That was so, so very funny! I thought you left us hanging at the end then I scrolled down and saw the line about playing exploding snap. I just about fell off my chair I was laughing so hard! And when Hermione told Fred and George off for apparating where they can't... I'm still laughing. You've done a lovely job of breaking all the rules. Thank you for this good read.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. This is my first review ever :-) I'm really glad you liked it. *jumps around in glee*
43 Chapters?!?!?! *dies*
I'm debating whether to sit back and make some popcorn, or turn in my mod-badge! Seriously, though, I've been continuing to enjoy your story. I'm just back for a moment to skim through and see if I've missed any chapters. Also, I hope you don't mind, but I've been recommending you to anyone who will listen. *smiles*
Author's Response: Thank you, Dr.. Please see my email! S.
I love this line: "You have to change something, Minerva, or you’ll be taking up permanent residence in the Hospital Wing. I put you right beside Potter’s reserved bed." It helps set a lovely light tone that you mostly maintain throughout this whole piece.
I'm here because I just found a random story URL (yours) on a post-it note when I was cleaning up my computer this evening. I have no idea how long it's been there. But here I am. I can't believe there aren't any reviews on this story!
I had to read through a few times to get the ending straight in my mind. There are some odd pronouns that I'm not sure if they're mistakes or they're meant to muddy the waters. For example: I also have to tell me that most of the Potter’s. In any case, they add to the charming twisty-turniness that is this story.
Bravo! What a nice beginning!
I particularly enjoyed your insights into both Lupin and Tonks. "Doesn’t look dangerous, but she will be, she’s an Auror. Doesn’t look fazed to see me, either." How many of us have been drawn to someone and wondered whether they might be a little dangerous? But it was especially effective that you had the Werewolf wondering about the Auror, rather than the other way around. And then to give them equal measure, "and, er, you seem nice enough to make up for the other ten percent." Hee hee hee! How delightful. Plenty of wondering, plenty of circling around each other, some light conversation, and a fair dose of uncomfortable pauses. A lovely balance all the way around
"Tonks heaved a (very quiet) sigh of relief when McGonagall moved on – being told to call her former teacher by her first name was almost as unnerving as simply meeting her outside of school." This made me laugh out loud! It is so true! You've got some very good insight, both into the characters, and into human nature. I can't wait to see where you take us in the next chapter. Thank you for a delightful read.
~ ~ ~”Sirius…” Sirius blinks. He cranes his neck to look behind him.
A shiver runs up his spine as if a cold, dead finger is stroking it
"Who’s there?!” he calls out to the voice, spinning clockwise to try and catch a glimpse of whatever it is.
Very interesting. The Adgias were an unexpected twist. And that those who have died are interested in the mortal world, but unable to see it also caught me off-guard. I kind of wanted it to be longer to see you explore some of the ideas a bit more. Some of the transitions between parts were a little abrupt. Still, very interesting. You've given me some food for thought for the week!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your constructive criticism! I'll keep it in mind next time I start writing something! Thanks again!
What an utterly delightful bit of writing!
I'd have been satisfied with the description of pets. You so thoroughly described every person who has ever reveared the animals they live with. First the Burmese Python (hmmm, where have we seen one of those before?) and then the beautiful white Persian, and finally the obligatory black cat. Just delightful. "and when Brynhild is not looking, he sharpens his claws on the furniture." made me laugh out loud!
And then there's the monkey! I was willing to accept the premise of an unwanted pet, unwillingly adopted. But when you revealed the monkey's identity --- I'm still chuckling. “If you don’t like it here, you can leave,” she has hissed at the end of the first noisy day. “No-one is stopping you.” And on re-reading now that I know the punchline, this bit is especially funny!
I've been enjoying your character analyses on the forums, and I'm delighted to have finally gotten around to reading one of your stories!
I'm very happy to hear that the monkey part of the story worked. All the time I kept wondering whether or not it was obvious - so thanks for reassuring me! -S.
