you have it down pat!

Anyway, I am eagerly awaiting your next chapter!

~~Azhure~~

 

A Different View On Love by helz_belz
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 364]

Summary: James would do anything to get inside Lily’s head. Lily would do anything to get away from James. Lily was brewing a banned potion. James went to find her. Lily made a mistake and the potion exploded. James got his wish, but is it much more than he bargained for?

Now Complete!



After a year the Epilouge is now up! Come read for a bit of fun!!

Runner up QSQ - Best Chaptered Canon Romance


Reason for Nomination:
This is the most unique take on how James and Lily really got to know each other. The story is hilarious and keeps you laughing throughout, but it never lets you forget the serious stuff. Plus, she somehow manages to end each chapter with a nice cliffhanger.

~~hestiajones

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 51560 Chapters: 15 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/23/08 Updated: 04/08/11


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 12/07/08 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two: When You Become Exceedingly Handsome

*laughs* Helen, I can't believe I haven't read this story yet. I think it's probably because I hate the James/Lily pairing as a whole. But this story has such an original - and humorous - take on the pairing that I couldn't resist. Very nice chapter. I love James and Lily' reactions! I just have two corrections:

“Looks like were soul mates, eh?”

That should be we're, not were.

The same goes here:

“If were lucky, this could all be over in a month.”

You forgot the apostrophe. :)

Well, I'm off to read the next chapter!

~~Azhure~~



Author's Response: Whoot! What a great way to celebrate seventy reviews, with a comment from my dear friend Azhure. Thanks for picking up the mistakes, I just went and fixed them up then :). I'm glad you did click on this story and you are enjoying it - I always like to go for different :) Thanks again for the review :)

 
Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 12/07/08 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three: It Must Be The Shampoo

Another great chapter! I thought I was going to die from laughter when Lily told James about her boyfriend! Anyway, like the last chapter, I have some corrections:

“Well, you are definitely more attractive then me,” she returned, anger welling up inside her.

He had been gently awoken by Alice, who was in James opinion, better to see in the morning then Sirius.

For both of these sentences it should be ‘than’, not ‘then’. You use than when you’re comparing two things.

“Lily however, had gone bright red.

You need a comma after ‘Lily’.

“ “Oh, look Lily flower,” she said, imitating his style as best she could.

You need a comma after ‘look’.

“I hope you have as much fun as you did in the shower.”

I’m a bit confused about this sentence. Did you mean, “I hope I have as much fun as you did in the shower”? It could just be me, but I’m confused. :P

“Oh yes, his name is Rodger.

There should be a comma after ‘Oh’.

“ “In fact you told me he said he was going to come up and kiss you in front of everyone; today at breakfast.

There needs to be a comma after ‘fact’.

“He was defiantly going to enjoy it.

Did you mean ‘definitely’ instead of ‘defiantly’? Defiantly means disobediently or boldly.

“With that final thought he had slipped into pleasant dreams.

There needs to be a comma after ‘thought’.

“By breakfast he had been in a fantastic mood. He had been gently awoken by Alice, who was in James opinion, better to see in the morning then Sirius. He had gotten up, had a long shower and finally let Lily’s hair free in a way she never wore it. He then spent thirty minutes getting dressed, carefully in front of the mirror.

In this paragraph you start three out of the four sentences with ‘he’. This interrupts the flow. Try changing at least one.

“ “Oh sorry, you should have been there.

There needs to be a comma after ‘oh’.

“ “H-She left him there!

You should use a question mark instead of an exclamation mark.

“ “Don’t play dumb, you put him into a leg-locker curse and stuffed him in the laundry remember?

There needs to be a comma after ‘laundry’.

“ “Really, James, you are way too obsessed with her.” Sirius gazed at James who was sitting at the front.

This is a bit confusing. I know what you mean, but when you say he gazed at James it basically contradicts what was said in the speech. I know what you’re saying, and Lily knows it’s Jams at the front, not herelf. I just think you need to change this.

“ “Look, I understand why you like her, but she is not worth it Prongs!

There needs to be a comma after ‘it’.

Like I said, another very amusing chapter, Helen! *hugs* I’m off to read the next one!

~~Azhure~~



Author's Response: Thanks for all the time and effort you are spending trawling though the chapters and picking up the mistakes, it really helps improve the story :). Hehe, I'm glad you liked Lily's boyfriend. He does come back in later chapters...

I hope you have as much fun as you did in the shower. James was just telling Lily about how much fun he had had in the shower. So when Lily tells him about Rodger coming over to kiss him, she adds that sentence as a throwback to the way he has been teasing her. I'm not really good at explaining things. It's probably very confusing, I doubt it's just you.

Thanks so much for your help. *Hugs Azhure*

 
Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 12/07/08 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Four: I Cant Get Enough Of Your Love, Babe

Lily singing as James and Sirius discovering her = love! I cracked myself up laughing, seriously! Anyway, here are the corrections! *hugs*

“He insulted my hair,” James answered fluidly, “That is of course the stupidest thing in the world. My hair is gorgeous.”

You either have to make the comma after ‘fluidly’ a full stop, or put ‘that’ in all lowercase. You can’t have a capital and a comma.

Seeing this James decided to take a chance and turn…

There should be a comma after ‘this’.

She flicked another, just as he was turning around. It hit him straight in the face, causing him to slop brown liquid all over himself.

You should say ‘Lily flicked another’, instead of ‘she flicked another’. It’s a bit confusing otherwise.

In the instant their eyes connected, she knew she was out of her depth. She should have never started a war with James. She sent him a pleading look, but it was wasted. James had already begun his next move.

You said ‘she’ a lot in this sentence. Try changing at least one.

“Oh no, it’s all over my robes!”

There should be a comma after ‘oh’.

Quickly pulled his robes over his head and threw them to the ground.

Shouldn’t you say, ‘He quickly pulled his robes...’? That would make more sense

“Oh no, it also looks like I got my shirt too.” James continued, faking a huge sigh.

Again, there needs to be a comma after ‘oh’, but you also need a comma after ‘too’.

“Er, Lily, I don’t think that will be necessary.” McGonagall injected before anything could go any further.

You need a comma after ‘necessary’.

He shot a wink at Lily before skipping out of the room.

You should say ‘James’ instead of ‘he’. It’s confusing otherwise.

“As for you James, I have absolutely no idea what has gotten into you today.”

There needs to be a comma after the first ‘you’ (before ‘James).

Finally arriving back in the dormitory all she wanted to do was curl up on her bed (well James’ bed at least) and shut her eyes to the world surrounding her.

There needs to be a comma after ‘dormitory’, and another one after ‘well’.

Apparently the question was not rhetorical and they were apparently expecting an answer.

I recommend you delete the second ‘apparently’, so you’re not repeating yourself.

“They also occasionally shower.” Remus added, before both boys chuckled.

You need a comma after ‘shower’.

So they were more observant then Lily gave them credit for at least.

’Than’, not ‘then’. 

Seriously you smell like as though a drunken rabbit has died on you.

You need a comma after ‘seriously’, and I recommend deleting ‘as though’. This sentence is a bit awkward because of that.

In fact, he was more attractive then Rodger.

’Than’, not ‘then’.

“That too much of anything is not good for you babe.”

You need a comma after ‘you’.

Lily slowly pulled of the shirt, dancing as she went.

You mean ‘off’, not ‘of’, right? ;) And very amusing! It’s about time Lily had some fun!

“None the less I am talking you to the Hospital Wing for a check up,”

’Nonetheless’ is one word, and the comma at the end should be a full stop.

He pulled Lily towards him and sniffed, as though unsure of what he was smelling, “right after you have a shower.” he finished before shoving James into a cubical.

The comma after ‘smelling’ should be a fullstop. ‘Right’ should begin with a capital, and the full stop after ‘shower’ should be a comma. 

Deciding she would interrogate Lily later, she decided to go ahead with her news.

You say a version of ‘decide’ twice in this sentence. Try changing one.

*hugs* I have to go now, but I will continue with the next chapters as soon as I can! Great story!