Bravo! What an enjoyable story! What a seemingly insignificant choice! But how many of us have stepped onto a train or bus and chosen where to sit based on our mood that day? I loved your idea of Snape dabbling in the dark arts as a way of keeping the world in balance. And the glimpse of boy-Lucious. I also enjoyed the way you kept everyone in-character even though you changed their perpectives a bit. Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review, Poultrygeist, I'm really pleased that you think the characters were true to their canon counterparts. I worked very hard to try to keep everyone in character, and I'm really happy that you pointed that out.
I love that you named her Holly! Just like Harry's wand! And Fantasium - the writing is lovely! Thanks for letting me play too. So many tantalizing what-if's... ;)
I thought I'd drop by and read and review. Only when I started to read, I realized I'd already read. How is it that I read your story and didn't leave a review?! What can I possibly have been thinking?
This is brilliant. I love the idea of Snape being frustrated with Dumbledore and taking it out in a letter. You handle it so elegantly. And your description of Azkaban is poignant and, I think, utterly appropriate. Well-done!
Beautifully written! In general I am not a fan of Marauder-Era fics, but yours is extraordinarily well done. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you, Poultrygeist. I'm glad you gave this fic a try. I really appreciate the time you've taken to read and review.
LOLOL! What fun! I love Luna talking to the frog as if he understands what she's saying.
I love this line:Only a frog basking in a ring a daisies was the witness to their long-awaited scene of passion I keep re-reading it and giggling.
I'm very torn. Part of me loves looking at the pretty graphics you generate, but part of me wants to steal away your copy of Photoshop and set you to work writing! I would love to see who you could come up with for Colin Creevy... ::wink::
Author's Response: O_o; I still get nightmares from how young I was when I wrote that line. Hmmm, Colin Creevey, you say?...
Delightful! The characters are so wonderfully in-character. And the idea of Minerva doing "a Snape" and Albus envying her ability to do so --- priceless!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. That mens a lot coming from someone of your calibre! Yea, I can just see ole Dumbledore getting sidetracked pondering eyebrows.
"Author's Response: Uh, thanks? I get the point by the way-how come the review came up so many times?" Thank you for your well-humored reponse to an ugly review. *huggles*
Love, A Mod.
Author's Response: Yummy indeed!! LOL And I must credit you with the title. *hies off to alter summary!*
Your story made me laugh out loud! Thank you for an enjoyable read.
I am in love with your story. I loved the piece with Dudley in particular. You clearly put some careful thought into constructing your plot. And your characterization is spot-on. Bravo!
Author's Response: Part of the challenge of this story was accepting that the only time-effective way to do it was to format it like a radio show script and put all the descriptive material into present tense. Everything else I've written has been in the standard past-tense narrative format.
“Yes, I am just sad at the thought that this perfect moment is already just another memory. Time goes by so quickly, I feel it slipping through my fingers.” What an utterly despondent remark! Poor Harry.
I like your use of the scars telling a story. I sort of expected more metaphorical use of scars, though. I thought you might do more with the scars that are unseen. Perhaps even something with Hermione's unseen scars. Still, I liked that when Hermione told the story of Harry's scars it ended up being her story.
This is so well written that you make me almost believe that this ship is possible. But not quite. *giggles*
Author's Response: I am obsessed with the passing of time!
Maybe I will go back and correct the things you mentioned about the metaphorical scars and Hermione's scars. I just figured Harry's internal scars would be implied and obvious, maybe not. I just always fear revising. *cringes*
Wow! That well written? Well, that was my plan? Convert the world to H/Hr shippers. Resistance is futile!! Come over to the warm and fuzzy side! Come on, you know you want to!!
Awwwwww! How sweet! *wipes away a tear* I don't think I'm a fan of the interspersed song lyrics. Honestly, I skipped most of them. Maybe it's just because I don't know the song. A lovely story, very believable.
Author's Response: LOL, thanks Mandy. ;)
Wow! That's some good writing. I do hope that you're continuing the story. I like how you use little bits of dialogue to set voice and accent --- the healer's accent, the child's lisp --- but then you don't beat us over the head with them. Dialogue can get so exhausting to read when one constantly has to interpret the English into English. You've drawn me in with your careful writing and gentle exploration of character. Keep up the good work!
Some day?! I want him to love her NOW!!! Nice job. I really like the details that show how Charlie loves and respects the dragons. I think that tells us a lot about who he is and how he's going to treat our little Hermione...