~~Azhure~~



Author's Response: Oh, wow! Thanks for all the comments - you truly outdid yourself this time. I've gone and fixed up everything, and I know the story is better off for it. I'm glad you liked the shower scene, I really enjoyed writing it :) Thanks so much for all the things you have picked up in the last three chapters. I'm glad you are enjoying the story and hope you enjoy the rest of the chapters. *Hugs Azhure*

Thanks again,
Helen

 

Closure by lilcushinggirl2005
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Hermione is having a tough time coping with the after shock of the war, so she turns to Ron for closure.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1087 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/08/08 Updated: 08/13/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 08/14/08 Title: Chapter 1: Closure

Very nice! I just have a few nitpicks:

The first paragraph seems to be a bit repetitive. You say 'he' a lot, and to me that interrupts the flow.

"Don't cry, Hermione, it'll be all right,"

There needs to be a comma before Hermione, and 'alright' isn't really a word. You should use 'all right'.

We knew how they felt; we felt it, too.

Instead of a comma after 'felt' you should have semicolon.

Numbness sets in at first. Disbelief that so many were gone, then gladness that they didn't die in vain and that they lost their lives to save the world.

This part is a bit strange to me. At first, it seems like you are going to list them, but you only do it that way for 'numbness', and then you explain something else. I also don't like the word 'gladness', but that's just me. I recommend saying:

Numbness sets in at first. Disbelief follows, the pain of so many lost. Then you feel happiness that they didn't die in vain and that they lost their lives to save the world.

Then the hunt for your loved ones that had survived begins.

You have a bit of tense confusion here. It should be 'begins', not 'began'. I fixed it up here.

I would make sure they were remembered as heroes as well - they deserved the honor.

Instead of the comma after 'well', you should use a dash. I fixed it up above.

He seemed to understand.

You need a full stop, not a comma here.

"Do you want me to leave?" he asked, sounding hurt, like I had slapped him.

You need a comma after 'asked'.

I didn't have enough strength to of think one.

I added 'of' after 'to'.

It was so right; the way he felt to me.

You need a semicolon, not a comma here.

Overall, a really emotional story. You highlight their relationship perfectly, and I felt myself almost crying after I had read this. Nice work!

~~Azhure~~

 

The Free Elf by clabbert2101
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: A poem following the events leading up to and including Dobby's death. From Harry's point on view.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 102 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/15/08 Updated: 08/17/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 08/19/08 Title: Chapter 1: The Free Elf

*sniffles* Poor Dobby. I love your poem, it's short but emotional. I just have a few nitpicks:

A manic laugh pierces the night,

Her last attempt to halt our flight.

I think there should be a semi colon instead of a comma here.

A silver flash cuts empty space;

Yet comes to rest in a fatal place.

Here is should be the other way round. It just doesn't make sense if you use a semi colon here instead of a comma.

Those yellow eyes meet my own green

And as they gain a misty sheen,

I think there should be a full stop after 'green'. Otherwise the sentence goes on for too long. And the full stop will break up the stanza nicely.

And the ending doesn't rhyme - as I'm sure you're aware. But I can't really think of a good way to change it without ruining the emotion. So I think you're safe to leave it just this once. :)

Again, lovely poem. I can't wait to read more of yours!

~~Azhure~~



Author's Response: Thanks so much for the suggestions. I'm going to edit the story now.

 

Elvendork by mrsmcclnt
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary:

“I know you love her.”

“I know, but…” James head leaned hard into his as he tried to explain. “That night when was I with her, as much as I planned it out to do it, it didn’t feel right. I knew I couldn’t go through with it unless….” he sighed. James looked back into Sirius eyes, knowing that Padfoot could finish his sentence.



For the longest time, Sirius Black was content with his friendship with James.

But soon he came to realize that there was something more he was feeling as he watched his friend fall in love with someone else.







Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Slash

Word count: 3202 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/21/08 Updated: 08/23/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 09/06/08 Title: Chapter 1: The Shirts

Rhi told me about this!! *hugs* As you can probably tell, Rhi and I share the same OTP.

Gah, it was a great story...the emotions... the love triangle....*sigh* And the fact you linked it to JKR's prologue was great! Well, I'm off to read it again! Nice work!!! - and sorry for the short review...I'm just so excited!

~~Azhure~~



Author's Response: **giggles*

Well you two have alot in common. Thanks again for reading and reviewing. I hope you still like it the second time around.

 

Lost by Gmariam
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 22]

Summary: Past Featured StoryAlbus Potter is lost: guilt and grief have driven him to a desperate search for the Deathly Hallows, and Harry must confront his son before it is too late. Their confrontation, however, ends in disaster as Albus disappears with two of the Hallows.

As he continues his search for the Resurrection Stone, Albus remembers the shadowy road that lead him to his confrontation with his father – and must face both his brother and the tragic loss that has driven him so far down dark paths.

Albus must journey deep within to conquer the darkness that surrounds him. Will he find what he seeks? Or will Albus be lost to his loved ones forever? This story is now complete.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Slash, Violence

Word count: 20197 Chapters: 7 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/02/08 Updated: 03/28/10


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 11/03/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One - Confrontation

Wow, that was a very emotional and powerful story. I've always had the idea of Albus wanting the Horcruxes for whatever reason in the back of my mind, and you portrayed it perfectly. And yet you still make it realistic. A lot of authors can overdo things like the fight between Albus and Harry, but I think you kept it under control, whilst really worrying the reader. I also love the way you didn't end it happily. I am forever the angst lover, and nothing is worse than having a good angsty story end happily.

Hmm, your story does give want for more, though... like Inverarity said. But I'm not sure if you should write more or not. I think that would break up the tension the reader feels at the end of the story. The want for more is a great way to draw the reader in, and it keeps their mind in the plotline. They would go over the story again and again, read it over and over. Then, of course, since readers do have minds of their own - or at least I hope they do - they would think up their own conclusion.

No, I think it's good the way it is, actually. You have no need to write more and soften the blow. But if you did write more, I wouldn't complain! :P

Fantastic job, Gina! *hugs*

~~Azhure~~



Author's Response: Thanks so much for the lovely review, Azhure! I really appreciate you stopping to read this and leave such a nice note. :) And I appreciate your comments about continuing it as well. Right now I think it reads more as a scene from a story than a story itself - there is definitely more in my mind's eye. But as I said, this scene spoke to me very strongly, so I had to write it, and I'm glad it wasn't overdone! I guess I'll just have to see what my muse says about continuing it. Thanks again!! ~Gina :)

 

The Soul's Surrender by florian_f
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: What could have been the final battle ends in Harry's death. Is it really the end, though? Something just doesn't seem quite right to Hermione, and a desperate search leads to a dark discovery about Harry Potter.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Violence

Word count: 2285 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
11/04/08 Updated: 12/14/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 11/15/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow, an interesting start to what seems to be an intriguing story. I am definitely going to eagerly await the updates to this! Nice work!

~~Azhure~~



Author's Response: Thank you! I'm kind of torn because I've got another idea for another story that I like better, but I'll keep working on this one. Thank you for reading.

 

Siren's Song by Phia Phoenix
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: The Greek breed of merpeople are known as Sirens, and have entranced many a foolish sailor to his watery doom by means of their fair singing. But in many cultures there are tales of Sirens who have succumbed to the same snare they have spun so many: love.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Dubious Consent

Word count: 213 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/04/08 Updated: 11/07/08


Reviewer: Ginny_Alamalexia Signed
Date: 03/23/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I can't believe I haven't reviewed this yet -- ah, but nominating this poem for the RQSQ is a good enough time to review, don't you think? ;)

This poem is just amazingly written. The whole way you use contrasts between the main character and the seagulls, her husband and the sea. I just... the description, the language, the emotions, the rhythm... It's all so beautiful.

My favourite part would have to be the ending -- where we see to its full extent the chains her husband has wrapped about her, and we see the longing she feels, and the knowledge she has that she'll never be free.

I've read this poem heaps of times, and I love it more each time. Gah, I honestly don't know what else to say. This poem is amazing.

*hugs*

~~Azhure~~

 
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